Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YH50ETKHS025QR181ZE949

Run Details

Duration:
10m 19s
Cost:
$0.161816
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Heartstone had turned warm by the time Aurora reached the last of the oak standing stones. Now it pulsed against her breastbone, each crimson beat answering something inside the arch ahead. The arch had not been there when they entered Isolde’s grove. Its stones leaned together without mortar, worn round by weather that had never touched Richmond. Beyond them lay a depth of amber light, blurred as though seen through heated glass. Behind Aurora, wildflowers nodded among the roots and Isolde’s silver hair lifted in a wind that did not stir the grass. “That is not an invitation,” Nyx whispered. “You say that about every door without a handle.” “Doors with handles have caused me fewer centuries of trouble.” Nyx rose beside the arch, a tall silhouette trimmed in violet where their eyes glowed. They traced the air with one finger. Something wrinkled around the touch. “The solstice has worn a seam here. From the latch-stone to the root.” Aurora drew Isolde’s gift. The moonsilver dagger chilled her palm, its leaf-shaped blade gathering the grove’s faint moonlight. She set its point where Nyx indicated and pushed. At first nothing happened. Then resistance dragged at the blade, thick and elastic. Aurora changed her angle and drew down. The dagger parted the unseen ward with a sound like silk tearing underwater. Warm air spilled over her. It smelled of crushed herbs, caramelised sugar and rain on hot stone. Somewhere far beyond the arch, a multitude cheered. A gong rolled through their applause, followed by the bright clatter of thousands of knives against plates. Aurora tightened her grip on the dagger and stepped through. The warmth settled over her shoulders. Dry pollen coated the path beneath her boots, gold as saffron. Above her stretched an amber sky without sun, moon or cloud. Its light came from everywhere and cast no shadows. The arch stood on a terrace of ivory stone. Below it, vineyards descended in broad steps towards an orchard whose trees had broken through the roofs of a palace. Roots thick as towers gripped the fallen walls. Vines spilled from empty windows, heavy with translucent fruit. Beyond the palace, hills folded into other hills, too many for the valley to contain. Rivers threaded between them, reflecting a sky they did not seem to share. When Aurora looked back, the arch stood several fields below her, though she had walked on level ground. “Dymas,” Isolde said. Her lavender eyes moved across the terraces. For once, wonder had stripped the riddles from her voice. “You haven’t been here either,” Aurora said. “No.” “A straight answer. We really are somewhere strange.” Nyx crossed the threshold. Without a shadow to anchor them, their outline smoked at the edges. They pressed their long hands together, drew themselves solid and examined a vine curling around a broken column. “Belphegor keeps a generous garden.” “The Prince keeps appetites,” Isolde said. “A garden is an appetite that has learnt to wait.” Aurora’s boots printed the gold pollen. Nyx’s tracks faded as soon as they lifted their feet. Isolde crossed the same patch without disturbing a grain. The path led beneath the orchard. Transparent leaves chimed against one another overhead. Some branches carried blue pears with skins fine enough to show the pale threads inside; others bent under bunches of crimson fruit that gave off their own light. Split seedpods lined the path. When the warm wind passed through them, they produced the cries of gulls, the drone of bees and once, unmistakably, a snatch of drunken singing. There were no birds. No insects moved among the blossoms. Aurora slowed beneath a low branch. Its fruit smelled of oranges. Then the scent changed. Ginger. Rice wine. The peppery steam that rolled through Golden Empress’s kitchen whenever Yu-Fei lifted a stockpot lid. For an instant Aurora could hear the restaurant’s extractor fans and the barked shorthand of the dinner rush. Her stomach clenched. She leaned closer. The smell changed again: onions softening in butter, damp wool drying by a radiator, her mother opening a kitchen window against Cardiff rain. Nyx’s hand closed around her wrist. “Rory.” “It’s using my head.” “Your head appears to keep a well-stocked kitchen.” Aurora stepped back. The branch swayed after her though the wind had dropped. Isolde caught a falling blossom on her palm without closing her fingers around it. “Do not eat. In Dymas, a bite can be a signature.” “And smelling?” “A signature begins with reading.” “Comforting.” “It was not meant to be.” Nyx nudged a fallen pear with the toe of their boot. The fruit collapsed into gold dust. A single clear note rose from it, and somewhere in the valley an unseen choir answered with seven perfect harmonies. They all listened until the last voice faded. “Next time,” Nyx whispered, “I shall kick a stone.” At the palace wall, roots had split a mosaic into two crooked fields of colour. Aurora crouched to examine it. The artist had pictured no prince and no triumphant feast. Cooks occupied the centre, carrying bowls, jars and bundles of seedlings. Around them sat guests with horns, wings, tails and ordinary human hands. Every figure offered something to the person beside it. A draught lifted the black hair from Aurora’s neck. It carried none of the orchard’s sweetness, only cold stone and old smoke. She stood and followed it behind a curtain of white-flowering vine. “Service stairs,” she said. “If the front rooms are for promises, the kitchen will tell us what they cost.” The stairs descended into a chamber broad enough to hold the whole restaurant in Soho. Ovens lined the walls beneath chimneys stained brown by centuries of smoke. Copper pans hung from iron rails. Ladles rested across mixing bowls, their handles worn concave