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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN1H6MA7E0QKDGYYHCDE7X
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
33.5s
Cost:
$0.012428
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The Raven’s Nest hummed with the low murmur of conversation and the clink of glasses, the kind of sound that settled into the bones like a second heartbeat. The green neon sign outside bled through the rain-streaked windows, casting everything in an eerie, underwater glow. Rory leaned against the bar, her fingers tracing the rim of her gin and tonic, the ice long melted into something weak and watery. She hadn’t meant to stay this long. Just a quick drink after her shift at the Golden Empress, a moment to shake off the chill of the London evening before heading upstairs to her flat. But the Nest had a way of holding onto people, like a spider’s
silk
—soft, almost unnoticeable, until you
tried to
leave. The door swung open, letting in a gust of damp air and the distant wail of a siren. Rory didn’t look up. She was too busy watching the way the condensation on her glass caught the light, how it slid down in slow, uneven rivulets. Then the bar went quiet. Not all at once, but in patches, like a wave receding. Heads turned. A few murmurs, the kind that carried
weight
. Rory finally lifted her gaze. And there he was. Evan. Her breath hitched. It wasn’t possible. Not here. Not now. She hadn’t seen him in—what? Three years? Four? Time had a way of blurring at the edges when you tried not to think about it. He stood just inside the doorway, shaking the rain from his coat, his dark hair longer than she remembered, curling at the nape of his neck. He looked different. Thinner. The sharp angles of his face had softened, or maybe it was just the way the light hit him. His eyes, though—those hadn’t changed. Still that same unsettling green, like sea glass worn smooth by the tide. He hadn’t noticed her yet. He was too busy scanning the room, his gaze lingering on the old maps pinned to the walls, the framed photographs of men in trench coats and women in fedoras, their faces half-lost to shadow. Rory’s fingers tightened around her glass. She should leave. Now. Before he saw her. Before this became something she couldn’t
unravel
. But she didn’t move. Evan’s eyes
flicked
toward the bar, and then—there it was. Recognition. A
flicker
of something like surprise,
quickly
smothered. He hesitated, just for a second, before crossing the room toward her. “Rory,” he said, and his voice was the same too. Low. Rough around the edges. The kind of voice that had once made her stomach flip, back when she still believed in the things he told her. “Didn’t expect to see you here.” She forced a smile, sharp as broken glass. “London’s a small city.” “Not that small.” He slid onto the stool beside her, close enough that she could smell the rain on his coat, the faintest hint of cologne—something woody, expensive. “You look good.” She wanted to laugh. She wanted to throw her drink in his face. Instead, she took a sip, letting the gin burn its way down her throat. “You too.” A lie. He didn’t look good. He looked like a man who had
been hollowed
out and put back together wrong. There were shadows under his eyes, deeper than the ones she remembered. And his hands—she couldn’t help but notice—were steady. Too steady. Like he’d learned to control every tremor, every tell. The bartender, a wiry man with a scar through his eyebrow, materialized in front of them. “What’ll it be?” “Whiskey,” Evan said. “Neat.” The bartender nodded and moved away. Evan turned back to Rory, his knee brushing against hers under the bar. She didn’t pull away. She told herself it was because she didn’t want to make a scene. “How’ve you been?” he asked. “Fine.” The word tasted like ash. “You?” “Good. Busy.” He paused, as if waiting for her to ask with what. When she didn’t, he added, “I’m in finance now. Private equity.” Of course he was. Evan had always been good with numbers, with systems, with things that could be controlled. It was the messier parts of life he’d never quite mastered. “Sounds lucrative.” “It is.” He studied her, his gaze lingering on the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist—the one he’d given her, though neither of them would ever say it out loud. “You still delivering for that Chinese place?” “Golden Empress. Yeah.” She swirled the dregs of her drink. “It pays the bills.” Evan’s whiskey arrived. He took a sip, his eyes never leaving hers. “You ever think about coming back to Cardiff?” “No.” “Your parents ask about you.” “They have my number.” He exhaled through his nose, a sound that might have been a laugh if it hadn’t been so bitter. “You always were stubborn.” “And you always were a liar.” The words hung between them, heavy and
unspoken
