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Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YFX004BF5CR9DME0XSQKN2
Run Details
Model:
Kimi K3.1 Pro (Reasoning, Max)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
6m 51s
Cost:
$0.108734
Provider:
Moonshot AI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
97.77%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
75.50%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
90.91%
Name drop frequency
(details)
91.86%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
45.20%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
55.56%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
82.92%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
83.33%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
93.9017%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
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Aurora stopped. Three steps later, so did the
echo
.
She kept the torch aimed
at the path. Bracken crowded its edges, black beyond the reach of the beam, and the oak trunks behind it stood too close together for her to see between them.
She waited with one heel
raised. No bird called. No car passed beyond the park wall. The distant pressure of London, that low murmur she usually heard even through closed windows, had gone. She lowered her foot. Dirt gritted under her trainer. Nothing followed. “Better.”
Her voice came back flat
and small.
The park had swallowed the
rest.
The note in her coat
pocket had promised answers, though it had offered none itself. Six lines of narrow handwriting. No signature.
She had read it often
enough on the ride from Silas’s bar to recall it without taking it out. The stone is not jewellery.
It does not belong to
you. Return it to the oak ring in Richmond Park before it opens what should stay closed. Come alone. Return implied prior ownership. Belong implied someone had the right to decide.
Her father had spent twenty
years taking sentences apart in court, and Aurora had learnt the habit at his kitchen table.
Whoever wrote the note had
chosen every word with care.
They had also known where
she lived, which flat above the bar was hers, and which door had a lock that stuck unless she lifted the handle.
That had brought her here
more than fear had. Fear could be managed.
Strangers who knew too much
needed dealing with. She had still taken precautions.
Yu-Fei had the note and
a map with the grove circled in red. If Aurora failed to call, he would contact Eva, then the police.
Her phone carried a full
charge.
She had a spare torch
battery, six receipt slips from the Golden Empress, and no intention of staying longer than necessary. The Heartstone rested against her breastbone, warm through two layers of cloth. She touched it once. The
pulse
came again, slow enough to distinguish from her own heartbeat. “Not jewellery,” she said. “That narrows it down to almost everything.” The path bent, though her map showed it running straight.
She followed it for another
fifty paces and found the first receipt slip. Aurora aimed the torch at her own handwriting. OUT.
She had pinned the paper
beneath a stone at the previous bend, with the arrow pointing back towards the gate.
Now it lay across the
path ahead of her. The arrow pointed into the trees.
She left it where it
was. Beyond the next bend, the ground opened into a clearing. Seven standing stones formed its boundary. Each rose higher than her head, dark and narrow, with deep grooves cut down its face. The grooves joined near the top in the shape of an oak leaf. Living oaks grew between the stones, their roots gripping the earth in thick, knotted arcs. Moss softened the bases of the pillars, but nothing grew on their carved surfaces. Wildflowers covered the clearing. Harebells nodded beside white anemones. Red campion crowded the roots, mixed with small violet blooms Aurora could not name. Plants that belonged to separate months flowered within the same patch of soil.
Their mingled scent reached her
as she crossed the boundary, thick and sweet, with something dry underneath it. The torch beam passed over the whole ring. No benefactor. No convenient figure in a coat. No explanation waiting beside a thermos.
She checked each gap between
the stones before stepping fully inside. The
silence
here had texture.
It pressed against her ears
until she heard the soft rush of her own blood. A low slab lay near the centre. Its surface carried no carving, only a shallow depression worn by years of rain or hands. Aurora unclasped the silver chain. The deep crimson stone, no larger than her thumbnail, gave off a faint inner glow when she held it above the slab. Not reflected torchlight. The light moved beneath its surface.
