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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMSHSDYZABXZYBWGEQ33Q1C
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Model:
Claude Sonnet 4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
52.5s
Cost:
$0.034572
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The green neon sign of The Raven's Nest cast its familiar glow across the rain-slicked pavement as Aurora pushed through the heavy wooden door. She'd been living above the bar for three months now, but tonight felt different—charged with an electricity that had nothing to do with the storm brewing outside London's gray October sky. The familiar scent of aged whiskey and leather greeted her as she descended into the dimly lit interior. Old maps covered the walls like faded dreams, their edges curled with time, while black-and-white photographs of forgotten faces stared down from their frames. Silas stood behind the polished oak bar, his grey-streaked auburn hair catching the amber light as he polished a glass with
methodical
precision. His hazel eyes lifted as the door chimed shut behind her. "Evening, Rory." His voice carried that same quiet authority that had made her
feel
safe from the moment she'd first stumbled into his establishment, fleeing from Cardiff and everything she'd left behind. Aurora nodded, shaking droplets from her straight black hair. She'd planned to grab her delivery bag and head upstairs to her flat, but something made her pause. A figure at the far end of the bar, hunched over a tumbler of amber liquid, seemed familiar in a way that made her stomach clench. The man's shoulders were broader than she remembered, his dark hair shorter and threaded with premature silver at the temples. But when he lifted his head and turned toward the sound of the door, Aurora's breath caught. The same green eyes that had once looked at her with such tenderness now held a hollowness that made her chest ache. "Christ," Evan whispered, his voice rougher than it had been two years ago. "Laila?" The old nickname hit her like a physical blow. Only he had called her that—a pet name born from a joke about her middle name during their university days. Before everything went wrong. Before she learned what his hands could do when anger overtook him. "It's Aurora now," she said, her voice steady despite the way her heart hammered against her ribs. "Just Aurora." Silas's movements behind the bar had stilled, and she could
feel
his attention sharpen like a blade drawn from its sheath. He knew about Evan—not the details, but enough. Enough to understand why she'd fled Cardiff in the middle of the night with nothing but a suitcase and Eva's promises of a fresh start in London. Evan's laugh
was bitter
, hollow. "Of course it is. Can't have anything connecting you to your old life, can you?" "Some connections aren't worth preserving." The words came out cooler than she'd intended, but she didn't regret them. She moved toward the bar, not away from him but not closer either—a careful distance that spoke volumes. "Drink?" Silas asked, his voice neutral but his posture alert. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the light as he reached for a glass. "Jameson. Neat." She settled onto a stool three seats down from Evan, close enough for conversation but far enough to maintain her escape route. Old habits, learned the hard way. Evan studied her profile, and she could
feel
his gaze like a
weight
. "You look good," he said finally. "Different, but good. Living in London suits you." "It does." She accepted the whiskey from Silas with a grateful nod. The burn of it grounded her, reminded her that she was here, now, not trapped in the Cardiff flat where she'd once counted ceiling cracks to avoid meeting his eyes during his rages. "I've been thinking about you," Evan continued. His voice had taken on that careful tone she remembered—the one that came before apologies that meant nothing, before promises that lasted only until the next time. "About us. About how things ended." Aurora's fingers tightened around her glass. "Things ended exactly as they needed to." "Did they?" He shifted on his stool, and she caught a whiff of his cologne—the same one he'd worn at university, before everything curdled between them. "I've changed, Laila. I know you don't believe that, but I have. I'm seeing someone. A therapist. Working on myself." The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist
began to
throb
, an old phantom pain that had nothing to do with the childhood accident that caused it and everything to do with the night she'd pressed herself against the bathroom door while he pounded on it from the other side. She'd gripped the doorknob so
tightly
it had left marks. "Good for you." She lifted the whiskey to her lips, used the motion to create another barrier between them. "Everyone deserves help when they need it." "Don't be like that." His voice carried a familiar edge now, the one that used to make her flinch. "I'm trying to apologize here. To make things right." "Some things can't be made right, Evan. They can only be survived." Silas moved closer, ostensibly to wipe down the bar near her seat, but she felt the protective presence of him like a shield. His slight limp was barely noticeable as he
navigated
behind the bar, but she'd learned to read the signs of old pain—in him, in herself, in the careful way they both moved through the world now. "I never meant to hurt you," Evan said, and his voice cracked on the words. "You have to
know that. I
loved you." "No." The word came out sharp, final. "You loved the idea of me. The version of me that agreed with everything you said, that made herself smaller so you could
feel
