Run: 2026-11-11-01M75PW5G9MTHBYMDQ2MNMYHTT

Run Details

Duration:
2m 32s
Cost:
$0.072448
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
One hundred and forty-two iron treads spiraled down into the belly of north London, and Detective Harlow Quinn counted every one of them out of habit. At forty-one, after eighteen years in the Metropolitan Police, she trusted measurements more than impressions. Measurements didn't panic, and they didn't lie. At the bottom of the shaft, she paused to check the worn leather watch on her left wrist. Six-twelve in the morning. Above her, Camden High Street would just be shaking off the night's rain, shutters rattling up on vintage clothing shops and cheap tattoo parlors. Down here, seventy feet beneath the tarmac, the air tasted of dead Victorian brick, iron grease, and something sharply out of place—like crushed cloves dropped onto a hot skillet. Quinn squared her shoulders with the brisk, military precision that made junior constables straighten their ties, ducked beneath a rusted iron bulkhead, and stepped onto the abandoned platform. Portable halogen lamps stood on tripods along the tiled curve, throwing harsh white glare across grime-darkened Edwardian posters for tonic wine and seaside railways. Forensics had already laid down steel stepping plates. Near the center of the platform, a white tent hadn't been erected yet, leaving the body exposed on the soot-blackened concrete beside a bricked-up cross-passage. DS Graham Sykes looked up from his clipboard as she approached, blowing steam across the rim of a paper coffee cup. "Morning, Quinn. Didn't think catchers from central were getting pulled for a squatter overdose, even a weird one." "Borough commander flagged the cardiac presentation," Quinn said, setting her jaw. She stopped at the edge of the stepping plates, folding her five-foot-nine frame into a neat crouch without letting the hem of her coat brush the floor. "Walk me through it." "TfL structural crew came down at four-thirty to inspect subsidence cracks after last night's storm," Sykes said, gesturing up the curve of the empty track bed. "Cut the padlock off the street grate on Buck Street, smelled what they thought was an electrical fire, and found our John Doe here. Male, late thirties, no wallet, no phone, labels cut out of his coat. Looks like an underground rave or a pop-up thieves' market went sideways." Quinn studied the dead man. He lay flat on his back, fingers curled like dried twigs against his palms. There was no blood, no bruising around the windpipe, no needle marks in the pale crooks of his elbows. Every capillary in his open eyes had ruptured, turning the whites a solid, lacquered crimson. Around his head, the greasy dampness of the platform stones had frozen into a delicate halo of white frost, already melting into dark beads under the heat of the forensic lamps. A cold knot tightened behind Quinn's ribs. Three years ago, in a sweltering Rotherhithe timber yard in mid-July, she had knelt beside DS Morris and looked at that exact same frost webbing across dry pine floorboards. The coroner had written *acute idiopathic arrhythmia* on Morris's certificate and closed the file. Quinn hadn't slept eight consecutive hours since. "Where's the generator?" she asked, her brown eyes tracking slowly across the vaulted ceiling. Sykes blinked. "Sorry?" "You said rave or pop-up market. Down here, pitch black, seventy feet underground. You need lighting rigs, sound systems, diesel generators, or heavy battery banks. Where are the cable drag marks? Where are the diesel fumes?" "Cleared out before TfL got here, obviously," Sykes said, waving his clipboard toward the yawning black mouth of the southbound tunnel. "Last night was a full moon—always brings the Camden lunatics out in droves. One of the punters drops dead, the organizers panic, pack their gear, and leg it down the disused spur toward the live Northern Line tracks." Quinn stood up, brushing a speck of grit from her gloved knuckles, and walked to the granite lip of the platform. She unclipped a high-lumen torch from her belt and angled the beam down onto the track ballast. A thick, undisturbed velvet of black tunnel silt coated the wooden sleepers and rusted rails. Aside from a single neat pair of hobnailed boot prints leading in from the inspection shaft—the TfL engineer's—nothing larger than a rat had crossed that track bed in decades. "Nobody went down the tunnel, Graham," Quinn said quietly. "And TfL had to take an angle grinder to a seized padlock on the street grate just to get down the spiral stairs." Sykes frowned, stepping up beside her to peer into the pit. "Must be another maintenance hatch further down the mezzanine." "Check the station blueprints. This spur was bombed out in forty-one and sealed at both ends." Quinn turned her torch back onto the platform itself, sweeping the beam low across the ground so the oblique light caught every ridge of dirt. "Look at the floor." Now that she wasn't looking at the body, the geometry jumped out at her. Along the curved tiled wall stood fourteen distinct rectangles of relatively clean stone, each roughly six feet wide and spaced precisely four paces apart, bordered by thick, churned paste where hundreds of heels