Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMWV22HW6GV5JZGNE0HYHSB

Run Details

Model:: Claude 3.5 Haiku
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Horror: alone in an eerie place at night
Duration:: 9.2s
Cost:: $0.002002

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre.

A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The ancient standing stones loomed like silent sentinels, their weathered surfaces etched with lichen and shadows. Aurora Carter's breath formed small clouds in the cold night air, her bright blue eyes scanning the Grove's boundary. Moonlight filtered through gnarled oak branches, creating fractured patterns on the ground that seemed to shift and breathe.

She shouldn't be here. Not alone. Not at night.

The Heartstone pendant around her neck felt heavy, its deep crimson surface catching what little light remained. It pulsed with a faint warmth against her collarbone, almost like a heartbeat out of sync with her own.

The wildflowers that supposedly bloomed year-round looked wrong in the moonlight — pale and bloodless, their petals too perfectly arranged, too still. No breeze stirred them. No insects hummed. The silence was absolute.

Aurora took another step forward. Her delivery shoes — scuffed from countless routes through London — made no sound against the soft ground. Something was watching her. Not just watching. Waiting.

A sound. Barely perceptible. Like fabric brushing against bark. Behind her.

She didn't turn immediately. Years of street-smart survival in London had taught her that sudden movements invited danger. Instead, she shifted her weight subtly, listening.

Nothing.

Then: a whisper. Not wind. Not leaves. Something that sounded almost like her name.

Her childhood scar — the small crescent on her left wrist — began to itch.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.0000%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	0
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)

55.5556%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)

wordCount

225

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

highlights

0	"perfectly"

100.0000%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.0000%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.0000%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)

wordCount

225

totalAiIsms

found

word	"sentinels"
count	1

word	"loomed"
count	1

word	"fractured"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"etched"
count	1

highlights

0	"sentinels"
1	"loomed"
2	"fractured"
3	"weight"
4	"etched"

100.0000%

Cliche density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.0000%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	30
matches	(empty)

100.0000%

Filter word density

Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.0000%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	30
matches	(empty)

100.0000%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

22.8

std

14.85

0.651

sampleLengths

0	53
1	9
2	36
3	33
4	31
5	11
6	25
7	1
8	14
9	15

100.0000%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤5% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	30
matches	(empty)

100.0000%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

matches

0	"was watching"

82.5926%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	225
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	13
adverbRatio	0.057777777777777775
lyAdverbCount	5
lyAdverbRatio	0.022222222222222223

100.0000%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	30
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.0000%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

7.6

std

6.78

0.892

sampleLengths

0	16
1	19
2	18
3	4
4	2
5	3
6	17
7	19
8	22
9	4
10	3
11	4
12	5
13	18
14	4
15	3
16	1
17	2
18	2
19	5
20	2
21	4
22	14
23	7
24	1
25	3
26	2
27	2
28	7
29	15

90.0000%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.6
totalSentences	30
uniqueOpeners	18

100.0000%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags	0
fancyCount	0
fancyTags	(empty)

89.8911%