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Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YFG226YBH3W6PKY3SB898N
Run Details
Model:
Kimi K3.1 Pro (Reasoning, Max)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
9m 17s
Cost:
$0.142332
Provider:
Moonshot AI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
83.84%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
86.15%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
89.94%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
91.07%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
64.64%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
44.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
33.11%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
91.67%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
92.8188%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The dead man had no
wallet, no phone and, in DS Venn’s opinion, no mystery.
Quinn reserved judgment until she
had counted the steps. There were one hundred and twelve, turning down through a maintenance shaft behind a Camden lock-up.
Rain needled on the hatch
above her. By the last turn, the sound had thinned to a metallic
whisper
, and the air had changed: wet brick, old soot, something
sweetly
resinous beneath it.
Her worn leather watch showed
04:38 when she ducked under the final length of crime-scene tape.
The station had been closed
since 1963.
Its name survived on a
tiled band along the platform, half obscured by mineral stains. Dead advertisements faced the tracks.
A woman with an impossible
beehive smiled beside a promise of cleaner washing; a man in a trilby recommended cigarettes for the throat. Between them, numbered forensic markers stood in the dust.
Venn waited beside the body
with his hands in his coat pockets.
He had the patient, slightly
offended expression of a man whose simple explanation was about to be interfered with. “Anonymous call at two sixteen,” he said. “Maintenance hatch unlocked. First response found him. Male, maybe mid-thirties. No obvious wound. Pathologist’s initial guess is respiratory failure, possibly chemical.” “Drugs?” “Could be. There was a market down here, or a
very
tidy rave. Bad batch goes round, somebody dies, everyone else discovers an urgent appointment elsewhere.” “You found drugs?” “Not yet.” “Needles?” “No.” “Then keep the theory on a loose lead.” Venn gave a small shrug. “I’m not married to it. Robbery’s possible. They emptied his pockets.”
Quinn looked at the numbered
exhibits on the sterile sheet beyond him. A notebook. A disc of yellow-white material, pierced near the edge.
A small brass compass, its
casing clouded with verdigris. “They took his identification,” she said, “and left his notebook.” “Perhaps he didn’t carry identification.” “Perhaps.” She approached the body.
He lay on his back
near the far wall, his coat buttoned to the throat and his boots set neatly together. He might have been asleep, if sleep had ever produced so little ease. One side of his face was bloodless; the other had darkened to a bruised violet. There was no foam at his mouth, no vomit on his clothes, no blood visible beneath his head.
A dry man in a
dry coat, though everyone who had come through the hatch that morning carried the rain with them. Quinn crouched without touching him. Purple discoloration ran down the left side of his neck and vanished beneath his collar.
His left hand was darker
than his right. “He died on his side,” she said. Venn came nearer. “So he was moved.” “Without anyone stepping here.” The body lay within an island of undisturbed dust. The forensic team had reached it by putting down stepping plates from the opposite direction; their route was clearly marked. Beyond that, there were no drag grooves, no heel scuffs, no confused trampling where frightened companions might have argued over what to do. The dust held a faint bloom of soot, smooth as felt. Venn considered it. “They cleaned up.” “And replaced the dust?” “Carried him, then. Put him down
gently
.” “From where?” He looked along the platform, then up at the ceiling. Quinn watched him perform the same calculation she had. The nearest maintenance opening was thirty yards away. The tiled wall behind the body was blank. “All right,” Venn said. “It’s peculiar.” “It’s staged. Peculiar is the smell.” The resinous scent was stronger beside the corpse. Under it lay another odor, so faint she might have imagined it: rain striking hot metal. Quinn straightened and turned her attention to the platform. At first glance, the place looked merely vandalized. There were scorch marks, broken candle stubs, chalk symbols and long pale rectangles in the dust. But the rectangles repeated at regular intervals. Six along one wall, seven along the other. Each was roughly the depth of a folding table. Black crescents of wax marked some of the corners. Between them, the dust had
been trodden
flat by many feet. Not a rave. No space cleared for
dancing
, no cables, no bottles, no food wrappers, no sound equipment. People had stood facing the rectangles. Transactions had taken place across them. “Stalls,” she said. Venn nodded. “Stolen goods. Pills. Whatever people sell when they don’t want a shopfront.” “And every customer came down those hundred and twelve steps?” “Presumably.” “The first two flights were clean when I arrived. One set of wet prints from the responding officer. Yours. Mine. Forensics. No mud on the handrail. No litter caught in the corners.” “They could have used another entrance.” “Yes,” Quinn said. “That’s the part I’m interested in.”