had lingered. Stall pitches. Not chaotic partygoers dancing, but orderly queues shuffling from booth to booth. She walked the steel plates along the line of invisible stalls, eyes narrowed. Ravers left crushed lager cans, nitrous canisters, cigarette filters, plastic baggies. There wasn't a scrap of modern plastic anywhere on the concrete. Instead, caught in the cracks between the flagstones, her beam glinted off thick shards of dark violet glass, droplets of black beeswax, and a pungent scatter of dried, silvery-green leaves that smelled nothing like cannabis and everything like the sharp, metallic spice thickening the air. Near the rusted iron frame of the old ticket turnstiles, a small plastic evidence cone marked an exhibit. Quinn crouched beside it. Lying in the dust was a flat disc of yellowed bone the size of a florin, notched around the rim and carved at the center with an intricate, serpentine glyph. Near the turnstile, three more white chalk marks had been tallied on the brick pillar, then hastily wiped with a wet rag. Entry tokens. Checked at the gate. "Who's the civilian?" Quinn asked, nodding toward the bottom of the spiral staircase. Just behind the blue-and-white crime scene tape stood a petite young woman, no more than five-foot-four, dwarfed by the fluorescent jacket of the uniformed constable keeping an eye on her. Even from thirty feet away, under the unforgiving glare of the work lights, her curly red hair stood out like a flare against the soot-stained tiles. She wore round glasses perched on a pale, freckled nose, and both arms were wrapped tightly around a worn leather satchel so overstuffed with heavy hardback books that the brass buckles strained. "Oh, right—stroke of luck, actually," Sykes said, brightening. "Uniforms caught her lingering by the Buck Street grate twenty minutes after we strung the tape. Flashed a British Museum pass. Name's Eva Kowalski. Research assistant in their restricted archives, Master's in Ancient History from Oxford. Says TfL occasionally tips off her department when pre-war excavations open up so they can log old tilework before builders wreck it." Quinn stared at the young woman, her sharp jaw going utterly rigid. She knew that face. She had a surveillance photograph of Eva Kowalski pinned to a corkboard in her spare bedroom, right beside four other twenty-somethings whose names kept surfacing at the margins of impossible break-ins, vanished antiquities, and missing-persons cases across London. As Quinn watched, Eva's green eyes darted past the constable's shoulder, fixing directly on the forensic trays near the body. Slowly, unconsciously, Eva raised a trembling hand and tucked a loose curl of red hair behind her left ear. "TfL found a corpse at four-thirty and decided to ring the British Museum before five in the morning?" Quinn murmured. Sykes hesitated, the logic catching in his throat. "Well. Maybe she monitors council engineering permits." "Keep her on that step. Don't let her use her phone." Quinn held out her gloved hand. "What else came off the scene near the body?" "Just one piece of Camden Lock tourist tat," Sykes muttered, reaching into the crimescene tray to hand her a clear polythene evidence bag. "Found it wedged against the skirting tiles two feet from our dead man's fingers. Figured he dropped it when he went down." Quinn held the bag up to the halogen light. Inside rested a small brass compass, its heavy casing crusted in patches with a pale green patina of verdigris. Beneath the scratched glass crystal, there were no cardinal letters, no degree markings at all. Instead, the brass face was etched with dense, concentric rings of jagged sigils that seemed to pull painfully at the focus of her eyes if she stared directly at their intersections. At the center, a slender blackened needle hovered on its pin. Quinn glanced up the curve of the platform to orient herself. Buck Street lay above the stairs; Chalk Farm lay north, straight up the left-hand tunnel mouth. Magnetic north was thirty degrees off her left shoulder. The needle in the bag wasn't pointing left. It was pointing dead right, trembling with a faint, rapid vibration, aimed straight past DS Sykes's elbow toward the bricked-up cross-passage beside the corpse. "Magnetized iron in the tunnel lining," Sykes offered, peering over her wrist. "Throws compasses off all the time down here." Quinn didn't answer. Keeping the polythene bag level on her flat palm, she stepped off the metal plate onto a clear patch of stone and walked eight measured paces past the body, moving parallel to the bricked-up archway. Inside the sealed plastic, the blackened needle rotated smoothly counterclockwise. It ignored the cast-iron tunnel rings behind her. It ignored the heavy steel tripod lamps. As she stopped on the far side of the arch, the needle settled with unnerving precision, pointing back the way she had come—still locked dead center on the solid expanse of Victorian brickwork. Quinn turned to face the wall. The archway was eight feet high and six feet wide, bricked flush decades ago with dark engineering bricks and coarse lime mortar. She stepped closer, stopping twelve inches from the masonry. Immediately, the stale underground warmth vanished, replaced by a razor-thin draft of bitter cold that smelled fiercely of ozone and wet iron. Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair prickled at the nape of her neck. Out of the corner of her eye, she glanced at the worn leather watch on her left wrist. The thin silver second hand hit the nine, shuddered violently backward half a tick, and froze dead. Just like Morris's had. Quinn lowered her torch beam to the base of the bricked-up arch. Earlier, Sykes's team had stayed back from the wall to give the corpse wide berth, leaving the thick carpet of gray platform dust right against the skirting completely untouched. Scuffed footprints crowded the grime there—dozens upon dozens of boots, leather soles, and heavy shoes, overlapping in a tight bottleneck. Quinn crouched low, shining the beam across the impressions at a shallow angle. Every single print pointed inward, toes pressed right up against the bottom course of solid brick. There were no heel pivots. No scuff marks of people turning back. In fact, half a dozen clearest boot prints were cut cleanly in half by the wall itself, heels stamped deep in the London dust, toes vanishing directly underneath solid nineteenth-century mortar as if the masonry hadn't been there an hour ago. Two hundred people hadn't fled down the tracks. They had packed their stalls before the full moon waned, queued past the turnstile, and walked straight through six courses of solid brick—all except one man who had been a fraction of a second too slow when the door slammed shut, dropping his brass compass as the cold stopped his heart. Slowly, Quinn straightened to her full height. She slipped the compass bag into her coat pocket—she would log the exhibit number herself—and turned back toward the spiral stairs. Thirty feet away behind the fluttering plastic tape, Eva Kowalski stared at the brick wall, then shifted her wide green eyes to Quinn's face and tucked the same red curl behind her left ear a second time. "Graham," Quinn said, her voice calm, clipped, and entirely steady as she walked toward the tape. "Get an ambulance van to take our witness back to Holborn Nick. Tell custody I'm interviewing Miss Kowalski myself."
created_at"2026-11-11T16:25:51.892Z" 11/11/2026, 4:25:51 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.464
leniency0.929
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.071
80.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2075
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count3
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"tightly"
count1
4
adverb"utterly"
count1
5
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slowly"
2"precisely"
3"tightly"
4"utterly"
5"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2075
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"churned"
count1
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"dancing"
count1
4
word"intricate"
count1
5
word"crystal"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"magnetic"
count1
8
word"measured"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"churned"
2"chaotic"
3"dancing"
4"intricate"
5"crystal"
6"etched"
7"magnetic"
8"measured"
9"warmth"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
86.28% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences101
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords2066
ratio0.001
matches
0"acute idiopathic arrhythmia"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
77.54% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions63
wordCount1656
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London3
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn24
Metropolitan1
Police1
Camden1
High1
Street2
Victorian2
Edwardian1
Graham1
Sykes11
Rotherhithe1
Morris3
TfL1
Eva4
Kowalski2
Chalk1
Farm1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Street"
3"Graham"
4"Sykes"
5"Morris"
6"Eva"
7"Kowalski"
places
0"London"
1"Metropolitan"
2"Camden"
3"High"
4"Chalk"
5"Farm"
globalScore0.775
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sigils that seemed to pull painfully at the focus of her eyes if she stared directly at their intersections"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.484
wordCount2066
matches
0"Not chaotic partygoers dancing, but orderly queues shuffling from booth to booth"
80.46% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences116
matches
0"crossed that track"
1"books that the"
2"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean43.04
std23.96
cv0.557
sampleLengths
048
175
228
357
439
542
675
784
857
914
103
1136
1259
1338
1444
1532
1620
1745
1863
1980
2074
216
2213
2388
2466
2554
2639
2720
2815
2926
3045
3174
3211
3336
3432
3520
3638
3758
386
3965
4035
414
4241
43102
4459
4528
4637
4735
91.37% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences101
matches
0"been erected"
1"been tallied"
2"were wrapped"
3"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs246
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"wasn't pointing"
2"was pointing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences116
ratio0.06
matches
0"Down here, seventy feet beneath the tarmac, the air tasted of dead Victorian brick, iron grease, and something sharply out of place—like crushed cloves dropped onto a hot skillet."
