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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPBX465VFYY54SERG64TKE
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
7.9s
Cost:
$0.000330
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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In the hushed stillness of a London night, Aurora Carter pedaled her bicycle through the labyrinthine streets, the cold breath of autumn nipping at her heels. The city, usually a
symphony
of life, was a quiet stage set under the moon's silver gaze. She
was bound
for Richmond Park, not by choice, but by the insistent pull of the Heartstone pendant that hung around her neck, a crimson gem pulsating faintly against her chest. The park
loomed
ahead, a dark mass against the night sky, its ancient oak standing stones like silent
sentinels
marking the boundary. Rory had been here before, but never at this hour, never with this sense of unease prickling her skin. She locked her bike to a rack, the clink of metal against metal
echoing
ominously in the silence. The Fae Grove, as Eva called it, was a hidden clearing that existed in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm. Time moved differently here, an hour inside could be minutes or days outside. Rory had seen it with her own eyes, but the magic of it still
sent a shiver down
her spine. She stepped into the grove, the wildflowers beneath her boots releasing their sweet scent into the night air. The Heartstone pendant
throbbed
against her skin, guiding her deeper into the grove. She followed its lead, her eyes scanning the shadows, her ears straining for any sound that didn't belong. The wind rustled the leaves, a soft, whispering sound that
seemed to
carry words just beyond her comprehension. She shook her head, attributing it to her imagination, but the feeling of being watched persisted, a prickling sensation at the back of her neck. A twig snapped behind her. Rory spun around, her heart pounding in her chest. Nothing moved in the darkness. She took a deep breath, trying to calm her nerves. It was just an animal, she told herself. But the rationalization did little to ease the tension coiling in her muscles. She continued on, the Heartstone leading her to a circle of ancient stones at the grove's heart. They were massive, their surfaces worn smooth by time and touch, their bases buried deep in the earth. A faint glow emanated from within the circle, pulsating in time with the Heartstone at Rory's throat. She stepped into the circle, the air growing colder, heavier. The glow intensified, casting eerie shadows that
seemed to
writhe and twist at the edge of her vision. She reached up, her fingers brushing against the Heartstone. It pulsed warmer, its glow matching the one in the circle. Suddenly, a voice
echoed
through the grove, a whisper carried on the wind. "Aurora Carter." Rory spun around, her eyes searching the darkness. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her belly. Silence answered her, then another whisper, "Malphora." Rory's breath hitched. That was the name her mother had called her when she was a child, a name she hadn't heard in years. A name she had thought forgotten. "Who are you?" she demanded, her voice
echoing
in the silence. The wind picked up, the trees rustling, their leaves whispering in a language only they understood. The shadows at the edge of her vision
seemed to
grow darker, more substantial. Rory's
heart pounded in her chest
, her breath coming in short gasps. She was not alone. A figure stepped into the light, its form shimmering like heat haze. It was a woman, her hair a cascade of silver, her eyes as bright as the moon. She
was dressed
in a gown that
seemed to
be made of starlight, her feet bare, her skin glowing with an
otherworldly
radiance. She was beautiful, but there was something about her that made Rory's blood run cold. "You know who I am, Malphora," the woman said, her voice like the rustle of leaves, the whisper of wind. "I am Isolde, Queen of the Fae." Rory's mind raced. She had heard stories of the Fae, of their tricks and their traps. She had to be careful, had to keep her wits about her. "What do you want with me?" she asked, her voice steady despite the fear that gripped her. Isolde smiled, a slow, predatory curve of her lips. "I want what is mine, Malphora. I want the Heartstone." Rory's hand went to the pendant, her fingers closing around it protectively. "This belongs to me," she said, her voice firm. "It was given to me." Isolde laughed, a sound like tinkling bells that set Rory's teeth on edge. "Given to you? By whom, child? You know nothing of its power, of its purpose." Rory's grip tightened on the pendant. "I know enough," she said. "I know it's mine." Isolde's eyes flashed, her form shimmering. "It belongs to the Fae, to me. It was stolen, and I want it back." Rory shook her head. "I won't give it to you." Isolde's smile faded, her eyes hardening. "You have no choice, Malphora. You are bound to the Heartstone, bound to me. You cannot resist me." Rory felt a tug at her mind, a pressure that made her knees weaken. She gritted her teeth, pushing back against the intrusion. She was not a pawn to be moved at the whim of another. She was Aurora Carter, and she would not be controlled. She took a deep breath, her eyes locked with Isolde's. "I am Aurora Carter," she said, her voice ringing out in the grove. "I am not your pawn, I am not your Malphora. I will not give you the Heartstone." Isolde's
eyes widened
, her form flickering. The pressure in Rory's mind increased, pain shooting through her skull. She gritted her teeth, her fingers digging into her palms, her nails drawing blood. She would not yield. Suddenly, the pressure vanished. Isolde's form
shimmered
, then disappeared, leaving behind an empty space. The glow in the circle faded, the shadows retreating. The wind died down, the trees silent once more. Rory stood there, her breath coming in ragged gasps, her body shaking with reaction. She had faced down the Queen of the Fae and lived to tell the tale. But she knew this was not over. The Heartstone still
throbbed
at her neck, still guided her. She
was bound
to it, bound to the Fae realm. And she knew, with a certainty that made her blood run cold, that she would face Isolde again.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
91.6667%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
8
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Silence answered her, then another whisper, [then]"
81.3259%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1071
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"suddenly"
count
2
highlights
0
"suddenly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
6.6293%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1071
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"symphony"
count
1
1
word
"sentinels"
count
1
2
word
"throbbed"
count
2
3
word
"shimmered"
count
1
4
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
5
word
"loomed"
count
1
6
word
"echoed"
count
1
7
word
"echoing"
count
2
highlights
0
"symphony"
1
"sentinels"
2
"throbbed"
3
"shimmered"
4
"otherworldly"
5
"loomed"
6
"echoed"
7
"echoing"
33.3333%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
1
1
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
2
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
1
highlights
0
"heart pounded in her chest"
1
"eyes widened"
2
"sent a shiver down"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
77
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
87
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
27
mean
39.67
std
20.4
cv
0.514
sampleLengths
0
74
1
59
2
73
3
74
4
50
5
52
6
48
7
15
8
23
9
7
10
41
11
46
12
67
13
27
14
45
15
19
16
26
17
28
18
15
19
21
20
10
21
24
22
46
23
40
24
35
25
32
26
74
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
77
matches
0
"was bound"
1
"was dressed"
2
"was bound"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
168
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
943
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
26
adverbRatio
0.027571580063626724
lyAdverbCount
10
lyAdverbRatio
0.010604453870625663
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
87
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
87
mean
12.31
std
5.89
cv
0.478
sampleLengths
0
26
1
17
2
31
3
22
4
19
5
18
6
22
7
13
8
20
9
18
10
13
11
18
12
18
13
25
14
5
15
9
16
5
17
10
18
8
19
13
20
17
21
18
22
17
23
10
24
18
25
9
26
11
27
13
28
2
29
8
30
15
31
7
32
3
33
21
34
6
35
11
36
16
37
14
38
12
39
4
40
12
41
17
42
23
43
15
44
20
45
7
46
3
47
13
48
12
49
17
38.5057%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
10
diversityRatio
0.25287356321839083
totalSentences
87
uniqueOpeners
22
81.2500%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"demanded (demand)"
1
"the woman said, her voice like the rustle of leaves, the whisper of wind (say, like)"
2
"she said, her voice ringing out in the grove (say, ringing out)"
84.2771%