Run: 2026-10-27-01M5YJC5C04B3F6WQQ9FWNRS89

Run Details

Duration:
52.5s
Cost:
$0.020130
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The constable at the foot of the stairs held out a tray of bone tokens and would not let Detective Quinn past without one. “They told me it was the rule, ma’am.” “They being?” The constable glanced over his shoulder. Beyond him, a tiled passage descended into darkness. Someone had strung a line of yellow bulbs along the ceiling, but the light did little for his expression. “The people who found the body.” Quinn selected a token. It was warm and roughly oval, with a notch cut into one edge. She held it up to the light. “Animal?” “I didn’t ask.” At the entrance to the passage, an elderly woman sat behind a folding table. She wore a purple dressing gown and a pair of rubber gloves. Quinn showed her the token. The woman examined it, then nodded toward the passage. “Keep it with you.” “Is that all?” “For coming in.” Quinn slipped the token into her coat pocket and continued down. The passage opened onto an abandoned Underground platform, its old station name painted over so many times that only the first black letter showed through. Stalls crowded the platform edge beneath the low iron roof. Most had shutters drawn or cloths thrown over their wares. A few traders remained, watching the police with the deliberate stillness of people who had decided not to be helpful. The air smelled of damp brick, hot metal and something sweet enough to make Quinn’s teeth ache. DS Patel waited beside a cordon of blue-and-white tape. He had taken off his jacket and rolled his shirtsleeves neatly to the elbows. A paper cup rested on the floor beside him, untouched. “Sir,” he said. Quinn ducked under the tape. “What have we got?” “Male, approximately sixty. Name given as Elias Venn. Sold clocks, instruments, that sort of thing.” Patel gestured toward a stall enclosed by wire mesh. “Found by his neighbour at six twenty. Ambulance crew pronounced him.” Inside the enclosure, Venn lay on his back between a workbench and a narrow counter. His grey hair was spread across the boards, and his shirt was dark with blood beneath the left collarbone. A brass instrument lay in his open right hand. A padlock hung from the mesh door. It was closed, though the door itself stood open. “Who opened it?” Quinn asked. “His neighbour. A woman called Lark. She says she cut through the mesh.” There was a ragged hole in the wire beside the latch, large enough for a hand. The cut ends curled outward. “And then?” “She reached through, took the keys from the victim’s pocket and opened the padlock.” “Why not leave the lock and call us?” “She says she thought he might still be alive.” Quinn looked at the blood on Venn’s shirt. “Was there any reason she shouldn’t?” “Not that I can see.” Two crime-scene investigators were working on the platform. One photographed the outside of the cage; the other knelt near Venn’s feet, arranging numbered markers. Quinn waited until the photographer had finished, then stepped closer to the door. The wire around the hole was bright where it had been cut. A pair of heavy shears lay on the counter inside, their handles red. “Lark’s?” Quinn asked. “Venn’s. She says she borrowed them from him yesterday and brought them back this morning.” “Convenient.” “Yes, sir.” Patel glanced at his notes. “She says the stall was locked when she arrived. She saw him on the floor, called for help, then cut her way in.” “Witnesses?” “Three heard her shout. One saw her cutting the wire. Nobody saw anyone leave the stall.” Quinn crouched near the door without touching it. The padlock was an ordinary brass model, its shackle thick and scratched. The latch consisted of two iron loops, one fixed to the door and one to the frame. “You can close this without the key,” she said. Patel looked down. “Yes.” “So the key in his pocket tells us nothing about who locked him in.” “It tells us he didn’t unlock it and let himself out.” “He’s still here.” Patel gave her a patient look. “The traders are calling it a locked-room murder. I’m trying to establish what happened, not make it sound interesting.” Quinn stood. “What do you think happened?” “Someone came in while Venn was setting up, stabbed him and pulled the door shut behind them. Lark found him. The hole and the keys are exactly what they appear to be.” “Any idea who?” “Lark says a young woman was arguing with him last night. Red hair, glasses, carrying a leather satchel. We’ve got her upstairs.” “Why upstairs?” “She tried to leave when she saw the uniforms.” “People do.” “She also had blood on her cuff.” The investigator at Venn’s feet looked up. “We’re ready for you now, ma’am. Mind the markers.” Quinn stepped inside. Venn’s workbench was crowded with small drawers, coils of wire and opened cases lined with faded velvet. One drawer hung partly out. Its brass handle had been twisted sideways, and several shallow gouges marked the wood around it. “Anything missing?” Quinn asked. “Lark says Venn kept cash in there,” Patel said. “Drawer’s empty.” The boards beside the bench were littered with minute brass filings. Quinn followed them with her eyes. They