Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YG9X694S2DFJ2HG6Z1J120

Run Details

Duration:
52.5s
Cost:
$0.019100
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The man in the delivery jacket came out of the alley carrying a child. Detective Harlow Quinn lowered her umbrella. Rain struck her closely cropped hair and ran down her neck. Across the Camden road, the man shifted the child higher against his shoulder, keeping her head tucked beneath his chin. A canvas medical bag knocked against his hip. Tomás Herrera. Former paramedic. Unlicensed since the tribunal eighteen months ago. Quinn had seen his photograph that afternoon, clipped to a report that described him as a medical contact for the group she had been watching. One of that group had left the Raven’s Nest in Soho an hour earlier with a sealed envelope and traveled north. Quinn had followed him to this alley. Now Herrera had emerged without the man or the envelope. A bus passed between them. When its red bulk cleared, Herrera was already crossing against the lights. “Mr. Herrera!” He looked up. Even through the rain, she saw him recognize the warrant card in her raised hand. Then he ran. Quinn dropped the umbrella and followed. A horn blared as she stepped into the road. She caught the side mirror of a crawling taxi with her palm, pushed past its bonnet and reached the far pavement in time to see Herrera disappear between a betting shop and a shuttered café. “Police! Stop!” He didn’t. The child’s shoe flashed white against his dark jacket as he turned the corner. Quinn drove into the alley after him. Her shoes skidded on wet cardboard. A bin lid clattered somewhere ahead, followed by a man swearing. She rounded a stack of beer crates and found Herrera shouldering through the service yard of a restaurant. The kitchen door stood open; steam and the smell of fried onions poured around two cooks who had come out to smoke. “Which way?” Quinn snapped. One pointed with his cigarette. “He’s got a kid.” “I can see that.” Beyond the yard, a narrow passage opened onto another street. Herrera was half a block ahead, moving awkwardly now, the child’s weight slowing him. He glanced back, and for a moment Quinn saw her face. She was perhaps eight, pale beneath the streetlights, her eyes closed. Something dark stained the collar of her coat. Quinn took out her radio. “Control, this is Detective Quinn. I’m pursuing a male, Tomás Herrera, north of Camden High Street. He’s carrying an unconscious child. Request immediate units and an ambulance.” A crackle answered her, then a voice asking for her location. She gave the last street name she’d passed. Ahead, Herrera shoved through a knot of people outside a pub. A woman screamed as beer spilled over her coat. Quinn ran around them, breathing hard but steadily, her arms close to her sides. The pavement narrowed beside a row of market stalls, their shutters down for the night. Rain drummed on the metal roofs. Herrera veered into a covered cut-through, where strings of dead bulbs hung over tables chained together. Quinn followed him under the awning and gained ground. “Put her down!” she called. “The ambulance is coming.” Herrera stopped so abruptly she nearly collided with him. He turned, one arm locked beneath the child’s knees. Up close, his olive skin had gone gray with exhaustion. His dark curls were plastered to his forehead, and a fine chain showed at his open collar. “She won’t survive an ambulance,” he said. There was blood on his sleeve. Quinn could smell the sharp medicinal tang coming from his bag. “You’re not qualified to make that call anymore.” “I’m the only one here who knows what’s happening to her.” The child made a thin sound. Herrera looked down at her, and the fear on his face gave Quinn pause. Then his gaze flicked past her shoulder. Quinn turned. A man stood at the mouth of the passage, rain shining on the shoulders of his black coat. He held an umbrella low enough to hide his face. There was room for him to pass, but he remained where he was. Herrera backed away. “You brought him.” “I came alone.” The man closed the umbrella. Its tip struck the paving stones with a metallic click. Herrera ran again, through a gap between two stalls. Quinn went after him. Behind her, the man’s footsteps began, unhurried and distinct. She forced herself not to look back. Herrera ducked beneath a hanging tarpaulin and vanished through a door Quinn would have taken for part of the wall. By the time she reached it, the door was swinging shut. She caught its edge. Beyond it, concrete steps descended into darkness. “Control, suspect entering an underground access point.” She pressed the radio harder against her shoulder. “There’s another male following. Black coat, black umbrella.” Static. She tried again. The radio hissed, then gave a short squeal that made her pull it away from her ear. Below, a door slammed. The stairwell smelled of damp brick and old electricity. Quinn drew her torch and started down. The beam found faded cream tiles beneath layers of grime. A rusted handrail followed the stairs around a bend. At the bottom lay a discarded paper cup, a wet footprint and a small white object. Quinn crouched. The object was a flat disc, no wider than a two-pound coin, with a hole bored through its center. A length of broken cord lay beside it. The surface was yellowed and faintly porous. Bone, she thought. She picked it up with a tissue from her pocket. Somewhere ahead, a bolt scraped. Then came Herrera’s voice, muffled through a door. “Please. She’s