Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMR3503FRXW3SJS54ZPRGJW

Run Details

Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.003460
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Raven’s Nest runs on quiet memory. The green neon above the door hums a patient, almost conspiratorial glow as Rory steps inside, the door sighing shut behind her with a soft, stubborn creak. The air is warm with the scent of old wood, warm amber, and that faint, stubborn tang of rain-damp London that never quite dries. Maps crowd the walls in ragged rows, black-and-white photographs pinned like a burned into a memory. A piano of laughter and soft clinks threads through the far room, but here at the bar the noise settles into a careful hush, as if the place is listening for someone who hasn’t spoken in years. Rory moves forward with the familiar ease of someone who has learned to pretend not to notice how much her own heartbeat can pick up, even when nothing in the world has changed. She’s not here to drink or to bask in nostalgia. She’s here because she lives above this room, because the night is long and scarred from the day’s small disappointments, because she’s learned that some doors don’t stay closed, even when you want them to. Her shoulder-length black hair catches a glint from the neon, and for a moment the color of her eyes—the bright blue she’s learned to guard—seems to dim into the dimmer corners of the Nest. She doesn’t straighten her spine so much as slip into a posture she’s trained herself to wear: calm, in control, unafraid of the moment when she might have to decide quickly what she will do with what she knows. The bar is alive in the way a sleeping city pretends to be awake—people leaning in to hear each other over the clatter of dishes, the glow of ceiling lamps casting gold over the wood. A woman in a red scarf sets down a glass that catches the rim of a candle and throws a tiny, warm halo on the counter. A man with a hat tipped low across his brow coughs into his fist and then grins as if he hasn’t done anything wrong in years. And there, near the far end, behind the gleaming oak, stands Silas Blackwood. Silas has aged into the role of quiet authority as if it were a tailor’s trick he learned in a long life of shadows. He wears his years with a kind of deliberate order: grey-streaked auburn hair, a neatly trimmed beard that makes his face look both patience and risk, and a limp that travels with him like a whispered secret. He’s behind the bar, not crowding the room but containing it. His hazel eyes pick out every detail—the way a hand grips the edge of a glass, the way a laugh with too much bravado slides away, the subtle tremor in a voice that denies any weakness. He wears a silver signet ring on his right hand, a tiny vow of something—an old promise, perhaps, or a network he’s kept alive in the spaces between clubs and quiet deals. Rory stops a breath away from him, the scene thinning to a single, bright line of memory and now. The ring catches the light and glints with a tooth of steel. The bartender—someone she’s learned to ignore, or at least to not expect—glances up, recognizes the moment, and slides a nod her way. Then Silas looks up, and time compresses into a single, loaded second. “Rory,” he says, and the word lands like a calm bell ringing in a church that used to be their world. She answers with a half-smile she keeps trained for opportune moments. “Silas,” she says, the name lifting with a tremor she pretends isn’t there. He’s not surprised to see her. There’s a certain unspoken history between them that the Nest doesn’t forget even when memories threaten to vanish in the smoke of night. He doesn’t rise fully from behind the bar; his knee has learned the mercy of a slower ascent since Prague, since the old operations that turned into a scar she never fully leaves. The limp is a discreet punctuation mark to a life he’s chosen to leave behind, or perhaps a life that won’t let itself be left behind. “What are you doing here?” he asks, not unkindly, as if he’s asking for a delivery that isn’t a person but a memo, something easy to file away and forget. Rory looks at the glass in her hand—she doesn’t remember ordering it—and sets it down gently, as if the swap of weight might move a thread between them. The Nes t has done what it always does: it makes distance feel like a thing you could reach out and touch if you wanted to. She lifts her chin and does not smile fully, because there is a thing in her chest that won’t let a smile pass through it easily. “Same as you,” she says quietly, “watching the room, listening to the shelves, pretending I’m not here for a purpose I can’t name yet.” She lets a breath out, shallow and precise. “I saw you and thought I’d say hello before I remember I shouldn’t.” Silas studies her, and in his eyes there’s a peculiar mix of recognition and reservation. He’s lived long enough to know when a person is wearing a mask that isn’t theirs, even if it looks perfectly suited to the moment. Rory’s masks are carved into muscle memory at this point, a second skin: the cool head, the quick solution, the willingness to bargain with danger if it buys a fraction of safety for someone else. Her wrists brush the edge of her sleeve, and he spots the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—the childhood accident that has never quite left its mark on her, even as she’s learned to hide it behind long sleeves when the weather turns cruel. He doesn’t mention it. He’s