She went to the exhibits
and put on a fresh pair of gloves. The compass had already
been photographed
. When she lifted its evidence bag, the needle inside
trembled
.
Its face was crowded with
fine etchings, concentric rings and small hooked sigils cut into the brass with more care than the casing suggested. Age had greened the hinges. It was ugly, delicate work, made by someone who had expected the object to be handled often and kept for a long time. The needle pointed toward the far wall. Quinn turned the bag. The needle moved with it, then settled again in the same direction. Venn watched. “Broken.” “Possibly.”
She walked three paces to
her left. The needle changed its bearing. “Magnet in the wall,” Venn said. “Old reinforcement.” “Perhaps.”
She set it down and
opened the notebook at the marked page. Most of the entries were figures, dates and diagrams copied with painful precision. Several words had
been underlined
so hard that the pen had scored the paper. On the final used page, the handwriting deteriorated into haste. Veil, Camden. Full moon. Token for entry. E.K. says needle finds nearest breach, not safest.
If second door opens, tell
Aurora. Quinn read it twice. Last night had been the full moon.
She had seen it, white
and swelled above the roofs while she sat in her car outside a house in Highgate, waiting for one of Aurora’s friends to do something incriminating. None of them had.
They had gone in at
eleven and out at twelve, carrying nothing more suspicious than Eva Kowalski’s worn leather satchel. Two weeks earlier, Kowalski had sat across an interview table from Quinn, round glasses slipping down her freckled nose.
She had tucked a red
curl behind her left ear before answering. The Veil Market? An occult rumour, Detective. Not somewhere one can actually go. Quinn looked again at the rows of stalls preserved in dust. “What?” Venn asked. “Nothing yet.” “Always encouraging.”
She handed him the notebook
and took up the bone-white token.
It was warmer than the
brass had been, though that might have been the evidence bag.
Its edge had been worn
smooth by handling. A design had been cut into one face: a circle broken by a single vertical stroke. The same design marked the compass, almost lost among its protective sigils. “Robbers left these too,” she said. “Sentimental robbers.” “No. Efficient ones. They took the things that would tell us who he was and left the things that would tell us where he’d been.” Venn’s expression altered. “Why?” “Because they wanted the second discovery and not the first. Or because they wanted us occupied with the wrong one.” She returned to the wall. A length of crime-scene tape hung near it, fastened to an iron bracket. The draft from the staircase came along the platform in slow, cold pulses. Each
pulse
should have stirred the loose end of the tape toward the tunnel.
Instead, it quivered toward the
tiles. Quinn held her gloved hand near the skirting. Air touched her palm. She knelt. At the base of the wall, almost invisible beneath a powdering of soot, a fine curve interrupted the dust. It described part of a circle, six feet across. She followed it with one finger without touching. At each end, a vertical seam climbed through the grout. “Doors have habits,” she said. “They keep them after people forget.” Venn crouched beside her. “Service access.” “Does it appear on the plans?” “The plans are from 1958 and look like someone drew them during an air raid.” “A service void explains the door. It doesn’t explain why everyone used it instead of the stairs.” “It might, if they didn’t want to be seen.” “Then why leave him where an anonymous call could bring us straight to him?” Venn had no immediate answer. Quinn liked him better for not inventing one. She examined the tiles by torchlight. Most were crazed with age. Three near the center were smoother, their glaze a fraction deeper. On the middle tile, at waist height, she found a circular depression no larger than a fingerprint. Something dark
was packed
into it. She cleaned it
gently
with a forensic swab. A vertical cut emerged through the dirt. Venn looked from the depression to the token in her other hand. “You’re not serious.” “Has the wall
been photographed
?” “Every inch.” “Then I’m serious.” “Quinn—” “If it’s a lock, I open it. If it isn’t, I’ve wasted ten seconds.” She set the token into the depression. For a moment, nothing happened.