stopped abruptly beneath a rectangular patch of clean wood. “Was something there?” “We don’t know.” The patch was about the size of a large book. At one corner, a crescent of dark wax clung to the floor. The investigator had placed a marker beside it. Venn’s right hand lay palm upward. The object in it was a small brass compass, green with verdigris. Protective-looking marks had been etched around its face. Its needle pointed toward the back of the stall, almost parallel with the platform wall. “Has that been moved?” Quinn asked. “No,” the investigator said. “Photographed in situ.” There was dried blood along the side of Venn’s hand, but not on the compass. His fingers curled loosely around its edge. Quinn leaned closer. The skin beneath the instrument was pale and unmarked. “Can you lift it?” The investigator put on fresh gloves and carefully removed the compass. A narrow streak of blood crossed Venn’s palm where the rim had rested. Quinn looked at the underside. Clean. “Someone put it there after the blood dried,” she said. Patel crouched beside her. “Or he picked it up before he was stabbed.” “Then the rim would have blood on it. His hand was already wet when he closed it around the compass.” “Maybe he held it carefully.” “With a wound in his chest?” Patel considered the body. “All right. Someone placed it there. Why?” Quinn looked at the instrument’s face. The needle had shifted while the investigator lifted it, then settled again, pointing past the workbench. “To tell us something,” she said. “Or to make us think he was telling us something.” A voice behind them said, “It points to the nearest opening.” Quinn turned. A young woman stood beyond the cordon with a uniformed constable. Her curly red hair had escaped from a clip, and one lens of her round glasses was smeared. She had a worn leather satchel clutched against her ribs. Patel rose. “Miss Kowalski, I told you to wait.” “I know. I could see what you were holding.” She tucked a curl behind her left ear. “Please don’t turn it any farther. The needle can stick.” Quinn stepped out of the stall. “You know Venn?” “Eva Kowalski. Yes. I bought things from him.” “Patel tells me you argued last night.” “We argued about an instrument he sold me. It wasn’t what he said it was.” Eva’s green eyes flicked toward the body. “Is he really dead?” “Yes. Where did the blood on your cuff come from?” Eva held out her sleeve. A rust-coloured smear marked the edge. “A book. I caught my hand on the clasp this morning.” She turned her palm over. A small cut crossed the base of her thumb. Patel said, “We’ll check it.” “You said the compass points to an opening,” Quinn said. “A rift. Or a portal.” “Meaning?” Eva hesitated. “Somewhere you can cross from one place to another.” Quinn glanced back at the instrument. “It’s a compass. North is an excellent place to start.” “It doesn’t point north.” “We’ll check that too. Why did you try to leave?” “Because I work in a restricted archive, and I didn’t want my name attached to this place.” Eva swallowed. “I didn’t hurt him.” “Did you come here this morning to see him?” “Yes. I wanted my money back.” “What time?” “Just after six. His shutter was down, so I went to get tea. When I came back, there were people shouting.” Quinn studied the compass again. The investigator held it level now, and the needle pointed toward the back wall. Quinn took her own phone from her pocket and opened its compass. North lay in the opposite direction. “Could there be a magnet behind the wall?” she asked. “There could,” Eva said. “But that isn’t what’s making it move.” “Is there a door behind the wall?” “Not one I’ve seen.” Patel folded his arms. “Sir, if Miss Kowalski was here at six, she had an opportunity. Venn’s neighbour says they argued. There’s blood on her sleeve. We should get her statement somewhere quieter and establish her movements.” “We should,” Quinn said. “First, I want to speak to the neighbour.” Lark’s stall stood on the other side of the cordon. She sold candles from shallow wooden trays: black, white, red, and a deep blue that looked almost purple under the bulbs. She had a long face, a grey plait and the pinched, indignant expression of a woman whose morning had been ruined by other people’s incompetence. “I’ve already told him everything,” she said when Patel brought Quinn over. “I need you to tell me again.” Lark’s account came readily. She had arrived at six fifteen, found Venn on the floor and shouted for help. Someone had called an ambulance while she cut the wire. “Did you touch anything before the police arrived?” Quinn asked. “Only his keys. And him, to feel for a pulse.” “Which pocket were the keys in?” “His coat.” “He isn’t wearing a coat.” “His trousers, then. It was a shock.” “You borrowed the shears yesterday?” “Yes.” “Why?” “To cut a crate open.” Quinn looked at the trays. “Do you make the candles?” “No. I sell them.” “Were you here last night when Miss Kowalski argued with Venn?” “I was packing up.” “What was the argument about?” “A faulty compass, I think.” Eva made a small sound behind Quinn. “A lamp.” Lark’s eyes shifted to her. “Well, you would know.” Quinn looked down at the candles. Several had