not that kind of man, not in that way. He doesn’t need to. The scar is a map of every choice she’s made that wasn’t quite as clean as she’d hoped, every time she’s run toward something she could not name and found she’d arrived, maybe too late. “Cardiff,” he says after a long pause, with a soft accuracy that makes it sound almost like a question. “ Cardiff, you still dream in that color green?” He gestures at the neon, and for a moment the bar seems to lean closer to them as if the room remembers too. Rory doesn’t flinch. She’s learned to carry the past not as a weapon but as a weight she uses to stay upright. She nods, almost amused by the nostalgia that smells like rain and copper coin. “I see London in green now,” she says, and lets the lie sit there for just a beat before she adds, more honestly, “But I still carry Cardiff in my chest, a map I check when I’m lost.” The room relaxes into its quiet rhythm—the soft clink of glass, the murmur of nearby conversations, the muffled footfall of someone moving a chair too quickly. Silas shifts, not quite manœuvring into a better posture, but adjusting in a way that makes the space around him tense and then settle. “You’re not here for a drink,” he says, not a challenge so much as a statement of what he knows she isn’t going to pretend. In his voice there’s the elegance of a man who has learned not to pretend about the things that matter. Rory fiddles with the strap of her bag, the brass buckle catching a handful of shadows. She’s wearing the plain clothes of a delivery person by day, and the thin reserve of someone who has learned not to show fear by night. But she’s also the Rory who used to run across Cardiff’s derelict rooftop lines with Eva, chasing something she couldn’t name and somehow finding it only in the chase itself. The memory surfaces like a tide—bright and full—and she lets it wash over her with a controlled breath. “I came to tell you I’m not here to beg,” she says, and the admission is both a relief and a risk. “I came because I realized I’ve been living without an anchor for years now, and your door—this place—was always the anchor that never forgot what it meant to listen.” Silas considers her words as if weighing a fragile artifact in his palm. The Nest’s hidden back room is a rumor in the stockroom of his life, a room you only reach when you have a reason to enter it, when a voice on the other side is worth listening to, when the truth is less terrifying than the silence that surrounds it. “People come here to forget,” he says, his tone soft but solid, as if the bar itself were speaking through him. “Or to remember something they’ve learned not to admit, even to themselves. You came for something practical, or something you felt you could only say to me if I were listening in the right room.” Rory lifts her shoulders in a small shrug that doesn’t pretend to be casual. “I’ve learned to keep secrets in plain sight,” she says, letting a faint, haunted practicality creep into her voice. “And I’ve learned that some secrets need the right kind of listening—some are not mine to tell, but they’re mine to hear, if I’m lucky enough to hear them at all.” She swallows, and in the act of swallowing she reveals a little of the sting of years, of friendships that drifted away like smoke, of a path she chose not to walk in Cardiff and then did walk, far away in London, where Eva’s smile had once meant safety and instead became a different kind of instruction. There’s a pause in which the room seems to tilt, not with any drama but with the heavy inevitability of truth arriving at last, unannounced, like rain on a day you’ve already dressed for sunshine. Silas, for his part, lets the air fill with a distant memory of Prague—an embargo of a city’s cold heart and the body’s fatigue that still lives in him as a subtle ache he wears with dignity, a reminder that even a life of control can fail a man’s own compass. “Prague,” Rory says softly, as if naming it will strip it of its power over him. He doesn’t object to the word; he doesn’t deny it. The old operation, the failure, the knee that never fully forgives the road it chose to travel. “You remembered Prague,” he says, his voice a careful, almost affectionate whisper that makes Rory’s pulse skip a little. “And you learned to hide the parts that once spoke too loudly.” “Maybe I learned to listen harder,” she counters. The edge in her voice isn’t cruel, it’s precise. She’s learned that listening is a shield—one not a weapon, but something you hold up between yourself and the world when the world asks questions you don’t want to answer. There’s a moment when their gazes lock and the unspoken speaks louder than any sentence could. They both carry heavier versions of themselves. Rory bears a crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a childhood accident that’s become legend among people who know her only as the quick thinker who gets there before the problem swallows the room. Silas wears the weight of a career that nearly swallowed him—quietly, without fanfare, until his knee betrayed him and his own ambitions learned to be content with the shadow of the nest he built. “Time does its work, Rory,” Silas says at last, softly. The line of his mouth tightens not with anger but with something like relief, a sustained breath after a long hold. “It makes you smaller in some places and larger in others. It teaches you how to carry the things you could have learned to refuse.” Rory regards him with a mixture of respect and