Then something clicked inside the
wall with the heavy patience of an old mechanism. The token grew cold beneath her fingers. A seam appeared where there had been only grout, running upward and then across. The resin smell sharpened. Venn stood. “That’s enough of a result for me.” Quinn drew the compartment’s small torch from her pocket and put her free hand against the tile. It swung inward without resistance. Cold air came through the gap. Behind the door, where the station survey showed forty feet of London clay, a narrow passage ran downhill. Its floor
was coated
in pale dust. At the threshold lay a scuffed impression of a boot, and beyond it a broad, disturbed patch where something heavy had slid. On the inside edge of the door, at shoulder height, a partial handprint had dried to the color of old rust. Venn stopped looking amused. Quinn crouched again. The dust on the passage floor was not the station’s sooty gray. It was almost white. The dead man’s shoulders and the back of his coat had carried the same pallor. “Get forensics down here,” she said. “I want comparison samples from his coat, his boots, the platform and this passage. And bring me the original station plans. Not the council summary.” Venn
was still staring
at the handprint. “You think he died in there?” “I think he died on his left side, somewhere with pale dust. I think he was put on the platform after everyone else had gone. The market, or whatever it was, cleared out last night. Someone stayed behind to arrange him.” “As a message?” “As an explanation.” Quinn looked back at the neat boots, the buttoned coat, the
carefully
chosen objects. “Overdose. Trespass. Criminals panic and run. A story ordinary enough that we’d help tell it.” The air from the passage shifted, bringing with it the smell of rain on hot metal. For an instant she was nowhere beneath Camden. She stood three years earlier in a riverside lock-up, looking at DS Morris’s covered body while a scenes-of-crime officer insisted there had been no fire. No electrical fault. Nothing burned. The smell had been there all the same, clinging to Quinn’s clothes after she left. It had never gone into her final report. She had not been able to make it mean anything, and unexplained details were too easily mistaken for mistakes. The compass needle twitched inside its bag. Quinn lifted it. The needle no longer pointed at the wall. It pointed through the open doorway, down the passage,
perfectly
steady. Venn followed her gaze. “Still broken?” “Yes,”
she said, because the alternative required a vocabulary she did not yet possess
. She checked her
watch
. 05:07. Above them, London
was beginning
its first deliveries, its early buses, its plausible noise. In a few hours Eva Kowalski would be at the British Museum, moving between the public galleries and the restricted archives with her satchel full of books, trusted to know which fragments of the past should remain locked away. Quinn thought of green eyes behind round glasses. A curl tucked behind a left ear. Not somewhere one can actually go. “One more thing,” she said. “Find Eva Kowalski. Quietly. Don’t telephone her first.” Venn took out his own phone, then paused. “You think she’ll run?” “No.” Quinn looked at the last line in the notebook, at Aurora’s name written hard enough to tear the paper. “I think she’ll want to know whether we opened the wall.” She stepped aside to let Venn pass, but kept the compass in her hand. Beyond the doorway, the passage descended into darkness no station plan accounted for. The needle strained toward it and did not waver.
created_at
"2026-10-27T10:46:32.273Z"
10/27/2026, 10:46:32 AM
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7196
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generation_time
557321
tokens_prompt
896
tokens_completion
15972
native_tokens_prompt
932
native_tokens_completion
14185
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
11283
native_tokens_cached
768
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
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"stop"
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7196
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0.1423316
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
15
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
73
tagDensity
0.205
leniency
0.411
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
83.84%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2166
totalAiIsmAdverbs
7
found
0
adverb
"sweetly"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
3
adverb
"gently"
count
2
4
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
5
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
highlights
0
"sweetly"
1
"slightly"
2
"very"
3
"gently"
4
"carefully"
5
"perfectly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
86.15%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2166
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"whisper"
count
1
1
word
"dancing"
count
1
2
word
"trembled"
count
1
3
word
"efficient"
count
1
4
word
"pulse"
count
1
5
word
"quivered"
count
1
highlights
0
"whisper"
1
"dancing"