She placed the pendant in
the depression and coiled the chain beside it. “You wanted it here. It’s here.” The flowers shifted at the edge of her vision. She turned the torch towards them. Every stem stood still. “You can collect it before I change my mind.” Something exhaled behind the nearest stone. Not a sigh. A single release of breath, close and controlled, the sort a person made after holding it for too long. Aurora moved the beam an inch at a time. Moss. Bark. A root split by age. The gap beyond the stone held only darkness. She stepped back from the slab. “Aurora.” The woman’s voice came from the path she had entered by. Aurora did not answer. She slipped her right hand into her coat pocket and closed it around the spare battery. A poor weapon, but heavy enough to improve a punch. The voice did not repeat itself. It had spoken with no urgency and no question,
as if identifying an object on a shelf
. She crossed to the path, keeping the slab behind her and the standing stone on her left. At the boundary, she looked back. The pendant remained where she had put it. Seven stones. Seven oaks. One slab. She walked out. Her phone timer showed four minutes elapsed. She had started it at the park gate. That gave her six minutes to reach the road if she kept her pace and ignored any further advice from the trees. She took twenty steps. The receipt with OUT written on it crackled under her shoe. Aurora lifted her foot. Mud had obscured the arrow. She left the paper untouched and walked faster. At a hundred paces, she checked the map. The blue dot spun over Richmond Park, drifted towards the river, then snapped back to the clearing. No signal. The compass still worked, so she chose the bearing she had followed from the gate and kept the torch fixed ahead. Trees passed on either side.
Once, something paced her through
the bracken. She heard no
footfall
, only the faint drag of leaves, a pause, then another drag. It maintained the distance between them with care. Aurora stopped. The dragging continued for two more steps. She swept the torch sideways. The beam caught a pale vertical shape behind an oak. It narrowed as she watched,
not ducking away but withdrawing by degrees, until only bark remained
. She did not go closer. “Yu-Fei has the address,” she said. No answer came. She had
not expected one, but the statement helped
. Someone outside knew. Someone would come looking. She resumed walking. The path ended at the standing stones. Aurora entered the clearing from the opposite side. The pendant lay on the slab, its chain no longer coiled. It formed a straight silver line, with the clasp pointing towards her. She turned and went back through the gap. This time she counted aloud. At fifty, her voice
began to
sound strained, so she counted inside her head instead. At eighty, a sweet scent reached her. At a hundred and three, wildflowers appeared in the torch beam. The clearing again. Her phone buzzed. Notifications crowded the screen, too many to read at once. Forty-two missed calls. Messages from Eva, Yu-Fei, and a number she recognised as the Golden Empress landline. The most recent sat at the top. Rory, it’s Thursday. This isn’t funny now. Tell me where you are. Aurora stared at the date. She had entered the park on Monday. She opened Yu-Fei’s first message. Before the text could load, the screen went black. The phone restarted in her hand, warm against her palm. When the lock screen returned, it showed Monday again, no missed calls, and a timer still waiting at four minutes. Aurora switched it off. Her next breath shook. She shortened it, held it, and released it through her nose. Panic would spend her torch battery and her legs. She needed both. The flowers along the boundary dipped in sequence. One patch after another bent towards the soil, a slow wave passing around the ring. Nothing touched them. When the movement reached the gap behind her, it stopped. Aurora looked at the standing stones and counted. Eight. The additional stone stood across the path by which she had first entered. Moss coated its base. Roots had grown around it. Deep grooves formed the same oak leaf near its top, but this leaf hung upside down. She crossed to it and pressed her palm against the carving. Cold grit roughened her skin. No fresh tool marks. No loose soil. The stone had every mark of age except the decency to have been there before. From the slab came a small metallic sound. The chain had moved again. One link at a time, it drew itself straighter. Aurora picked up the pendant by its clasp. Heat spread across her fingers, and the crimson stone
pulsed
. Once. A pause. Once more. She held it away from her body. Leaving it in the clearing had not opened an exit. Carrying it had not closed one. That made it the only object here whose behaviour changed with her choices, which meant she could use it. She extended her arm towards the nearest stone. The gem’s
warmth
faded. At the next gap, it strengthened. She moved around the clearing in short arcs, watching the glow rather than the trees. The pendant cooled near the carved pillars and warmed near the oaks. Its
pulse
quickened
