Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMRC4TFHJM6QRMXTPT9K9PR

Run Details

Model:: GPT-4.1 Mini
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 20.7s
Cost:: $0.002836
Provider:: OpenAI

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
71.67%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
0.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
88.75%	Name drop frequency	(details)
16.07%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
73.61%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
100.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
70.17%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
84.75%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
73.17%	Technical jargon density	(details)
75.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
78.4398%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The ancient oaks of Richmond Park gave way to a faint shimmer in the air, a soft distortion flickering where the boundary between worlds bled thin. Aurora’s heart quickened beneath her ribcage as she stepped forward, fingers brushing the cool silver chain of the Heartstone pendant hidden under her jacket. The pendant’s faint crimson glow pulsed like a slumbering ember, responding to the faint disturbance in the Veil. Beside her, Isolde drifted ahead like a wispy wraith, her silver hair catching stray beams of a pale, unearthly light that seemed not quite of this world. Her pale lavender eyes scanned the horizon with quiet attention, lips parting now and then to speak words that sounded like riddles, half-heard and half-understood.

Nyx followed behind Aurora in their shifting humanoid silhouette, the faint glow of violet eyes humming in the dimness beneath the canopy. Their voice barely rose above the rustle of leaves, a whisper carried on the wind.

“This place breathes differently,” Nyx said. “Not bound by time, or so it seems. The Grove folds in and out of something older, something forgotten.”

Aurora swallowed, eyes wide. Even the air felt thick — sweet and rich with wildflowers blooming year-round, their colors impossible to name. It was as though the sundappled realm they had stepped into was a living dream, caught between the ticking of the mortal clock and the timeless pulse of the Fae.

The standing stones, gnarled and worn, loomed ahead. Ancient oaks carved into towering pillars, roots twisting like serpents weaving beneath the earth. Isolde stopped before them, her feet silent as the moss beneath. “The boundary,” she whispered, reaching out to touch the smooth bark of one stone, which hummed cold as ice beneath her fingertips. “Cross here, and the world shifts beneath your feet.”

Aurora glanced back once, at the familiar shadows cast by London’s dim streets where her flat and Silas’ bar waited, at the echo of the city’s restless hum. Then forward again, her bright blue eyes fixed on the clearing before them.

The Grove stretched wide, a pocket of wild magic carved out from the very fabric of reality. Time folded and spun curiously here. An hour inside could stretch into days without their knowledge. The air shimmered with that peculiar blend of warmth and chill, like a breath between lives. The wildflowers bloomed in riotous colors — luminous blues, vivid violet berries glistening like glass. The scent was intoxicating, both sweet and faintly metallic.

Nyx’s shadow form drifted forward, fingers trailing through the strange blossoms, their fingers phasing in and out of corporeality. “Like the garden of the forgotten,” they murmured, voice a breeze through the leaves. “A place neither here nor there.”

Isolde’s gaze turned to the sky, where the amber warmth of Dymas’s realms could almost be felt pressing faintly beyond the Veil. “This crossing grows weaker as the solstice approaches,” she said. “The boundaries thin, and dangers stir beneath.”

A thread of unease tugged at Aurora’s spine. Not from the Grove itself — its beauty was undeniable — but from the way the Veil policed itself, watching, waiting. The repetitious pulse of the Heartstone quickened faintly against her chest.

While Isolde traced ancient symbols in the soil, Nyx drifted toward a twisted tree at the edge of the clearing. Its branches creaked in a silence that felt too heavy, watching. The bark here was rough, blackened as if scorched, yet alive with silver veins pulsing faintly like nerves.

Aurora took another step forward, drawn by a faint chime barely audible beneath the hum of the Grove. The sound came from the gnarled base of the tree, where a hollow opened like a doorway. Light, dim but present, spilled softly from its depths.

“Be careful,” Isolde warned, voice still melodic, but edged with an ancient caution. “Not all that shines is safe.”

She reached out to grip the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt, the moonsilver hilt cool and faintly glowing under the canopy’s filtered light. Aurora felt its cold promise, a weapon made to cut through darkness no mortal blade could pierce.

