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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPBN62D11H0M8NJZAV926K
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
30.8s
Cost:
$0.001109
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
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Meta
AI
The moon hung low in the sky, a pale disc casting a sil
very
glow over the twisted branches of the ancient oaks that surrounded The Fae Grove. Aurora Carter stepped through the gnarled roots, her heart thrumming in her chest, a steady drumbeat of anxiety. She had come here for answers, but the air felt thick with something unnameable, a
weight
pressing down on her shoulders as she crossed the threshold marked by the standing stones. The grove was a hidden
sanctuary
, a pocket of magic nestled within Richmond Park, but tonight it felt different. The wildflowers, usually vibrant and alive,
seemed to
droop under the moonlight, their colors muted, as if they too sensed the wrongness that
hung in the air
. Aurora brushed her fingers against the petals of a nearby bloom, its softness a
stark
contrast to the unease curling in her stomach. She took a deep breath, inhaling the scent of damp earth and something
sweetly
decayed. The Heartstone Pendant, nestled against her chest, pulsed faintly, a warm thrum that felt both comforting and alarming. It had
been given
to her by an unknown benefactor, a token of protection—or perhaps a warning. She had hoped it would guide her, but now it felt like a tether to something she couldn’t quite grasp. As she ventured deeper into the grove, the sounds of the outside world faded, replaced by an unsettling silence. The rustle of leaves, the distant call of a night bird, all fell away, leaving only the sound of her own
footsteps
crunching on the underbrush. She paused, straining to hear something—anything—beyond the thudding of her heart. Then, a whisper. It was soft, almost imperceptible, like the rustle of
silk
against skin. Aurora turned
sharply
, her bright blue eyes scanning the shadows, but there was nothing there. Just the trees, their twisted limbs reaching out like skeletal fingers. She shook her head, trying to dispel the creeping dread that coiled around her mind. “Get a grip, Rory,” she muttered to herself, her voice
echo
ing in the stillness. “You’re here for a reason.” She had come seeking the truth about her past, about the strange occurrences that had plagued her since she fled Cardiff. The dreams that felt too real, the shadows that danced just beyond her vision. She needed to confront whatever lay hidden in this grove, to understand the connection between her and the Fae realm. But as she moved further in, the air thickened, and the shadows deepened. The trees
loomed
larger, their bark twisted and gnarled, as if they were alive and watching her. Aurora felt a shiver race down her spine, a primal instinct urging her to turn back. Yet, she pressed on, driven by a mixture of fear and determination. A sudden rustle to her left made her jump. She spun around, heart racing, but again, there was nothing. Just the trees, their branches swaying
gently
in a breeze that felt too cold for the season. She took a step back, her foot crunching on a brittle twig, the sound
echo
ing in the silence like a gunshot. “Hello?” she called, her voice
wavering
. “Is anyone there?” The only response was the whisper of the wind, a soft sigh that
seemed to
carry her words away. She felt foolish, standing there in the dark, calling out to shadows. But the feeling of being watched intensified, a prickling sensation crawling over her skin. Then, from the corner of her eye, she caught a
flicker
of movement. A shadow darted between the trees, too quick to be a trick of the light. Aurora’s breath hitched in her throat. She turned her head, but the shadow
was gone
, swallowed by the darkness. “Just the trees,” she whispered, trying to convince herself. “Just the trees.” But the Heartstone Pendant pulsed again, a steady warmth that felt like a heartbeat against her chest. She reached for it, fingers brushing the cool silver chain, grounding herself in its presence. It was a reminder of her purpose, of the strength she needed to find. As she moved deeper into the grove, the air grew heavier, thick with an
oppressive
energy that made her skin prickle. The wildflowers, once vibrant, now
seemed to
wilt, their petals curling inward as if recoiling from something unseen. Aurora’s pulse quickened, a sense of urgency propelling her forward. She had to find the source of the wrongness, to confront whatever
was lurking
in the shadows. The grove was a place of power, a bridge between worlds, and she could feel the pull of the Fae realm, a siren call that beckoned her closer. But with each step, the whispers grew louder, a
cacophony
of voices that swirled around her, indistinct yet insistent. They tugged at her mind, weaving through her thoughts like tendrils of smoke. “Rory… Rory…” they called, a haunting
echo
that sent chills racing down her spine. “Stop it!” she shouted, her voice breaking the stillness. “I’m not afraid of you!” The grove responded with silence, a heavy pause that felt like a breath held too long. Aurora stood still, heart pounding, waiting for a response. But the only sound was the rustle of leaves, the soft sigh of the wind. Then, from the depths of the shadows, a figure emerged. It was tall and slender, its features obscured by the darkness, but Aurora could feel its gaze piercing through her. The air crackled with energy, a
