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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPGAP1PA0MR5Q5DX71H3WD
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:
7.1s
Cost:
$0.000291
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of Richmond Park, where the ancient oaks stood
sentinel
, Aurora Carter stepped into the Fae Grove. The moon hung low, a silver coin in the night sky, casting dappled shadows through the canopy. She had come here on a whim, drawn by Eva's tale of the grove's strange allure, but now, alone in the hush of night, she felt a prickle of unease. The wildflowers b
loomed
year-round, their colors muted in the moonlight, like a faded painting.
The air was heavy with
their scent, sweet and cloying, as if the grove held its breath. Rory's boots crunched on the gravel path, the sound
echoing
too loudly in the silence. She paused, listening. Silence pressed back, thick and expectant. She reached up, fingers tracing the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist. A childhood memento from a fall, or so her mother had said. But lately, it itched when she felt
watch
ed, like now. She shook off the thought, her breath misting in the cool air. The standing stones
loomed
ahead, their ancient faces carved with runes that
seemed to
writhe in the moonlight. She had seen them before, in photos, but they were different in the flesh. Older. Hungrier. She hesitated, then stepped between them, feeling a shiver run down her spine as she crossed the threshold. Time moved differently here, Eva had warned. An hour inside could be minutes or days outside. Rory checked her
watch
, a habit more than anything. It was late, but not too late. Yet. She tucked a strand of straight, shoulder-length black hair behind her ear, her bright blue eyes scanning the grove. The silence was absolute. No rustle of leaves, no hoot of an owl. Just the soft thrum of her own heartbeat. She took a deep breath, the scent of wildflowers filling her lungs. Then she heard it. A whisper, like fabric rustling. She turned, eyes searching the shadows. Nothing moved. She waited, heart pounding, but the sound didn't repeat. Rory started walking again, her steps slower now, more cautious. The grove felt...wrong. Not quite alive, but not quite dead either. Like it
was holding
its breath, waiting. For what, she didn't know. But the feeling grew with each step, a creeping dread that made the hairs on her neck stand on end. She reached into her pocket, fingers closing around the Heartstone Pendant. A gift from an unknown benefactor, its deep crimson gemstone pulsed faintly with warmth, a faint inner glow casting eerie shadows on her fingers. It
was supposed
to help her
navigate
the Fae realm, but here, in the grove, it felt...alive. Pulsing in time with her heartbeat, growing warmer as she walked deeper into the grove. A twig snapped. She froze, eyes darting towards the sound. Nothing. Just shadows
dancing
in the moonlight. She took a deep breath, trying to calm her racing heart. It was just the grove, playing tricks on her. She was alone. She had to be. But as she started walking again, she couldn't shake the feeling of being
watch
ed. The grove was alive, she realized, but not with life as she knew it. It was alive with something else. Something ancient. Something hungry. The pendant grew warmer, its glow brighter. She looked down at it, then back up, her eyes widening as she saw them. Shadows, moving at the edge of her vision. She turned, trying to catch them, but they were always just out of sight. Taunting her. She broke into a run, heart pounding in her chest. The shadows kept pace, always just out of reach. She could hear them now, their
footsteps
echoing
hers, their breath ragged in sync with hers. She could feel their presence, cold and malevolent, pressing against her back. She stumbled, falling to her knees. The pendant slipped from her fingers, rolling away into the undergrowth. She reached for it, desperation clawing at her throat. Her fingers brushed against it, but it was too late. The shadows were upon her, their cold touch like ice on her skin. She screamed, a sound that
echoed
through the grove, bouncing off the ancient stones. Then, silence. The shadows paused, their touch lingering, then they
were gone
. Vanished into the night, leaving her alone in the grove. Rory scrambled for the pendant, finding it nestled among the wildflowers. It was cold now, its glow faded. She clutched it in her fist, her breath coming in ragged gasps. She had to leave. Now. She stumbled to her feet, turning towards the standing stones. But they
were gone
. Or rather, they were there, but they were...wrong. Their faces twisted into grimaces, their runes writhing like snakes. She backed away, fear coiling in her stomach. Then she heard it again. The whisper. Louder this time. Closer. She turned, eyes wide, and saw it. A figure, standing at the edge of the grove. Tall, with long, flowing hair. Its face
was hidden
, but she could feel its eyes on her. Watching. Waiting. She turned to run, but it was too late. The figure stepped forward, its face still hidden. Then, it spoke. "Welcome, Aurora Carter," it said, its voice like ice. "We've been waiting for you." Rory screamed, the sound
echoing
through the grove as darkness claimed her.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
1
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
879
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
879
totalAiIsms
9
found
0
word
"sentinel"
count
1
1
word
"loomed"
count
1
2
word
"dancing"
count
1
3
word
"footsteps"
count
1
4
word
"echoed"
count
1
5
word
"echoing"
count
3
6
word
"navigate"
count
1
highlights
0
"sentinel"
1
"loomed"
2
"dancing"
3
"footsteps"
4
"echoed"
5
"echoing"
6
"navigate"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was heavy with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
98
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
98
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
99
matches
(empty)
33.0108%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
19
mean
46.11
std
12.24
cv
0.266
sampleLengths
0
66
1
55
2
45
3
52
4
52
5
59
6
53
7
67
8
44
9
38
10
46
11
47
12
49
13
36
14
35
15
40
16
46
17
34
18
12
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
98
matches
0
"was supposed"
1
"were gone"
2
"were gone"
3
"was hidden"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
157
matches
0
"was holding"
93.8393%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
871
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"malevolent, pressing against her"
adverbCount
35
adverbRatio
0.040183696900114814
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004592422502870264
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
99
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
99
mean
8.85
std
5.56
cv
0.628
sampleLengths
0
19
1
17
2
30
3
14
4
17
5
15
6
3
7
6
8
11
9
12
10
10
11
12
12
18
13
14
14
1
15
1
16
18
17
7
18
9
19
9
20
7
21
1
22
19
23
4
24
9
25
8
26
12
27
4
28
5
29
6
30
2
31
9
32
10
33
3
34
8
35
7
36
5
37
20
38
11
39
24
40
17
41
15
42
3
43
7
44
1
45
6
46
11
47
9
48
3
49
4
56.2290%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
6
diversityRatio
0.37373737373737376
totalSentences
99
uniqueOpeners
37
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
1
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
87.2399%