by hands. On the nearest bench sat a round loaf, pale with flour. Heat rose from it when Aurora held her palm above the crust. “Either someone’s here,” she said, “or this room has lost track of time.” “Both may be true,” Isolde said, “and still leave you with stale bread.” Thousands of papers rustled above the hearths. They hung in bundles like drying herbs, some browned and brittle, others white enough to reflect the ovens’ glow. Aurora lifted the nearest by one corner. A name headed it: Mara Venn of Whitechapel. Beneath that, a date in 1811. The handwriting narrowed towards the bottom, where Mara had agreed to labour at the Prince’s table until all hunger in Dymas was satisfied. Aurora read it twice. “That clause doesn’t end.” Nyx drew another paper into the light. This one bore an address in Soho. A third had been signed in ballpoint. “Perhaps the Prince has a modest appetite.” Aurora turned the page over, found no additional terms and let it fall. “This isn’t a fixed term. It’s a life sentence with a garnish.” Some pages carried signatures. Others bore a thumbprint, a smear of blood or a single scorched mark. Fine red lines ran from their lower edges into the mortar between the stones. Aurora raised the Fae blade towards one. Isolde’s fingers rested near, not on, her hand. “A blade may cut the paper and spare the chain.” “These are copies.” Aurora lowered the dagger. “Destroying them would make us feel useful and change nothing.” A bell struck beneath the floor. The nearest oven exhaled smoke. A woman appeared at the bench with both hands buried in dough. Her linen sleeves passed through the flour without shifting it. At the next station, a broad cook with four arms chopped roots in a blur of knives. More figures filled the aisles: human, horned, scaled, some so translucent that Aurora could see the ovens through their ribs. Orders overlapped in a dozen languages. Someone called for salt. Someone else recited quantities in French. A boy hurried through Nyx carrying a covered tureen, his lips shaping the same word over and over. Coming. Coming. Coming. Nyx dissolved into smoke. The boy passed through that too. A fine red thread encircled every cook’s wrist. Each one disappeared into the floor. Aurora moved aside as the woman at the bench reached through her. Cold crossed Aurora’s ribs, carrying a flash of exhaustion so complete that her knees loosened. Then the bell struck again. The kitchen emptied. The loaf continued steaming. Nyx gathered themselves back into solid form. Their violet eyes had dimmed to pinpoints. “One failed ritual kept me for centuries,” they whispered. “This place has made a recipe of the same cruelty.” Aurora’s fingers had tightened around the dagger until the crescent scar on her left wrist stood white. She eased her grip. Anger would not improve the wording of a single contract. Beyond the ovens, the cold draught continued. “Don’t follow the food smells,” she said. “Follow the air. Even a magical kitchen needs to breathe.” The draught led them through a narrow door and down a corridor where the warmth drained away. The distant cheers vanished. So did the smells of bread and fruit. A high ringing replaced them, thousands of tiny notes sounding at different distances. The corridor opened beneath a dome of roots. Aurora stopped at the threshold. A tree occupied the centre of the chamber, white-barked and vast, its trunk braided from a hundred smaller trunks. Black water encircled its roots in channels that flowed uphill. Its branches supported no ordinary canopy. Thousands of transparent pods hung among the leaves, each enclosing a point of coloured light. Stone niches lined the circular wall. Some held jars of grain. Others contained wrinkled beans, dried husks, flat seeds patterned like eyes. One shelf displayed rows of rice beside dark cherries and a handful of plain brown apple pips. The next held specimens labelled in scripts that rearranged themselves whenever Aurora looked away. “Seeds,” she said. Nyx tilted their head. “You sound disappointed.” “I was expecting another oven.” “There is one beneath the third root. It appears to be cold.” Aurora glanced down. Nyx had already crossed half the chamber. Isolde paused before an inscription cut into the nearest niche. Her silver hair pooled around her boots as she bent. “The first guest brought no gold,” she read. “She brought an apple, shared the flesh and kept the stones.” Nyx looked into the branches. “A dangerous guest. She expected a second visit.” Aurora approached the tree. Up close, the lights inside the pods were not lights at all. The nearest contained a miniature orchard beneath a grey sky. Rows of green trees no taller than grains of sand bent under rain. Aurora could see individual drops striking their leaves. Another pod held red dunes beneath a white sun. A third contained dark water and a floating garden where pale flowers opened and closed with the tide. She leaned towards the orchard. Rain sounded inside it. Not the ringing of the other pods, but actual rain: a soft roar on leaves, a harder patter on a slate roof, water running through a gutter. Cool drops touched her face. They vanished before they could wet her skin. “Is it a memory?” she asked. Isolde joined her beneath the branch. “A seed is a meal that has learnt patience. Why should it remember less than a stone?” Aurora held out her palm. The little orchard’s rain passed through it without weight, smelling of soil and green bark. Nyx had discovered a pod that gave off a low, contented bubbling. They bent until their face nearly touched its shell. “This one contains a kettle.” “Of course it does,” Aurora said. “No. Listen. There is someone in the next room, humming to it.” Nyx closed their violet eyes. For a while, the three of them moved from branch to branch. Isolde read the names beneath the niches. Aurora found a pod filled with snow falling through pine branches and another holding the dry rattle of a harvest under a copper sky. None of the little worlds offered her food. None changed to match her hunger. They kept their own weather, their own labour and their own small, persistent sounds. Aurora stood beneath them with cool rain passing over her face while Nyx listened to the unseen kettle and Isolde’s voice moved along the wall, naming seeds that no earthly soil had ever held.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.348
