Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNETGZ3PQF44289N1PD0W3M

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Duration:
9.7s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign flickered above the doorway like a dying firefly, casting a thin halo on the rain‑slick pavement. Aurora paused at the curb, the hum of the city muffled by the night’s damp. She tucked the insulated bag from the Golden Empress into the strap of her messenger, the weight of the day’s deliveries pressing against her shoulder. The bar’s windows were dark, but a thin line of amber light seeped through the cracks, spilling onto the cracked tiles outside. She had never meant to come back to this part of Soho. The flat above the Raven’s Nest was a convenient roof over her head, a cheap lease that let her keep a roof over her head while the city’s rent rose like a tide. But tonight, the city seemed to have a habit of pulling her back toward places she tried to forget. The door swung open with a soft sigh, and the scent of stale beer mingled with the faint perfume of old wood and something metallic—perhaps the lingering tang of a bar that had seen too many late‑night deals. Aurora stepped inside, the dim light swallowing her silhouette. The walls were a patchwork of faded maps, their inked borders softened by time, and black‑and‑white photographs of faces she didn’t recognize. The photographs stared back with eyes that seemed to have been caught in a moment of quiet desperation. She moved toward the bar, her boots making a soft thud against the worn floorboards. The hum of conversation was low, a murmur of voices that rose and fell like tide. In the far corner, a small bookshelf leaned against the wall, its spines a jumble of titles that hinted at a secret beyond the ordinary. The sight of it made Aurora’s pulse quicken; she remembered the stories Eva had whispered about the bar’s hidden back room, a place where whispers turned into deals. Silas stood behind the bar, his back to the room, his silhouette framed by the green glow of the sign. He was taller than she remembered, his shoulders broader, his hair now a mixture of auburn and grey streaks that caught the light like lichen on a stone. A neatly trimmed beard framed his jaw, each hair caught in a precise line, as if he had once been a soldier who still kept his uniform crisp. His left leg bore a slight limp, a subtle shift that made the bar stool under his weight creak. Aurora’s eyes found the silver signet ring on his right hand, the little piece of metal catching the amber light and throwing a brief flash across the polished wood. She felt a flicker of something—perhaps recognition, perhaps something else—before the memory of the scar on her left wrist rose to the surface. The crescent‑shaped mark, a souvenir from a childhood accident, was still faintly pink under the skin, a reminder of a time when she could have been broken and not have been. She took a breath, feeling the cool air fill her lungs, and walked up to the bar. The wooden surface was worn smooth by countless elbows and spilled drinks. Silas turned, his hazel eyes meeting hers with a mixture of surprise and something that lingered just beyond the surface. “Rory?” he said, his voice low and measured, the kind of tone that could cut through a room full of chatter without raising his voice. “I didn’t expect to see you here.” Aurora smiled, a thin line that didn’t quite reach the corners of her eyes. “Silas. It’s been a long time.” She placed the bag on the bar, the clink of metal against wood echoing softly. “I’m... just delivering a late order. The Golden Empress—” He nodded, his gaze flicking to the bag, then back to her. “You’re still doing the deliveries, huh? I always thought you’d end up somewhere else, maybe in a courtroom.” She let out a small laugh, the sound barely audible over the low hum of the jukebox playing an old jazz tune. “I left the pre‑law track after a… a few years. It didn’t feel right. And then… things happened.” She brushed a strand of black hair behind her ear, feeling the scar on her wrist as she moved. “I needed a place to stay. The flat above your bar was… convenient.” Silas’s eyes softened for a moment, a flicker of something that could have been regret. “I heard about the… the incident with Evan. I’m sorry, Rory. I should have been there.” She felt a pang, a sharp sting that rose from the scar to her throat. “It’s not your fault, Silas. I made my own choices.” She swallowed, the words tasting like old wine. “I’ve been… trying to keep moving.” He leaned against the bar, the weight of his limp shifting his posture, the silver ring catching a glint of light. “You always were good at thinking on your feet. I remember the night we snuck into the old library on the university campus, trying to find that hidden room in the basement. You were the one who figured out the lock.” Aurora’s mind drifted back to that night, the smell of dust and old paper, the thrill of breaking rules. She remembered how Silas’s hand had trembled when he opened the door to the secret room, how the air had smelled of cold stone and something metallic—perhaps a hint of the past they both tried to leave behind. “I think about that sometimes,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “The secret room. The… the things we kept hidden.” Silas’s gaze hardened for a heartbeat, then softened again. “The world changes, Rory. People change. I’m not the same man I was when we were in university. The knee injury… the ring… the bar. All of it… it’s a mask, but it’s also a shield.” She felt the weight of his words settle on her chest. “I see that in you, Silas. The way you run this place, the way you keep the old maps on the walls. It’s like you’re trying to keep a piece of that past alive.” He smiled, a faint, almost imperceptible curve of his lips. “And you, you keep moving. The deliveries, the flat above my bar. You’re always on the go, never staying long enough to… settle.” Aurora’s eyes drifted to the bookshelf in the corner, the spines of the books a silent promise of hidden doors. “Do you ever think about the back room? The one behind the books?” Silas’s hand tightened around a glass, the silver ring catching the light. “Only when I need to remember why I’m here.” He leaned forward, his elbow resting on the bar, his hazel eyes locking onto hers. “You know why I opened this place, Rory?” She shook her head, the motion sending a tiny ripple through the scar on her wrist. “I guess I’m not sure.” He took a slow sip, the glass clinking against the wood. “I was a field agent. MI6. I spent years chasing shadows, living in places where the night never ended. One botched operation in Prague left me with a knee that never healed, a mind that never truly rested. I needed a place where I could control the darkness, where I could keep the people I cared about safe. The bar became that place. The secret room… it’s a reminder that sometimes the safest places are the ones you hide behind.” Aurora felt a sudden urge to reach out, to touch the scar on her wrist, to feel the pulse of her own history. “I’ve been trying to hide too,” she confessed, the words slipping out like a confession. “I left the law because I thought I could escape the weight of expectations. I thought I could run from… from everything. But the city has a way of pulling you back, doesn’t it?” