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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN8N5609SKT5A21KZQXMB7
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
16.2s
Cost:
$0.000252
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The pendant burned against her skin, its crimson pulse steady and insistent beneath her shirt. Aurora—Rory—had told herself it was just the cold, the way the wind off the Thames bit at her cheeks like a thousand tiny teeth. But the pendant didn’t care for excuses. It thrummed, a slow, rhythmic ache that vibrated up her sternum, as if something inside it had woken. She should have listened to the voice in her head—the one that had whispered *no* when she’d first slipped the thing into her pocket. But the note had been clear: *Meet me at the Grove at midnight. Alone.* No signature, no explanation, just the address scrawled in ink that smelled faintly of damp earth and something older, something that made her skin prickle. And so here she
was, standing
at the edge of Richmond Park, where the trees grew too close together, their branches knitting a canopy so thick the moon couldn’t pierce it. The standing stones
loomed
ahead, their gnarled oaks twisted like fingers reaching for the sky. The air hummed, not with crickets or rustling leaves, but with something deeper, something that made her teeth ache. She adjusted the strap of her bag, her fingers brushing the pendant again. The warmth had intensified. *You shouldn’t be here.* Rory exhaled
sharply
, the breath fogging in the frigid night. She wasn’t superstitious. She wasn’t *anything* like her father, who’d spent his life chasing ghosts in courtrooms. But the Grove wasn’t just a park. It was a place where the air tasted wrong, where the wildflowers never died and the standing stones had stood since before history had names for them. The note had been a mistake. She should turn back. But the pendant pulsed again, harder this time, and her pulse matched it, a frantic two-step against her ribs. She stepped forward. The moment her boots crunched over the gravel path, the world shifted. Not in a way she could name—no flash of light, no snap of sound—but like the air itself had thickened, like she’d
been swallowed
by something vast and patient. The trees leaned in closer. The standing stones
seemed to
breathe. And then— A sound. Not a rustle. Not a branch snapping. Something wet and slow, like a hand dragging through mud. Rory froze. The pendant burned against her skin, the heat seeping into her palm. She swallowed hard, her tongue thick in her mouth. *You’re being ridiculous.* But her breath came too fast. Her fingers twitched toward the pendant, as if it might shield her. Then she saw it. A
flicker
at the edge of her vision—something pale, something *wrong*—moving between the trees. Not a deer. Not a fox. It had too many limbs, too many joints, the way it moved, all liquid and wrong. Her stomach twisted. She wanted to scream. Wanted to run. But her feet
were rooted
to the ground, as if the earth itself had decided she belonged here. The thing moved again, closer this time. Rory’s pulse roared in her ears. She could feel the pendant’s heat radiating through her skin, a living thing against her chest. She
clenched her fist
around it, her nails biting into her palm. *What the hell are you doing here?* The voice wasn’t in her head. It was *around* her, a whisper that slithered through the air like smoke. Not hers. Not human. She turned
slowly
, her gaze darting between the trees. The pendant pulsed violently now, the heat
searing
through her shirt. The air smelled like iron and something older, something that made her skin crawl. Then she saw it. A figure stood between the oaks, too tall, too thin. Its limbs were wrong—too many joints, too many fingers, its skin the color of damp parchment, stretched too tight over bones that looked like they’d
been carved
from ice. Its mouth didn’t move, but the words still slithered into her mind. *You shouldn’t have come.* Rory stumbled back, her heel catching on a root. She barely caught herself, her hands flying up to steady herself. The pendant burned like a brand against her chest. The figure tilted its head, and for a heartbeat, she thought she saw something like recognition in its hollow eyes. *You’re not supposed to be here.* She swallowed. Her voice came out a whisper. “Who—who are you?” The thing didn’t answer. It just stepped forward, its movements too deliberate, too *wrong*. The pendant pulsed again, the heat radiating outward, warming the air around her. Rory’s breath came in ragged gasps. She could feel the thing’s gaze on her, heavy as a physical
weight
. Then the trees *moved*. Not the wind. Not branches swaying. The trees themselves
seemed to
lean in, their roots writhing just beneath the soil, their leaves rustling in unison, as if something vast and ancient had decided to speak. The pendant burned hotter now, the heat radiating through her,
searing
