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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN803ZNMJKNQ5PW5M0PVVW
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
21.5s
Cost:
$0.000310
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
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Meta
AI
The green neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest*
flickered
weakly against the London drizzle, its glow bleeding into the pavement like a bruise. Inside, the air smelled of aged whiskey and the faint, acrid tang of pipe tobacco, the kind that clung to the walls like memories. Aurora Carter—Rory, to her friends—leaned against the bar, nursing a double gin that had long gone tepid. She hadn’t meant to stay this late, but the rain had turned the streets into a slick,
glistening
nightmare, and the thought of climbing the stairs to her flat above Silas’ place felt like climbing a mountain after a long day. She was halfway through her third drink when the door chimed, and the bell above it jingled like a warning. A gust of cold air rushed in, carrying the scent of rain and something else—something sharp, like ozone after a storm. Rory didn’t look up immediately. She
knew that scent
. Knew the way it clung to a man who had once been her world. “Rory Carter,” the voice drawled, thick with the kind of amusement that used to make her stomach flip. “Still working the same shift, I see.” She turned
slowly
, her fingers tightening around the glass. Evan O’Malley stood in the doorway, taller than she remembered, broader, his dark hair streaked with silver at the temples. His suit was expensive, the kind that whispered *power*, the kind that had once made her
feel
small and precious. His eyes, though—those were the same. Dark as a winter sky,
unreadable
. “Evan,” she said, her voice flatter than she intended. “What are you doing here?” He pushed off the doorframe, his boots clicking against the polished wood. “Thought I’d check in on my favorite delivery girl.” His smile was slow, like he
was savoring
the sight of her. “Heard you took a job at the Golden Empress. Must be nice, working for a Chinese restaurant.” Rory’s jaw tightened. She hadn’t told him about that. No one had. “I work for Yu-Fei Cheung. She’s a friend.” “Ah.” He tilted his head, studying her. “Still got the same sharp tongue, I see.” “You still got the same habit of showing up unannounced.” Evan chuckled, low and warm, like he
was amused
by her. “Miss me?” She didn’t answer. Instead, she took a slow sip of her gin, letting the burn settle in her throat. “You look different.” “So do you.” He stepped closer, close enough that she could see the faint lines at the corners of his eyes, the way his jaw was sharper now, more defined. “Still
got that fire
in you, though. I like it.” Rory exhaled through her nose. “What do you want, Evan?” He leaned against the bar beside her, his shoulder brushing hers. She could
feel
the heat of him, the way he used to make her skin prickle with
anticipation
. “Just wanted to see how you were doing. Heard you left Cardiff. Thought you’d gone back to your old life.” “And what’s that supposed to mean?” “Nothing.” He waved a hand. “Just that I figured you’d be back in those fancy suits, arguing about some lawyer’s loophole or other. Not delivering takeout in Soho.” Rory’s fingers curled around the edge of the bar. “I didn’t choose this.” “No?” He turned to her, his voice dropping to something softer, almost intimate. “Then why?” She opened her mouth, closed it. The words stuck in her throat. *Because of you.* Because I couldn’t stand the way you looked at me when I laughed. Because I couldn’t bear the silence when you were angry. Because I
was afraid
of becoming the thing you wanted me to be. Instead, she said, “I needed a change.” Evan studied her for a long moment, his gaze lingering on the scar on her left wrist—the one she’d gotten when she was twelve, climbing a tree she wasn’t supposed to. The one he’d never seen before. “You always did like a challenge.” Silas emerged from the back room then, his limp more pronounced as he moved across the floor. His hazel eyes
flickered
between them, assessing. “Evening, Evan.” “Silas.” Evan’s voice was smooth, almost polite. “Still running this place?” “Still running it.” Silas slid a fresh glass onto the bar, poured a measure of whiskey, and slid it toward Evan without
being asked
. “You here alone?” “Just passing through.” Silas nodded, but his gaze never left Rory. “You good?” She forced a smile. “Fine.” Evan took a sip of his whiskey, watching her over the rim of his glass. “You still see Eva?” Rory’s stomach twisted. “Of course.” “Good.” He set the glass down. “She’s always been your better half.” Rory didn’t correct him. She didn’t
say that Eva
was the only person who had ever
truly
*seen* her, who had loved her for the mess she was. Instead, she said, “What happened to you, Evan?” He blinked, surprised. “What do you mean?” “You were always so sure of yourself.” She gestured vaguely at his suit, his posture, the way he carried himself like he owned the room. “Now you just… look like you’re waiting for something.” Evan’s smile faded. “I’ve got a lot on my plate.” “Right.” She took another sip of her gin, the liquid burning its way down her throat. “Business.” “Something like that.” Silas cleared his throat. “You two done here?” Evan’s gaze snapped to him. “Why? You got somewhere to be?” Silas shook his head. “Just wondered if you were going to keep Rory standing here all night.” Evan’s jaw tightened. “I was just leaving.” “Good.” Silas turned to Rory. “You want me to walk you up?” She hesitated. “Yeah. Thanks.” Evan stood abruptly. “I’ll catch you later, Rory.” She didn’t look at him. “Don’t.” The word hung between them, heavy and final. Evan didn’t argue. He just nodded once, then turned toward the door. The bell jingled as he stepped outside, the rain washing away the last of the neon glow. Silas waited until the door closed behind him before speaking. “He’s not worth it.” Rory exhaled
sharply
