Run: 2026-11-11-01M75QFMDAFQVZGPZ5NM2WTHBP

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Duration:
2m 16s
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$0.067388
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Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn checked the worn leather watch on her left wrist as she ducked beneath the crime scene tape at the mouth of the alley. Six-twelve in the morning, and the Camden drizzle was already soaking into the collar of her trench coat. Ahead of her, a rusted iron maintenance door stood ajar, wedged open with a rubber forensic block. Above the lintel, flaking cream paint still bore the faint ghost of a London Underground roundel that hadn’t seen a paying passenger since before the Blitz. She squared her shoulders and started down the spiral iron staircase. Even in the cramped shaft, she moved with the quiet, military precision that eighteen years in the Metropolitan Police had drilled into her bones. At five-foot-nine, she had to mind the low-hanging Victorian conduits, damp condensation dripping onto her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair. With every turn of the steps, the familiar London street smells of wet tarmac and fried grease faded, replaced by stagnant subterranean air—and beneath that, something altogether sharper. Cloves, scorched copper, and the metallic tang of a lightning strike. Quinn paused on the bottom landing. Her sharp jaw tightened. She had smelled that exact combination once before, three years ago in a dead-end Whitechapel courtyard, kneeling beside DS Morris while his radio hissed static into the dark. She pushed the memory down, schooled her expression, and stepped onto the disused platform. Portable forensic floodlights bathed the arched tunnel in harsh white glare, throwing long shadows across cracked ceramic tiles and decades of coal-black grime. Two technicians in white Tyvek suits worked near the middle of the platform beside a body covered by a clear plastic tent. Waiting near the edge of the empty track bed stood DS Gareth Miller, hands shoved deep into his coat pockets, a steaming paper cup wedged under one arm. "Morning, Gov," Miller said, straightening as she approached. "Bit grim before breakfast, even for Camden." "Talk to me, Gareth," Quinn said, her brown eyes sweeping the curved walls, the vaulted ceiling, the dark mouth of the northbound tunnel. "Street cleaner spotted the alley door swinging open around five," Miller said, gesturing toward the forensic tent with his chin. "Uniforms came down expecting copper thieves or rough sleepers. Found our man instead. Prints came back twenty minutes ago—Arthur Vance, forty-eight. Small-time fence out of Kentish Town. Couple of priors for handling stolen Georgian silver, nothing violent." "Cause of death?" "Pathologist hasn't turned him yet, but there's no blunt trauma, no stab wounds, no defensive marks on the knuckles." Miller blew out a breath that plumed white in the chill. "Looks like a massive cardiac event. You look at his neck, the capillaries under the jaw have gone dark, almost purple-black. Classic toxic shock from a bad synthetic batch. Nitazenes, probably, or whatever backyard alchemy the kids are cooking up in Hackney Wick this week." Quinn walked slowly to the edge of the forensic taping, keeping her boots well clear of the chalked stepping plates. "You think Vance came forty feet underground alone to score?" "Not alone," Miller said easily. "Look at the dust, Boss. Place has been trampled from one end of the platform to the other. Squat rave, or an illegal pop-up club. Organizers bolt-crop a disused shaft, drop a text to five hundred phones at midnight, sling pills for four hours, and clear out with the sound system before first light. Vance probably bought something his heart couldn't handle, collapsed in the dark, and the crowd bolted." "A rave," Quinn repeated flatly. "Happens every weekend round here." "Not like this, it doesn't." Quinn crouched on her heels, resting a gloved wrist on her knee as she studied the platform floor under the raking halogen light. "Look at the soot, Gareth. Really look at it." Miller frowned, stepping up beside her. "It's scuffed." "Only down the center," Quinn said, pointing down the length of the platform. A three-meter-wide corridor of disturbed grime ran dead straight parallel to the track bed, hundreds of boot prints overlapping in steady, purposeful two-way traffic. "Nobody was dancing down here. Look along the tiled wall." She angled her torch toward the inner curve of the station. Beginning two paces from the stairs, the thick, greasy dust had been disturbed in neat, rectangular patches, each roughly eight feet square, separated from the next by narrow strips of untouched decades-old silt. "Rugs," Quinn murmured, rising to her full height. "Heavy ones, or wooden pallets. Twelve down this side, ten along the track edge. Laid out in rows with an aisle down the middle. And tell me where the rubbish is." Miller blinked, glancing around the cavern. "Sorry?" "Five hundred kids in a tunnel for four hours," Quinn said. "Where are the crushed lager cans? The nitrous canisters? Cigarette ends, plastic baggies, vomit in the corners? There isn't a single scrap of litter on these tiles. Whoever set up down here packed twenty-two stalls, swept their pitches, and carried everything out." She walked ten yards down the central