whenever she approached the slab. On the far side of it, she found a bare patch among the flowers. No larger than a dinner plate. Black soil, fine as ash, without a single root or fallen petal. The Heartstone pulled
warmth
through her fingers in steady waves. Aurora crouched at the edge of the patch. She did not lower the pendant into it. “No.” The word sounded absurdly small. She put more
weight
behind the next one. “I haven’t agreed to anything.” Under the ground, something knocked. Three soft impacts, spaced like the beats of the stone. Aurora rose so fast that her knee cracked. She backed towards the slab. The soil at her feet gave a faint twitch, settling rather than splitting. A wildflower stem toppled across the bare patch. Its white petals remained on the surface. Another knock answered from behind her. She turned. Nothing stood at the slab. The sound had come from below that too. Aurora moved sideways. Beneath her feet, something moved sideways with her. She stopped. It stopped. She took one careful step towards the outer ring. A footstep mirrored it under the earth, heavier than hers and a fraction late. The standing stones no longer
looked like a boundary
. They looked like the bars of a cage built to contain a much larger clearing, with the bars driven deep enough to hold something on both sides. Aurora raised the torch towards the nearest gap. Her shadow stretched across the flowers and touched the stone before she did. Then the shadow kept lengthening. Its head slid up the carved surface while her own head remained level. She switched off the torch. Darkness took the clearing, but not
completely
. The Heartstone cast a dim red circle over her hand. Around the bare patch, petals held a faint pallor of their own. Something stood between two oaks. Aurora could see it only when she looked at the stone beside it. A slim shape, motionless, with its head inclined
as though listening to a sound behind her
. When she shifted her eyes, the oaks stood empty. The thing in the ground drew a long breath. She heard the intake pass through soil and roots. It had depth. Lungs, or space enough to imitate them. Aurora closed her fist around the pendant. Its heat pressed into her palm. “Stay down there.” The ground split. No thunder accompanied it. No earth spilled aside. A seam opened across the bare patch, neat as a cut made with a razor, and widened without a sound. Blackness lay below. The wildflowers around it leaned away, their stems bending until petals touched the grass. Aurora switched on the torch. Its beam reached only a short distance into the opening before stopping, as if the dark below had substance. The Heartstone convulsed against her fingers.
Once, twice, then a rapid
pulse
that forced her hand open. The pendant dropped. It did not fall into the seam. It hung at the level of her knee, suspended by its silver chain, though she had released the clasp. The chain rose towards the opening link by link. Something below had taken hold of it. Aurora grabbed the chain with both hands. Cold metal sliced across her palms. She planted one trainer against the edge of the seam and pulled. For an instant, the thing below yielded. Then it pulled back. Her shoe slipped. Soil whispered into the opening. Aurora went down on one knee, and from the darkness came the rustle of someone climbing with unhurried care. A hand emerged beside her trainer. Its fingers closed over the edge of the seam. The nails were short. One knuckle carried a faint ink stain. On the left wrist, pale against the skin, curved a small crescent-shaped scar. Aurora stared at her own wrist. The same scar showed above her sleeve. The woman below tightened her grip and spoke in Aurora’s voice. “Don’t let me put it on.”
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"gen-1793098416-AUhqZE2VRPRj8Ai970pM"
upstream_id
"chatcmpl-6ae082b04d02c5f1e67db120"
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"a3fafaac-f097-4ef1-86b3-842854dad5c6"
id
"chatcmpl-6ae082b04d02c5f1e67db120"
is_byok
false
latency
1910
model_permaslug
"moonshotai/kimi-k3.1-pro-20261023"
provider_name
"Moonshot AI"
status
200
total_cost
0.108734
cache_discount
(null)
upstream_inference_cost
0
provider_name
"Moonshot AI"
response_cache_source_id
(null)
data_region
"global"
workspace_id
"97e315e5-d303-487d-83c1-83180e8a13d4"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
2
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
11
tagDensity
0.182
leniency
0.364
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
97.77%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2245
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"completely"
count
1
highlights
0
"completely"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
75.50%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2245
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"echo"
count
1
1
word
"pulse"
count
3
2
word
"silence"
count
1
3
word
"footfall"
count
1
4
word
"pulsed"
count
1
5
word
"warmth"
count
2
6
word
"quickened"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
1
highlights
0
"echo"
1
"pulse"
2
"silence"
3
"footfall"
4
"pulsed"
5
"warmth"
6
"quickened"
7
"weight"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
262
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
262
