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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMFBRXYM7AJSNSS9PQPB1Z
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
29.2s
Cost:
$0.010988
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The Raven’s Nest smelled of aged whiskey and lemon oil, the kind of scent that clung to the walls like a second skin. Rory wiped her hands on her apron, the crescent scar on her left wrist catching the dim light as she reached for another glass. The bar was quiet tonight—just a handful of regulars nursing their drinks, the low hum of conversation barely rising above the jazz record spinning on the old turntable. She didn’t see him at first. It was the way the air shifted, the sudden stillness of the room, that made her
look
up. A man stood in the doorway, silhouetted against the green neon glow of the sign outside. His coat was damp from the London rain, his auburn hair streaked with more grey than she remembered. He leaned
slightly
on his left leg, the way he always had, but the years had carved deeper lines around his eyes. Silas. Rory’s breath hitched. She hadn’t seen him in—what? Five years? Six? Not since she’d left Cardiff in the dead of night, not since she’d stopped answering his calls. He spotted her immediately. His hazel eyes locked onto hers, sharp and knowing, the way they always had been. A ghost of a smile touched his lips, but it didn’t reach his eyes. “Rory,” he said, his voice rougher than she remembered. She swallowed. “Silas.” The glass in her hand felt
suddenly
heavy. She set it down, her fingers trembling just
slightly
. The last time she’d seen him, he’d been standing on her parents’ doorstep, his signet ring
glinting
in the porch light as he
tried to
talk her out of leaving. *You don’t have to run,* he’d said. *Not from him. Not from this.* But she had run. And now here he
was, filling
the doorway of his own bar like a man who had never left it. Silas limped toward her, his cane tapping
softly
against the hardwood floor. The regulars at the bar barely glanced up—this was his place, after all, and they knew better than to stare. But Rory felt every step like a drumbeat, counting down the years between them. “You’re working here now?” he asked, nodding at her apron. She crossed her arms, as if that could shield her from the
weight
of his gaze. “Just part-time. Yu-Fei needed someone for deliveries, and Silas—” She stopped, realizing her mistake. “I mean, the pay’s decent.” A
flicker
of something passed over his face. Amusement? Pain? “You can say my name, Rory. I’m not a ghost.” She exhaled through her nose. “I didn’t think you’d still be here.” “Where else would I be?” He leaned against the bar, close enough that she could smell the rain on his coat, the faint scent of sandalwood that always clung to him. “This place is mine. Or didn’t you know?” She had known. Of course she had. Eva had mentioned it in passing, years ago, when Rory was still too raw to ask for details. *Silas bought a bar in Soho. Can you believe it? The old spy, playing landlord.* But Rory had never
look
ed it up. Never let herself
wonder
. Now, she took in the familiar details—the maps on the walls, the black-and-white photos of faces she didn’t recognize, the way the light from the neon sign outside painted everything in shades of green. This was his world. And she had walked into it without meaning to. “What are you drinking?” she asked, because it was easier than saying anything real. Silas studied her for a long moment, then slid onto a stool. “Whiskey. Neat.” She poured it without
look
ing at him, her hands steady even as her pulse raced. The amber liquid caught the light as she pushed the glass toward him. He took it, his fingers brushing against hers. Just for a second. Just enough to make her remember the way he used to ruffle her hair when she was a kid, the way he’d called her *kiddo* like she was something precious. “You
look
different,” he said. She laughed, sharp and humorless. “Yeah. Well. Time does that.” “Not just time.” His gaze
flicked
to her wrist, to the scar she’d had since she was twelve. “You’re not the girl who used to climb trees in your parents’ backyard.” She flexed her fingers, as if she could hide the mark. “No. I’m not.” Silence stretched between them, thick with everything they
weren’t saying
. The last time they’d spoken, she’d been crying in his car, her knuckles bruised from where Evan had grabbed her. *I can’t go back there,* she’d sobbed. *I won’t.* Silas had driven her to the train station without another word. He’d given her cash, a burner phone, the name of a friend in London. *Call me when you get there,* he’d said. *No matter what.* She hadn’t. Now, he swirled the whiskey in his glass, the ice clinking