lane, stopping where a forensics marker sat beside a tiny smear of iridescent grey powder and three shards of thick, smoky glass. Not brown beer bottle glass—curved, heavy-walled crystal, blown without a seam, the inner surface coated in an oily residue that smelled faintly of crushed myrrh and bitter almonds. "Not a rave," Miller conceded, the certainty draining from his voice. "Pop-up market, then? Knock-off watches, stolen phones?" "In pitch darkness, with no generator?" Quinn pointed up at the rusted brackets along the ceiling. "No cable ties for string lights. No petrol fumes from a portable rig, and no wheel tracks from trolleys on the stairs. Wait—how did uniforms say the street door was breached?" "Padlock was lying on the step," Miller said, flipping open his notebook. "Funny thing, actually. The shackle wasn't cut. Rusted solid for twenty years, according to Council Maintenance, yet the tumblers were turned clean open." Quinn checked the date bezel on her watch. The seventeenth. Last night, walking back to her flat in Islington, the clouds had parted around eleven, illuminating the rooftops under a bloated, bone-white full moon. A cold thread pulled tight behind her ribs. Twenty-nine days ago, port authority police had been called to a Victorian bonded vault beneath Rotherhithe—rusted locks turned without a scratch, neat squares swept into the riverside silt, a whiff of ozone lingering in the brick. Twenty-nine days before that, an abandoned reservoir cistern under Greenwich. Both written off by borough detectives as urban explorers. Both the morning after a full moon. "Show me what came out of Vance's pockets," Quinn said. Miller led her to a folding table near the stairwell where an exhibits officer had laid out clear evidence bags. Wallet with sixty pounds in twenties. No phone. Set of house keys. And at the end of the row, two items tagged separately. Quinn picked up the first bag. Inside lay a flat, circular disc the size of a half-crown. At first glance she thought it was ivory or yellowed plastic, but holding it closer to the floodlight revealed the unmistakable porous grain of marrow bone. Smooth at the edges from handling, its face had been incised with a sharp burin: a vertical slit bisected by three crescent arcs. No price tag, no maker's hole for a chain. A tally. An entry pass. She set it down and lifted the second bag. "Found that six feet from his left hand," Miller said. "Looks like it skittered across the tiles when he went down. Camden Market steampunk tat, I reckon. Maybe he was fencing antiques after all." It was a small brass compass, heavy for its size, the bevels crusted with a dry greenish-blue patina of verdigris. Quinn tilted it under the lamp. There were no cardinal letters on the dial—no N, S, E, or W, no degree markings at all. Instead, the tarnished face was etched with hair-fine, interlocking sigils that hurt her eyes if she stared directly at their junctions. Even through two millimeters of polythene, the craftsmanship felt wrong, seamless in a way no machine lathe or human engraver produced. And the needle wasn't still. Quinn frowned. She knew London's geography better than the lines of her own palm; the disused spur beneath Camden Road ran north-northwest. Yet the blackened iron needle wasn't pointing up the tunnel toward Hampstead. It was straining sideways against the brass housing, quivering with a rapid, silent tremor, pointing dead across the platform. "Must be magnetized," Miller offered, peering over her shoulder. "Old traction current in the rails." "The third rail was ripped out in nineteen-sixty, Gareth." Keeping the bagged compass flat on her gloved palm, Quinn stepped away from the table. As she walked parallel to the tracks, the needle pivoted smoothly, tracking a fixed point on the station's inner wall. She slowed, turning to face a bricked-up passenger archway twenty feet beyond Vance's body. The closer she stepped to the Victorian brickwork, the harder the needle trembled against its glass face. Five feet from the arch, her breath misted thicker in the air. The temperature dropped by ten degrees in the space of a single stride. A fine coat of greasy black frost clung to the mortar joints, and in the dead quiet between the murmur of the technicians, Quinn heard—or felt in her back teeth—a low, decaying hum, like a struck tuning fork fading into silence. Morris's face flashed behind her eyes. The Whitechapel bricks, ice-cold in the middle of July. The coroner's verdict of *unascertained natural causes* that had never let her sleep past four in the morning. Someone hadn't carried twenty-two market stalls up that narrow iron staircase. They had gone through the wall. And when the passage closed, the backwash—or whatever Vance had bought in that shattered vial—had stopped his heart in seconds. "Gov?" Miller stepped closer, rubbing his arms against the sudden draft without seeming to register where it came from. "You alright? Look like you've seen a ghost." "Did we pull street CCTV?" Quinn asked, her voice crisp, betraying nothing as she lowered the compass. "Yeah, council camera on the high street catches the mouth of the alley." Miller pulled a ruggedized tablet from under his arm and tapped the screen awake. "Mostly useless. Sodium streetlamp's flickering, and half the lens is blurred with rain. Between two and four-thirty, maybe a dozen people slip out of the alley—all dark hoods, umbrellas