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
271
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
27
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2245
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
4
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
90.91%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
58
wordCount
2200
uniqueNames
15
maxNameDensity
1.18
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
2
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
London
1
Silas
1
Richmond
2
Park
2
Aurora
26
Eva
2
Golden
2
Empress
2
Heartstone
4
Yu-Fei
3
Thursday
1
Monday
2
Seven
3
Moss
3
One
4
persons
0
"Silas"
1
"Aurora"
2
"Eva"
3
"Heartstone"
4
"Yu-Fei"
5
"Seven"
6
"Moss"
places
0
"London"
1
"Richmond"
2
"Park"
3
"Golden"
globalScore
0.909
windowScore
1
91.86%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
172
glossingSentenceCount
4
matches
0
"as if identifying an object on a shelf"
1
"looked like a boundary"
2
"looked like the bars of a cage built to c"
3
"as though listening to a sound behind her"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
2
per1kWords
0.891
wordCount
2245
matches
0
"not ducking away but withdrawing by degrees, until only bark remained"
1
"not expected one, but the statement helped"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
271
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
125
mean
17.96
std
15.94
cv
0.887
sampleLengths
0
9
1
68
2
9
3
2
4
1
5
13
6
41
7
29
8
70
9
21
10
57
11
12
12
16
13
11
14
23
15
8
16
1
17
35
18
6
19
10
20
64
21
54
22
22
23
31
24
23
25
36
26
13
27
6
28
9
29
10
30
9
31
6
32
22
33
24
34
6
35
1
36
11
37
30
38
23
39
23
40
8
41
6
42
3
43
37
44
4
45
11
46
17
47
48
48
35
49
2
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
262
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
372
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
271
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
94.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
2205
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar."
adverbCount
78
adverbRatio
0.03537414965986395
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.004988662131519274
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
271
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
271
mean
8.28
std
5.2
cv
0.628
sampleLengths
0
2
1
7
2
8
3
27
4
6
5
3
6
7
7
17
8
4
9
5
10
2
11
1
12
7
13
6
14
15
15
5
16
2
17
19
18
5
19
6
20
16
21
2
22
4
23
8
24
21
25
10
26
27
27
9
28
4
29
8
30
5
31
13
32
12
33
6
34
21
35
12
36
4
37
12
38
4
39
7
40
10
41
13
42
8
43
1
44
20
45
9
46
6
47
6
48
10
49
6
45.20%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
13
diversityRatio
0.2915129151291513
totalSentences
271
uniqueOpeners
79
55.56%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
240
matches
0
"Once, something paced her through"
1
"Then the shadow kept lengthening."
2
"Once, twice, then a rapid"
3
"Then it pulled back."
ratio
0.017
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
68
totalSentences
240
matches
0
"She kept the torch aimed"
1
"She waited with one heel"
2
"She lowered her foot."
3
"Her voice came back flat"
4
"She had read it often"
5
"It does not belong to"
6
"Her father had spent twenty"
7
"They had also known where"
8
"She had still taken precautions."
9
"Her phone carried a full"
10
"She had a spare torch"
11
"She touched it once."
12
"She followed it for another"
13
"She had pinned the paper"
14
"She left it where it"
15
"Their mingled scent reached her"
16
"She checked each gap between"
17
"It pressed against her ears"
18
"Its surface carried no carving,"
19
"She placed the pendant in"
ratio
0.283
82.92%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
181
totalSentences
240
matches
0
"She kept the torch aimed"
1
"She waited with one heel"
2
"The distant pressure of London,"
3
"She lowered her foot."
4
"Dirt gritted under her trainer."
5
"Her voice came back flat"
6
"The park had swallowed the"
7
"The note in her coat"
8
"She had read it often"
9
"The stone is not jewellery."
10
"It does not belong to"
11
"Her father had spent twenty"
12
"They had also known where"
13
"That had brought her here"
14
"Fear could be managed."
15
"Strangers who knew too much"
16
"She had still taken precautions."
17
"Yu-Fei had the note and"
18
"Her phone carried a full"
19
"She had a spare torch"
ratio
0.754
83.33%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
4
totalSentences
240
matches
0
"Whoever wrote the note had"
1
"If Aurora failed to call,"
2
"Now it lay across the"
3
"Before the text could load,"
ratio
0.017
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
84
technicalSentenceCount
3
matches
0
"That made it the only object here whose behaviour changed with her choices, which meant she could use it."
1
"A slim shape, motionless, with its head inclined as though listening to a sound behind her."
2
"Its beam reached only a short distance into the opening before stopping, as if the dark below had substance."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
2
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
2
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
11
tagDensity
0.182
leniency
0.364
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
93.9017%