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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMT6FT0NGYM3GGQVVNT8QFE
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Model:
Claude Sonnet 4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
52.6s
Cost:
$0.034632
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The green neon sign of The Raven's Nest cast an emerald glow across the rain-slicked pavement as Aurora pulled her jacket tighter against the October wind. She'd walked these Soho streets countless times over the past six months, but tonight something felt different—an electric
anticipation
that made her skin prickle. The familiar
weight
of her delivery bag hung from her shoulder, empty now after her final run for the Golden Empress. She pushed through the heavy wooden door, the brass handle cold under her palm. The bar's dim interior enveloped her like an old friend's embrace, all weathered leather and amber light. Maps covered the walls in overlapping layers, their edges curled with age, while black-and-white photographs captured frozen moments of a London that existed only in memory. Silas looked up from behind the bar, his hazel eyes crinkling at the corners. "Evening, Rory. Whiskey?" "Please." She settled onto her usual stool, noting how her landlord's slight limp seemed more pronounced tonight as he moved between bottles. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the light as he poured two fingers of amber liquid into a glass. The bar held perhaps a dozen patrons scattered across its shadows, the usual mix of locals nursing pints and tourists clutching overpriced cocktails. Aurora had just lifted her glass when a voice from behind made her freeze. "Aurora Carter. Christ, I'd
know that posture
anywhere." The whiskey burned her throat as she turned, already knowing what she'd find.
Marcus
Holloway stood three feet away, his expensive suit tailored to perfection, his once-messy brown hair now styled with military precision. The boy who'd spent summer afternoons in her Cardiff garden catching frogs had become a man who looked like he'd stepped from the pages of a financial magazine. "
Marcus
." The name felt strange on her tongue,
weight
ed with years of silence. His smile was perfect—too perfect, she realized. The crooked incisor that had made him self-conscious at sixteen had
been corrected
, along with every other imperfection time might have carved into his features. "May I?" He gestured to the empty stool beside her. Aurora nodded, her throat
suddenly
dry. Silas materialized with practiced efficiency, setting a crystal tumbler of what looked like expensive scotch in front of
Marcus
without
being asked
. "So,"
Marcus
said, settling onto the stool with fluid grace, "Aurora Carter in a Soho dive bar. This wasn't on my list of likely encounters." "It's not a dive." The words came out sharper than she'd intended. "And I live upstairs." Something
flickered
across his face—surprise, perhaps, or disappointment. "Of course. I should have realized." He lifted his glass in a mock toast. "To unexpected reunions." She didn't return the gesture. Instead, she studied his profile as he drank, noting the subtle changes that money and ambition had wrought. His jaw was sharper now, carved by expensive treatments and careful nutrition. The laugh lines around his eyes had
been smoothed
away, leaving only the faintest traces of the boy who'd once cried in her arms after his father's funeral. "You look well," he said, though his gaze lingered on her delivery bag with barely concealed confusion. "Different, but well." "Different how?" "Harder. More..." He paused, swirling the scotch in his glass. "Defined, I suppose. The Aurora I knew was softer around the edges." The observation stung because it was true. The girl who'd left Cardiff had believed in fairy tale endings and second chances. London had taught her otherwise. "People change," she said. "Indeed they do." His smile returned, that polished curve she
was beginning
to hate. "Though some of us change for the better. I assume you heard about the promotion? Senior partner at Whitmore & Associates. Youngest in the firm's history." She hadn't heard, hadn't kept track of his meteoric rise through London's financial elite. The
Marcus
she'd known had wanted to teach history, had spent hours in university libraries researching obscure medieval battles with the passion of a true academic. "Congratulations." The word felt like broken glass. "Thank you. It's been quite the journey." He paused, studying her face with clinical interest. "What about you? Still pursuing law?" The question hung between them like a blade. She could lie, could craft some story about taking time off or exploring other options. Instead, she found herself telling the truth. "I never wanted law. That was my father's dream."
Marcus
blinked, the first crack in his perfect composure. "But you were brilliant at it. Remember that mock trial in Professor Williams' class? You destroyed the opposition." "Being good at something doesn't mean you should do it." She took another sip of whiskey, letting it burn away the memory of herself at twenty-one, standing in a Cardiff courtroom and feeling nothing but hollow victory. "So what do you do now?" "I deliver Chinese food." The silence stretched between them, filled with the bar's ambient noise—clinking glasses, muted conversations, the soft jazz bleeding from hidden speakers.
Marcus
stared at her as if she'd grown a second head. "That's..." He
seemed to
struggle for words. "That's quite a change." "Is it? Maybe this is who I was always meant to be." "Don't be ridiculous." His voice carried a sharp edge now, the first genuine emotion she'd heard from him. "You're wasting yourself, Aurora. You have a brilliant mind, and you're using it to—" "To what? Survive? To find something that doesn't make me want to disappear?" The words came out louder than she'd intended, drawing glances from nearby patrons. Silas's eyes found hers in the mirror behind the bar, a silent question. She shook her head
slightly
.