her skin. Rory gasped, her hands flying to her chest. The figure in front of her tilted its head again, its hollow eyes fixed on her. *You don’t belong here.* She shook her head, her voice raw. “I—I don’t know what this is, but I need to leave.” The thing didn’t move. It just stood there, its presence filling the space between them, thick and suffocating. The pendant pulsed once more, the heat radiating outward, warming the air around her. Rory’s breath came in ragged gasps. She could feel the thing’s gaze on her, heavy as a physical
weight
. Then the ground
trembled
. Not an earthquake. Not a storm. Something deeper, something that made the earth itself shudder beneath her feet. The pendant burned like fire against her skin, the heat radiating outward,
searing
her chest. Rory cried out, her hands flying to her face. The figure in front of her didn’t move. It just stood there, its hollow eyes fixed on her, its presence filling the space between them, thick and suffocating. *You don’t belong here.* She shook her head, her voice a broken whisper. “I don’t know who sent me, but I need to go.” The thing didn’t answer. It just stood there, its presence filling the space between them, thick and suffocating. The pendant burned hotter now, the heat radiating outward,
searing
her skin. Rory gasped, her hands flying to her chest. Then the trees *whispered*. Not leaves. Not wind. The trees themselves
seemed to
speak, their voices slithering into her mind, a chorus of whispers that made her skin crawl. *You don’t belong here.* She stumbled back, her heel catching on a root. She barely caught herself, her hands flying up to steady herself. The pendant burned like a brand against her chest. The figure in front of her tilted its head, and for a heartbeat, she thought she saw something like pity in its hollow eyes. *You don’t belong here.* Rory’s breath came in ragged gasps. She could feel the thing’s gaze on her, heavy as a physical
weight
. The pendant burned hotter now, the heat radiating outward,
searing
her skin. She gasped, her hands flying to her chest. Then the ground
trembled
again, and the figure in front of her *moved*. It didn’t walk. It didn’t run. It *unfolded*, its limbs stretching, its body elongating, its skin stretching too tight over bones that looked like they’d
been carved
from ice. The pendant burned like fire against her skin, the heat radiating outward,
searing
her chest. Rory screamed. The thing in front of her didn’t answer. It just stood there, its hollow eyes fixed on her, its presence filling the space between them, thick and suffocating. The pendant burned hotter now, the heat radiating outward,
searing
her skin. Rory gasped, her hands flying to her face. Then the trees *whispered* again, their voices slithering into her mind, a chorus of whispers that made her skin crawl. *You don’t belong here.* And the figure in front of her *laughed*.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
0
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
84.9398%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1328
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slowly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1328
totalAiIsms
14
found
0
word
"searing"
count
7
1
word
"flicker"
count
1
2
word
"trembled"
count
2
3
word
"loomed"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
3
highlights
0
"searing"
1
"flicker"
2
"trembled"
3
"loomed"
4
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"clenched jaw/fists"
count
1
highlights
0
"clenched her fist"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
130
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
3
narrationSentences
130
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
133
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
49
mean
26.94
std
24.88
cv
0.924
sampleLengths
0
64
1
128
2
21
3
71
4
19
5
3
6
54
7
2
8
40
9
3
10
18
11
4
12
64
13
41
14
7
15
23
16
34
17
4
18
51
19
4
20
49
21
6
22
11
23
46
24
4
25
35
26
37
27
4
28
18
29
51
30
4
31
42
32
28
33
4
34
20
35
38
36
4
37
25
38
4
39
53
40
4
41
39
42
13
43
44
44
2
45
48
46
20
47
4
48
8
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
130
matches
0
"been swallowed"
1
"were rooted"
2
"been carved"
3
"been carved"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
223
matches
0
"was, standing"
92.6938%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1303
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
63
adverbRatio
0.04834996162701458
lyAdverbCount
6
lyAdverbRatio
0.004604758250191865
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
133
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
133
mean
9.92
std
6.9
cv
0.695
sampleLengths
0
15
1
24
2
7
3
18
4
24
5
13
6
26
7
31
8
15
9
19
10
13
11
4
12
4
13
10
14
3
15
14
16
7
17
27
18
6
19
4
20
19
21
3
22
12
23
29
24
5
25
6
26
2
27
2
28
3
29
4
30
10
31
2
32
12
33
9
34
3
35
6
36
12
37
4
38
14
39
3
40
3
41
16
42
3
43
4
44
3
45
18
46
7
47
6
48
16
49
12
36.4662%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
18
diversityRatio
0.14285714285714285
totalSentences
133
uniqueOpeners
19
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
89.0647%