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Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YHN4MNDZJP81E53BMRMDBC
Run Details
Model:
GPT-6.1 Terra (Reasoning, Medium)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
52.6s
Cost:
$0.019729
Provider:
OpenAI
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
47.90%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
81.80%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
21.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
88.3684%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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Silas caught the glass before
it hit the floor, but the woman who had knocked it from the bar had already turned towards him. For a second she kept hold of her purse.
Then her fingers opened, and
it fell at her feet. “Silas?” He set the glass upright.
Beer ran over his knuckles
and gathered beneath his silver signet ring. “Mara.”
Rory stopped with two clean
tumblers in her hands.
She had heard Silas use
all sorts of voices behind the bar: the soft one that coaxed a drunk into a cab, the flat one that sent a man out through the door.
She had never heard this
one.
The woman wore a dark
suit and a white blouse buttoned at the throat.
Her hair, cut close to
her head, showed a broad stripe of grey.
She had the sort of
face Rory saw on people leaving court, composed until they spotted someone they knew.
Silas came round the end
of the bar, his left leg dragging a little. “You cut it off,” he said. Mara touched her hair. “You grew a beard.” “You once said I had the face for one.” “I said you had the face for hiding.”
He bent to pick up
her purse. Mara reached it first.
She checked the clasp, though
it had not opened, and tucked the purse beneath her arm. Rory put the tumblers away.
The Raven’s Nest had nearly
emptied.
A couple at the far
table argued over a map on the wall, their voices too low to make out. Near the entrance, the green neon sign washed the edge of a photograph. Mara looked around the room. “I was told there was someone here who could find an address.” “Who told you that?” “A man called Des. He runs a locksmith’s in Clerkenwell.” “I know Des.” “He said to ask for the owner. He didn’t mention your name.” Silas glanced at Rory. “Would you mind taking those glasses through?”
She gathered them on a
tray. Mara had left a small damp mark on the bar where her hand had rested. There was a pale band around one finger, as if she had taken off a ring. In the back room, Rory stacked the glasses beside the sink. The door to the bar stood open, and she could hear them without making out the words. Silas spoke first. Mara answered at length. Then neither of them spoke. Rory wiped the tray with a cloth and went back through. Mara sat on a stool, her purse on her lap. Silas had poured two whiskies. His own stood untouched. “Rory, this is Mara Vale. We worked together.” “Doing what?” “Various things.” Mara gave a short laugh. “He still says that. Once, he told a customs officer we sold kitchen equipment. The officer opened the case and found a pistol.” “What happened?” Rory asked. “I said it was for opening tins.” “And he let you go?” “He took the pistol. Silas complained all the way to the hotel.” “It was a good pistol.” Mara lifted her glass.
She held it between both
hands, warming nothing. “Your knee still gives you trouble.” “When I have an audience.” “I thought you’d had it fixed.” “They offered me a new one. I declined.” “You always did hate owing people.” Silas moved a beer mat beneath the foot of her glass. “That’s not how I recall it.” The couple at the table rose and came to pay. Silas took their money, handed over their coats and waited while they settled their argument in the doorway. One wanted to take the map home. The other said it belonged to the bar. “You could ask,” Mara said. The man looked at her. “You could ask him for the map.” Silas shook his head. “There. Saved you the trouble,” Mara said. The couple left. Rory locked the door behind them and turned the sign to CLOSED. When she returned, Mara had taken a folded sheet of paper from her purse. “I need to find the woman in this photograph.”
She laid it on the
bar. The sheet held two photographs, both of the same young woman. In one, she stood against a plain wall, her hair pulled back, her mouth shut. In the other, someone had caught her on a pavement with a paper cup in her hand.
Her head had turned towards
the camera. Rory picked up the sheet. A company name sat at the top: VALE TRANSPORT SERVICES. “Is she an employee?” “No.” “She looks as if she’s being followed.” “She was.” Silas drew the paper towards him. Beneath the photographs, someone had printed a name: ADA RAHIMI. There was a date of birth and an address in Hounslow, crossed through in black ink. “What does your company transport?” he asked. “People.” “Where?” “Detention centres. Airports. Courts.” Rory looked at Mara’s suit again, at the neat cuffs and the small initials stitched into one of them. “You work for the Home Office?” “We hold contracts with them.” “Why are you looking for her?” Mara took a sip of whisky and set the glass down with care. “Her mother was on one of our coaches. She died in hospital three days later.” Silas rested his palm on the paper. “How?” “She had diabetes. There was a delay with her insulin.” “Who delayed it?” “The medical record didn’t travel with her from the holding centre.” “That wasn’t what I asked.” Mara smoothed the edge of the sheet, though it lay flat. “One of my staff removed the record from the file. A woman at the holding centre had written that Mrs Rahimi needed insulin before the journey. The driver had already signed for the collection. If the note had stayed in the file, he would have had to wait for a nurse.” “And the staff member?” “I dismissed him.” Rory picked up the photograph again. Ada’s paper cup had a dark lid.
