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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPEA30F704025NV47P6M0K
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
8.4s
Cost:
$0.000389
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Soho, where the neon lights of Chinatown kissed the cobblestones, the distinctive green sign of The Raven's Nest cast its glow upon the damp night. The bar hummed with the low murmur of patrons, a
symphony
of clinking glasses and hushed conversations.
The air was thick with
the scent of aged whiskey and the faint
echo
of jazz from a bygone era. Aurora Carter, known to most as Rory, pushed open the heavy door, a bell jingling
softly
overhead. She stepped inside, her eyes adjusting to the dim light, her breath misting in the sudden warmth. She was a small woman, her straight black hair falling to her shoulders, her bright blue eyes scanning the room. She wore her usual uniform - jeans, a t-shirt, and a worn leather jacket - her delivery uniform tucked into her bag. Her left wrist bore a small crescent-shaped scar, a memento from a childhood adventure gone awry. She spotted Silas Blackwood behind the bar, his grey-streaked auburn hair and neatly trimmed beard visible even in the low light. He
was polishing
a glass, his hazel eyes meeting hers with a familiar warmth. His left leg bore a slight limp, a remnant of his days in the service. He wore his silver signet ring, a symbol of his past life, on his right hand. "Rory," he greeted, a smile tugging at the corners of his mouth. "Long time no see." Rory smiled back, her eyes crinkling at the corners. "Silas," she acknowledged, sliding onto a stool at the bar. "You're looking well." Silas chuckled, pouring her a glass of the house red. "Liar," he said, pushing the glass towards her. "But I appreciate the sentiment." Rory took a sip, her eyes wandering over the old maps and black-and-white photographs that adorned the walls. The Raven's Nest was a time capsule, a place where the past and present coexisted. She felt a
pang
of nostalgia, a longing for simpler times. Silas watched her, his gaze thoughtful. "You've changed," he said, his voice
barely above a whisper
. Rory looked at him, her eyes meeting his. "Haven't we all?" she replied, her voice steady. Silas nodded, his gaze never leaving hers. "True," he said. "But you... you've changed more than most." Rory looked away, her gaze falling on the scar on her wrist. She traced it absently, her mind drifting back to the past. She had been a different person then, a girl with dreams and hopes, a girl who believed in happy endings. "You left in such a hurry," Silas said, his voice breaking into her thoughts. "I worried about you." Rory looked back at him, her eyes filled with a sadness she couldn't quite hide. "I'm sorry," she said. "I didn't mean to worry you. I just... I needed to get away." Silas nodded, understanding in his eyes. "From him," he said, his voice barely a whisper. Rory nodded, her grip tightening around her glass. Evan had been her world once, her sun and moon. But he had turned out to be a storm, a tempest that had threatened to consume her. She had fled, leaving behind her old life, her old self. "I heard you moved to London," Silas said, changing the subject. "How's the big city treating you?" Rory smiled, a genuine smile this time. "It's... different," she said. "Busy. Noisy. But it's growing on me." Silas chuckled. "That's the spirit," he said. "And what do you do in this big, busy city?" Rory hesitated before answering. "I work part-time at Golden Empress," she said. "Deliveries, mostly." Silas raised an eyebrow. "You, a delivery person?" he asked, surprise evident in his voice. "Rory, you were pre-law. You were going to be a lawyer, like your father." Rory looked away, her eyes falling on the scar on her wrist again. " Plans change," she said, her voice barely audible. Silas looked at her, his gaze filled with a quiet understanding. "They do," he agreed. "But sometimes, they change for a reason." Rory looked back at him, her eyes filled with a question she couldn't quite voice. Silas smiled, his gaze never leaving hers. "You're stronger now, Rory," he said. "You've been through hell and back, and you're still standing. That's something to be proud of." Rory felt a lump form in her throat. She had missed this, she realized. She had missed having someone who knew her, who understood her. She had missed Silas. "Thank you," she said, her voice barely a whisper. Silas nodded, his gaze filled with a warmth that made her
feel
safe. "Anytime, Rory," he said. "That's what friends are for." Rory smiled, her eyes crinkling at the corners. "I've missed you, Silas," she said. "I've missed this." Silas smiled back, his eyes filled with a warmth that made her
feel
at home. "I've missed you too, Rory," he said. "Welcome back." Rory looked around the bar, her gaze falling on the old maps and black-and-white photographs. She felt a sense of belonging, a sense of peace. She had found her way back, she realized. She had found her way home. But even as she felt this sense of belonging, she couldn't shake off the
feel
ing of unease. She had changed, she knew. She had grown tougher, harder. She had become a survivor. But she also