1"Aside from a single neat pair of hobnailed boot prints leading in from the inspection shaft—the TfL engineer's—nothing larger than a rat had crossed that track bed in decades."
2"Buck Street lay above the stairs; Chalk Farm lay north, straight up the left-hand tunnel mouth."
3"As she stopped on the far side of the arch, the needle settled with unnerving precision, pointing back the way she had come—still locked dead center on the solid expanse of Victorian brickwork."
4"Scuffed footprints crowded the grime there—dozens upon dozens of boots, leather soles, and heavy shoes, overlapping in a tight bottleneck."
5"They had packed their stalls before the full moon waned, queued past the turnstile, and walked straight through six courses of solid brick—all except one man who had been a fraction of a second too slow when the door slammed shut, dropping his brass compass as the cold stopped his heart."
6"She slipped the compass bag into her coat pocket—she would log the exhibit number herself—and turned back toward the spiral stairs."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1693
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"dried, silvery-green leaves"
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.03366804489072652
lyAdverbCount28
lyAdverbRatio0.016538688718251624
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean17.81
std11.6
cv0.652
sampleLengths
026
115
27
318
44
524
629
728
824
98
1025
1121
1218
1311
1427
154
1626
1749
185
1914
2019
2115
2231
237
2429
2514
267
2714
282
291
3036
3121
3238
3321
3417
3515
3629
379
3823
3911
409
4141
424
4314
4435
452
4612
4713
4811
4911
98.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.6551724137931034
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners76
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences97
matches
0"Aside from a single neat"
1"Instead, caught in the cracks"
2"Just behind the blue-and-white crime"
3"Slowly, unconsciously, Eva raised a"
4"Instead, the brass face was"
5"Immediately, the stale underground warmth"
6"Just like Morris's had."
7"Slowly, Quinn straightened to her"
ratio0.082
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences97
matches
0"She stopped at the edge"
1"He lay flat on his"
2"she asked, her brown eyes"
3"She unclipped a high-lumen torch"
4"She walked the steel plates"
5"She wore round glasses perched"
6"She knew that face."
7"She had a surveillance photograph"
8"It was pointing dead right,"
9"It ignored the cast-iron tunnel"
10"It ignored the heavy steel"
11"She stepped closer, stopping twelve"
12"Her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair"
13"They had packed their stalls"
14"She slipped the compass bag"
ratio0.155
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences97
matches
0"Measurements didn't panic, and they"
1"Quinn squared her shoulders with"
2"Forensics had already laid down"
3"DS Graham Sykes looked up"
4"Quinn said, setting her jaw"
5"She stopped at the edge"
6"Sykes said, gesturing up the"
7"Quinn studied the dead man."
8"He lay flat on his"
9"Every capillary in his open"
10"A cold knot tightened behind"
11"The coroner had written *acute"
12"Quinn hadn't slept eight consecutive"
13"she asked, her brown eyes"
14"Sykes said, waving his clipboard"
15"Quinn stood up, brushing a"
16"She unclipped a high-lumen torch"
17"A thick, undisturbed velvet of"
18"Quinn said quietly"
19"Sykes frowned, stepping up beside"
ratio0.546
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences97
matches
0"Now that she wasn't looking"
1"Even from thirty feet away,"
ratio0.021
85.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Quinn squared her shoulders with the brisk, military precision that made junior constables straighten their ties, ducked beneath a rusted iron bulkhead, and ste…"
1"Instead, caught in the cracks between the flagstones, her beam glinted off thick shards of dark violet glass, droplets of black beeswax, and a pungent scatter o…"
2"Instead, the brass face was etched with dense, concentric rings of jagged sigils that seemed to pull painfully at the focus of her eyes if she stared directly a…"
3"In fact, half a dozen clearest boot prints were cut cleanly in half by the wall itself, heels stamped deep in the London dust, toes vanishing directly underneat…"
4"They had packed their stalls before the full moon waned, queued past the turnstile, and walked straight through six courses of solid brick—all except one man wh…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
78.57% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
1"Sykes muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences28
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.143
91.6123%