Her gaze pointed past the
camera, towards something Rory could not see. “Did you call the police?” “We opened an investigation.” “That wasn’t what I asked,” Rory said. Mara’s eyes moved to her. “No. I gave the police the file without the note. I found it afterwards.” Silas took his hand off the paper. “Where is it now?” “In a safe place.” “Is it?” Mara drew a folded document from her purse and placed it under the photograph. “I copied it. Ada has the original.” The handwriting on the copy was cramped but clear. INSULIN REQUIRED BEFORE TRANSFER. Beneath it sat a signature and an employee number. “How did she get it?” Silas asked. “I gave it to her.” “Why?” “Because she asked me what happened to her mother.” “And you told her?” “Not at first.” Silas took up his glass. He still did not drink. Mara watched him. “Go on. You’ve got something ready.” “You had her followed.” “I wanted to know where she took it.” “Your company wanted to know.” “It’s my company.” The words landed between them. Mara pressed her lips together and looked down at the bar. Rory carried the copy to the lamp at the end. The paper had a faint brown stain along one edge. Someone had handled the original with dirty hands, or laid it beside a cup. The note had gone into a file and come out again, and Mrs Rahimi had gone onto a coach without her insulin. “Why find Ada now?” Rory asked. “She called me. She said she was going to a solicitor with the note and the rest of the papers I gave her. She wanted me to come with her.” “When?” “She wouldn’t tell me. She said she’d call again.” “And she hasn’t?” “No. Then I found out my head of security had sent men to her flat. He told me he’d done it for the company.” “You hired him,” Silas said. “I know.” “You paid him.” “I know that too.” Mara’s hand closed around her purse. For an instant Rory thought she would leave.
Instead she pushed the photograph
towards Silas. “I called her number from a different phone. Someone answered, but they didn’t speak. Then the line went dead.” “You could tell the police what you’ve told us.” “I will. I’d rather find her first.” Silas looked at the photograph. His thumb covered Ada’s face. Mara reached over and moved his hand. “Don’t do that.” He pulled back. “I remember you like this,” she said. “With your hand on a piece of paper and a room full of people waiting for you to decide what it meant.” “That was a long time ago.” “You’ve kept the hand.” Silas put both hands beneath the bar. Rory heard the faint click of his ring against a shelf. Mara’s gaze followed the movement. “Do you remember the room in Prague? The one with the green tiles?” “Yes.” “My brother hated it. He said the tiles made everybody look ill.” Rory set down the copy. Silas stood still, his shoulders squared to Mara. “Tom had a way with rooms,” he said. “He had a way with people. He liked them.” “He liked most of them.” “He liked you. That should tell you something.” Mara emptied her glass. The whisky
seemed to
catch in her throat, but she put the glass down without coughing. “After the hospital, you came to my flat. You told me he’d missed the car.” Silas said nothing. “You sat at my table and told me you’d waited as long as you could.” “I did wait.” “Did you?” “Yes.”
She opened her purse and
took out a photograph, much smaller than the sheet with Ada’s face. Its edges had curled.
She put it beside the
whisky glass. A young man stood outside a building, one hand raised to shield his eyes. Behind him, a woman in a long coat laughed at whoever held the camera. Rory recognised Mara only when she looked at the mouth. “He sent that to me a week before,” Mara said. “I kept it on the fridge. You looked at it while you talked.” Silas picked up the photograph.
