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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPEJ9VYVXAWRWVPTZ54B85
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
9.5s
Cost:
$0.000360
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Soho, where neon lights cast their multicolored glow on cobblestones slick with rain, the distinctive green sign of "The Raven's Nest"
flickered
like a
beacon
. The bar, nestled between a vintage record shop and a late-night kebab joint, was a relic of old London, its dim interior a
sanctuary
from the city's relentless pace. Aurora Carter, known to most as Rory, pushed open the heavy door, a bell jingling
softly
overhead. The warmth enveloped her, a
stark
contrast to the chill outside. She shook off her damp coat, revealing a simple black dress and boots that had seen better days. Her straight, shoulder-length black hair, still damp from the rain, framed her face, drawing attention to her bright blue eyes and the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. Rory had been living above the bar for months now, a
sanctuary
after fleeing her abusive ex and the life she'd left behind in Cardiff. She'd found
solace
in the rhythm of her days - deliveries by day, books and silence by night. But tonight, she craved company, something more than the usual nods and hellos from the regulars. Silas Blackwood, the bar's owner, was behind the counter, his auburn hair streaked with grey, neatly trimmed beard framing a face that bore the lines of a life well-lived. He moved with a slight limp, a remnant of his days as an MI6 field agent, pouring a pint of ale with the precision of a man who'd done it a thousand times before. His hazel eyes, sharp and observant,
flicked
up as Rory entered, a small smile tugging at the corners of his mouth. "Evening, Rory," he said, his voice a low rumble. "Usual?" Rory nodded, sliding onto a stool at the counter. "Please, Silas." As Silas poured her pint, the door creaked open again, letting in a gust of cold air. A tall figure stepped in, shaking off an umbrella. The man
was dressed
in a tailored suit, his dark hair styled neatly, a far cry from the jeans and t-shirts he'd favored in their youth. He looked around the bar, his gaze landing on Rory. For a moment, he seemed frozen, then a smile spread across his face, transforming him into the boy she'd once known. "Rory," he said, striding over. "It's been ages." Aurora looked up, her eyes widening in surprise. "Evan," she breathed, the name slipping out before she could stop it. She
quickly
corrected herself, "I mean, Tom. It's been a while." Tom, or rather, Evan, as she'd known him in their shared past, slid onto the stool next to her. "Too long," he agreed, his eyes never leaving hers. "You look... different." Rory raised an eyebrow. "Different from the last time you saw me, you mean? Or different from the girl you knew in school?" Evan chuckled, running a hand through his hair. "Both, I suppose. You've always been beautiful, Rory. But now, there's something... more." Silas placed Rory's pint in front of her, giving Evan a pointed look. "What can I get you, Tom?" Evan ordered a whiskey, his gaze never leaving Rory. "So, what brings you to London, Rory? Last I heard, you were still in Cardiff." Rory took a sip of her beer, gathering her thoughts. "I moved here a few months ago. Needed a change of scenery." Evan nodded, but his eyes held a question. "And what do you do here? In London, I mean." Rory shrugged. "This and that. I work part-time at Golden Empress, deliver food. Nothing glamorous." Evan laughed, a sound that once would have made Rory's heart flutter. Now, it only served to remind her of the past. "You never were one for glamour, were you?" Rory smiled, but it didn't reach her eyes. "And you, Tom? What brings you to Silas' bar?" Evan leaned back, his whiskey in hand. "Business. I'm a lawyer now, you know. Partner at a firm in the city." Rory nodded, not surprised. Evan had always been ambitious, always had his sights set on something bigger. "That's... impressive." Evan waved a hand dismissively. "It's just a job. But enough about me. Tell me about you, Rory. What have you been up to? Who have you been?" Rory looked down at her scar, tracing the crescent shape absently. "I've been... figuring things out. Learning who I am, outside of what others expect me to be." Evan reached out, his fingers brushing against hers. "And who
is that, Rory
? Who are you?" Rory pulled her hand back, wrapping it around her pint glass. "Someone stronger than she was. Someone who knows her worth." Evan's smile faded, replaced by a look of regret. "I'm sorry, Rory. For everything." Rory looked at him, her eyes hard. "Are you, Tom? Or are you just sorry you got caught?" Evan flinched, looking down at his whiskey. "I