Nyx hovered nearby, shadow fingers curling lightly. “Shadows twist when the Veil thins,” they said. “Curiosities become snares.”

The trio moved cautiously, Aurora’s breath steady despite the hum of uncertainty threading through the clearing.

With a hesitant step, she knelt beside the hollow. Inside, nestled in a nest of roots and glowing moss, lay an orb, no larger than a fist, flickering with shifting amber light. It seemed neither stone nor flame — something caught between essence and element. The pulse was slow and measured.

Her fingers hovered, the Heartstone flickering wildly now, warming against her skin.

Isolde’s eyes widened. “A fragment of Hel’s wyrd—a seed from the vineyards of Dymas,” she said in a voice both reverent and wary. “It carries echoes of gluttony and excess, but also potential. A cursed gift, or a boon yet born.”

Aurora met Nyx’s glowing gaze. “We shouldn’t take it lightly.” Her voice was calm, but inside, a knot of anticipation twisted.

The shade inclined their head in agreement, their form flickering faintly. “Power held here is ancient, dangerous. Yet its tether to the mortal coil still weak. If we can harness it, it might untangle threads we’ve thought lost.”

Isolde’s silver hair shifted, as though stirred by an unseen breeze. “But beware the price,” she warned. “Everything here feeds — be it vine, shadow, or soul.”

The clearing seemed to pulse around them, wildflowers trembling, the standing stones humming an ancient chorus.

Aurora rose, exchanging a glance with her companions. Her fingers closed tightly around the Heartstone hidden beneath her jacket. The secret world of the Fae had beckoned them here—not just as wanderers, but as seekers.

As they prepared to leave the Grove, the familiar sensation of time warping tugged at Aurora’s mind. What had begun as moments might stretch into hours or days beyond the Veil. But she could not yet say what mysteries, or dangers, lay waiting in the hidden realms between. The Grove held its wonders close, fragrant and alive, yet bound by an ancient caution whispered only in shadows.

With one last glance at the silent standing stones, the three began their return, their steps light but their thoughts heavy with the burden of newfound truths—and the fragile thread between this world and the many others beyond.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Aurora glanced back [back]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.556

leniency

rawRatio

0.1

effectiveRatio

0.1

71.67%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1059

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"very"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	1

adverb	"lightly"
count	2

adverb	"cautiously"
count	1

adverb	"tightly"
count	1

highlights

0	"very"
1	"softly"
2	"lightly"
3	"cautiously"
4	"tightly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1059

totalAiIsms

found

word	"quickened"
count	2

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"scanned"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	4

word	"loomed"
count	1

word	"familiar"
count	2

word	"echo"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"chill"
count	1

word	"glistening"
count	1

word	"traced"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	1

word	"measured"
count	1

word	"echoes"
count	1

word	"potential"
count	1

word	"anticipation"
count	1

word	"newfound"
count	1

highlights

0	"quickened"
1	"pulsed"
2	"scanned"
3	"whisper"
4	"pulse"
5	"loomed"
6	"familiar"
7	"echo"
8	"shimmered"
9	"warmth"
10	"chill"
11	"glistening"
12	"traced"
13	"silence"
14	"depths"
15	"measured"
16	"echoes"
17	"potential"
18	"anticipation"
19	"newfound"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"eyes widened/narrowed"
count	1

highlights

0	"eyes widened"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	63
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	72
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	39
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1062
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	9
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

88.75%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

898

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.22

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Richmond	1
Park	1
Heartstone	4
Veil	4
Isolde	7
Aurora	11
Fae	3
London	1
Grove	5
Dymas	1
Nyx	6
Fae-Forged	1
Blade	1

persons

0	"Heartstone"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Aurora"
3	"Fae"
4	"Grove"
5	"Dymas"
6	"Nyx"
7	"Blade"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"Veil"
3	"London"

globalScore

0.888

windowScore

16.07%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"not quite of this world"
1	"sounded like riddles, half-heard and half-"
2	"It was as though the sundappled realm they had stepped into was a living dream, caught between the ticking of the mortal clock and the timeless pulse of the Fae"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

2.825

wordCount

1062

matches

0	"neither here nor"
1	"neither stone nor"
2	"not just as wanderers, but as seekers"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	72
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