palpable
tension that made her skin prickle. “Who are you?” she demanded, her voice steadier than she felt. The figure stepped closer, revealing a face that was both beautiful and terrifying, with eyes that glimmered like stars against the night. “You seek the truth, Aurora Carter,” it said, its voice smooth and melodic, yet laced with an undercurrent of something darker. “But truth comes at a price.” Aurora’s breath caught in her throat. She had come seeking answers, but now, standing before this being, she felt the
weight
of her choices pressing down on her. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed fiercely, a warning, a reminder of the stakes involved. “What do you want from me?” she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. The figure smiled, a slow, unsettling curve of its lips. “Only what you are willing to give.” The shadows around them shifted, swirling like smoke, and Aurora felt the ground beneath her feet tremble. The whispers grew louder, a chorus of voices rising in a crescendo, drowning out her thoughts. She was not alone, and the realization sent
a jolt of fear
through her. “Leave me alone!” she shouted, but the words felt weak against the tide of energy that surged around her. The figure stepped closer, its presence overwhelming, and Aurora felt the pull of the Fae realm tugging at her
very
essence. She
was caught
in a web of magic and darkness, and the truth she sought felt more elusive than ever. With a surge of determination, she clutched the Heartstone Pendant, its warmth flooding her with courage. “I won’t be your pawn,” she declared, her voice rising above the chaos. The figure paused, its expression shifting, a
flicker
of surprise crossing its features. “Very well,” it said, the words dripping with a mix of amusement and menace. “But remember, the truth you seek may not be what you desire.” And with that, the shadows closed in, swallowing the figure whole, leaving Aurora alone in the grove, the whispers fading into silence. She stood there, heart racing, the
weight
of the encounter settling heavily on her shoulders. The grove felt different now, the air charged with a new energy, and she knew she had only just begun to scratch the surface of the darkness that lay ahead.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
11
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
53.4523%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1289
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"gently"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
2
adverb
"sweetly"
count
1
3
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
4
adverb
"very"
count
2
highlights
0
"gently"
1
"sharply"
2
"sweetly"
3
"barely above a whisper"
4
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1289
totalAiIsms
17
found
0
word
"palpable"
count
1
1
word
"cacophony"
count
1
2
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
3
word
"flicker"
count
2
4
word
"wavering"
count
1
5
word
"oppressive"
count
1
6
word
"loomed"
count
1
7
word
"silk"
count
1
8
word
"stark"
count
1
9
word
"weight"
count
3
10
word
"footsteps"
count
1
11
word
"echo"
count
1
12
word
"echoing"
count
2
highlights
0
"palpable"
1
"cacophony"
2
"sanctuary"
3
"flicker"
4
"wavering"
5
"oppressive"
6
"loomed"
7
"silk"
8
"stark"
9
"weight"
10
"footsteps"
11
"echo"
12
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"hung in the air"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
78
matches
0
"a jolt of fear"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
3
narrationSentences
78
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
85
matches
(empty)
86.3596%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
31
mean
41.48
std
18.76
cv
0.452
sampleLengths
0
76
1
69
2
70
3
56
4
56
5
19
6
55
7
58
8
57
9
9
10
45
11
47
12
12
13
46
14
49
15
45
16
46
17
14
18
40
19
43
20
11
21
49
22
41
23
14
24
17
25
47
26
19
27
41
28
29
29
39
30
67
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
78
matches
0
"been given"
1
"was gone"
2
"was caught"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
193
matches
0
"was lurking"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1211
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
48
adverbRatio
0.03963666391412056
lyAdverbCount
12
lyAdverbRatio
0.00990916597853014
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
85
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
98.9312%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
85
mean
15.13
std
6.01
cv
0.397
sampleLengths
0
27
1
18
2
31
3
19
4
27
5
23
6
15
7
18
8
17
9
20
10
19
11
26
12
11
13
3
14
12
15
15
16
11
17
15
18
14
19
5
20
21
21
14
22
20
23
13
24
17
25
16
26
12
27
9
28
10
29
17
30
21
31
6
32
3
33
19
34
12
35
14
36
13
37
15
38
6
39
13
40
9
41
3
42
17
43
15
44
14
45
21
46
18
47
10
48
17
49
28
46.4706%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
3
diversityRatio
0.29411764705882354
totalSentences
85
uniqueOpeners
25
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
11
fancyCount
8
fancyTags
0
"she muttered to herself, her voice echoing in the stillness (mutter echo)"
1
"she whispered, trying to convince herself (whisper, try convince)"
2
"shouted (shout)"
3
"demanded (demand)"
4
"it said, its voice smooth and melodic, yet laced with an undercurrent of something darker (say, lace)"
5
"shouted (shout)"
6
"she declared, her voice rising above the chaos (declare, rise)"
7
"it said, the words dripping with a mix of amusement and menace (say, drip)"
81.4832%