with me.” A second voice answered too low for Quinn to make out. A moment later, hinges groaned. Quinn hurried down the remaining steps into a tiled corridor. A heavy iron gate stood across it, shut tight. Beyond the bars, a woman in a red coat watched her. Herrera was already twenty yards farther on, bent over the child as he carried her toward a glow at the end of the passage. “Police,” Quinn said, showing her warrant card. “Open the gate.” The woman didn’t move. She was broad-shouldered and wore several thick silver rings. A scar split one eyebrow. “Token.” Quinn held up the disc. The woman’s eyes narrowed. “That’s his.” “He dropped it. There’s a seriously ill child down here.” “Then you’d better let him get on.” Quinn gripped the bars. “A man is following us. I don’t know who he is.” The woman looked past her, toward the stairs. For the first time, her expression changed. She reached through the gate. Quinn handed over the disc. The woman examined it, slipped it into her pocket and unlocked the gate. “Stay close,” she said. “Who is he?” But the woman had already turned away. Quinn followed her along the corridor. The air grew warmer. Voices rose ahead, dozens of them, mixed with the scrape of wheels and the rattle of shutters. They passed through a tiled arch onto the platform of an abandoned Tube station. Stalls crowded the length of it beneath a canopy of tarpaulins. Lamps hung from cables strung between the old columns, casting green and amber light over tables piled with jars, books and bundles of dried plants. People pressed shoulder to shoulder in the narrow aisles. A train map, yellow with age, remained on the wall behind a counter; someone had pinned strips of dark cloth over the station names. Herrera pushed through the crowd ahead. The child’s white shoe bobbed once between two shoulders and disappeared. Quinn hesitated at the platform entrance. Her radio had gone silent. The stairway was behind her, and the woman in the red coat had already moved back toward it, leaving Quinn among strangers who had begun to notice her. Three years earlier, she had followed DS Morris into a derelict house in Brixton. Their suspect had gone through the kitchen. Morris had gone after him while Quinn checked the back garden. She had heard Morris shout once. By the time she got inside, the kitchen was empty, its locked window painted shut. Morris had been found in the cellar, his neck broken. The suspect had never been identified. The report said Morris must have fallen through a damaged section of floor. Quinn had walked that floor herself. She had never found the hole. Someone brushed against her. She turned sharply, but it was only a woman carrying a tray of small glass bottles. The woman gave Quinn a hard look and moved on. At the far end of the platform, Herrera stopped beside a stall hung with blue cloth. A man behind the counter lifted the child from his arms. Quinn set off after them. She passed a table of pocket watches, all ticking at different rates. At the next stall, a boy held out a silver coin to a customer; it bent slowly between his fingers, though he did not appear to be pressing it. Quinn kept moving. She could examine what she had seen later. The man at the blue stall laid the child on a padded bench. Herrera pulled supplies from his bag: scissors, gauze, a roll of tape. Quinn reached them as he cut open the child’s coat. “Move,” he said. “I need to see what’s wrong with her.” “You can see from there.” She stepped back enough to let him work. The child’s shirt was dark with blood at the shoulder. Herrera cut it away, revealing a wound just below the collarbone. The skin around it had turned an alarming blue-black. “What caused that?” Quinn asked. Herrera pressed gauze to the wound. “A blade.” “Where?” “The alley where you found us.” “The man in the black coat?” Herrera met her eyes. “Yes.” The man behind the stall uncorked a jar. A bitter smell rose from it. He dipped two fingers inside and drew them out coated in thick gray paste. Quinn caught his wrist. “What is that?” “Something that might keep her alive,” he said. Herrera leaned close to the child, listening to her breathing. “Detective, please.” Quinn released the man. He spread the paste around the wound, and the child jerked so violently that Herrera had to hold her down. Her eyes opened. For a second she stared at Quinn, frightened and lucid. “Where’s my mum?” she whispered. Herrera took her hand. “We’ll find her. Stay with me now.” Quinn looked back along the platform. The crowd had shifted, opening a narrow path from the entrance. At its far end stood the man in the black coat. The woman in red faced him with both hands on the gate, holding it shut. He said something Quinn couldn’t hear. The woman shook her head. Then the lamps nearest the gate went out. A murmur ran through the market. Stallholders began pulling cloths over their goods. Someone shouted for people to clear the entrance. The man placed his palm against the bars. The iron gave a long, low groan. Quinn drew her baton and started toward him. “Detective!” Herrera called. She looked back. He had the child upright now, wrapping her in a clean blanket. The man from the stall was packing jars into a wooden case. “Take her farther down,” Quinn said. “Find another way out.” Herrera hesitated. Then he lifted the child and disappeared behind the blue cloth with the stallholder. The iron gate buckled inward. The woman in red stumbled back, one hand clamped over her wrist. Quinn reached her as the man stepped through. “Armed