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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMRY67ZG9KJ34QC93Z4Z4M
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
33.3s
Cost:
$0.012284
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The Raven’s Nest hummed with the low murmur of late-night patrons, the kind of place where the air smelled of aged whiskey and the faint metallic tang of old coins left too long in pockets. The green neon sign outside cast a sickly glow through the rain-streaked windows, painting the floor in shifting emerald pools. Rory sat at the bar, her fingers tracing the rim of a half-empty glass of gin, the ice long melted into something watery and weak. She hadn’t meant to stay this long. Just a quick drink after her shift at the Golden Empress, a moment to shake off the chill of the London damp before heading upstairs to her flat. But the Nest had a way of holding onto people, like a spider’s
silk
—soft at first, then impossible to break. The door swung open, letting in a gust of wind that sent napkins skittering across the bar. Rory didn’t look up. She was too busy watching the way the gin caught the light, how it turned the liquid into something almost golden, almost warm. Then the door clicked shut, and the room settled back into its usual rhythm—except for the way the hairs on the back of her neck stood up, as if someone had run a finger down her spine. “Well,” a voice said, rough as gravel under boot heels. “If it isn’t little Laila Carter.” Rory’s breath hitched. That name. No one had called her that in years. Not since— She turned. Evan stood there, leaning against the doorframe like he owned the place. His dark hair was shorter now, cropped close to his skull, and there was a hardness to his jaw that hadn’t been there before. The last time she’d seen him, he’d been all sharp edges and pretty words, the kind of man who could charm a room with a single smile. Now, his smile was still there, but it didn’t reach his eyes. They were the same—flat, assessing—but something in them had gone dull, like a blade left too long in the rain. “Evan,” she said, and her voice was steadier than she felt. “What are you doing here?” He pushed off the doorframe and sauntered toward her, his hands shoved deep in the pockets of his leather jacket. “Same as you, I reckon. Needed a drink.” His gaze
flicked
over her, lingering on the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist before moving up to her face. “You look different.” Rory resisted the urge to tug her sleeve down. “So do you.” A beat of silence. Then Evan laughed, sharp and humorless. “Yeah. Well. Life’s a bitch, innit?” He slid onto the stool beside her, close enough that she could smell the cigarette smoke clinging to his clothes, the faint sourness of old alcohol beneath it. The bartender—a broad-shouldered man with a salt-and-pepper beard—glanced their way, his hazel eyes narrowing just
slightly
before he turned back to polishing a glass. Rory took a sip of her gin, buying time. “How’ve you been?” Evan shrugged. “You know. Getting by.” He flagged down the bartender, ordered a whiskey neat. When it arrived, he downed half of it in one go. “Haven’t seen you around. Figured you’d left London.” “I did,” Rory said. “For a while.” “Where’d you go?” “Nowhere special.” Evan’s mouth twisted. “Right. Nowhere special.” He swirled the whiskey in his glass, watching the amber liquid cling to the sides. “I looked for you, you know. After.” Rory’s fingers tightened around her glass. “Did you?” “Yeah. Went by your flat. Your parents’ place. Even checked the Golden Empress, though I don’t know why you’d be slumming it there.” He shot her a look. “They said you’d quit. Disappeared.” “I didn’t disappear,” she said quietly. “I just… left.” “Without a word.” His voice was flat, but there was something beneath it—something raw, something that made Rory’s chest ache. “You just packed up and vanished. Like I didn’t even matter.” Rory exhaled through her nose. “You know why I left, Evan.” “Do I?” He leaned in, close enough that she could see the faint scar above his eyebrow, the one he’d gotten falling off his bike when they were kids. “Or did you just decide I wasn’t worth the fight?” The words hit her like a punch. She opened her mouth, closed it. Because the truth was, she *had* left without a fight. Without an explanation. She’d just… run. And now, sitting here beside him, she realized how much that must have hurt. How much it still did. “I’m sorry,” she said. Evan stared at her for a long moment. Then he knocked back the rest of his whiskey and signaled for another. “Yeah. Me too.” The bartender set the fresh drink in front of him, his signet ring
glinting
under the dim bar lights. Rory watched him move, the slight limp in his left leg as he stepped away. Silas. She’d known him for years, but she’d never asked about the limp. Some things were better left
unspoken