bigger. That wasn't love, Evan. It was possession." She saw him flinch at her words, saw something crumble in his face. For a moment, he looked like the boy she'd known at Cardiff University—uncertain, vulnerable, human. It would have been easy to soften, to offer comfort. The old Aurora might have done exactly that. But she wasn't the old Aurora anymore. "I miss her sometimes," she said quietly, surprising herself with the admission. "The girl I used to be. She was softer. More trusting. But I don't regret losing her if it meant finding myself." Evan stared into his glass, swirling the amber liquid. "I dream about her sometimes. About you. About the night you left." He looked up, and she saw tears gathering in his green eyes. "I came home and you were just... gone. Like you'd never existed at all." "I had to disappear to survive." The truth of it settled between them like a stone dropped in still water. "You made it impossible for me to exist in the same space as you." He was quiet for a long moment, and in that silence, Aurora heard the rain picking up outside, drumming against the windows of The Raven's Nest like impatient fingers. A few other patrons had filtered in during their conversation, their voices a low murmur that provided cover for words too personal for strangers' ears. "I know," Evan said finally. "I know I
did that. I
know I..." He trailed off, unable or unwilling to give voice to the worst of it. "I'm sorry, Laila. Aurora. I'm so fucking sorry." She believed him. That was the terrible part—she believed his regret was genuine, believed he'd found some measure of peace in his therapist's office, believed he'd learned to name the demons that had driven him to hurt the thing he claimed to love most. But belief didn't erase scars. It didn't undo damage. It didn't make forgiveness a requirement. "I know you are," she said. "But sorry doesn't change what happened. It doesn't give me back the person I was before I learned to be afraid of you." Evan finished his drink and signaled to Silas for another. His hands shook
slightly
as he lifted the fresh glass to his lips. "So that's it then? We just pretend we never meant anything to each other?" Aurora considered the question,
really
considered it. They had meant something to each other once—something bright and hopeful and full of possibility. But that something had
been poisoned
, corrupted until it became a cage instead of a
sanctuary
. "We meant everything to each other," she said. "And then we meant nothing but pain. Both of those things can be true at the same time." She stood, leaving money on the bar for her drink. Silas nodded almost imperceptibly—a gesture that said he understood, that said she was safe here, that said she could choose to stay or go without judgment. "I'm glad you're getting help," she told Evan. "I'm glad you're trying to be better. But I can't be part of that journey. I have my own healing to do." He looked up at her then, and for just a moment, she saw a
flicker
of the boy who'd made her laugh in lecture halls, who'd held her hand during scary movies, who'd whispered promises into her hair in the darkness of their shared bed before everything went wrong. "Be well, Laila," he said
softly
. "Be better, Evan," she replied. Then she turned and walked toward the narrow stairs that led to her flat above the bar, leaving him with his whiskey and his regrets and the
weight
of all the words they'd finally spoken.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
30.7692%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
13
adverbTagCount
4
adverbTags
0
"he said finally [finally]"
1
"she said quietly, surprising herself with the admission [quietly]"
2
"Evan said finally [finally]"
3
"he said softly [softly]"
74.3918%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1562
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"tightly"
count
1
3
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
2
"tightly"
3
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
55.1857%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1562
totalAiIsms
7
found
0
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
1
word
"throb"
count
1
2
word
"flicker"
count
1
3
word
"methodical"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
2
5
word
"navigated"
count
1
highlights
0
"sanctuary"
1
"throb"
2
"flicker"
3
"methodical"
4
"weight"
5
"navigated"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
77
matches
0
"was bitter"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
0
"feel"
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
97
matches
0
"know that. I"
1
"did that. I"
86.2508%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
43
mean
35.95
std
16.25
cv
0.452
sampleLengths
0
55
1
76
2
32
3
53
4
59
5
14
6
45
7
19
8
56
9
20
10
36
11
27
12
30
13
27
14
45
15
40
16
13
17
46
18
59
19
26
20
28
21
12
22
59
23
23
24
39
25
46
26
7
27
34
28
47
29
34
30
54
31
35
32
59
33
29
34
37
35
38
36
26
37
36
38
30
39
49
40
6
41
5
42
35
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
77
matches
0
"been poisoned"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
205
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1207
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
34
adverbRatio
0.028169014084507043
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.012427506213753107
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
97
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
97
mean
15.94
std
9.93
cv
0.623
sampleLengths
0
24
1
31
2
18
3
24
4
23
5
11
6
32
7
9
8
18
9
26
10
20
11
17
12
22
13
13
14
1
15
9
16
20
17
4
18
12
19
17
20
2
21
21
22
8
23
27
24
5
25
15
26
18
27
18
28
10
29
17
30
24
31
6
32
13
33
6
34
8
35
12
36
33
37
7
38
27
39
6
40
6
41
7
42
26
43
20
44
49
45
10
46
19
47
7
48
19
49
9
60.4811%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.41237113402061853
totalSentences
97
uniqueOpeners
40
21.1538%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
8
fancyTags
0
"Evan whispered, his voice rougher than it had been two years ago (whisper, be)"
1
"she said, her voice steady despite the way her heart hammered against her ribs (say, hammer)"
2
"he said finally (say finally)"
3
"Evan continued (continue)"
4
"Evan said, and his voice cracked on the words (say, crack on)"
5
"she said quietly, surprising herself with the admission (say quietly, surprise)"
6
"Evan said finally (say finally)"
7
"he said softly (say softly)"
84.0137%