a guarded tenderness she can afford now that she’s learned the geometry of survival. “I’ve carried fear like a second coat,” she admits. “I’ve learned to roll it up and tuck it into a bag and go on with the day because people depend on me not to panic. But fear is loud, Silas. Fear doesn’t forget your name.” He studies her for a long moment, as if appraising a shipment of delicate instruments in a crate that could crack under a careless breath. Then he nods slightly, the barest gesture that is almost a blessing. “So you came here to tell me you’re still you,” he says, half as confirmation, half as challenge. “And that you’re not looking for me to fix what you’ve learned to live with.” His tone holds a thread of affection, a medic’s tenderness toward a patient who has learned to hide the wound from even herself, but also a stubborn insistence that the wound needs a witness. Rory’s eyes flick to the shelf where a picture sits—now not on the wall, but in her memory: a carding of their younger selves with Eva, laughter stitched between them, a promise that had felt more like a dare. Eva’s name comes unbidden, and the memory of that friend who dragged Rory to London to escape Evan’s shadow tugs at her sleeve. She swallows again, and this time the swallow carries a weight of something she had not expected to admit aloud, even to herself. “Eva would tell you I’m still capable of being saved,” she says, and though the sentence is light, the ache behind it is heavy enough to tilt the room. “But she’s not here to tell you. And I don’t know if you listen for the same things she listened for.” Silas smiles once, small and not quite sure, as if he understands that every person who walks into this room walks in with a different map, but some maps share borders that never truly disappear. He sets his hands on the counter, the metal of the surface cool under his palms, and lifts his chin in a way that says he’s listening, not instructing. “You’ve learned to navigate by instinct,” he says. “That’s a useful map. But be careful of what you trust your instincts to tell you about the world, Rory. The world is not kind to good instincts that forget the price of a good lie.” There’s a tremor in his voice when he says “the price of a good lie,” not accusation so much as a reminder. Rory understands the calculus of it—how easily a truth can become a weapon, how a lie can become a shield that keeps someone safe for a night or a life. “I’ve learned to tell the difference between a risk worth taking and a risk that will swallow you whole,” she replies, without bravado, with a gravity that makes him lean in a fraction closer. “And I’ve learned there are doors in places you don’t want to go that lead to the room you wish you never found, and sometimes the room you never knew you needed.” The mention of doors—the bookshelf door to the secret room, perhaps the literal door they used to unlock with clues and coded phrases when the older life called—draws a subtle chuckle from him. It’s a dry sound, a carved-out laugh that betrays nothing of the fear behind it. “Would you like to see it?” he asks, almost gently, his words measured as if he’s offering a map rather than a temptation. Rory feels the pull of the back room—the hidden space where Silas has kept a world safe from the open room’s casual risk. She doesn’t want to cross a boundary she’s not sure she’s meant to cross, doesn’t want to step into a room that might hold something she’s not ready to discover about herself or about him. Yet the invitation sits there, wide as a gate, and with it comes a tremor of possibility: perhaps there is something in that back room that could anchor this reunion, or perhaps it’s only a reminder that some doors, once opened, let in the cold air you can’t ever close again. She looks at him, letting the moment stretch. “If the room is still listening,” she says, “I’ll tell it it has my permission to leave me alone.” The corner of Silas’s mouth quivers in what might be relief or resignation, perhaps both. He slides a small key across the counter toward her—an unassuming thing, nothing flashy, just a small metal rectangle warm from his hand and insistent in its quiet promise. It’s not a test, exactly; it’s a seal. The key belongs to the back room, to the secret door that has kept its own counsel all these years, to the unspoken things the Nest houses for people who understand they are not the only ones who carry secrets. Rory doesn’t touch the key. Not yet. She doesn’t want a key to unlock something she may not be ready to see, or to keep locked something she might have to live with from now until forever. “I’m not here to take,” she says instead, and the honesty in the words lands softly, a deliberate choice to reveal her intention rather than the fear she carries. “I’m here to tell you I’m not done with what I started with you, Silas. The world’s bigger than a bar, and older than the maps on these walls. But sometimes the truth is not enough to save you from the days that follow it.” His eyes search hers, quiet and penetrating, as if he’s listening for a signal that only someone with a past like theirs would know how to give. Then he nods once, almost imperceptibly, and slides the key back toward the edge of the counter, not in her direction but as if offering the door itself to her. “Then you’ll come back,” he says, not a command but a statement of certainty about a future both of them have learned to doubt and yet still hope for. Rory’s breath hitches in a way that