knew that this
change had come at a cost. She had left behind her old self, her old dreams. She had left behind a part of herself that she couldn't quite retrieve. She looked at Silas, her gaze filled with a sadness she couldn't quite hide. "I'm not the same person I was, Silas," she said. "I've changed. I've... hardened." Silas looked at her, his gaze filled with a quiet understanding. "Change is a part of life, Rory," he said. "It's how we grow, how we learn. It's how we become who we are." Rory nodded, her gaze falling on the scar on her wrist again. She traced it absently, her mind drifting back to the past. She had been a different person then, a girl with dreams and hopes, a girl who believed in happy endings. But that girl
was gone
now, replaced by a woman who had seen the darker side of life, a woman who had learned to survive. Silas reached out, his hand covering hers. "You're still you, Rory," he said, his voice filled with a quiet certainty. "You're still the girl who used to come in here, full of dreams and hopes. You're still the girl who believed in happy endings." Rory looked at him, her eyes filled with a gratitude she couldn't quite express. "Thank you, Silas," she said, her voice barely a whisper. Silas smiled, his gaze filled with a warmth that made her
feel
safe. "That's what friends are for, Rory," he said. "That's what family is for." Rory felt a lump form in her throat. She had missed this, she realized. She had missed having someone who knew her, who understood her. She had missed Silas. She had missed her old self. But even as she felt this sense of belonging, she couldn't shake off the
feel
ing of unease. She had changed, she knew. She had grown tougher, harder. She had become a survivor. But she also
knew that this
change had come at a cost. She had left behind her old self, her old dreams. She had left behind a part of herself that she couldn't quite retrieve. But as she looked at Silas, his gaze filled with a warmth that made her
feel
at home, she realized that maybe, just maybe, she could find her way back. Maybe she could find her way back to who she was, to who she wanted to be. Maybe she could find her way back to her old self, to her old dreams. And maybe, just maybe, she could find her happy ending after all.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
69.2308%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
26
adverbTagCount
5
adverbTags
0
"he said, his voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
1
"he said, his voice barely a whisper [barely]"
2
"she said, her voice barely audible [barely]"
3
"she said, her voice barely a whisper [barely]"
4
"she said, her voice barely a whisper [barely]"
84.9170%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1326
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"softly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"softly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
77.3756%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1326
totalAiIsms
3
found
0
word
"symphony"
count
1
1
word
"pang"
count
1
2
word
"echo"
count
1
highlights
0
"symphony"
1
"pang"
2
"echo"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
106
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
4
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
106
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
126
matches
0
"knew that this"
1
"knew that this"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
40
mean
33.05
std
19.75
cv
0.598
sampleLengths
0
66
1
92
2
66
3
16
4
22
5
23
6
44
7
16
8
16
9
17
10
43
11
18
12
32
13
15
14
46
15
17
16
18
17
17
18
14
19
29
20
22
21
22
22
44
23
29
24
9
25
22
26
17
27
24
28
39
29
67
30
28
31
34
32
68
33
44
34
24
35
26
36
35
37
67
38
62
39
12
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
106
matches
0
"was gone"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
194
matches
0
"was polishing"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1081
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar,"
adverbCount
37
adverbRatio
0.034227567067530065
lyAdverbCount
9
lyAdverbRatio
0.008325624421831638
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
126
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
126
mean
10.49
std
5.6
cv
0.533
sampleLengths
0
29
1
17
2
20
3
17
4
17
5
20
6
22
7
16
8
21
9
14
10
15
11
16
12
12
13
4
14
9
15
10
16
3
17
10
18
8
19
5
20
18
21
15
22
11
23
6
24
10
25
8
26
8
27
7
28
3
29
7
30
12
31
11
32
20
33
14
34
4
35
15
36
4
37
13
38
6
39
9
40
8
41
10
42
17
43
11
44
11
45
6
46
7
47
4
48
7
49
2
28.5714%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
27
diversityRatio
0.24603174603174602
totalSentences
126
uniqueOpeners
31
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
26
fancyCount
7
fancyTags
0
"he greeted, a smile tugging at the corners of his mouth (greet, tug)"
1
"she acknowledged, sliding onto a stool at the bar (acknowledge, slide)"
2
"he said, pushing the glass towards her (say, push)"
3
"Silas said, his voice breaking into her thoughts (say, break)"
4
"Silas said, changing the subject (say, change)"
5
"he agreed (agree)"
6
"he said, his voice filled with a quiet certainty (say, fill)"
91.4173%