kept low, heads down. Pros, maybe. Except one at four-eighteen." He handed her the tablet and pressed play. The grainy footage showed the glistening cobblestones at the alley's mouth. A figure emerged from the shadows at a brisk, near-panicked walk, stepping directly beneath the amber cone of the streetlamp before glancing back toward the rusted door. Quinn went utterly still. Even on the rain-streaked feed, there was no mistaking the build—five-foot-four, slight shoulders hunched against the drizzle, a worn leather satchel bulging with heavy books slung across her coat. As the woman looked up the empty street, the sodium light caught a halo of damp, curly red hair and glinted off round glasses perched above a pale, freckled complexion. She paused on the kerb, patting her empty coat pocket with one hand, while her other hand rose automatically to push a stray curl behind her left ear. Miller squinted at the screen. "Lost postgrad, looks like. Probably cut through the alley from the night bus, saw the open door, and spooked herself. Want me to put a circulation image out to Camden patrols?" "No," Quinn said quietly, her thumb freezing the frame on that familiar nervous gesture. She didn't need a patrol car to ID her. She had a photograph of the exact same woman pinned to the corkboard in her study, right beside Aurora's file. Eva Kowalski. Twenty-six. Moved to London two years before Aurora arrived, master's in Ancient History from Oxford, currently cleared for the restricted archives at the British Museum. Quinn had spoken to her once for three minutes on Great Russell Street—long enough to note the sharp intelligence behind those green eyes, and the precise way she tucked her hair behind her left ear the moment the word *police* came out. Eva hadn't stumbled down that alley by mistake. She had walked out of a subterranean black market with a satchel full of books, realized she had dropped something brass in the dark, and lost her nerve before she could go back down the stairs to fetch it. Quinn handed the tablet back to Miller and looked down at the verdigris-crusted compass resting in her palm, its needle still straining toward the freezing brick wall. For three years she had been chasing shadows with nothing to show for it but stalled inquiries and polite warnings from upstairs. "Log the bone disc with central exhibits," Quinn said, slipping the bagged compass into her deep coat pocket and pulling out her notebook to sign the chain-of-custody sheet herself. "Leave this piece with me, and hold the CCTV off the main server. I know where to find our witness."
created_at"2026-11-11T16:36:29.748Z" 11/11/2026, 4:36:29 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
63.64% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Miller said easily [easily]"
1"Quinn repeated flatly [flatly]"
2"Quinn said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.477
leniency0.955
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.136
93.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2189
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
2"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2189
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"synthetic"
count1
3
word"dancing"
count1
4
word"crystal"
count1
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"chill"
2"synthetic"
3"dancing"
4"crystal"
5"etched"
6"trembled"
7"silence"
8"shattered"
9"glistening"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences107
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences107
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
repeatedSegmentCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen72
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords2174
ratio0.002
matches
0"unascertained natural causes"
1"police"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1585
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn23
Camden2
London4
Underground1
Blitz1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Victorian3
Whitechapel2
Morris2
Tyvek1
Gareth1
Miller16
Islington1
Rotherhithe1
Greenwich1
Road1
Hampstead1
Keeping1
Vance2
July1
Aurora2
Kowalski1
Ancient1
History1
Oxford1
British1
Museum1
Great1
Russell1
Street1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Police"
2"Morris"
3"Tyvek"
4"Gareth"
5"Miller"
6"Rotherhithe"
7"Vance"
8"Aurora"
9"Kowalski"
places
0"Camden"
1"London"
2"Metropolitan"
3"Victorian"
4"Islington"
5"Greenwich"
6"Road"
7"Hampstead"
8"Ancient"
9"Oxford"
10"British"
11"Russell"
12"Street"
globalScore0.774
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2174
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean40.26
std26.93
cv0.669
sampleLengths
086
193
238
314
473
515
623
757
83
975
1030
1175
125
135
1437
158
1647
1744
1839
197
2053
2157
2218
2347
2435
2534
2670
2710
2843
2980
309
3134
3286
335
3453
3515
369
3749
3883
3933
4037
4127
4217
4366
448
4538
464
4787
4836
4914
92.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences107
matches
0"been disturbed"
1"been called"
2"been incised"
3"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs232
matches
0"was already soaking"
1"wasn't pointing"
2"was straining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences130
ratio0.069
matches
0"With every turn of the steps, the familiar London street smells of wet tarmac and fried grease faded, replaced by stagnant subterranean air—and beneath that, something altogether sharper."
