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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPC4QM25ZCJ6F2DY9AMG8F
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
41.4s
Cost:
$0.000451
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Soho, the neon green sign of The Raven's Nest
flickered
like a
beacon
, casting a soft glow on the damp cobblestones. The rain had finally let up, but the night air still hung heavy with its memory. Aurora Carter, known to the world as Rory, hesitated at the entrance, her reflection staring back at her in the glass door. She took a deep breath, the scent of rain and old wood filling her lungs, before pushing it open. The bar was a time capsule, unchanged since she'd last stepped foot in it years ago. The same worn leather booths, the same scratched mahogany bar, the same walls adorned with old maps and black-and-white photographs. The only thing that had changed was the man behind the bar. Silas Blackwood, once a lean and sharp field agent, now bore the softening of age. His hair
was streaked
with grey, his beard neatly trimmed, and there was a slight limp in his left leg as he poured a pint of bitter for a regular. Rory watched him from the doorway, her heart pounding in her chest. She'd heard he'd retired, opened this place as a front for his network of contacts. She'd heard a lot of things about Silas over the years, but she hadn't expected to see him again. Not after she'd left without a word. Silas looked up as she approached the bar, his hazel eyes meeting hers. For a moment, time
seemed to
stand still. Then, a slow smile spread across his face, crinkling the corners of his eyes. "Well, well, well," he said, his voice as warm and rich as the whisky he poured for her without asking. "Look what the cat dragged in." Rory took the glass, her fingers brushing against his. She felt a jolt,
a spark of recognition
. "Silas," she said, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "It's been a long time." He leaned against the bar, his gaze never leaving hers. "Too long, Rory. Too bloody long." He gestured to the glass. "You're looking well. London agrees with you." She took a sip, feeling the burn of the whisky down her throat. "It's not so bad," she said, noncommittal. She looked around the bar, her eyes landing on the bookshelf at the far end. "You've done well for yourself, Si." Silas followed her gaze, a hint of a smile playing on his lips. "It's not so bad," he
echoed
, his voice laced with meaning. He nodded to the whisky. "You're not drinking it for the taste, are you?" Rory looked at the glass, then back at Silas. She sighed, setting the glass down. "I didn't come here to reminisce, Silas. I need your help." Silas raised an eyebrow, pushing off from the bar. He limped around to her side, gesturing to a booth in the corner. "Let's sit down, shall we?" Rory followed him, sliding into the booth opposite him. She watched as he poured them both another drink, his hands steady despite the tremor she'd seen earlier. He slid the glass towards her, his eyes never leaving hers. "What do you need, Rory?" She took a deep breath, her fingers tracing the rim of her glass. "I need information. About a man named Evan
Thompson
." Silas leaned back, his eyes narrowing. "Evan
Thompson
. That name sounds familiar." Rory nodded, her heart pounding in her chest. "He's the reason I left Cardiff. The reason I left... everything." Silas was silent for a moment, his gaze never leaving hers. Then, he nodded, a slow, understanding nod. "I see." Rory looked down at her glass, her fingers tracing the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. "I need to find him, Silas. I need to make sure he's not a threat anymore." Silas was silent for a moment, his gaze never leaving hers. Then, he nodded, a slow, understanding nod. "I'll see what I can do, Rory. But you know how these things work. It won't be easy or cheap." Rory looked up, her bright blue eyes meeting his. "I know. But I have to try. I can't live my life looking over my shoulder anymore." Silas nodded, a hint of a smile playing on his lips. "I understand, Rory. I do. But you have to understand, things have changed. I'm not the man I used to be." Rory looked at him,
really
looked at him. She saw the lines around his eyes, the grey in his hair, the slight tremor in his hands. She saw the
weight
of time, the
unspoken
regret. And she saw something else, something she hadn't expected to see. Fear. She reached across the table, her hand covering his. "None of us are, Silas. None of us are." Silas looked at her hand, then back at her. He turned his hand over, his fingers curling around hers. "You're right, Rory. None of us are." They sat there for a moment, their hands entwined, their eyes locked. Then, Rory pulled her hand away, her gaze dropping to her glass. "So, what now?" she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Silas leaned back, his gaze never leaving hers. "Now, we make a plan. But first, let's catch up. It's been too long, Rory. Too bloody long." Rory looked at him, a small smile playing on her lips. "Alright, Si. Let's catch up." As they talked, the bar filled up around them. The regulars came in, the laughter and the music filled the air. But Rory and Silas stayed in their corner, their voices low, their eyes locked. They talked about old times, about the things that had changed, about the things that had stayed the same. They talked about everything and nothing, their words filling the silence that had grown between them over the years. And as they talked, Rory felt a
weight
lift off her shoulders. She felt the tension in her muscles ease, the knot in her stomach
unravel
. She felt safe, she felt at home. She felt like she was finally,
truly
, home. But as the night wore on, and the bar emptied out, Rory felt a different kind of tension. She felt the
weight
of the past, the
unspoken
regret. She felt the fear that had been
simmering