Marcus
leaned closer, lowering his voice. "This isn't you. The Aurora I knew had dreams, ambitions. She wanted to change the world." "The Aurora you knew was a child." She turned to face him fully, noting how he recoiled
slightly
from the intensity in her bright blue eyes. "She believed in justice and fairness and happy endings. She believed that good people got rewarded and bad people got punished." "And now?" "Now I deliver lo mein to strangers and sleep above a bar, and I'm happier than I've been in years." It was true, she realized as the words left her lips. Despite everything—the cramped flat, the minimum-wage job, the way her parents' phone calls had dwindled to awkward monthly check-ins—she felt more like herself than she had since childhood.
Marcus
finished his scotch in one swallow, his composed mask slipping further. "I don't understand you anymore." "Did you ever?" The question hung between them like an accusation. She watched him process it, saw the moment when memory collided with present reality. They'd been inseparable once, two outcasts in a small Welsh town who'd found
solace
in each other's company. But that had been before university, before London, before life had carved them into shapes they no longer recognized. "I thought I did," he said quietly. "I thought we wanted the same things." "We were eighteen,
Marcus
. We didn't know what we wanted." "I knew I wanted you." The admission fell between them like a stone into still water. Aurora felt something twist in her chest, a pain she'd thought buried beneath years of careful forgetting. "That was a long time ago." "Not that long." He reached toward her, then stopped, his hand hovering inches from her wrist. "We could still—" "Could still what? Pretend we're the same people we were at university? Pretend that seven years of silence don't matter?" His hand fell to the bar. "I tried to call. After graduation, I mean. You'd changed your number." "I changed everything."
The weight of those words
settled between them. She could see him trying to understand, this man who'd climbed every ladder life had offered, who'd never learned that sometimes the only victory was in walking away. "I should go," she said, standing. "Aurora, wait." He grabbed her wrist, his fingers brushing the small crescent scar that marked her childhood accident. "Let me buy you dinner. Proper dinner, not whatever takeaway you're living on. We could talk—" "There's nothing to talk about." She pulled free, noting how his touch felt foreign against her skin. "We're different people now. That's not anyone's fault. It just is." She left money on the bar and headed for the door, feeling his eyes follow her movement. At the threshold, she turned back one last time.
Marcus
sat hunched over his empty glass, the perfect lines of his suit
suddenly
seeming like armor against a world he no longer understood. "
Marcus
?" He looked up, hope flickering across his features. "I'm glad you got what you wanted." The door closed behind her with a soft click, sealing away the past and the man who'd once promised her the world. Outside, the rain had stopped, leaving the streets
gleaming
under the neon glow. Aurora walked to the narrow door beside the bar's entrance and climbed the stairs to her flat, each step carrying her further from the girl she'd been and deeper into the woman she'd chosen to become.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"he said, though his gaze lingered on her delivery bag with barely concealed confusion [barely]"
1
"he said quietly [quietly]"
73.7015%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1521
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
1
adverb
"suddenly"
count
2
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"suddenly"
80.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
0
"Marcus"
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
60.5523%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1521
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"gleaming"
count
1
2
word
"solace"
count
1
3
word
"anticipation"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
2
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"gleaming"
2
"solace"
3
"anticipation"
4
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"weight of words/silence"
count
1
highlights
0
"The weight of those words"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
77
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
111
matches
0
"know that posture"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
59
mean
25.54
std
17.96
cv
0.703
sampleLengths
0
71
1
57
2
17
3
44
4
37
5
8
6
62
7
13
8
42
9
28
10
25
11
16
12
25
13
63
14
20
15
2
16
22
17
26
18
4
19
40
20
40
21
7
22
21
23
30
24
9
25
27
26
37
27
6
28
4
29
32
30
11
31
12
32
32
33
13
34
31
35
22
36
47
37
2
38
20
39
39
40
17
41
3
42
59
43
14
44
10
45
5
46
28
47
6
48
19
49
20
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
77
matches
0
"been corrected"
1
"being asked"
2
"been smoothed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
202
matches
0
"was beginning"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1120
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
43
adverbRatio
0.038392857142857145
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.009821428571428571
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
111
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
111
mean
13.58
std
7.8
cv
0.575
sampleLengths
0
26
1
24
2
21
3
14
4
17
5
26
6
14
7
3
8
22
9
22
10
23
11
14
12
8
13
13
14
21
15
28
16
13
17
7
18
25
19
10
20
6
21
22
22
25
23
12
24
4
25
8
26
14
27
3
28
5
29
18
30
12
31
28
32
17
33
3
34
2
35
10
36
12
37
7
38
14
39
5
40
4
41
14
42
26
43
14
44
26
45
7
46
15
47
6
48
8
49
15
61.8619%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.4144144144144144
totalSentences
111
uniqueOpeners
46
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"Marcus said, settling onto the stool with fluid grace (say, settle)"
1
"he said, though his gaze lingered on her delivery bag with barely concealed confusion (say, linger barely conceal)"
2
"he said quietly (say quietly)"
3
"she said, standing (say, stand)"
80.9480%