police are on their way,” Quinn said. “Put your hands where I can see them.” His face was ordinary enough: pale, clean-shaven, perhaps fifty. Rainwater dripped from his coat onto the tiles. He looked past Quinn toward the blue stall. “Give me the girl.” “You’ll have to come through me.” His gaze settled on her. “You people always say that.” Quinn raised the baton. “On your knees.” He took another step. She struck his forearm, hard enough to break a bone. The impact jarred her wrist. He barely flinched, but his arm dropped, and Quinn drove her shoulder into his chest. They hit the gate together. The woman in red seized his coat and dragged him sideways. Quinn saw an opening and struck again, this time at his knee. He folded with a sharp intake of breath. The woman pulled a short iron chain from beneath her coat and looped it around his throat. He clawed at it, his composure gone. Quinn caught his wrist and twisted it behind him. “Move!” the woman shouted. People were already running. A stall overturned, spilling jars across the platform. The man under Quinn’s grip gave a sudden wrench and tore free of his coat. The woman staggered backward, left holding the chain and the empty garment. He went after Herrera. Quinn chased him through the crowd. At the blue stall, the cloth had been pulled aside, revealing a narrow service tunnel. She plunged through it and heard footsteps splashing ahead. The tunnel curved between bare brick walls. A lamp burned at the far end beside a flight of steps. Herrera was climbing them with the child, the stallholder behind him carrying his case. The man in black caught the stallholder by the shoulder and threw him against the wall. The wooden case burst open, jars smashing on the floor. Quinn hit the man from behind. They went down in the broken glass. He rolled onto her, surprisingly strong, and closed one hand around her throat. She drove the end of her baton into his ribs. His grip loosened just enough for her to drag in air. Behind him, Herrera turned on the steps. “Go!” Quinn shouted. He went. The door above slammed shut. The man looked toward it, and Quinn struck him across the jaw. His head snapped sideways. She shoved him off, scrambled up and backed toward the steps with her baton raised. He stayed on his knees for a moment, touching his mouth. Blood marked his fingers. Then he smiled at her, and Quinn felt the cold return to her stomach. From the platform came the woman in red and two others, each carrying a length of iron chain. The man saw them too. He rose, stepped over the broken jars and walked away into the dark end of the tunnel. None of them followed him. Quinn climbed the stairs, her throat aching. At the top, the door opened onto a rain-swept service lane. Herrera stood beneath a streetlamp with the child in his arms. A white van waited beside him, its rear doors open. He had wrapped the girl tightly enough that only her face showed. “She needs a hospital,” Quinn said. Herrera glanced down at the dark stain spreading through the blanket. “She needs someone who knows how to treat that wound. I have a place.” The stallholder emerged from the stairwell behind Quinn, favoring one leg. He climbed into the van and held out his arms. Herrera passed the child to him. Quinn put a hand on the rear door before Herrera could close it. “Her name.” He looked at her, rain running from his curls. “Lucía,” he said. “And her mother?” “I’m trying to find her.” Quinn took out her notebook. Herrera’s eyes dropped to it, wary. “I need an address where I can find you,” she said. “I can’t give you that.” “You ran from a police officer carrying a wounded child. Someone attacked you in the street, and he’s still down there. You need help whether you want it or not.” For a moment she thought he would refuse. Then he took the notebook and wrote a phone number on the top page. “It’s not registered to me,” he said. “But I’ll answer.” Quinn checked her radio. It crackled back to life, a dispatcher repeating her call sign. She gave her location and requested an ambulance again. Herrera’s jaw tightened. “I’ll tell them the patient’s gone if you leave now,” she said. “But I want to know how she is.” He nodded once. “I’ll call you.” She stepped aside. The van pulled away, its tires hissing through standing water. Quinn watched its lights turn the corner, then looked back at the service door. The woman in red stood just inside it, chain coiled in her hand. She had wrapped her injured wrist in a strip of cloth. “Who was he?” Quinn asked. “I don’t know his name.” “Will he come back?” The woman looked down the dark stairwell. “Not tonight.” Quinn wanted to go back down, secure the scene, bring a team through every stall on the platform. But the sound of sirens was growing louder, and she had a wounded child’s name, a phone number and a man to describe. She could start there. She took one step toward the door. The woman in red pulled it shut before she reached it. Quinn heard a bolt slide into place. By the time the first patrol car turned into the lane, the door would not open, and no one answered when she hammered on it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.309
leniency0.618
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2848
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slowly"
2"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
89.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2848
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count2
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"flicked"
