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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPDP8A4HN73YW0RS7ZFXSN
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
9.1s
Cost:
$0.000374
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Soho, where neon lights cast their kaleidoscopic glow on cobblestones slick with rain, The Raven's Nest stood as a
beacon
of quiet refuge. Its distinctive green sign hummed
softly
, casting a verdant glow over the faces of those who sought
solace
within. The bar was a relic of old London, its walls adorned with yellowed maps and black-and-white photographs that whispered tales of a city long past. Aurora Carter, known to the world as Rory, pushed open the heavy door, a bell chiming her arrival. The warmth of the bar enveloped her, a
stark
contrast to the chill outside. She shook off her damp coat, revealing straight, shoulder-length black hair and bright blue eyes that darted around the room, taking in the familiar surroundings. She had spent countless nights here, but it felt different now, as if the
very
air held
echoes
of her past. Behind the worn oak bar, Silas Blackwood, the Spymaster as some knew him, poured a pint of ale with practiced ease. His hazel eyes, framed by lines
etched
by time and experience, met Rory's gaze. A small smile tugged at the corners of his neatly trimmed beard, but it didn't reach his eyes. He nodded towards the empty stool at the end of the bar, her usual seat. Rory slid onto the worn leather, her small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist catching the light. She watched Silas move, his slight limp in his left leg a reminder of the life he'd led before The Raven's Nest. "You're a sight for sore eyes, Rory," he said, his voice a low rumble. "Back at you, Si," she replied, her voice steady despite the flutter in her stomach. She hadn't seen him in years, not since she'd fled Cardiff, leaving behind a life that had grown too heavy to bear. She'd sent him the occasional postcard, but words on paper couldn't capture
the weight of her silence
. Silas set a pint of Guinness in front of her, the creamy head settling like a cloud on the dark stout. "Still your poison, I presume?" Rory wrapped her fingers around the cool glass, nodding. "Some things never change." Silas raised an eyebrow, a hint of challenge in his gaze. "Is that so?" The silence that followed was heavy with
unspoken
words, a chasm of time and regret stretching between them. Rory broke it first, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "I'm sorry, Si. I should have... I should have come back sooner." Silas leaned against the bar, his gaze steady. "You had your reasons, Rory. I didn't expect you to stay, not after... e
very
thing." Rory looked down at her glass, tracing the condensation with her finger. "I thought I could outrun it, you know? The past. But it's always there, isn't it? Lurking in the shadows, waiting for me to turn around." Silas nodded, his expression softening. "The past has a way of catching up with us, no matter how far we run." Rory took a sip of her Guinness, the bitter taste grounding her. "How have you been, Si? Really?" Silas shrugged, a small smile playing at the corners of his mouth. "The same as always, I suppose. Running this place keeps me busy. Keeps me from getting too lost in the past." Rory looked around the bar, her gaze lingering on the old maps and photographs. "It's good to see you, Si. Really good." Silas reached out, his silver signet ring catching the light as he squeezed her hand. "It's good to have you back, Rory. Even if it's just for a night." As the evening wore on, the bar filled with a mix of locals and tourists, their laughter and conversation creating a warm hum. Rory and Silas talked of old times, of people they'd known and places they'd been. But there was an undercurrent to their conversation, a tension that neither could ignore. It was in the way Silas's gaze lingered on Rory's face, as if he
were trying
to memorize e
very
line and curve. It was in the way Rory's fingers
trembled
slightly
as she raised her glass to her lips, a sign of the nerves she was careful to hide. As the clock ticked towards midnight, the bar
began to
empty. Rory watched as Silas poured the last of the day's takings into a small safe behind the bar, his movements precise and efficient. She remembered the stories he'd told her, of the life he'd led before The Raven's Nest, of the secrets he'd kept and the lies he'd told. She wondered if he still carried those secrets with him, if they weighed heavy on his shoulders as hers did on hers. Silas caught her watching him, a small smile playing at the corners of his mouth. "Penny for your thoughts, Rory." Rory shook her head, a small smile tugging at her lips. "Just remembering, Si. Remembering a time when life was simpler." Silas walked around the bar, his limp more pronounced after a long day on his feet. He sat down on the stool next to hers, his gaze steady. "Life is never simple, Rory. Not
