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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPAZQKY5TVDZ1CRE3D6CD8
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
30.1s
Cost:
$0.000463
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Soho, where neon lights
flickered
like dying stars, The Raven's Nest squatted, its distinctive green sign casting a sickly glow on the rain-slicked pavement. The bar was a relic, a dimly lit
sanctuary
from the city's relentless pulse, its walls adorned with old maps and black-and-white photographs that whispered tales of a London long gone. Aurora Carter, known to most as Rory, pushed through the heavy door, a gust of cold air preceding her. She shook out her damp hair, the straight black strands falling like a curtain around her shoulders. Her bright blue eyes, sharp as a winter's dawn, scanned the room, taking in the familiar faces and the comforting hum of conversation. She'd been away too long, and the bar felt like a warm embrace after a bitter storm. Silas Blackwood, behind the worn oak counter, polished a glass with a cloth that had seen better days. His hazel eyes, keen as ever, missed nothing. He noticed Rory the moment she stepped in, her small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist catching the light as she pushed her sleeves up. He watched her, a faint smile tugging at the corners of his neatly trimmed beard, grey-streaked auburn like the first leaves of autumn. Rory's gaze landed on Silas, and she felt a jolt, a mix of surprise and relief. She hadn't seen him since she'd fled to London, leaving behind the wreckage of her life in Cardiff. She'd sent him a letter, a brief explanation, an apology. But it wasn't the same as seeing him, was it? She crossed the room, her boots
echoing
on the wooden floor. "Silas," she said, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside her. She'd always been good at hiding her emotions, a skill honed from years of dealing with her father's moods. Silas looked up, his eyes meeting hers. There was a moment of silence, a beat of understanding passing between them. Then, he set the glass down and stepped out from behind the counter, his slight limp more pronounced than she remembered. He pulled her into a hug, his beard tickling her cheek. "Rory," he murmured, his voice a low rumble. "It's been a while." She nodded, her throat tight. "Too long," she
managed to
say, pulling back. She looked at him,
really
looked at him. The lines around his eyes were deeper, his hair greyer. He looked... older. Tired. She felt
a pang of guilt
. She should have come back sooner. Silas poured her a drink, a measure of Irish whiskey, neat. He remembered her preferences, just as he remembered everything. It was one of the things that made him a good spymaster, she supposed. He slid the glass towards her, his signet ring
glinting
in the dim light. "You look well," he said, his gaze lingering on her face. Rory picked up the glass, her fingers brushing against the cool crystal. "I am," she said, taking a sip. The whiskey burned her throat, a welcome distraction from the emotions
churning
inside her. "I'm working at Golden Empress now. Part-time, but it pays the bills." Silas nodded, leaning against the counter. "And how's Eva?" Rory's smile was small, bittersweet. "She's good. Thriving, actually. She's got her own gallery now. She's been trying to get me to paint again, but..." She shrugged, letting the sentence trail off. She hadn't painted since she left Cardiff, since Evan... Silas followed her gaze to the photograph on the wall behind him, a black-and-white image of Prague. "You know," he said, his voice low, "I never did tell you what happened in Prague." Rory looked at him, surprised. She'd always wondered about the story behind that photograph, the reason for his limp. But she'd never asked, never pushed. She'd learned early on that Silas shared his stories on his terms, not hers. "You don't have to," she said, her voice soft. He looked at her, his eyes thoughtful. "I want to," he said, pushing off from the counter. He gestured to the booth in the corner, the one where they used to sit, talking for hours about nothing and everything. "Come on," he said, "let's sit down." Rory followed him, her heart pounding in her chest. She felt
a sense of unease
, a niggling worry. Silas never talked about his past, not
really
. What had changed? She slid into the booth, her back to the wall, her eyes never leaving Silas's face. Silas sat down opposite her, his knee brushing against hers. He took a deep breath, his eyes fixed on the photograph. "I was young," he began, his voice distant, "too young to be running an operation like that. But I was eager, too eager. I thought I knew everything, thought I could handle anything." He paused, his fingers tracing the rim of his glass. "The target was a high-value asset, a Russian defector. We were supposed to extract him, bring him back to London. But things went wrong. The meet was compromised, and we were ambushed. I took a bullet to the knee, and the asset... he didn't make it." Silas looked at Rory, his eyes filled with a regret that cut deep. "I failed," he said, his voice
barely above a whisper
. "I failed him, and I failed my team." Rory reached out, her hand covering his. She felt the callouses, the rough edges of a life lived hard. "Silas," she said, her voice steady, "you can't blame yourself. You did your best." He looked at her, his eyes searching hers. "Can I?" he said, his voice raw. "Because I've been thinking, Rory. I've been thinking about all the things I could have done differently. All the lives I could have saved if I'd just been... better." Rory felt a lump form in her throat. She
knew that feeling
, that sense of regret, that gnawing worry that she could have done more. She'd felt it every day since she left Cardiff, since she left Evan. She'd blamed herself, blamed herself for not seeing the signs, for not leaving sooner. She'd
carried that guilt
like a stone in her pocket, heavy and constant. She squeezed Silas's hand, her fingers tightening around his. "Silas," she said, her voice firm, "you can't change the past. You can't undo what's already done. All you can do is learn from it, move forward." Silas looked at her, his eyes filled with a sadness that made her heart ache. "And what if I don't want to move forward?" he said, his voice barely audible. "What if I want to stay here, in this... this limbo?" Rory felt
