"she replied, using the name that still held the old trust between them as if it could keep a door from yawning open and spilling something they hadn’t agreed to share [still]"
1
"he said, letting a rare smile brush the corner of his mouth, then vanish as if it had worn out its usefulness [then]"
2
"Silas said, and the words fell with a careful weight that suggested more than simple observation [more]"
3
"Silas said softly, almost as if he didn’t intend the remark to be heard by anyone but the bottles and the maps bearing witness to too many cold, weathered truths [softly, almost too]"
4
"she said, and there was a tremor, something not quite a tremor, that she wanted him to hear and understand without her having to lay out every truth in a confessional’s neat order [quite]"
5
"he said, his tone almost conspiratorial, as if revealing a protected sanctuary were not a risk but a courtesy extended after years of mutual understanding [almost]"
6
"she answered, letting the honesty feel unfamiliar and almost reckless, as if she were stepping onto a balcony from which she could see a future she hadn’t allowed herself to imagine in years [almost]"
7
"Silas said, his voice even, calm, and impossibly patient [impossibly]"
8
"she finally allowed her voice to say aloud, the name rolling in her mouth like a soft weapon she could choose to wield or lay down [finally]"
9
"Silas answered, and he did something else then—he offered a half-step to the shelf as if inviting her to take the chance of stepping into a room that would hold more than the fear of consequence [then—more]"
10
"she said, and for once she did not try to veil the ache in her tone [once]"
11
"he pressed gently, not in accusation but as a man who understood the habit of seeking shelter among those who know how to keep quiet [gently]"
12
"Silas said, almost as if he were quoting a line from a file he’d kept for decades, a line he’d learned to recite with a quiet, almost spiritual faith [almost almost]"
13
"she said softly, letting the old naming stretch between them like a thread [softly]"
14
"he said, simply [simply]"
15
"he whispered, not harshly, but with a tenderness that surprised her [harshly]"
16
"she said, almost a sigh, letting the words slip through her lips with an honesty she hadn’t permitted in herself for years [almost]"
17
"she said finally, and there was a hesitant courage in her voice that surprised even her [finally, even]"
18
"he said, almost as though he were offering a bookmark rather than a life-changing invitation [almost rather]"
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
4249
adjectiveStacks
4
stackExamples
0
"soft, liquor-warmed sigh"
1
"many cold, weathered truths."
2
"small crescent-shaped scar"
3
"own exact, careful way."
adverbCount
157
adverbRatio
0.0369498705577783
lyAdverbCount
31
lyAdverbRatio
0.007295834313956225
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
167
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
167
mean
29.78
std
15.06
cv
0.506
sampleLengths
0
33
1
27
2
44
3
38
4
34
5
27
6
55
7
23
8
63
9
33
10
21
11
25
12
1
13
18
14
29
15
25
16
36
17
18
18
17
19
28
20
21
21
32
22
16
23
31
24
38
25
32
26
47
27
30
28
18
29
18
30
47
31
35
32
37
33
30
34
18
35
15
36
38
37
21
38
28
39
25
40
15
41
43
42
16
43
16
44
10
45
34
46
26
47
31
48
31
49
17
38.0240%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
20
diversityRatio
0.20359281437125748
totalSentences
167
uniqueOpeners
34
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
28
fancyCount
22
fancyTags
0
"he said, not raising his voice but letting the syllables settle between them like a held note (say, does not raise let settle like hold)"
1
"she replied, using the name that still held the old trust between them as if it could keep a door from yawning open and spilling something they hadn’t agreed to share (reply, use still hold keep yawn do not agree share)"
2
"he said, letting a rare smile brush the corner of his mouth, then vanish as if it had worn out its usefulness (say, let brush vanish worn)"
3
"Silas said, and the words fell with a careful weight that suggested more than simple observation (say, fall)"
4
"she said, letting a thread of unfamiliar weariness slip into her voice (say, let slip)"
5
"Silas said softly, almost as if he didn’t intend the remark to be heard by anyone but the bottles and the maps bearing witness to too many cold, weathered truths (say softly, does not intend be heard bearing witness)"
6
"she said, and there was a tremor, something not quite a tremor, that she wanted him to hear and understand without her having to lay out every truth in a confessional’s neat order (say, be want hear understand to lay)"
7
"he said, his tone almost conspiratorial, as if revealing a protected sanctuary were not a risk but a courtesy extended after years of mutual understanding (say, reveal does be not extend)"
8
"she answered, letting the honesty feel unfamiliar and almost reckless, as if she were stepping onto a balcony from which she could see a future she hadn’t allowed herself to imagine in years (answer, let step see does not allow imagine)"
9
"Silas said, his voice even, calm, and impossibly patient (say, calm)"
10
"she finally allowed her voice to say aloud, the name rolling in her mouth like a soft weapon she could choose to wield or lay down (finally allow say roll in like choose wield lay down)"
11
"Silas answered, and he did something else then—he offered a half-step to the shelf as if inviting her to take the chance of stepping into a room that would hold more than the fear of consequence (answer, do offer invite take step hold more)"
12
"she said, and for once she did not try to veil the ache in her tone (say, does not try)"
13
"he pressed gently, not in accusation but as a man who understood the habit of seeking shelter among those who know how to keep quiet (press gently, understand seek know keep)"
14
"Rory said at last, breaking the quiet with a careful breath she had learned to measure in the dark corners of corners (say learn measure)"
15
"Silas said, almost as if he were quoting a line from a file he’d kept for decades, a line he’d learned to recite with a quiet, almost spiritual faith (say, quote keep learn recite)"
16
"she said softly, letting the old naming stretch between them like a thread (say softly, let like)"
17
"he whispered, not harshly, but with a tenderness that surprised her (whisper, surprise)"
18
"she said, almost a sigh, letting the words slip through her lips with an honesty she hadn’t permitted in herself for years (say, let slip does not permit)"
19
"she said finally, and there was a hesitant courage in her voice that surprised even her (say finally, be surprise even)"