leniency0.696
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.56% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2045
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2045
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"chilled"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"comforting"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"mosaic"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"traced"
2"chilled"
3"silk"
4"warmth"
5"stomach"
6"comforting"
7"perfect"
8"mosaic"
9"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences185
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences216
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2045
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
57.08% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1722
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.86
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
Aurora32
Isolde13
Richmond1
Nyx18
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei1
Cardiff1
Soho2
Thousands2
Mara2
Venn1
Whitechapel1
Prince1
Dymas1
Fae1
French1
Coming3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Aurora"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
4"Empress"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"Mara"
7"Venn"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Golden"
2"Cardiff"
3"Soho"
4"Prince"
5"Dymas"
6"French"
globalScore0.571
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences131
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.489
wordCount2045
matches
0"Not the ringing of the other pods, but actual rain: a soft roar on leaves, a harder patter on a sla"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences216
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs109
mean18.76
std16.87
cv0.899
sampleLengths
032
162
27
39
410
527
613
727
833
95
1037
1110
1237
1374
1418
153
1617
177
181
198
2034
215
2216
2325
2471
2510
2615
2739
283
2923
306
311
324
338
3413
3514
3611
372
385
391
406
4137
428
439
4462
4522
4611
4719
4855
4912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences185
matches
0"been signed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs282
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences216
ratio0.005
matches
0"Some branches carried blue pears with skins fine enough to show the pale threads inside; others bent under bunches of crimson fruit that gave off their own light."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1005
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.01890547263681592
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.001990049751243781
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences216
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences216
mean9.47
std5.47
cv0.577
sampleLengths
017
115
211
315
415
521
67
79
810
915
107
115
1213
134
1414
159
164
179
187
1913
205
2112
228
2317
2410
256
2611
2711
289
299
3020
318
329
3315
3413
3518
363
377
3810
397
401
418
424
4312
4418
455
466
4710
486
4910
66.67% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4166666666666667
totalSentences216
uniqueOpeners90
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences166
matches
0"Then resistance dragged at the"
1"Somewhere far beyond the arch,"
2"Then the scent changed."
3"Then the bell struck again."
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences166
matches
0"Its stones leaned together without"
1"They traced the air with"
2"She set its point where"
3"It smelled of crushed herbs,"
4"Its light came from everywhere"
5"Her lavender eyes moved across"
6"They pressed their long hands"
7"Its fruit smelled of oranges."
8"Her stomach clenched."
9"She leaned closer."
10"They all listened until the"
11"It carried none of the"
12"She stood and followed it"
13"They hung in bundles like"
14"Her linen sleeves passed through"
15"Their violet eyes had dimmed"
16"She eased her grip."
17"Its branches supported no ordinary"
18"Her silver hair pooled around"
19"She leaned towards the orchard."
ratio0.139
80.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount126
totalSentences166
matches
0"The Heartstone had turned warm"
1"The arch had not been"
2"Its stones leaned together without"
3"Nyx rose beside the arch,"
4"They traced the air with"
5"Something wrinkled around the touch."
6"Aurora drew Isolde’s gift."
7"The moonsilver dagger chilled her"
8"She set its point where"
9"Aurora changed her angle and"
10"The dagger parted the unseen"
11"It smelled of crushed herbs,"
12"A gong rolled through their"
13"Aurora tightened her grip on"
14"The warmth settled over her"
15"Its light came from everywhere"
16"The arch stood on a"
17"Roots thick as towers gripped"
18"Vines spilled from empty windows,"
19"Rivers threaded between them, reflecting"
ratio0.759
30.12% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences166
matches
0"Now it pulsed against her"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences76
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The peppery steam that rolled through Golden Empress’s kitchen whenever Yu-Fei lifted a stockpot lid."
1"A boy hurried through Nyx carrying a covered tureen, his lips shaping the same word over and over."
2"The next held specimens labelled in scripts that rearranged themselves whenever Aurora looked away."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
84.78% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.283
leniency0.565
rawRatio0.231
effectiveRatio0.13
92.3373%