. “I know.” Silas poured himself a whiskey, the ice clinking against the glass. “You ever think about going back to law?” She shook her head. “No.” “You sure?” “Positive.” He studied her for a long moment. “You’re not the same person who left Cardiff.” “I know.” “Good.” He took a sip. “Because the old Rory would’ve let him walk all over her.” She almost laughed. Almost. But the memory of Evan’s hands on her, the way he’d made her
feel
like she was the only thing in the world—it still lingered, a ghost beneath her skin. “I’m not that person anymore.” Silas nodded, as if he’d expected nothing less. “That’s the thing about growing up, Rory. You realize you don’t have to be what someone else wants you to be.” She thought of the scar on her wrist, the way it had faded but never quite disappeared. The way Evan had never once asked about it. “I know.” Silas slid the whiskey toward her. “Drink up. You’ve had enough.” She took it, the amber liquid warm in her hands. “Thanks.” He clinked his glass against hers. “To new beginnings.” “To new beginnings.” They drank in silence, the
weight
of the past pressing down like the London rain outside. Rory looked around the bar, at the old maps, the faded photographs, the way the light pooled in the corners like secrets. She thought of Eva, of the life she’d built here, of the way she’d finally stopped waiting for someone else to make her whole. She was whole now. Silas must have seen the change in her expression. He smiled faintly. “You’re thinking too hard.” “I’m just remembering.” “Good.” He stood, his limp more pronounced now. “Come on. Let’s get you home.” She followed him through the bar, past the patrons who barely glanced up, past the hidden door that led to the secret room where Silas conducted his business. The rain had stopped by the time they reached the stairs to her flat, the air cooler now, the city quieting down for the night. Silas paused at the bottom step. “You ever think about talking to someone? About what happened?” Rory looked at him. “You mean a therapist?” “Or just someone who isn’t Evan.” She considered it. Then she shook her head. “I’m fine.” Silas studied her for a long moment. Then he nodded. “If you change your mind.” “I will.” He clapped her shoulder once, his grip firm. “Goodnight, Rory.” “Goodnight, Silas.” She climbed the stairs, her boots
echoing
against the wood. The flat was dark when she let herself in, the curtains drawn against the night. She kicked off her shoes, peeled off her jacket, and sat on the edge of the bed, staring at the scar on her wrist. She thought of Evan, of the way he’d looked when he’d walked out the door. Of the way he’d never once asked about her life here, about the person she’d become. She thought of Eva, of the way she’d always been there, of the way she’d loved her without conditions. She thought of the future, bright and uncertain, and for the first time in a long time, she didn’t
feel
afraid. She pulled out her phone, dialed Eva’s number. The call connected on the second ring. “Rory?” Eva’s voice was warm, sleepy. “Is everything okay?” “I’m okay,” Rory said. “I just wanted to hear your voice.” Eva’s breath hitched. “Oh. Rory—” “I miss you.” “I miss you too.” A pause. “What’s wrong?” “Nothing.” Rory smiled, even though Eva couldn’t see it. “I just needed to hear your voice.” “You’re sure?” “Positive.” Eva exhaled, relieved. “Okay. Come over. I’ll make tea.” “Yes.” She hung up, set the phone on the nightstand, and lay back on the bed. The scar on her wrist was just a faint line now, barely visible in the dim light. She was free. And for the first time in years, that felt like enough.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"Instead, she said, [Instead,]"
1
"Instead, she said, [Instead,]"
82.1322%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1679
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
2
adverb
"truly"
count
1
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slowly"
2
"truly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
58.3085%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1679
totalAiIsms
7
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
2
1
word
"glistening"
count
1
2
word
"unreadable"
count
1
3
word
"anticipation"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
1
5
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"glistening"
2
"unreadable"
3
"anticipation"
4
"weight"
5
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
118
matches
0
"was afraid"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
118
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
193
matches
0
"knew that scent"
1
"got that fire"
2
"say that Eva"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
94
mean
17.79
std
17.69
cv
0.995
sampleLengths
0
105
1
64
2
25
3
61
4
14
5
50
6
20
7
15
8
10
9
13
10
22
11
40
12
10
13
49
14
6
15
28
16
13
17
15
18
51
19
7
20
43
21
26
22
11
23
27
24
3
25
10
26
5
27
19
28
5
29
12
30
36
31
7
32
34
33
10
34
17
35
3
36
8
37
11
38
17
39
7
40
12
41
4
42
8
43
6
44
37
45
14
46
5
47
19
48
5
49
2
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
118
matches
0
"was amused"
1
"being asked"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
223
matches
0
"was savoring"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1239
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
47
adverbRatio
0.037933817594834544
lyAdverbCount
13
lyAdverbRatio
0.010492332526230832
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
193
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
193
mean
8.66
std
7.35
cv
0.849
sampleLengths
0
23
1
24
2
17
3
41
4
20
5
21
6
5
7
4
8
14
9
18
10
7
11
9
12
20
13
20
14
6
15
6
16
9
17
5
18
12
19
21
20
17
21
3
22
6
23
3
24
8
25
7
26
8
27
10
28
11
29
2
30
3
31
16
32
3
33
30
34
10
35
5
36
5
37
11
38
18
39
20
40
6
41
5
42
23
43
9
44
4
45
13
46
2
47
6
48
6
49
16
43.2642%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
13
diversityRatio
0.29015544041450775
totalSentences
193
uniqueOpeners
56
75.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"the voice drawled, thick with the kind of amusement that used to make her stomach flip (drawl, make)"
1
"she said, her voice flatter than she intended (say, flatter intend)"
85.8062%