His ring caught against the
paper. “Tom was late. I went back to the building. There were men at the entrance.” “You said you never saw him.” “I saw his coat.” Mara’s fingers tightened on the rim of her glass. “His coat.” “He was on the floor inside. One of the men had a gun. I couldn’t see whether Tom was moving.” “You saw him.” “Yes.” “And you came to my flat and ate the soup I gave you.” Silas put the photograph down. “I had orders to bring out the documents. If I went in, the men at the entrance would have taken me.” “You had a gun.” “There were three of them.” “You had a gun, Silas.” Rory watched his right hand. The finger with the ring had left a damp circle on the photograph. “I was afraid,” he said. Mara stared at him. “You had twenty-three years to say that.” He nodded once. “I know.” “No, you don’t. I searched for him. I paid people to find out where he was buried. I went back there and stood outside that building.” “I know you did.” “You knew?” “I had someone watching you. I wanted you safe.” Mara rose from the stool so fast it struck the bar. Rory caught it before it fell. “You had someone watching me.” “I should have told you.” “You could have told me where he was. I went into offices with his photograph, and men looked through it as if I’d handed them a blank page. You knew where he was.” Silas reached for the photograph. Mara snatched it away and slipped it into her purse. “You let me look for him.” “I’m sorry.” She gave him an open, astonished look.
Then she sat down again
and steadied the stool with her feet. Rory fetched a glass of water. Mara accepted it, though she did not drink. “When I started the company,” she said, “I drove the vehicles myself. School trips, hospital appointments. I took old men for their dialysis and waited outside with the engine off because the fumes came through the windows.” Silas remained across the bar from her. “Then we got a contract for court transport. More vehicles, more staff. The detention work paid better. I told myself the people would get there with us or with someone else. Our drivers had training. Our vehicles were clean.” “Did you believe that was enough?” Rory asked. “For a while. Then I stopped asking.” She ran a finger around the rim of the water glass. “Mrs Rahimi’s daughter came to the office. My receptionist called security, and I told him to let her in. Ada put a photograph on my desk. Her mother had made a cake for someone, and she was standing beside it with flour on her face.” Mara paused. Rory could hear the refrigeration unit behind the bar. “I told Ada I’d look into it. She said, ‘You already have. You wrote to me.’ She’d brought the letter I signed.” “Did you remember signing it?” Silas asked. “No. I recognised my signature.” Mara looked at the copy of the medical note. “I gave her that because she kept coming back. I gave her the other papers because she asked for them. I thought I could hand them over and she’d take them somewhere I didn’t have to go.” “But she asked you to go with her,” Rory said. “Yes.” The phone in Mara’s purse
began to
ring. She pulled it out and looked at the screen. “Ada?” Mara nodded. She pressed the screen and put the phone to her ear. “Ada, where are you?” A voice came through, too faint for Rory to hear. “No. I didn’t send anyone to you.” Silas held out his hand. Mara shook her head. “I know what I said before. Listen to me now. Where are you?” The voice sharpened. Mara winced and moved the phone away from her ear. “Tell her where you are,” Silas said. Mara gave him a hard look, then spoke into the phone. “I’m at the Raven’s Nest. Dean Street. There are two other people here. One of them can help.” She listened. “No, I haven’t got the original. You have it.” A scrape sounded from the phone, followed by a burst of breath. Mara stood. “Ada?” Silas came round the bar. Mara turned away from him. “Let me speak to her,” he said. “She’s gone.” The line had not disconnected. Rory could hear a low shuffling sound. Mara held the phone out between them. Something struck the front door. All three looked towards it. A figure stood beyond the glass, one hand braced against the frame. Rory crossed the room and slid back the lock. Ada stumbled in. Her coat hung open, and one sleeve was dark from elbow to cuff. She clutched a thick envelope against her chest. Mara took a step towards her. “Ada.” Ada backed against the door. Her eyes fixed on Mara, then on the copy of the note lying on the bar. “You said you’d come alone.” “I didn’t know you were coming here.” “You told me the address.” “I didn’t know you were outside.” Ada’s hand came out of her coat pocket. She held a kitchen knife, its blade trembling. Rory stopped where she stood. Silas raised both hands. “Put that down. We can get someone to look at your arm.” Ada glanced at him, then at Rory. Blood dripped from her cuff onto the floorboards. “Who are you?” “Silas Blackwood. I own the bar.” “She said one of you could help.” “I can.” Ada pressed the envelope tighter to her chest. “I gave the police copies. They said they’d call me.” Mara moved closer. “Let me see your arm.” “Stay there.” “I can get you to a hospital.” “Like you got my mother to one?” Mara stopped. Ada’s phone lay on the floor just inside the door. Its screen still glowed. Silas bent to pick it up, and Ada swung the knife towards him. “Don’t touch it.” He straightened. “Do the men who followed you know you’re here?” he asked. Ada looked through the glass. A car had pulled up beneath the green sign. Two men got out. Mara went pale. “That’s my car.” One of the men came to the door and tested the handle. Rory had left it unlocked. He pushed it open, and Ada drove the knife into Mara’s hand as she reached for the envelope.
