Run: 2026-11-11-01M75NQEJKB0KY60K2BAY6EPY2

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Duration:
50.5s
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$0.025644
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"You hold a tumbler like a barrister now." Rory froze, the heavy crystal halfway to her mouth. Cheap peat smoke stung her nostrils. "Excuse me?" "Thumb on the base, pinky tucked." The man on the stool beside her tapped a manicured nail against the mahogany counter. "Your father's grip. You mocked it for three straight years at Cardiff." Rory turned. The dim green glow from the entrance sign sliced across his cheekbones, hollowing out a face she remembered as soft. Gone were the frayed jumpers and ink-stained knuckles of the boy who shared his Torts notes in cold lecture halls. A sharp dark Italian wool suit encased his shoulders. His hair, once a bird's nest of curls, lay slicked back with clinical precision. "Callum." "Hello, Aurora." Nobody in Soho used that name. Hearing it scraped against her ribs. Rory set the whisky down, her left sleeve riding up an inch to expose the pale crescent scar on her wrist. She tugged the cuff of her worn black leather biker jacket down over the skin. "Rory," she corrected. "Still just Rory." "Right." Callum's gaze dropped to the Golden Empress thermal bag resting by her scuffed boots. "Still rebelling against the family trade, then. Sweet and sour pork?" "Szechuan beef. Tipped well, too." "Glad to hear the gig economy treats its brightest dropouts kindly." "I didn't drop out. I left." "Semantics. Always your best module." Behind the taps, Silas polished a pint glass with slow, circular motions. His hazel eyes flicked from Callum's silk tie to Rory's tense shoulders. Silas shifted his weight off his bad left leg and limped closer, his silver signet ring catching the low amber light. "Everything alright here, Rory?" "Fine, Si. Old university mate." Silas studied Callum for three beats. The quiet authority of a man who survived Prague hung between them, heavy and unmistakable. Callum met the stare, his jaw tight, until he blinked first and reached for his gin. Silas gave a single nod and retreated toward the far end of the bar, near the towering oak bookshelf. Rory exhaled. She looked past Callum at the Raven's Nest, taking in the familiar sanctuary. Yellowed cartography of vanished empires lined the brick walls, framed alongside monochrome photographs of bombed-out London streets and nameless men in trench coats. Stale ale, beeswax, and old paper perfumed the cramped room, a world away from the sterile glass towers of the legal district Callum clearly inhabited now. "Interesting haunt," Callum said. "Bit grim." "Keeps the tourists out. And the solicitors." "Barristers, actually. Took silk's junior seat at Fountain Court last autumn." "Congratulations. Brendan Carter would weep with pride. He always preferred you to his actual daughter." "Your father asked after you last month. At the Inn's dinner." Rory picked at a peeling beer mat. Cardboard flaked under her thumbnail. "Did he?" "Told him I hadn't heard a word since second year." Callum rotated his glass. Ice clinked, a sharp, lonely sound. "Which was true. One Tuesday we were splitting cheap cider on Cathays Terrace, arguing about human rights law. Wednesday, your room was stripped bare. Phone disconnected." "London called." "Evan answered first, though." The room's warmth evaporated. Rory's bright blue eyes locked onto his reflection in the mirrored backing behind the liquor bottles. "Don't." "We saw the bruises, Rory. Eva and I both." "And you both had moot court finals that week. Priorities." Callum flinched. A crack splintered the polished courtroom veneer, revealing a flash of the twenty-year-old boy who used to leave custard creams outside her door during exam week. He swallowed his gin in one go. "Eva came for you eventually." "Six months later. When Evan put me through a plasterboard wall." "I didn't know." "You didn't ask. Easier to study when the messy Welsh girl disappears, isn't it? Keeps the grade average tidy." "That isn't fair." "Law rarely is. You learned that, surely." Callum stared at his empty glass. His shoulders sagged, spoiling the expensive tailoring. Noticeable grey threads peppered his temples, absurd on a man barely twenty-six. A gold band encircled his fourth finger, tight enough to pinch the flesh. "You got married," Rory said. "Engaged. Senior partner's daughter. Camilla." "Sounds expensive." "She hates jazz. And rain." Callum let out a dry, humourless bark of laughter. "Remember that leaky flat on Crwys Road? Bucket in the hallway. Miles Davis on a scratched vinyl." "Flip-flop of the floorboards every time the bloke downstairs slammed his door." "We were going to fix the system, Rory. Tear down the crooked landlords and corporate sharks." "Who do you defend at Fountain Court, Cal?" Silence stretched. Down the bar, a regular coughed. The green neon outside buzzed, casting sickly shadows across the vintage maps of Cold War Berlin. "Shell companies," Callum said. "Mostly offshore holdings. Property conglomerates." "The sharks." "They pay the mortgage in Kensington." He turned on his stool, facing her fully. Desperation bled into his voice, raw and unvarnished. "I hated myself the day you vanished. Kept your Constitutional Law textbook in my briefcase for two years. Stupid, right? Waiting for you to walk back into chambers and tell me my arguments were rubbish." Rory's throat constricted. For five years, she had painted Cardiff in shades of pure black. A prison of bruises and paternal expectations. Sitting beside Callum, smelling his cedarwood cologne instead of cheap roll-ups, she mourned the girl who used to highlight statutes in neon pink. That girl died in a flat in Roath, long before Rory ever boarded the coach to Victoria Station. "I deliver noodles, Cal. I pour pints on weekends. My