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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPHAA5HGKTMFNXJ8ZCPWSS
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
27.0s
Cost:
$0.001323
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The Raven's Nest hummed with the low murmur of conversation, the clinking of glasses punctuating the air like distant chimes. Aurora Carter leaned against the bar, her bright blue eyes scanning the dimly lit room, taking in the familiar chaos of Silas Blackwood’s establishment. The walls, adorned with old maps and black-and-white photographs, whispered stories of a time long past, much like the memories that
flickered
in her mind. She absently traced the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a remnant of childhood mischief, as she waited for Silas to pour her a drink. “Rory!” Silas called, his voice a warm rumble that cut through the haze of the bar. He emerged from behind the counter, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the soft glow of the green neon sign above the entrance. “What’ll it be tonight?” “Just a gin and tonic, Si,” she replied, her voice steady despite the flutter of nerves in her stomach. It had been a long day of deliveries, and the
weight
of her thoughts pressed heavily on her shoulders. She watched as he poured the drink, his movements precise and practiced, a
testament
to the years he had spent in the field and behind the bar. As he slid the glass toward her, she caught a glimpse of the silver signet ring he always wore on his right hand. It gleamed in the low light, a symbol of the man he had been and the life he had chosen. Silas had always carried himself with a quiet authority, a presence that demanded respect without uttering a word. But tonight, there was something different about him, a weariness that lingered in the corners of his hazel eyes. “Everything alright?” she asked, concern creeping into her voice. “Just the usual,” he replied, a hint of a smile tugging at the corners of his mouth. “You know how it is. The world keeps spinning, and I’m just trying to keep up.” Rory nodded, but her gaze drifted to the entrance as the door swung open, letting in a gust of cool night air. A figure stepped inside, silhouetted against the streetlights. For a moment, she thought it might be a trick of the light, a ghost from her past. But as the figure moved closer, her heart sank. It was Evan. He looked different, older, perhaps even more worn than she remembered. The sharp lines of his face had softened, but the arrogance still clung to him like a second skin. She felt a rush of emotions—anger, fear, regret—swirling within her like a tempest. She turned her back to him, hoping he wouldn’t notice her, but the universe had other plans. “Rory?” Evan’s voice cut through the noise, smooth and insistent. She felt the heat of his gaze on her, and her stomach twisted. “Is that
really
you?” Silas’s expression shifted,
a flicker of recognition
crossing his features as he glanced between them. “I think it’s time for me to check on the back room,” he said, his tone casual but his eyes sharp. He stepped away, leaving Rory to face the man who had once held so much power over her life. “Evan,” she said, her voice
barely above a whisper
. She forced herself to turn around, to meet his gaze. “What are you doing here?” “I could ask you the same,” he replied, a smirk playing on his lips. “I didn’t expect to find you in a place like this. You’ve changed.” “People
do that,” she
shot back, her heart racing. “What do you want?” He stepped closer, the scent of his cologne wrapping around her like a noose. “I just wanted to see how you’ve been. It’s been a while, hasn’t it?” “Five years,” she said, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. “Not that I’ve been counting.” Evan chuckled, a sound that
sent a chill down
her spine. “You always did have a flair for the dramatic. But
really
, Rory, I’ve missed you. We had something special, didn’t we?” “Special?” she
echoed
, incredulous. “You mean the way you made me feel like I was nothing? The way you controlled every aspect of my life until I couldn’t breathe?” His expression hardened, the charm slipping away like a mask. “You’re being dramatic again. I was trying to help you. You were lost.” “Lost?” she repeated, her voice rising. “I was trying to find myself, and you were suffocating me.” Evan stepped back, his eyes narrowing. “You think you’re better than me now? Just because you’ve moved to London and found a new job?” “I’m not better than you,” she said, her voice low but firm. “I’m just… different. I’ve learned to stand on my own two feet.” “Is that what you call it?” he sneered. “Running away? Hiding in a bar?” Rory felt the heat of anger rise within her, but she forced herself to breathe. “I’m not hiding. I’m living. Something you wouldn’t understand.” “Living?” he scoffed. “You think working as a delivery person is living? You’ve wasted your potential, Rory. You could have been so much more.” “More than what? More than a pawn in your game?” She shook her head, the memories flooding back—his manipulation, the way he twisted her words, the way he made her doubt herself. “I’m not your project anymore, Evan.” “Maybe not,” he said, his voice dropping to a low murmur. “But I still care about you. I always have.” “Care?” she laughed, a bitter sound that
echoed
in the dim light. “You don’t get to care about me after everything you did. You lost that right the moment you chose control over love.” Silas reappeared, his presence a welcome interruption. “Everything alright here?” he asked, his eyes flicking between them, assessing the tension that crackled in the air. “Just catching up,” Evan said, his tone smooth again, but Rory could see the tension in his jaw. “Right,” Silas replied, his gaze lingering on Rory. “Well, if you need anything, you know where to find me.” As Silas moved away, Rory felt a wave of gratitude wash over her. She turned back to Evan, her heart pounding. “I don’t want to do this. I don’t want to relive the past.” “Then let’s talk about the future,” he suggested, his voice softening. “We could start over. I’ve changed too, you know.” “Changed?” she