. Evan followed her gaze. “You still working for that old spook?” Rory blinked. “What?” “Silas.” Evan jerked his chin toward the bartender. “He’s ex-MI6, you know. Or so they say.” “I didn’t
know that,” Rory
lied. Evan smirked. “Sure you didn’t.” He took another sip of his drink. “You always were a terrible liar, Laila.” Rory bristled. “Don’t call me that.” “Why not? It’s your name, isn’t it?” “Not anymore.” Evan studied her, his dark eyes searching her face like he
was trying
to memorize it. “What happened to you, Rory?” She looked away. “Same thing that happened to you, I guess.” “Nah.” He shook his head. “I got older. You got… harder.” Rory didn’t answer. She didn’t know how. Evan sighed, rubbing a hand over his face. “Look, I didn’t come here to fight. I just…” He trailed off, his fingers tapping against the bar. “I saw you sitting here, and I thought—fuck, I don’t know what I thought.” Rory swallowed. “You thought you’d say hello.” “Yeah.” He laughed, but it was hollow. “Stupid, right?” She turned back to him,
really
looked at him. The lines around his eyes, the way his shoulders hunched just
slightly
, like he
was carrying
something heavy. He wasn’t the boy she’d known. Neither of them were those people anymore. “Not stupid,” she said
softly
. Evan met her gaze, and for a moment, it was like no time had passed at all. Like they were still two kids sneaking cigarettes behind the school, laughing because the world was big and bright and theirs for the taking. Then the moment passed. Evan drained his whiskey and stood, tossing a few notes onto the bar. “I should go.” Rory nodded. “Yeah. Me too.” He hesitated, like he wanted to say something else. But in the end, he just gave her a small, sad smile. “Take care of yourself, Rory.” She watched him walk away, his boots scuffing against the worn floorboards. The door swung shut behind him, and just
like that, he
was gone
. Silas slid a fresh gin toward her. “You alright?” Rory stared at the door. “I don’t know.” Silas didn’t press. He just nodded, like he understood. Maybe he did. Rory picked up her glass, the gin sharp and cold against her lips. Outside, the rain kept falling, blurring the neon sign into something soft and indistinct. She thought about Evan, about the way he’d looked at her—like she was a ghost, like she was something he’d lost a long time ago. She thought about the girl she’d been, the one who’d run without looking back. And for the first time in years, she wondered if she’d made a mistake.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
50.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
8
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she said quietly [quietly]"
1
"she said softly [softly]"
69.1834%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1298
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
2
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
69.1834%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1298
totalAiIsms
4
found
0
word
"flicked"
count
1
1
word
"glinting"
count
1
2
word
"silk"
count
1
3
word
"unspoken"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicked"
1
"glinting"
2
"silk"
3
"unspoken"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
98
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
98
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
134
matches
0
"know that,” Rory"
1
"like that, he"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
56
mean
22.91
std
24.67
cv
1.077
sampleLengths
0
135
1
81
2
16
3
15
4
2
5
95
6
16
7
50
8
12
9
16
10
52
11
12
12
34
13
7
14
3
15
2
16
28
17
8
18
33
19
9
20
31
21
11
22
39
23
48
24
4
25
24
26
53
27
11
28
3
29
16
30
6
31
19
32
6
33
7
34
2
35
21
36
11
37
11
38
7
39
40
40
7
41
9
42
40
43
5
44
41
45
4
46
16
47
5
48
26
49
25
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
98
matches
0
"was gone"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
189
matches
0
"was trying"
1
"was carrying"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1043
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
39
adverbRatio
0.037392138063279005
lyAdverbCount
6
lyAdverbRatio
0.005752636625119847
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
134
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
134
mean
9.57
std
7.92
cv
0.827
sampleLengths
0
35
1
20
2
25
3
7
4
28
5
20
6
17
7
4
8
23
9
37
10
10
11
6
12
3
13
2
14
8
15
2
16
2
17
12
18
24
19
27
20
12
21
20
22
11
23
5
24
20
25
27
26
3
27
9
28
3
29
4
30
6
31
6
32
28
33
24
34
9
35
3
36
2
37
13
38
11
39
8
40
4
41
3
42
3
43
2
44
3
45
18
46
7
47
6
48
2
49
28
59.9502%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
3
diversityRatio
0.373134328358209
totalSentences
134
uniqueOpeners
50
18.7500%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
5
fancyTags
0
"she said, and her voice was steadier than she felt (say, be feel)"
1
"she said quietly (say quietly)"
2
"Rory lied (lie)"
3
"laughed (laugh)"
4
"she said softly (say softly)"
86.2981%