feels intimate and dangerous to admit aloud. She has learned to measure every hope, to keep it in reserve like a spare battery for a device you’re not sure will keep running. But there’s something in the way he says it—a tone that implies an acceptance of the past and a readiness for whatever truth might be spoken—that makes the risk suddenly feel worth taking. “Yes,” she says, if only to herself, to the room, to the memory of what they used to be and what they might become again if she stays long enough for the word to matter. “I’ll come back.” Silas lifts a glass, a small, almost ceremonial gesture, and raises it toward her as if he’s offering a silent toast to the stubborn truth that they’ve both carried into the night. He doesn’t drink. He never does in moments like this, or he does it in a way that makes the act feel like an oath, and tonight the oath speaks more clearly than any service either of them could name. The two of them stand for a long moment—Rory’s nerves strung taut as a violin string, Silas’s old spine a quiet anchor in the noisy heart of the Nest. The world outside, with its rain-slick streets and the rumor of something dangerous moving in the deeper shadows, presses in through the windows, as if London itself holds its breath to listen to what they will say next. Finally, Rory steps back from the edge between memory and present reality. She draws the bag closer, not to hide the fact that she is still a person with a purpose, but to remind herself that she has one more thing to hold. “I’ve learned to trust what I can keep, not what I can borrow,” she tells him, her voice steadier now, the edge of vulnerability tempered by a stubborn, practical grace. “I won’t pretend this isn’t hard. I won’t pretend it’s only nostalgia and coffee and old stories.” She glances toward the shelf and the idea of a door that might reveal a truth she’s not ready to admit to herself yet. “But I won’t pretend I’ve forgotten how to listen, either.” He doesn’t answer with a grand pronouncement or a promise that glows like a halo. He answers with a small, almost human, expression—something that looks like sympathy, something that looks like respect. It’s the look of a man who has watched too many people come and go, who knows that the past doesn’t vanish if you ignore it, and that sometimes the only thing you can do is acknowledge its weight and keep walking. Rory takes a breath that feels like stepping into something colder, something that will settle into her lungs as she moves through the door toward a choice she’s only just beginning to understand. The neon sighs above, the bar breathes. The room holds its own pulse, a steady drum that knows the truth of time better than either of them. She says, softly, as if she’s letting a frightened animal inside her own chest out into the open air, “I’ll come back, Silas. And I’ll bring what I’m meant to bring. And if there’s a room waiting for us to speak in, I’ll tell it to listen.” The words feel like a fragile thing offered, something kept safe by her own hands. Silas nods again—the same careful movement, the same quiet grace—and for a moment the world returns to itself as if the moment had been a held breath, and now it has exhaled. Rory steps toward the door, the corridor of the Nest narrowing into a hallway of possibilities. The green glow washes over her one last time in a soft, forgiving tide. She doesn’t look back at Silas. Not yet. She looks toward the future, toward a door that might be opened not by iron hinges but by the patient turning of a new page. Outside, the rain has started again, a faint drum against the neon glow. She descends the stairs to the flat above the Nest, the door to her room opening with a quiet sigh as if it, too, remembers the nights spent in this same building with the same uncertain futures. She locks the door behind her and leans back against it for a moment, listening to the far hum of the neon through the walls, letting the resonance of his words settle into her like a measured cadence. The Crescent Moon outside the window is a pale witness to what has shifted—what has survived, what has not. And Rory, with the crescent scar on her wrist tucked away as it always is, stands in the room she has come to claim as hers again not through possession but through the quiet, stubborn act of arriving, of naming a future and promising to keep it honest. The weight of years rests on her shoulders, a heaviness that she carries not to crush herself but to remind herself that she is still the one who can navigate even when the map grows old and the room behind the door remains a question she’s willing to return to, again, tomorrow, and the next day after that.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.0000% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount12
adverbTags
0"she says quietly, She lets a breath out, shallow and precise [quietly]"
1"he says after a long pause, with a soft accuracy that makes it sound almost like a question [almost]"
2"she says, and lets the lie sit there for just a beat before she adds, more honestly [just more honestly]"
3"he says, not a challenge so much as a statement of what he knows she isn’t going to pretend [so]"
4"Rory says softly, as if naming it will strip it of its power over him [softly]"
5"he says, his voice a careful, almost affectionate whisper that makes Rory’s pulse skip a little [almost]"
6"Silas says at last, softly [softly]"
7"she says, and though the sentence is light, the ache behind it is heavy enough to tilt the room [enough]"