been packed in paper sleeves. A lump of dark blue wax had hardened on the edge of the nearest tray. She thought of the crescent on Venn’s floor. “Your candles drip much?” “They’re candles.” “May I see one?” Lark selected a blue one and held it out. Quinn examined its base. A thin paper label had been stuck there with brown gum. Part of the label had peeled away, leaving a curved edge. The wax on Venn’s floor had a strip of brown paper embedded in it. “Do you sell to Venn?” “Sometimes.” “Did you sell him one of these?” “I don’t remember.” Quinn handed the candle back. “You cut the wire from outside the stall?” “Yes.” “With Venn’s shears.” “I’ve told you.” “Show me how you held them.” Lark took the shears from the counter when the investigator brought them over. She mimed cutting in front of her, the long blades pointing away from her body. Quinn returned to the cage. The cut ends of the wire curled outward, toward the platform. She took the shears herself, holding them as Lark had. The jaws closed in a way that would push the severed wire inward. Patel watched her repeat the motion. “Could she have turned them?” Quinn turned the shears over and tried again. The wire would still bend away from the blades. To curl outward, it would have to be cut from inside the stall. Lark said, “I don’t see what that proves.” “It means you were inside when you cut the hole.” “I reached through.” “The hole wasn’t there yet.” For the first time, Lark’s expression slipped. “I must have cut it the other way.” “Perhaps.” Quinn handed the shears back to the investigator. “And perhaps Venn bought one of your candles, and perhaps he picked up a compass after he was stabbed without getting blood on it. I’d like to know why all those things happened together.” Lark opened her mouth, then closed it. Patel moved to her side. “Where were you before six fifteen?” “Here.” “You said you arrived at six fifteen.” “I said I found him then.” Quinn returned to the clean rectangle beneath the workbench. “What sat here?” Lark’s gaze went to the gap and stayed there a fraction too long. “A box,” Eva said quietly. “He kept a box there. Oak, with a brass clasp. He showed me a lens from it last night.” “Did he lock it?” “Yes.” Quinn looked at the damaged drawer, then at the brass filings on the floor. “The drawer was forced after the box was moved. The filings fell into the empty space.” Patel came to look. “Someone wanted us to think this was a robbery for cash.” “Someone wanted us to look at the drawer.” Quinn glanced at the compass in the investigator’s hand. “And at the back wall.” Eva frowned. “But if the compass was put there deliberately, it could be pointing to how the killer escaped.” “Could be,” Quinn said. “Unless the killer wanted us searching the wall while she walked out through the door.” Lark took a step back. Patel caught her arm. She jerked against him, hard enough to knock a tray of candles to the floor. They scattered across the tiles. “I found him,” she said. “He was already dead.” “Then tell me about the box,” Quinn said. Lark stared at her. “You took it out before anyone else came down. You put the compass in his hand, shut the stall and locked it. Then you cut the wire from inside your own stall, returned the shears to Venn’s counter and raised the alarm.” “There’s no way from my stall into his.” Quinn looked at the gap between the two enclosures. A canvas sheet hung there, concealing a stack of folded tables. “Move those,” she said. Patel signalled to the constable. Together they pulled the tables aside. Behind them, a section of wire mesh had been fastened with three small hooks. The lowest hook was bent, and fresh scratches marked the iron frame around it. Lark’s face went grey. Patel drew her hands behind her back. “You’re under arrest on suspicion of murder.” “I didn’t stab him,” she said. “I found him and took the box. That’s all.” “Who did stab him?” Quinn asked. Lark’s eyes went toward the platform wall, then away. “You’d better tell me before I find out some other way.” “I didn’t see.” Patel led her toward the stairs. Lark stumbled once on the scattered candles, then found her footing. The elderly woman at the entrance had risen from her table and was watching them approach. Quinn turned back to the stall. “Find the box,” she told the investigator. “Start with Lark’s stock and anything she’s packed for removal. And bag that compass separately.” The investigator looked at its face. “It’s still pointing at the wall.” Quinn went to the back of the stall. The bricks were black with old soot, and a band of yellow paint ran along them at shoulder height. She could see no door, no opening and no obvious place to hide a magnet. Behind her, Eva said, “I didn’t say it showed where the killer went. Only that it points to the nearest rift.” Quinn checked her watch. The worn leather strap had picked up a smear of dust. Above them, Lark’s voice rose sharply, followed by Patel’s, telling her to keep moving. “Can you tell us what’s in Venn’s box?” Quinn asked. “Not everything. He wouldn’t let me look.” “But you wanted to.” Eva hesitated. “Yes.” “Then you can stay while we find it.” Quinn stepped back from the wall and called for another investigator to examine the brickwork. Whatever Lark had taken, Venn had been killed for something, and the woman had just admitted she had reached him before the witnesses did. Quinn wanted the box found before Lark decided exactly how much more she was prepared to admit.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags37