echoed
, skepticism lacing her words. “You think a few years can erase the damage you’ve done?” “Maybe not erase, but we can move forward. Together.” Rory shook her head, her resolve hardening. “I’m not that girl anymore, Evan. I’ve fought too hard to reclaim my life to let you back in.” He stepped closer, desperation creeping into his voice. “Rory, please. I’m not the enemy here. I want to help you.” “Help?” she spat, the word bitter on her tongue. “You don’t know the meaning of the word. You only want to control me again.” Evan’s expression faltered, and for a moment, she saw a
flicker
of vulnerability in his eyes. “I’m not trying to control you. I just want a chance to
prove that I’ve
changed.” “Prove it?” she challenged, her heart racing. “You think I’m going to take your word for it? After everything?” “Then what do you want from me?” he asked, frustration seeping into his voice. “What can I do to show you that I’m different?” “Leave me alone,” she said, her voice steady. “That’s the only thing you can do.” Evan’s face fell, the mask of confidence slipping away. “Rory…” “Goodbye, Evan.” She turned away, her heart pounding in her chest as she walked back to the bar, the
weight
of the past heavy on her shoulders. Silas watched her approach, concern
etched
on his face. “Everything alright?” he asked again, his voice low. “Just… a blast from the past,” she replied, forcing a smile that didn’t quite reach her eyes. “I’m fine.” “Are you?” he pressed, his gaze searching hers. “You don’t have to pretend with me.” Rory took a deep breath, the tension in her chest easing
slightly
. “I know. It’s just… complicated.” “Life usually is,” Silas said, his tone gentle. “But you’re stronger than you think, Rory. You’ve come a long way.” “Thanks, Si,” she said, her voice softening. “I just wish it didn’t feel so heavy sometimes.” “Time has a way of weighing us down,” he replied, his eyes thoughtful. “But it also gives us the chance to rise again. You’re not that girl anymore, and you don’t have to carry the past with you.” Rory nodded, the truth of his words settling in her heart. She glanced back at Evan, who stood alone, a shadow of the man she once knew. The
weight
of
unspoken
regret hung between them, but she felt
a flicker of hope
ignite within her. She was not defined by her past, nor by the choices of others. She was Aurora Carter, and she was ready to embrace the future.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
93.3333%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
25
adverbTagCount
3
adverbTags
0
"she said, her voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
1
"Evan said, his tone smooth again, but Rory could see the tension in his jaw [again]"
2
"she replied, forcing a smile that didn’t quite reach her eyes [quite]"
73.2977%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1498
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
2
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
2
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
13.2176%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1498
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"testament"
count
1
1
word
"flickered"
count
1
2
word
"flicker"
count
3
3
word
"unspoken"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
3
5
word
"echoed"
count
3
6
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"testament"
1
"flickered"
2
"flicker"
3
"unspoken"
4
"weight"
5
"echoed"
6
"etched"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
1
1
label
"flicker of emotion"
count
2
highlights
0
"sent a chill down"
1
"a flicker of recognition"
2
"a flicker of hope"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
77
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
116
matches
0
"do that,” she"
1
"prove that I’ve"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
51
mean
29.24
std
18.34
cv
0.627
sampleLengths
0
95
1
42
2
65
3
80
4
9
5
33
6
60
7
60
8
27
9
55
10
24
11
27
12
13
13
28
14
18
15
32
16
29
17
23
18
17
19
24
20
24
21
14
22
24
23
24
24
38
25
20
26
34
27
25
28
18
29
19
30
34
31
20
32
18
33
9
34
26
35
20
36
24
37
32
38
19
39
24
40
15
41
10
42
36
43
8
44
19
45
15
46
17
47
20
48
16
49
38
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
77
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
170
matches
(empty)
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
939
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
26
adverbRatio
0.027689030883919063
lyAdverbCount
5
lyAdverbRatio
0.005324813631522897
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
116
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
116
mean
12.85
std
6.23
cv
0.485
sampleLengths
0
20
1
24
2
25
3
26
4
16
5
22
6
4
7
19
8
19
9
27
10
23
11
20
12
18
13
19
14
9
15
17
16
16
17
22
18
8
19
18
20
9
21
3
22
11
23
19
24
13
25
17
26
10
27
13
28
4
29
15
30
21
31
19
32
9
33
10
34
5
35
14
36
13
37
9
38
4
39
14
40
14
41
13
42
5
43
11
44
21
45
4
46
25
47
10
48
13
49
6
58.3333%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
4
diversityRatio
0.3706896551724138
totalSentences
116
uniqueOpeners
43
55.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
25
fancyCount
12
fancyTags
0
"he replied, a hint of a smile tugging at the corners of his mouth (reply, tug)"
1
"he replied, a smirk playing on his lips (reply, play)"
2
"she shot back, her heart racing (shoot back, race)"
3
"sneered (sneer)"
4
"he said, his voice dropping to a low murmur (say, drop)"
5
"laughed (laugh)"
6
"Evan said, his tone smooth again, but Rory could see the tension in his jaw (say, smooth again, see)"
7
"Silas replied, his gaze lingering on Rory (reply, linger)"
8
"he suggested, his voice softening (suggest, soften)"
9
"she replied, forcing a smile that didn’t quite reach her eyes (reply, force does not quite reach)"
10
"pressed (pressed)"
11
"she said, her voice softening (say, soften)"
85.5205%