really
. But it's how we
navigate
the complexities that defines us." Rory looked down at her hands, her fingers tracing the lines in the worn oak bar. "I've made mistakes, Si. Big ones. I'm not sure I can
navigate
my way back from them." Silas reached out, his hand covering hers. His skin was warm, his grip firm. "We all make mistakes, Rory. It's what we learn from them that matters." Rory looked up at him, her bright blue eyes filled with unshed tears. "I'm not sure I've learned anything, Si. I'm not sure I deserve to." Silas's expression softened, his gaze filled with a quiet understanding. "Deserving has nothing to do with it, Rory. You're here now, that's what matters." Rory took a deep breath, her shoulders rising and falling with the effort. "I don't know if I can stay, Si. I don't know if I can face the past, face the people I hurt." Silas squeezed her hand, his grip steady and sure. "You don't have to face them alone, Rory. You have friends, people who care about you. People who want to help you." Rory looked at him, her gaze filled with a quiet desperation. "I don't deserve your help, Si. I don't deserve your kindness." Silas's gaze was steady, his voice firm. "That's not for you to decide, Rory. It's for me to give, and for you to accept." Rory looked down at their hands, her fingers tracing the lines in his palm. "I don't know if I can, Si. I don't know if I can accept help, accept kindness." Silas's voice was soft, filled with a quiet understanding. "Then take it one step at a time, Rory. Take it one day at a time. That's all any of us can do." Rory looked up at him, her gaze filled with a quiet determination. "I can
do that, Si
. I can take it one step at a time." Silas smiled, a small, warm smile that reached his eyes. "That's all I ask, Rory. That's all any of us can ask." As the clock struck midnight, signaling the end of another day, Rory and Silas sat in silence, their hands still entwined. The
weight
of the past hung heavy between them, but there was a lightness too, a sense of possibility that neither could ignore. They had a long road ahead, a road filled with shadows and regrets, but they would walk it together, one step at a time. For now, that was enough. It had to be.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
2
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
45.4404%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1283
totalAiIsmAdverbs
7
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
3
adverb
"really"
count
3
4
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
2
"barely above a whisper"
3
"really"
4
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
14.2634%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1283
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"beacon"
count
1
1
word
"trembled"
count
1
2
word
"unspoken"
count
1
3
word
"stark"
count
1
4
word
"solace"
count
1
5
word
"weight"
count
2
6
word
"echoes"
count
1
7
word
"etched"
count
1
8
word
"navigate"
count
2
highlights
0
"beacon"
1
"trembled"
2
"unspoken"
3
"stark"
4
"solace"
5
"weight"
6
"echoes"
7
"etched"
8
"navigate"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"weight of words/silence"
count
1
highlights
0
"the weight of her silence"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
60
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
60
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
86
matches
0
"do that, Si"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
37.62
std
21.89
cv
0.582
sampleLengths
0
71
1
78
2
68
3
53
4
54
5
26
6
13
7
14
8
40
9
22
10
38
11
21
12
18
13
33
14
22
15
29
16
101
17
82
18
20
19
21
20
45
21
33
22
27
23
26
24
24
25
35
26
31
27
22
28
24
29
31
30
32
31
26
32
22
33
77
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
60
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
141
matches
0
"were trying"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
916
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
17
adverbRatio
0.018558951965065504
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004366812227074236
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
86
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
86
mean
14.87
std
6.05
cv
0.407
sampleLengths
0
27
1
19
2
25
3
18
4
14
5
25
6
21
7
21
8
14
9
18
10
15
11
17
12
22
13
14
14
15
15
22
16
17
17
21
18
5
19
9
20
4
21
11
22
3
23
18
24
10
25
12
26
8
27
14
28
12
29
26
30
5
31
16
32
12
33
6
34
12
35
21
36
14
37
8
38
15
39
14
40
23
41
15
42
14
43
22
44
27
45
11
46
23
47
26
48
22
49
15
53.4884%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
4
diversityRatio
0.3488372093023256
totalSentences
86
uniqueOpeners
30
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
2
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
88.6584%