softly
. “I heard you dropped out of law school.” Her stomach twisted. “News travels.” “Your mother mentioned it. Last Christmas.” He took a sip, watching her over the rim of the glass. “She worries.” Rory’s jaw tightened. “She shouldn’t.” “She’s your mother. Of course she should.” “And what about you?” The words came out sharper than she intended. “Do you worry too, Silas?” He set the glass down. “Every damn day.” The air left her lungs. She hadn’t expected that. Hadn’t expected the raw honesty in his voice, the way his eyes darkened like storm clouds. “Then why didn’t you come find me?” she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Silas was quiet for a long moment. Then,
slowly
, he reached into his coat pocket and pulled out a folded piece of paper. He slid it across the bar toward her. She didn’t want to touch it. Didn’t want to know what it was. But her fingers betrayed her, unfolding it with trembling hands. It was a train ticket. From Cardiff to London. Dated six years ago. “I came,” he said quietly. “The night you left. I was at the station when your train pulled in.” Rory’s vision blurred. She
remembered that night
—the way the platform had been slick with rain, the way she’d clutched her bag like it was the only thing keeping her from drowning. She’d
look
ed for Eva in the crowd, but not for him. Never for him. “Why didn’t you say anything?” she whispered. Silas exhaled, long and slow. “Because you were running. And I knew if I stopped you, you’d never forgive me.” She closed her eyes. The
weight
of it pressed down on her—the years, the silence, the way they’d both chosen to let each other go. When she opened them again, Silas
was watching
her, his expression
unreadable
. “Do you regret it?” she asked. He didn’t answer right away. Instead, he reached for the whiskey bottle and poured another finger into his glass. Then,
slowly
, he pushed it toward her. “Drink with me,” he said. “And I’ll tell you.”
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
96.2963%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
9
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"he said quietly [quietly]"
31.9728%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1176
totalAiIsmAdverbs
8
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
2
2
adverb
"softly"
count
2
3
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
4
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"slowly"
2
"softly"
3
"suddenly"
4
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
48.9796%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1176
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"flicker"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
1
2
word
"glinting"
count
1
3
word
"unreadable"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
2
highlights
0
"flicker"
1
"flicked"
2
"glinting"
3
"unreadable"
4
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
102
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
102
filterMatches
0
"look"
1
"wonder"
hedgeMatches
0
"tried to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
121
matches
0
"remembered that night"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
50
mean
23.32
std
17.67
cv
0.758
sampleLengths
0
75
1
6
2
74
3
1
4
28
5
33
6
9
7
3
8
60
9
24
10
46
11
10
12
35
13
20
14
12
15
39
16
51
17
47
18
14
19
14
20
28
21
42
22
5
23
10
24
31
25
14
26
39
27
36
28
2
29
20
30
5
31
20
32
5
33
7
34
17
35
8
36
25
37
15
38
31
39
23
40
13
41
19
42
45
43
7
44
20
45
25
46
12
47
6
48
26
49
9
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
102
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
180
matches
0
"was, filling"
1
"weren’t saying"
2
"was watching"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
998
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
36
adverbRatio
0.036072144288577156
lyAdverbCount
13
lyAdverbRatio
0.013026052104208416
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
121
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
121
mean
9.64
std
7.36
cv
0.764
sampleLengths
0
23
1
24
2
28
3
6
4
18
5
16
6
18
7
22
8
1
9
3
10
5
11
2
12
1
13
17
14
4
15
15
16
14
17
9
18
2
19
1
20
8
21
9
22
30
23
7
24
3
25
3
26
4
27
20
28
12
29
20
30
14
31
10
32
16
33
14
34
5
35
8
36
1
37
1
38
10
39
5
40
7
41
31
42
8
43
3
44
4
45
18
46
6
47
4
48
12
49
4
59.2287%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
5
diversityRatio
0.38016528925619836
totalSentences
121
uniqueOpeners
46
91.6667%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"he said, his voice rougher than she remembered (say, remember)"
1
"he said quietly (say quietly)"
2
"whispered (whisper)"
89.8908%