8"There’s a tremor in his voice when he says not accusation so much as a reminder. [so]"
9"she says instead, and the honesty in the words lands softly, a deliberate choice to reveal her intention rather than the fear she carries [instead, softly, rather]"
10"she says, if only to herself, to the room, to the memory of what they used to be and what they might become again if she stays long enough for the word to matter [again enough]"
11"She says, softly, as if she’s letting a frightened animal inside her own chest out into the open air, The words feel like a fragile thing offered, something kept safe by her own hands. [softly, like]"
69.4734% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount3931
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"gently"
count2
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count4
5
adverb"suddenly"
count1
6
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"perfectly"
2"quickly"
3"slightly"
4"softly"
5"suddenly"
6"truly"
100.0000% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.0000% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.8418% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount3931
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"resonance"
count1
1
word"gleaming"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
3
word"unspoken"
count3
4
word"weight"
count6
5
word"footfall"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count2
highlights
0"resonance"
1"gleaming"
2"glint"
3"unspoken"
4"weight"
5"footfall"
6"navigate"
100.0000% Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.0000% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences146
matches(empty)
100.0000% Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences146
filterMatches
0"look"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seems to"
1"tends to"
2"tend to"
100.0000% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount6
totalSentences159
matches
0"learned that some"
1"learned that some"
2"learned that listening"
3"understands that every"
4"go that lead"
5"knows that the"
66.9518% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean63.75
std24.5
cv0.384
sampleLengths
0111
178
273
3100
4140
565
621
753
859
930
1080
1145
1275
1398
1451
1574
1650
1745
1890
1951
2063
2156
2264
2357
2486
2543
2631
2747
2891
2956
3068
3137
3267
3385
3450
3564
3644
3752
3866
3948
4023
41109
4227
4392
4437
4574
4657
4729
4872
4938
100.0000% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences146
matches
0"are carved"
100.0000% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs512
matches
0"were speaking"
94.0000% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3333
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount124
adverbRatio0.0372037203720372
lyAdverbCount37
lyAdverbRatio0.0111011101110111
100.0000% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.0000% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean24.46
std12.37
cv0.506
sampleLengths
07
127
224
316
437
533
610
735
834
939
1035
1126
1226
1313
1424
1537
1611
1736
1832
1919
2012
2122
2212
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266
2723
2833
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3128
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4532
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4814
4938
37.4214% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.22641509433962265
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners36
0.0000% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags27
fancyCount23
fancyTags
0"he says, and the word lands like a calm bell ringing in a church that used to be their world (say, like ringing be)"
1"she says, the name lifting with a tremor she pretends isn’t there (say, pretend does be not)"
2"she says quietly, She lets a breath out, shallow and precise (say quietly, let)"
3"he says after a long pause, with a soft accuracy that makes it sound almost like a question (say make almost like)"
4"she says, and lets the lie sit there for just a beat before she adds, more honestly (say, let add)"
5"he says, not a challenge so much as a statement of what he knows she isn’t going to pretend (say, know does pretend)"
6"she says, and the admission is both a relief and a risk (say, be)"
7"he says, his tone soft but solid, as if the bar itself were speaking through him (say, speak)"
8"she says, letting a faint, haunted practicality creep into her voice (say, let haunt creep)"
9"Rory says softly, as if naming it will strip it of its power over him (say softly, name strip)"
10"he says, his voice a careful, almost affectionate whisper that makes Rory’s pulse skip a little (say, make skip)"
11"she counters (counter)"
12"Silas says at last, softly (say last)"
13"she admits (admit)"
14"he says, half as confirmation, half as challenge (say, challenge)"
15"she says, and though the sentence is light, the ache behind it is heavy enough to tilt the room (say, be be)"
16"There’s a tremor in his voice when he says not accusation so much as a reminder. (be does say not)"
17"she replies, without bravado, with a gravity that makes him lean in a fraction closer (reply, make lean)"
18"she says instead, and the honesty in the words lands softly, a deliberate choice to reveal her intention rather than the fear she carries (say instead, land softly, reveal carry)"
19"he says, not a command but a statement of certainty about a future both of them have learned to doubt and yet still hope for (say, learn doubt)"
78.2170%