40.85

std

22.19

0.543

sampleLengths

0	120
1	37
2	25
3	52
4	64
5	41
6	73
7	39
8	39
9	40
10	49
11	44
12	19
13	40
14	18
15	16
16	51
17	12
18	41
19	21
20	38
21	27
22	16
23	35
24	67
25	38

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	63
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

141

matches

0	"was intoxicating"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.083

matches

0	"Even the air felt thick — sweet and rich with wildflowers blooming year-round, their colors impossible to name."
1	"The wildflowers bloomed in riotous colors — luminous blues, vivid violet berries glistening like glass."
2	"Not from the Grove itself — its beauty was undeniable — but from the way the Veil policed itself, watching, waiting."
3	"It seemed neither stone nor flame — something caught between essence and element."
4	"The secret world of the Fae had beckoned them here—not just as wanderers, but as seekers."
5	"With one last glance at the silent standing stones, the three began their return, their steps light but their thoughts heavy with the burden of newfound truths—and the fragile thread between this world and the many others beyond."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	374
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	12
adverbRatio	0.03208556149732621
lyAdverbCount	2
lyAdverbRatio	0.0053475935828877

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	72
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.75

std

7.12

0.482

sampleLengths

0	26
1	24
2	18
3	27
4	25
5	22
6	15
7	6
8	19
9	4
10	18
11	30
12	8
13	14
14	11
15	22
16	9
17	28
18	13
19	17
20	6
21	10
22	16
23	15
24	9
25	19
26	14
27	6
28	22
29	10
30	7
31	8
32	21
33	11
34	20
35	11
36	18
37	18
38	17
39	9
40	13
41	6
42	23
43	17
44	7
45	8
46	3
47	16
48	9
49	23

73.61%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.4583333333333333
totalSentences	72
uniqueOpeners	33

100.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Even the air felt thick"
1	"Then forward again, her bright"
2	"Light, dim but present, spilled"

ratio

0.051

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
1	"Their voice barely rose above"
2	"It was as though the"
3	"she whispered, reaching out to"
4	"they murmured, voice a breeze"
5	"Its branches creaked in a"
6	"She reached out to grip"
7	"It seemed neither stone nor"
8	"Her fingers hovered, the Heartstone"
9	"she said in a voice"
10	"Her voice was calm, but"
11	"Her fingers closed tightly around"

ratio

0.203

70.17%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The ancient oaks of Richmond"
1	"Aurora’s heart quickened beneath her"
2	"The pendant’s faint crimson glow"
3	"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
4	"Nyx followed behind Aurora in"
5	"Their voice barely rose above"
6	"Aurora swallowed, eyes wide."
7	"It was as though the"
8	"The standing stones, gnarled and"
9	"Isolde stopped before them, her"
10	"she whispered, reaching out to"
11	"Aurora glanced back once, at"
12	"The Grove stretched wide, a"
13	"Time folded and spun curiously"
14	"An hour inside could stretch"
15	"The air shimmered with that"
16	"The wildflowers bloomed in riotous"
17	"The scent was intoxicating, both"
18	"Nyx’s shadow form drifted forward,"
19	"they murmured, voice a breeze"

ratio

0.78

84.75%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"While Isolde traced ancient symbols"

ratio

0.017

73.17%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Beside her, Isolde drifted ahead like a wispy wraith, her silver hair catching stray beams of a pale, unearthly light that seemed not quite of this world."
1	"It was as though the sundappled realm they had stepped into was a living dream, caught between the ticking of the mortal clock and the timeless pulse of the Fae…"
2	"Nyx’s shadow form drifted forward, fingers trailing through the strange blossoms, their fingers phasing in and out of corporeality."
3	"The bark here was rough, blackened as if scorched, yet alive with silver veins pulsing faintly like nerves."

75.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Isolde warned, voice still melodic, but edged with an ancient caution"

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"she whispered (whisper)"
1	"they murmured (murmur)"
2	"Isolde warned (warn)"
3	"she warned (warn)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.444

leniency

0.889

rawRatio

0.5

effectiveRatio

0.444

78.4398%