. Evan’s jaw tightened. For a moment, she thought he might walk away. But then he leaned in, his voice dropping to a murmur. “I’m not the same person I was, Rory.” “Aren’t you?” “No.” His fingers brushed against hers on the bar, just for a second. “I’ve changed.” She wanted to believe him. God, she wanted to. But the past had teeth, and it didn’t let go easily. “People don’t change, Evan. They just get better at hiding.” He flinched, just barely. Then the door to the back room—the one behind the bookshelf, the one she wasn’t supposed to know about—creaked open, and Silas stepped out. His limp was more pronounced tonight, the way it always was when the weather turned. He paused when he saw them, his hazel eyes flicking between Rory and Evan like a man assessing a threat. “Everything alright out here?” Silas asked, his voice deceptively mild. Rory forced another smile. “Fine. Just catching up with an old friend.” Silas’ gaze lingered on Evan for a beat too long. Then he nodded, once, and moved behind the bar. “You need anything, Rory, you let me know.” The
unspoken
message was clear: *I’ve got your back.* Evan watched him go, his expression
unreadable
. “Who’s that?” “Silas. He owns the place.” “Seems protective.” “He’s a good friend.” Evan’s fingers tapped against his glass, a restless rhythm. “You’ve got a lot of those now, don’t you? Friends.” She didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. The silence stretched between them, thick with everything they
weren’t saying
. The things he’d done. The things she’d let him do. The way she’d run, in the end, because it was the only way to survive. Evan finished his whiskey in one swallow. “I should go.” Rory nodded. “Yeah. You should.” He stood, hesitating for just a second, as if he wanted to say something else. But in the end, he just turned and walked away, his coat billowing behind him like a shadow. The door swung shut, and the Nest exhaled, the hum of conversation rising again like a tide. Rory stared at her empty glass. The ice had melted
completely
now, leaving nothing but water and the faintest hint of juniper. Silas slid a fresh gin and tonic in front of her. “You alright?” She wrapped her fingers around the glass, letting the cold seep into her skin. “I don’t know.” He didn’t press. He never did. That was the thing about Silas—he knew when to talk and when to listen. When to step in and when to let her fight her own battles. Outside, the rain had picked up, drumming against the windows in a steady rhythm. Rory took a sip of her drink, the gin sharp and clean on her tongue. She wasn’t the same person she’d been when she left Cardiff. She knew that. But standing there, with the ghost of Evan’s touch still lingering on her skin, she wondered if she’d ever
really
escaped him at all. Or if some part of her would always be looking over her shoulder, waiting for him to come back.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
66.6667%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"he said, and his voice was the same too [too]"
77.7117%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1346
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"completely"
count
1
1
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"completely"
1
"quickly"
2
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
40.5646%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1346
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"flicker"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
1
2
word
"silk"
count
1
3
word
"unspoken"
count
2
4
word
"unreadable"
count
1
5
word
"weight"
count
1
6
word
"unravel"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicker"
1
"flicked"
2
"silk"
3
"unspoken"
4
"unreadable"
5
"weight"
6
"unravel"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
120
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
120
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"tried to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
151
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
53
mean
25.13
std
25.19
cv
1.002
sampleLengths
0
125
1
76
2
4
3
1
4
102
5
61
6
4
7
31
8
43
9
12
10
31
11
29
12
52
13
19
14
4
15
36
16
5
17
7
18
24
19
32
20
36
21
14
22
20
23
1
24
5
25
4
26
23
27
6
28
39
29
2
30
15
31
30
32
63
33
10
34
12
35
27
36
9
37
9
38
5
39
2
40
4
41
19
42
7
43
36
44
10
45
5
46
50
47
22
48
13
49
17
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
120
matches
0
"been hollowed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
212
matches
0
"weren’t saying"
91.3735%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1186
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"same unsettling green, like"
adverbCount
51
adverbRatio
0.04300168634064081
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.006745362563237774
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
151
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
151
mean
8.82
std
7.06
cv
0.8
sampleLengths
0
28
1
17
2
24
3
7
4
28
5
21
6
18
7
4
8
23
9
5
10
11
11
2
12
8
13
5
14
4
15
1
16
3
17
3
18
2
19
2
20
5
21
2
22
1
23
17
24
26
25
3
26
1
27
19
28
5
29
13
30
5
31
35
32
6
33
3
34
1
35
4
36
7
37
4
38
10
39
1
40
8
41
12
42
10
43
1
44
4
45
22
46
6
47
8
48
4
49
28
54.7461%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
14
diversityRatio
0.3841059602649007
totalSentences
151
uniqueOpeners
58
75.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"he said, and his voice was the same too (say, be)"
1
"When she didn’t, he added, (does do not, add)"
88.5919%