a surge of anger
, hot and fierce. She leaned forward, her eyes flashing. "Then you're a fool," she said, her voice sharp. "Because life doesn't wait for us, Silas. It keeps moving, whether we're ready or not. And if we don't keep up, if we don't keep moving... we get left behind." Silas looked at her, his eyes wide with surprise. Then, he threw his head back and laughed, a sound that
echoed
through the bar, a sound that made the other patrons turn and stare. "God, I've missed you, Rory," he said, his eyes shining with unshed tears. "You always did have a way with words." Rory smiled, her anger dissipating as
quickly
as it had come. She felt
a sense of relief
, a
weight
lifting off her shoulders. She'd said what she needed to say, and Silas had heard her. That was all that mattered. She raised her glass, a silent toast. Silas raised his in return, clinking it against hers. "To moving forward," he said, his voice steady. "To moving forward," Rory
echoed
, taking a sip of her whiskey. She felt a sense of peace, a calm she hadn't felt in a long time. She was home, she realized. She was home, and she was exactly where she
was meant
to be. The night wore on, the bar filling up with the usual crowd. Silas and Rory talked, their conversation flowing like the whiskey they drank. They talked about everything and nothing, about the past and the present, about the things that had changed and the things that never would. They laughed, they argued, they remembered. And in the quiet moments, they remembered the things they hadn't said, the regrets they hadn't voiced. But they didn't dwell on them, not tonight. Tonight, they chose to move forward, one step at a time. As the clock struck midnight, Rory stood up, her chair scraping against the floor. She looked at Silas, her eyes filled with a warmth that made his heart ache. "I should go," she said, her voice soft. "I've got an early shift tomorrow." Silas nodded, standing up as well. He walked her to the door, his hand resting on the small of her back. He felt a sense of contentment, a peace he hadn't felt in a long time. "Come back soon," he said, his voice low. "I've missed you, Rory. More than you know." Rory looked at him, her eyes filled with a promise. "I will," she said, her voice steady. "I promise." She stepped out into the night, the cold air wrapping around her like a shroud. She turned back, one last look at Silas, one last look at The Raven's Nest. Then, she walked away, her boots
echoing
on the pavement, her heart filled with a hope she hadn't felt in a long time. Silas watched her go, his eyes filled with a sadness that made his heart ache. He turned back into the bar, his limp more pronounced than usual. He poured himself another drink, his eyes fixed on the photograph of Prague. He took a sip, the whiskey burning his throat, a reminder of the past, a promise of the future. He'd moved forward tonight, he realized. He'd taken a step, a small step, but a step nonetheless. And that was enough, for now. He raised his glass, a silent toast to the night, to the past, to the future. Then, he turned back to the bar, his eyes filled with a determination that made his heart pound. Because life didn't wait for anyone, he knew. And he was ready to keep moving, ready to keep living. Ready to face whatever came next.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
22
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she managed to say, pulling back [back]"
1
"he said, his voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
76.8116%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1725
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
2
highlights
0
"quickly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
2
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
42.0290%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1725
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
1
word
"churning"
count
1
2
word
"pang"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
1
4
word
"glinting"
count
1
5
word
"weight"
count
1
6
word
"echoed"
count
2
7
word
"echoing"
count
2
highlights
0
"sanctuary"
1
"churning"
2
"pang"
3
"flickered"
4
"glinting"
5
"weight"
6
"echoed"
7
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"sense of foreboding"
count
1
highlights
0
"a sense of unease"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
3
narrationSentences
127
matches
0
"a pang of guilt"
1
"a surge of anger"
2
"a sense of relief"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
127
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"managed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
139
matches
0
"knew that feeling"
1
"carried that guilt"
55.2283%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
36
mean
47.67
std
16.36
cv
0.343
sampleLengths
0
59
1
76
2
74
3
65
4
30
5
64
6
47
7
59
8
45
9
9
10
41
11
33
12
48
13
46
14
45
15
54
16
56
17
31
18
33
19
44
20
65
21
36
22
41
23
54
24
55
25
40
26
24
27
44
28
90
29
43
30
52
31
19
32
53
33
59
34
57
35
25
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
127
matches
0
"was meant"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
247
matches
(empty)
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1409
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.0234208658623137
lyAdverbCount
10
lyAdverbRatio
0.007097232079488999
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
139
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
139
mean
12.35
std
6.96
cv
0.564
sampleLengths
0
28
1
31
2
19
3
17
4
23
5
17
6
18
7
8
8
25
9
23
10
16
11
18
12
10
13
10
14
11
15
11
16
19
17
7
18
13
19
21
20
11
21
8
22
4
23
5
24
8
25
8
26
10
27
2
28
1
29
1
30
6
31
6
32
11
33
9
34
14
35
14
36
11
37
12
38
7
39
14
40
12
41
6
42
3
43
5
44
27
45
9
46
17
47
16
48
5
49
14
33.4532%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
23
diversityRatio
0.2158273381294964
totalSentences
139
uniqueOpeners
30
84.0909%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
22
fancyCount
8
fancyTags
0
"he murmured, his voice a low rumble (murmur)"
1
"she managed to say, pulling back (manage say, pull)"
2
"he said, his gaze lingering on her face (say, linger)"
3
"she said, taking a sip (say, take)"
4
"he said, pushing off from the counter (say, push)"
5
"he began, his voice distant (begin)"
6
"he said, his eyes shining with unshed tears (say, shine)"
7
"Rory echoed, taking a sip of her whiskey (echo, take)"
87.3890%