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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPD4D57C7WK6QPJM7ND8XV
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
24.3s
Cost:
$0.000295
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
In the hushed quiet of a London night, Aurora Carter pedaled her bicycle through Richmond Park, the cold October air nipping at her heels. She'd left Silas' bar hours ago, the last patron's laughter fading into the hum of the city. Now, she
was drawn
to the park, to the Fae Grove, by a force she couldn't explain. Her heartstone pendant, a deep crimson gem on a silver chain, pulsed faintly against her chest, a warmth that
seemed to
echo
her own heartbeat. The ancient oak standing stones marking the boundary
loomed
ahead, their gnarled branches reaching like skeletal fingers towards the moon. Rory slowed her bike, her breath misting in the chill. She'd been here countless times, but tonight, the grove felt different. The wildflowers that usually b
loomed
year-round
seemed to
huddle close to the ground, their petals closed tight.
The air was heavy with
an unseen tension, like the calm before a storm. She leaned her bike against an ancient oak and stepped into the grove, her boots sinking into the soft earth. The moon cast dappled shadows through the canopy, turning the clearing into a
dance
of light and dark. She walked deeper into the grove, her fingers tracing the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a habit when she
was nervous
. A twig snapped behind her. Rory spun around, her heart pounding. "Hello?" Her voice
echo
ed in the silence. She was alone. Or so it seemed. A faint rustling came from the bushes, too large to be a squirrel or a bird. She took a step back, her eyes scanning the darkness. The grove was never this quiet. Usually, it hummed with life, with the whispers of the Fae. But tonight, it was as if the grove itself held its breath, waiting. For what, Rory didn't want to know. She turned back, her eyes fixed on the path ahead. The grove
was playing
tricks on her, that was all. She
was letting
her imagination run wild. But then, she saw it. A figure, standing by the old oak where she'd left her bike. It was tall, too tall to be human, its form obscured by the shadows. It
seemed to
be watching her, its eyes reflecting the moonlight like a cat's. Rory's breath hitched in her throat. She took a step back, her heart pounding in her ears. The figure didn't move, but its presence
seemed to
grow, filling the grove with an ancient, malevolent power. She could feel it, a cold pressure against her skin, a whisper of something old and hungry. She turned to run, but it was too late. The grove
seemed to
shift around her, the trees closing in, the path disappearing. Panic surged through her, but she fought it down, her mind racing. She was Aurora Carter, cool-headed, intelligent, the girl who'd left an abusive ex and fled to London. She wouldn't panic. She wouldn't run. She took a deep breath, her eyes scanning the grove. The figure
was gone
, but she could still feel it, watching, waiting. She reached up, her fingers closing around the heartstone pendant. It pulsed warm against her skin, a comforting presence. She took a step forward, her eyes fixed on the spot where she'd left her bike. The grove
seemed to
resist her, the air growing colder, heavier. But she pushed on, her steps steady, her breath even. She was almost there when she heard it. A whisper, like dry leaves rustling, but with words. "Stay, child. Play with us." Rory froze, her heart pounding. The voice was everywhere and nowhere, a cold wind that
seemed to
seep into her bones. She took a deep breath, her fingers tightening around the pendant. "I'm not a child," she said, her voice steady. "And I don't play games." A laugh
echo
ed through the grove, a harsh, grating sound that set her teeth on edge. "Everyone plays, child. Even you." Rory ignored the voice, her eyes fixed on her bike. She was almost there when the grove
seemed to
explode into life. Shadows darted between the trees, the wildflowers b
loomed
in a riot of color, their petals opening wide, revealing eyes that
seemed to
glow in the darkness. The air
was filled
with whispers, with laughter, with the sound of something large moving through the undergrowth. Rory's
heart pounded in her chest
, but she didn't run. She grabbed her bike, her fingers closing around the handlebars. She could feel them, the Fae, their ancient power pressing against her, their hunger a cold, malevolent presence. But she wouldn't run. She wouldn't give them the satisfaction. She turned her bike around, her eyes scanning the grove. The figure was back, its eyes reflecting the moonlight, its form still obscured by the shadows. It
seemed to
smile at her, a cold, mocking smile that
sent a shiver down
her spine. "Until next time, child," it whispered, its voice like dry leaves rustling. Rory didn't respond. She pedaled away, her eyes fixed on the path ahead, her heart pounding in her ears. She didn't look back, not even when the grove
seemed to
sigh behind her, the wildflowers closing their petals, the shadows retreating. She didn't stop until she reached the boundary, the ancient oak standing stones
looming
ahead. She leaned her bike against one, her breath coming in ragged gasps. She was safe. She was out. But the grove... the grove had changed. And she had a feeling it wouldn't be the last time.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
2
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
917
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
34.5692%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
917
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"loomed"
count
1
1
word
"looming"
count
1
2
word
"dance"
count
1
3
word
"echo"
count
1
4
word
"echoed"
count
2
highlights
0
"loomed"
1
"looming"
2
"dance"
3
"echo"
4
"echoed"
33.3333%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
1
1
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
2
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
1
highlights
0
"heart pounded in her chest"
1
"The air was heavy with"
2
"sent a shiver down"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
77
matches
0
"was nervous"
90.0621%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
11
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
80
matches
(empty)
52.7344%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
18
mean
50.78
std
16.99
cv
0.335
sampleLengths
0
83
1
72
2
61
3
51
4
37
5
72
6
52
7
58
8
57
9
43
10
46
11
21
12
66
13
48
14
43
15
12
16
41
17
51
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
77
matches
0
"was drawn"
1
"was gone"
2
"was filled"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
163
matches
0
"was playing"
1
"was letting"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
893
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
22
adverbRatio
0.02463605823068309
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.0033594624860022394
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
80
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
80
mean
11.43
std
5.72
cv
0.501
sampleLengths
0
24
1
17
2
17
3
25
4
20
5
10
6
11
7
17
8
14
9
20
10
18
11
23
12
5
13
6
14
7
15
3
16
4
17
16
18
10
19
6
20
11
21
13
22
7
23
10
24
10
25
7
26
5
27
12
28
14
29
14
30
6
31
11
32
18
33
17
34
9
35
14
36
12
37
17
38
3
39
3
40
10
41
12
42
10
43
9
44
16
45
11
46
10
47
8
48
9
49
5
33.7500%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
13
diversityRatio
0.25
totalSentences
80
uniqueOpeners
20
50.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
2
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"it whispered, its voice like dry leaves rustling (whisper, like rustle)"
81.6735%