1"Not brown beer bottle glass—curved, heavy-walled crystal, blown without a seam, the inner surface coated in an oily residue that smelled faintly of crushed myrrh and bitter almonds."
2"Twenty-nine days ago, port authority police had been called to a Victorian bonded vault beneath Rotherhithe—rusted locks turned without a scratch, neat squares swept into the riverside silt, a whiff of ozone lingering in the brick."
3"There were no cardinal letters on the dial—no N, S, E, or W, no degree markings at all."
4"She knew London's geography better than the lines of her own palm; the disused spur beneath Camden Road ran north-northwest."
5"A fine coat of greasy black frost clung to the mortar joints, and in the dead quiet between the murmur of the technicians, Quinn heard—or felt in her back teeth—a low, decaying hum, like a struck tuning fork fading into silence."
6"And when the passage closed, the backwash—or whatever Vance had bought in that shattered vial—had stopped his heart in seconds."
7"Even on the rain-streaked feed, there was no mistaking the build—five-foot-four, slight shoulders hunched against the drizzle, a worn leather satchel bulging with heavy books slung across her coat."
8"Quinn had spoken to her once for three minutes on Great Russell Street—long enough to note the sharp intelligence behind those green eyes, and the precise way she tucked her hair behind her left ear the moment the word *police* came out."
70.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1626
adjectiveStacks5
stackExamples
0"untouched decades-old silt."
1"bone-white full moon."
2"dry greenish-blue patina"
3"brisk, near-panicked walk,"
4"damp, curly red hair"
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.01968019680196802
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.01107011070110701
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean16.72
std11.51
cv0.688
sampleLengths
025
118
217
326
411
524
619
728
811
96
104
1128
1214
1323
1422
1528
168
177
1823
1920
2037
213
2230
2345
2420
2510
265
2770
285
295
3028
319
326
332
3413
3524
3610
3711
3833
398
4031
416
421
4311
4442
4529
4628
4711
487
4916
91.54% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.5769230769230769
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners75
34.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"Instead, the tarnished face was"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences98
matches
0"She squared her shoulders and"
1"Her sharp jaw tightened."
2"She had smelled that exact"
3"She pushed the memory down,"
4"She angled her torch toward"
5"She walked ten yards down"
6"She set it down and"
7"It was a small brass"
8"She knew London's geography better"
9"It was straining sideways against"
10"She slowed, turning to face"
11"They had gone through the"
12"He handed her the tablet"
13"She paused on the kerb,"
14"She didn't need a patrol"
15"She had a photograph of"
16"She had walked out of"
ratio0.173
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences98
matches
0"Harlow Quinn checked the worn"
1"She squared her shoulders and"
2"Cloves, scorched copper, and the"
3"Quinn paused on the bottom"
4"Her sharp jaw tightened."
5"She had smelled that exact"
6"She pushed the memory down,"
7"Miller said, straightening as she"
8"Quinn said, her brown eyes"
9"Miller said, gesturing toward the"
10"Miller blew out a breath"
11"Quinn walked slowly to the"
12"Miller said easily"
13"Quinn repeated flatly"
14"Quinn crouched on her heels,"
15"Miller frowned, stepping up beside"
16"Quinn said, pointing down the"
17"A three-meter-wide corridor of disturbed"
18"She angled her torch toward"
19"Quinn murmured, rising to her"
ratio0.673
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences98
matches
0"Even in the cramped shaft,"
1"Even through two millimeters of"
2"Even on the rain-streaked feed,"
ratio0.031
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Above the lintel, flaking cream paint still bore the faint ghost of a London Underground roundel that hadn’t seen a paying passenger since before the Blitz."
1"Not brown beer bottle glass—curved, heavy-walled crystal, blown without a seam, the inner surface coated in an oily residue that smelled faintly of crushed myrr…"
2"Instead, the tarnished face was etched with hair-fine, interlocking sigils that hurt her eyes if she stared directly at their junctions."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Miller conceded, the certainty draining from his voice"
1"Quinn asked, her voice crisp, betraying nothing as she lowered the compass"
2"Quinn said quietly, her thumb freezing the frame on that familiar nervous gesture"
81.82% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Quinn repeated flatly (repeat)"
1"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
2"Miller conceded (concede)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.682
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.136
86.8249%