"she said, soft as rain striking glass, using the nickname he’d earned and never quite admitted to liking when the real name came through the door like a sudden storm [quite]"
1
"Silas finally said, and the dry honesty of that line felt like a doorway swinging shut behind an old friendship [finally like]"
2
"she said, which was not strictly true, because every breath she took in a room like this seemed to cradle an old decision, the moment when she had decided to lay down one life and pick up another [strictly]"
3
"Silas said after a moment that stretched long enough to be counted in memories rather than seconds [enough rather]"
4
"Rory returned, not aggressively, just with the quiet that came from years of thinking about what not to say when a room can hear every door you’ve ever opened and every door you’ve ever slammed shut [aggressively, just ever ever]"
5
"he added, almost gently, as if he’d told himself to speak softly on the subject and had forgotten to tone it down [almost gently, softly down]"
6
"Rory said more to the room than to him [more]"
7
"he replied, which sounded almost like a fact, the kind that could be used as a shield or a blade [almost]"
8
"he said, not elaborating, letting the weight of that place hover between them without inviting more [more]"
9
"he invited, and there was something almost benevolent, fatherly in the invitation, as if the old mentor in him wanted to know if his pupil still remembered the lessons that hurt to learn [almost fatherly still]"
10
"she finally said, and the words surprised even her with their clarity [finally even]"
11
"she said, and there was a tremor in her words that she tried to command into something steady again [again]"
12
"Silas said after a quiet interval, almost as if he could anticipate the question before it formed in her throat [almost]"
13
"she admitted, and it felt like a hinge being loosened, the kind that makes a door swing the wrong way and open into something you hadn’t planned to see [like]"
14
"Rory said, the words surprising in their blunt honesty, almost blunt enough to sound like a challenge to the old life she’d left behind [almost enough]"
15
"Then she said, [Then]"
16
"he said, almost like a blessing, almost like a challenge [almost almost]"
17
"Silas said softly, as if he were reminding a student of the simplest rule—do not forget the first thing you learned in the dark [softly]"
18
"Then, almost imperceptibly, he added with a taut, unsettling calm, [Then, almost imperceptibly,]"
19
"she replied, voice almost a whisper this time, as if the confession itself could fracture the night if spoken too loudly [almost too loudly]"
20
"she said, and the words felt both insufficient and exactly enough to close the hour with honesty rather than regret [exactly rather]"
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
3644
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
163
adverbRatio
0.04473106476399561
lyAdverbCount
36
lyAdverbRatio
0.009879253567508232
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
142
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
142
mean
29.81
std
13.72
cv
0.46
sampleLengths
0
35
1
23
2
49
3
27
4
51
5
35
6
33
7
32
8
29
9
21
10
42
11
28
12
8
13
29
14
21
15
59
16
31
17
49
18
52
19
26
20
8
21
28
22
41
23
34
24
34
25
24
26
14
27
17
28
21
29
23
30
30
31
10
32
40
33
32
34
22
35
7
36
28
37
34
38
47
39
24
40
46
41
54
42
4
43
7
44
23
45
5
46
40
47
43
48
2
49
37
39.4366%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
15
diversityRatio
0.2746478873239437
totalSentences
142
uniqueOpeners
39
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
30
fancyCount
26
fancyTags
0
"hissed (hiss)"
1
"she said, soft as rain striking glass, using the nickname he’d earned and never quite admitted to liking when the real name came through the door like a sudden storm (say, rain use earn quite admit like come through like)"
2
"he said, voice calm and low, as if they were not in a bar but inside a room where the air was thick with histories (say, voice do be not be)"
3
"she replied, sliding onto a stool that didn’t want to give up its habit of listening (reply, slide does not want give up)"
4
"Silas finally said, and the dry honesty of that line felt like a doorway swinging shut behind an old friendship (finally say, feel like swing)"
5
"he said, the cadence of a man who had learned to measure information the way some people measure risk (say, learn measure measure)"
6
"she said, which was not strictly true, because every breath she took in a room like this seemed to cradle an old decision, the moment when she had decided to lay down one life and pick up another (say, does be not take seem decide lay down pick up)"
7
"Silas said after a moment that stretched long enough to be counted in memories rather than seconds (say stretch be counted)"
8
"Rory returned, not aggressively, just with the quiet that came from years of thinking about what not to say when a room can hear every door you’ve ever opened and every door you’ve ever slammed shut (return, come think say hear ever open ever slam)"
9
"he added, almost gently, as if he’d told himself to speak softly on the subject and had forgotten to tone it down (add, tell speak softly forget tone)"
10
"Rory said more to the room than to him (say more)"
11
"he replied, which sounded almost like a fact, the kind that could be used as a shield or a blade (reply, almost like use)"
12
"she said, voice soft but precise, as if naming a weather pattern (say, voice name)"
13
"he said, not elaborating, letting the weight of that place hover between them without inviting more (say, does not elaborate, let invite more)"
14
"she admitted, not as a refusal but as a confession of caution (admit)"
15
"he invited, and there was something almost benevolent, fatherly in the invitation, as if the old mentor in him wanted to know if his pupil still remembered the lessons that hurt to learn (invite, be want know still remember hurt learn)"
16
"she finally said, and the words surprised even her with their clarity (finally say, surprise even)"
17
"she said, and there was a tremor in her words that she tried to command into something steady again (say, be try command)"
18
"Silas said after a quiet interval, almost as if he could anticipate the question before it formed in her throat (say anticipate form)"
19
"she admitted, and it felt like a hinge being loosened, the kind that makes a door swing the wrong way and open into something you hadn’t planned to see (admit, feel like loosen, make swing open does not plan see)"