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences169
tagDensity0.219
leniency0.438
rawRatio0.027
effectiveRatio0.012
89.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2785
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"loosely"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"loosely"
1"carefully"
2"really"
3"deliberately"
4"sharply"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
92.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2785
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"etched"
2"flicked"
3"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences186
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences186
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences318
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2785
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions48
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions111
wordCount1575
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.11
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Quinn49
Underground1
Patel20
Venn12
Eva10
Lark18
persons
0"Detective"
1"Quinn"
2"Patel"
3"Venn"
4"Eva"
5"Lark"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences119
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2785
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences318
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs195
mean14.28
std12.95
cv0.907
sampleLengths
024
18
22
333
46
524
61
73
831
913
103
113
1276
1317
1433
153
169
1735
1843
1916
205
2113
2221
232
2414
258
269
2714
285
2937
3025
313
3215
331
3430
351
3616
3737
389
394
4014
4111
423
4325
447
4532
463
4722
482
499
86.40% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount10
totalSentences186
matches
0"been twisted"
1"were littered"
2"been etched"
3"was smeared"
4"been ruined"
5"been packed"
6"been stuck"
7"been fastened"
8"been killed"
9"was prepared"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs271
matches
0"were working"
1"was watching"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences318
ratio0.003
matches
0"One photographed the outside of the cage; the other knelt near Venn’s feet, arranging numbered markers."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1580
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.027848101265822784
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.008860759493670886
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences318
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences318
mean8.76
std6.06
cv0.692
sampleLengths
024
18
22
36
48
519
66
74
813
97
101
113
1214
1312
145
159
164
173
183
1911
2025
2110
2210
2320
2417
259
2614
2710
283
295
304
3124
3211
3315
3419
359
367
379
385
3913
4016
415
422
4314
448
459
468
476
485
498
46.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.29559748427672955
totalSentences318
uniqueOpeners94
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences155
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences155
matches
0"It was warm and roughly"
1"She held it up to"
2"She wore a purple dressing"
3"He had taken off his"
4"His grey hair was spread"
5"It was closed, though the"
6"Its brass handle had been"
7"They stopped abruptly beneath a"
8"Its needle pointed toward the"
9"His fingers curled loosely around"
10"Her curly red hair had"
11"She had a worn leather"
12"She tucked a curl behind"
13"She turned her palm over"
14"She sold candles from shallow"
15"She had a long face,"
16"she said when Patel brought"
17"She had arrived at six"
18"She thought of the crescent"
19"She mimed cutting in front"
ratio0.161
21.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences155
matches
0"The constable at the foot"
1"The constable glanced over his"
2"Someone had strung a line"
3"Quinn selected a token."
4"It was warm and roughly"
5"She held it up to"
6"She wore a purple dressing"
7"Quinn showed her the token."
8"The woman examined it, then"
9"Quinn slipped the token into"
10"The passage opened onto an"
11"Stalls crowded the platform edge"
12"The air smelled of damp"
13"DS Patel waited beside a"
14"He had taken off his"
15"A paper cup rested on"
16"Quinn ducked under the tape."
17"Patel gestured toward a stall"
18"His grey hair was spread"
19"A brass instrument lay in"
ratio0.877
32.26% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences155
matches
0"To curl outward, it would"
ratio0.006
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"A few traders remained, watching the police with the deliberate stillness of people who had decided not to be helpful."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags37
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags29
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences169
tagDensity0.172
leniency0.343
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.9616%