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
20
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
165
tagDensity
0.121
leniency
0.242
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
100.00%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
2768
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
2768
totalAiIsms
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
189
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
189
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"began to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
334
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
repeatedSegmentCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
51
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
2768
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
52
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
124
wordCount
1476
uniqueNames
9
maxNameDensity
3.12
worstName
"Mara"
maxWindowNameDensity
5.5
worstWindowName
"Mara"
discoveredNames
Silas
30
Rory
31
Mara
46
Raven
1
Nest
1
Hounslow
1
Mrs
1
Rahimi
1
Ada
12
persons
0
"Silas"
1
"Rory"
2
"Mara"
3
"Raven"
4
"Nest"
5
"Mrs"
6
"Rahimi"
7
"Ada"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0
windowScore
0
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
108
glossingSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
2768
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
334
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
252
mean
10.98
std
10.78
cv
0.982
sampleLengths
0
24
1
19
2
1
3
17
4
1
5
48
6
46
7
14
8
6
9
4
10
4
11
9
12
8
13
27
14
44
15
5
16
12
17
4
18
10
19
3
20
12
21
4
22
7
23
37
24
40
25
11
26
19
27
8
28
2
29
2
30
5
31
23
32
4
33
7
34
5
35
12
36
5
37
12
38
6
39
5
40
6
41
8
42
6
43
11
44
6
45
43
46
5
47
5
48
7
49
4
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
189
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
276
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
0
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
0
totalSentences
334
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1476
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
36
adverbRatio
0.024390243902439025
lyAdverbCount
2
lyAdverbRatio
0.0013550135501355014
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
334
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
334
mean
8.29
std
6.75
cv
0.815
sampleLengths
0
24
1
9
2
10
3
1
4
5
5
12
6
1
7
9
8
33
9
6
10
14
11
13
12
19
13
14
14
6
15
4
16
4
17
9
18
8
19
7
20
4
21
16
22
5
23
6
24
20
25
13
26
5
27
12
28
4
29
10
30
3
31
12
32
4
33
7
34
6
35
15
36
16
37
11
38
17
39
3
40
4
41
5
42
11
43
10
44
5
45
4
46
8
47
2
48
2
49
5
47.90%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.19760479041916168
totalSentences
334
uniqueOpeners
66
81.80%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
4
totalSentences
163
matches
0
"Then her fingers opened, and"
1
"Then neither of them spoke."
2
"Instead she pushed the photograph"
3
"Then she sat down again"
ratio
0.025
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
31
totalSentences
163
matches
0
"He set the glass upright."
1
"She had heard Silas use"
2
"She had never heard this"
3
"Her hair, cut close to"
4
"She had the sort of"
5
"He bent to pick up"
6
"She checked the clasp, though"
7
"She gathered them on a"
8
"His own stood untouched."
9
"She held it between both"
10
"She laid it on the"
11
"Her head had turned towards"
12
"Her gaze pointed past the"
13
"He still did not drink."
14
"His thumb covered Ada’s face."
15
"He pulled back."
16
"She opened her purse and"
17
"Its edges had curled."
18
"She put it beside the"
19
"His ring caught against the"
ratio
0.19
21.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
143
totalSentences
163
matches
0
"Silas caught the glass before"
1
"He set the glass upright."
2
"Beer ran over his knuckles"
3
"Rory stopped with two clean"
4
"She had heard Silas use"
5
"She had never heard this"
6
"The woman wore a dark"
7
"Her hair, cut close to"
8
"She had the sort of"
9
"Silas came round the end"
10
"Mara touched her hair."
11
"He bent to pick up"
12
"Mara reached it first."
13
"She checked the clasp, though"
14
"Rory put the tumblers away."
15
"The Raven’s Nest had nearly"
16
"A couple at the far"
17
"Mara looked around the room."
18
"Silas glanced at Rory."
19
"She gathered them on a"
ratio
0.877
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
163
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
61
technicalSentenceCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
20
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
20
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
165
tagDensity
0.121
leniency
0.242
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
88.3684%