2
"trembled"
3
"efficient"
4
"pulse"
5
"quivered"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
173
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
173
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
231
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
41
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2166
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
17
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
89.94%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
60
wordCount
1665
uniqueNames
14
maxNameDensity
1.2
worstName
"Venn"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Venn"
discoveredNames
Venn
20
Camden
3
Aurora
3
Highgate
1
Eva
2
Kowalski
3
Quinn
19
Veil
2
Market
1
Detective
1
London
2
Morris
1
British
1
Museum
1
persons
0
"Venn"
1
"Camden"
2
"Aurora"
3
"Eva"
4
"Kowalski"
5
"Quinn"
6
"Morris"
7
"Museum"
places
0
"London"
1
"British"
globalScore
0.899
windowScore
1
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
120
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2166
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
231
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
117
mean
18.51
std
18.66
cv
1.008
sampleLengths
0
15
1
9
2
65
3
59
4
31
5
28
6
1
7
26
8
3
9
2
10
1
11
1
12
8
13
16
14
32
15
10
16
5
17
1
18
4
19
89
20
28
21
7
22
7
23
4
24
63
25
6
26
4
27
7
28
2
29
35
30
6
31
6
32
24
33
9
34
68
35
30
36
3
37
14
38
10
39
1
40
32
41
6
42
9
43
29
44
52
45
7
46
16
47
3
48
1
49
12
91.07%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
7
totalSentences
173
matches
0
"been closed"
1
"been trodden"
2
"been photographed"
3
"been underlined"
4
"been worn"
5
"was packed"
6
"was coated"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
267
matches
0
"was still staring"
1
"was beginning"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
3
flaggedSentences
3
totalSentences
231
ratio
0.013
matches
0
"A woman with an impossible beehive smiled beside a promise of cleaner washing; a man in a trilby recommended cigarettes for the throat."
1
"One side of his face was bloodless; the other had darkened to a bruised violet."
2
"The forensic team had reached it by putting down stepping plates from the opposite direction; their route was clearly marked."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1673
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
47
adverbRatio
0.028093245666467422
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.008965929468021518
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
231
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
231
mean
9.38
std
7.03
cv
0.75
sampleLengths
0
15
1
9
2
16
3
7
4
26
5
16
6
7
7
15
8
5
9
23
10
9
11
12
12
19
13
7
14
21
15
1
16
26
17
3
18
2
19
1
20
1
21
8
22
5
23
11
24
12
25
2
26
9
27
9
28
10
29
5
30
1
31
4
32
21
33
13
34
15
35
18
36
22
37
5
38
15
39
8
40
7
41
3
42
4
43
4
44
9
45
20
46
23
47
11
48
3
49
3
64.64%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.40869565217391307
totalSentences
230
uniqueOpeners
94
44.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
2
totalSentences
151
matches
0
"Instead, it quivered toward the"
1
"Then something clicked inside the"
ratio
0.013
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
35
totalSentences
151
matches
0
"Her worn leather watch showed"
1
"Its name survived on a"
2
"He had the patient, slightly"
3
"She approached the body."
4
"He lay on his back"
5
"He might have been asleep,"
6
"His left hand was darker"
7
"He looked along the platform,"
8
"She went to the exhibits"
9
"Its face was crowded with"
10
"It was ugly, delicate work,"
11
"She walked three paces to"
12
"She set it down and"
13
"She had seen it, white"
14
"They had gone in at"
15
"She had tucked a red"
16
"She handed him the notebook"
17
"It was warmer than the"
18
"Its edge had been worn"
19
"She returned to the wall."
ratio
0.232
100.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
106
totalSentences
151
matches
0
"The dead man had no"
1
"Quinn reserved judgment until she"
2
"Rain needled on the hatch"
3
"Her worn leather watch showed"
4
"The station had been closed"
5
"Its name survived on a"
6
"A woman with an impossible"
7
"Venn waited beside the body"
8
"He had the patient, slightly"
9
"Venn gave a small shrug."
10
"Quinn looked at the numbered"
11
"A disc of yellow-white material,"
12
"A small brass compass, its"
13
"She approached the body."
14
"He lay on his back"
15
"He might have been asleep,"
16
"A dry man in a"
17
"Quinn crouched without touching him."
18
"His left hand was darker"
19
"Venn came nearer."
ratio
0.702
33.11%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
151
matches
0
"If second door opens, tell"
ratio
0.007
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
67
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
91.67%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
15
uselessAdditionCount
1
matches
0
"she said, because the alternative required a vocabulary she did not yet possess"
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
73
tagDensity
0.178
leniency
0.356
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
92.8188%