arguments don't matter anymore." "You're the sharpest mind I ever met. Hiding in a Soho basement." "I'm breathing. That's the whole brief." Callum reached into his breast pocket. Rory stiffened, expecting a business card, some patronising offer of a paralegal clerkship to salve his bruised conscience. Instead, he slid a thick cream envelope across the sticky wood. No stamp. Just her dead name, *Aurora*, written in jagged, hurried ink. "I didn't walk in here by accident," Callum said. Rory didn't touch the paper. Her gaze snapped from the envelope to his pale knuckles. They were trembling. "How did you find me?" "My firm acquired a new client on Monday. Soho real estate portfolio. Holding companies layered six deep." Callum leaned in, breath reeking of juniper and sheer terror. "One of the directors flagged this building for immediate clearance. Private security, off the books." Down the bar, Silas stopped wiping the counter. His silver signet ring tapped twice against the brass rail, a sharp *tick-tock* of warning. "Who's the director, Callum?" Rory asked. "He goes by his middle name now. Bought himself a seat on the board with dirty Dublin money." Callum's eyes darted toward the frosted glass of the front door. "Evan's outside, Rory. And he brought three men." Heavy boots slammed against the Raven's Nest entrance, shattering the frosted glass inward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.441
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1150
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1150
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"crystal"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"silk"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"sanctuary"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"flicked"
2"silk"
3"weight"
4"familiar"
5"sanctuary"
6"warmth"
7"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences67
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1150
ratio0.002
matches
0"Aurora"
1"tick-tock"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
25.55% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount683
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity2.49
worstName"Callum"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Callum"
discoveredNames
Rory13
Torts1
Italian1
Soho1
Callum17
Golden1
Empress1
Silas5
Prague1
Raven2
Nest2
London1
Ice1
Silence1
Cold1
War1
Berlin1
Desperation1
Cardiff1
Roath1
Victoria1
Station1
Heavy1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Torts"
2"Callum"
3"Silas"
4"Raven"
5"Nest"
6"Ice"
7"Silence"
8"Desperation"
9"Heavy"
places
0"Soho"
1"Golden"
2"Prague"
3"London"
4"Cold"
5"Berlin"
6"Cardiff"
7"Roath"
8"Victoria"
globalScore0.255
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1150
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"used that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean17.42
std17.36
cv0.996
sampleLengths
08
115
22
333
465
51
62
748
86
926
105
1111
126
135
1445
154
165
1756
1864
196
207
2111
2215
2311
2412
252
2646
272
284
2920
301
319
3210
3335
345
3511
363
3719
383
397
4038
415
425
432
4431
4512
4616
478
4824
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs109
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences113
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount689
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.02177068214804064
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.00725689404934688
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean10.18
std7.05
cv0.693
sampleLengths
08
19
26
32
421
512
62
720
820
99
1014
111
122
136
146
1521
1615
173
183
1915
2011
215
2211
236
245
2512
2612
2721
284
295
306
3115
3216
3319
342
3513
3623
3726
384
392
407
4111
4215
4311
447
455
462
4714
486
4926
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.6106194690265486
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners69
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences56
matches
0"Instead, he slid a thick"
1"Just her dead name, *Aurora*,"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount10
totalSentences56
matches
0"His hair, once a bird's"
1"She tugged the cuff of"
2"His hazel eyes flicked from"
3"She looked past Callum at"
4"He swallowed his gin in"
5"His shoulders sagged, spoiling the"
6"He turned on his stool,"
7"Her gaze snapped from the"
8"They were trembling."
9"His silver signet ring tapped"
ratio0.179
85.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences56
matches
0"Rory froze, the heavy crystal"
1"The man on the stool"
2"The dim green glow from"
3"A sharp dark Italian wool"
4"His hair, once a bird's"
5"Nobody in Soho used that"
6"Rory set the whisky down,"
7"She tugged the cuff of"
8"Callum's gaze dropped to the"
9"His hazel eyes flicked from"
10"Silas shifted his weight off"
11"Silas studied Callum for three"
12"The quiet authority of a"
13"Callum met the stare, his"
14"Silas gave a single nod"
15"She looked past Callum at"
16"Rory picked at a peeling"
17"Cardboard flaked under her thumbnail."
18"Callum rotated his glass"
19"Ice clinked, a sharp, lonely"
ratio0.75
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Gone were the frayed jumpers and ink-stained knuckles of the boy who shared his Torts notes in cold lecture halls."
1"The quiet authority of a man who survived Prague hung between them, heavy and unmistakable."
2"A crack splintered the polished courtroom veneer, revealing a flash of the twenty-year-old boy who used to leave custard creams outside her door during exam wee…"
3"Sitting beside Callum, smelling his cedarwood cologne instead of cheap roll-ups, she mourned the girl who used to highlight statutes in neon pink."
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Callum leaned in, breath reeking of juniper and sheer terror"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.102
leniency0.203
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.034
89.9591%