beneath the surface all night. She felt it in Silas's eyes, in the way he held himself, in the way he avoided her gaze. She reached across the table, her hand covering his. "What's wrong, Si?" she asked, her voice soft. Silas looked at her, his hazel eyes filled with a sadness she hadn't seen before. "I'm not the man I used to be, Rory. I can't... I can't do the things I used to do." Rory squeezed his hand, her thumb brushing against his signet ring. "I know, Si. I know. But that's not what I'm asking. I'm asking for your help. Your knowledge. Your contacts. I'm not asking you to go back to the way things were." Silas was silent for a moment, his gaze never leaving hers. Then, he nodded, a slow, reluctant nod. "Alright, Rory. I'll help you. But you have to understand, things are different now. I have to be careful. We have to be careful." Rory nodded, her heart pounding in her chest. "I understand, Si. I do. But I need this. I need to
know that I'm
safe. That I can live my life without looking over my shoulder." Silas looked at her, his eyes filled with a mix of fear and determination. "Alright, Rory. We'll find him. We'll make sure he's not a threat anymore. But you have to promise me something." Rory looked at him, her heart in her throat. "What?" Silas leaned forward, his gaze never leaving hers. "Promise me that no matter what happens, no matter what we find, you'll walk away. You'll leave this life behind and never look back." Rory was silent for a moment, her gaze never leaving his. Then, she nodded, a slow, determined nod. "I promise, Si. I promise." As they sat there, their hands entwined, their eyes locked, Rory felt a sense of finality. She felt like she
was standing
on the edge of a cliff, looking down into the abyss. She felt the fear, the uncertainty, the regret. But she also felt the determination, the strength, the courage. She felt like she could do this. She felt like she had to do this. And as they stood up, their hands still entwined, their eyes still locked, Rory felt a sense of purpose. She felt like she was finally,
truly
, on the right path. She felt like she was finally,
truly
, home. But as they walked out of the bar, the neon green sign flickering above them, Rory felt a shiver run down her spine. She felt the
weight
of the past, the
unspoken
regret. She felt the fear that had been
simmering
beneath the surface all night. She felt it in Silas's hand, in the way he held her, in the way he avoided her gaze. And as they stepped out into the night, the rain starting to fall again, Rory felt
a sense of dread
. She felt like she
was walking
into the unknown, into the darkness. She felt like she
was walking
into a world she didn't recognize, a world she didn't understand. She felt like she
was walking
into a world that would change her, that would change everything. But as she looked at Silas, his hazel eyes filled with a mix of fear and determination, Rory felt
a sense of hope
. She felt like she wasn't alone, that she had someone by her side. She felt like she had a chance, a fighting chance. She felt like she could do this. She felt like she had to do this. And as they walked into the night, the rain falling around them, Rory felt a sense of purpose. She felt like she was finally,
truly
, on the right path. She felt like she was finally,
truly
, home.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
77.7778%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
6
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she said, her voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
52.1817%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1673
totalAiIsmAdverbs
8
found
0
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
2
1
adverb
"really"
count
1
2
adverb
"truly"
count
5
highlights
0
"barely above a whisper"
1
"really"
2
"truly"
80.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
0
"Thompson"
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
22.2953%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1673
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"beacon"
count
1
1
word
"simmering"
count
2
2
word
"flickered"
count
1
3
word
"unspoken"
count
3
4
word
"weight"
count
4
5
word
"echoed"
count
1
6
word
"unravel"
count
1
highlights
0
"beacon"
1
"simmering"
2
"flickered"
3
"unspoken"
4
"weight"
5
"echoed"
6
"unravel"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"sense of foreboding"
count
1
1
label
"flicker of emotion"
count
1
highlights
0
"a sense of dread"
1
"a spark of recognition"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
2
narrationSentences
108
matches
0
"a sense of dread"
1
"a sense of hope"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
108
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
136
matches
0
"know that I'm"
96.0663%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
43
mean
38.84
std
18.88
cv
0.486
sampleLengths
0
82
1
93
2
53
3
61
4
31
5
28
6
41
7
38
8
26
9
27
10
43
11
22
12
12
13
19
14
20
15
32
16
38
17
26
18
32
19
47
20
18
21
26
22
35
23
26
24
16
25
73
26
41
27
60
28
17
29
35
30
43
31
42
32
35
33
34
34
10
35
32
36
23
37
66
38
38
39
65
40
66
41
61
42
37
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
108
matches
0
"was streaked"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
229
matches
0
"was standing"
1
"was walking"
2
"was walking"
3
"was walking"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1301
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
52
adverbRatio
0.03996925441967717
lyAdverbCount
16
lyAdverbRatio
0.012298232129131437
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
136
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
136
mean
12.28
std
5.72
cv
0.466
sampleLengths
0
25
1
16
2
22
3
19
4
16
5
20
6
12
7
15
8
30
9
12
10
15
11
19
12
7
13
13
14
8
15
14
16
20
17
6
18
9
19
8
20
9
21
5
22
10
23
11
24
7
25
13
26
7
27
15
28
6
29
13
30
11
31
5
32
9
33
9
34
6
35
11
36
9
37
13
38
5
39
9
40
18
41
11
42
5
43
13
44
9
45
6
46
6
47
8
48
11
49
11
34.5588%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
21
diversityRatio
0.22058823529411764
totalSentences
136
uniqueOpeners
30
91.6667%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"he said, his voice as warm and rich as the whisky he poured for her without asking (say, pour ask)"
1
"he echoed, his voice laced with meaning (echo, lace)"
85.5616%