deserved that. I
know I hurt you, Rory. I know I wasn't the man you thought I was." Rory took a deep breath, her voice steady. "You were right, Tom. I didn't know you. Not
really
. But I know myself now. And I
know that I
deserve better." Evan looked up, his eyes filled with a mix of regret and longing. "You always did, Rory. Always." Silas, who had been quietly cleaning glasses, looked up at them. "You two look like you've got some catching up to do. Why don't you take it to the back? First round's on the house." Rory looked at Silas, then at Evan. She hesitated, then nodded. "Alright. But just for a little while." Evan smiled, standing up. "Lead the way." Rory slid off her stool, leading Evan towards the back of the bar. She pushed aside a bookshelf, revealing a hidden room. It was small, filled with worn furniture and the faint scent of old books and pipe tobacco. Evan looked around, his eyes widening in surprise. "What is this place?" Rory smiled, sitting down on a worn leather sofa. "Silas' secret. He uses it for... private conversations." Evan sat down next to her, his knee brushing against hers. "So, what do you want to talk about, Rory?" Rory looked at him, her expression serious. "I want to talk about us. About who we were, and who we are now. About the
weight
of time and the regret that comes with it." Evan nodded, his eyes never leaving hers. "Alright, Rory. Let's talk." And so, under the soft glow of an old lamp, surrounded by the
echoes
of secrets past, Aurora Carter and the man she once knew as Evan
began to
pick apart the threads of their shared history. They talked of laughter and tears, of love lost and found, of the
weight
of time and the
unspoken
regrets that haunted them both. And as the night wore on, the bar outside faded away, leaving only the two of them, bound by the past and the promise of a new beginning.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
66.6667%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"She quickly corrected herself, [quickly]"
74.2268%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1164
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"quickly"
1
"softly"
2
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
5.4983%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1164
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"beacon"
count
1
1
word
"sanctuary"
count
2
2
word
"flickered"
count
1
3
word
"flicked"
count
1
4
word
"unspoken"
count
1
5
word
"stark"
count
1
6
word
"solace"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
2
8
word
"echoes"
count
1
highlights
0
"beacon"
1
"sanctuary"
2
"flickered"
3
"flicked"
4
"unspoken"
5
"stark"
6
"solace"
7
"weight"
8
"echoes"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
62
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
62
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
94
matches
0
"is that, Rory"
1
"deserved that. I"
2
"know that I"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
40
mean
29
std
21.06
cv
0.726
sampleLengths
0
58
1
75
2
59
3
84
4
10
5
11
6
83
7
8
8
31
9
31
10
23
11
21
12
19
13
24
14
22
15
18
16
15
17
30
18
17
19
21
20
19
21
28
22
28
23
16
24
21
25
14
26
18
27
26
28
30
29
18
30
35
31
18
32
7
33
39
34
12
35
17
36
20
37
34
38
11
39
89
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
62
matches
0
"was dressed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
138
matches
(empty)
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
811
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
32
adverbRatio
0.03945745992601726
lyAdverbCount
9
lyAdverbRatio
0.011097410604192354
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
94
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
94
mean
12.34
std
7.89
cv
0.64
sampleLengths
0
29
1
29
2
17
3
11
4
18
5
29
6
25
7
18
8
16
9
29
10
34
11
21
12
9
13
1
14
9
15
2
16
17
17
9
18
26
19
10
20
21
21
5
22
3
23
8
24
12
25
11
26
19
27
9
28
3
29
4
30
19
31
8
32
13
33
13
34
6
35
9
36
15
37
10
38
12
39
8
40
10
41
2
42
13
43
12
44
10
45
8
46
8
47
9
48
7
49
14
63.8298%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
0
diversityRatio
0.3829787234042553
totalSentences
94
uniqueOpeners
36
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"he said, striding over (say, stride)"
1
"she breathed, the name slipping out before she could stop it (breathe, slip out stop)"
2
"She quickly corrected herself, (quickly correct)"
3
"he agreed, his eyes never leaving hers (agree, do not never leave)"
82.6013%