2"footsteps"
3"eyebrow"
4"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences276
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences276
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"appear to"
1"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences323
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2848
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions115
wordCount2498
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.52
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn63
Camden1
Herrera35
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
One2
Static1
Tube1
Morris5
Brixton1
People2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"One"
5"Morris"
6"People"
places
0"Camden"
1"Soho"
2"Brixton"
globalScore0.239
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences197
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2848
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences323
matches
0"walked that floor"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs149
mean19.11
std15.9
cv0.832
sampleLengths
014
145
211
363
417
52
618
73
850
92
1016
1164
124
139
144
1554
165
1727
1811
1942
2046
219
229
2336
247
2517
268
2711
2827
292
3041
316
323
3315
3422
3538
3611
3723
381
3920
4020
4135
4236
433
4423
454
4616
4754
4810
4918
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences276
matches
0"were plastered"
1"been found"
2"been identified"
3"been pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs447
matches
0"was already crossing"
1"was swinging"
2"was packing"
3"were already running"
4"was climbing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences323
ratio0.009
matches
0"The kitchen door stood open; steam and the smell of fried onions poured around two cooks who had come out to smoke."
1"A train map, yellow with age, remained on the wall behind a counter; someone had pinned strips of dark cloth over the station names."
2"At the next stall, a boy held out a silver coin to a customer; it bent slowly between his fingers, though he did not appear to be pressing it."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2504
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount72
adverbRatio0.02875399361022364
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.005591054313099041
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences323
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences323
mean8.82
std5.48
cv0.622
sampleLengths
014
16
211
320
48
52
62
77
825
921
107
1110
125
1312
142
153
1615
173
186
199
2035
212
222
2314
247
256
2611
2718
2822
294
305
314
324
3310
3414
3511
3611
378
385
3927
4011
418
4211
439
4414
4515
466
4716
489
495
46.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.23839009287925697
totalSentences323
uniqueOpeners77
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences250
matches
0"Then he ran."
1"Then his gaze flicked past"
2"Somewhere ahead, a bolt scraped."
3"Then came Herrera’s voice, muffled"
4"Then the lamps nearest the"
5"Then he lifted the child"
6"Then he smiled at her,"
7"Then he took the notebook"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount62
totalSentences250
matches
0"He looked up."
1"She caught the side mirror"
2"Her shoes skidded on wet"
3"She rounded a stack of"
4"He glanced back, and for"
5"She was perhaps eight, pale"
6"She gave the last street"
7"He turned, one arm locked"
8"His dark curls were plastered"
9"He held an umbrella low"
10"Its tip struck the paving"
11"She forced herself not to"
12"She caught its edge."
13"She pressed the radio harder"
14"She tried again."
15"She picked it up with"
16"She was broad-shouldered and wore"
17"She reached through the gate."
18"They passed through a tiled"
19"Her radio had gone silent."
ratio0.248
44.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount208
totalSentences250
matches
0"The man in the delivery"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn lowered her"
2"Rain struck her closely cropped"
3"A canvas medical bag knocked"
4"Quinn had seen his photograph"
5"Quinn had followed him to"
6"A bus passed between them."
7"He looked up."
8"Quinn dropped the umbrella and"
9"A horn blared as she"
10"She caught the side mirror"
11"The child’s shoe flashed white"
12"Quinn drove into the alley"
13"Her shoes skidded on wet"
14"A bin lid clattered somewhere"
15"She rounded a stack of"
16"The kitchen door stood open;"
17"Herrera was half a block"
18"He glanced back, and for"
19"She was perhaps eight, pale"
ratio0.832
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences250
matches
0"Now Herrera had emerged without"
1"Even through the rain, she"
2"By the time she reached"
3"By the time she got"
4"By the time the first"
ratio0.02
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences118
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Quinn had seen his photograph that afternoon, clipped to a report that described him as a medical contact for the group she had been watching."
1"The stairway was behind her, and the woman in the red coat had already moved back toward it, leaving Quinn among strangers who had begun to notice her."
2"The van pulled away, its tires hissing through standing water."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
76.47% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Quinn snapped (snap)"
1"She pressed (press)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"the woman shouted (shout)"
4"Quinn shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.309
leniency0.618
rawRatio0.238
effectiveRatio0.147
92.2747%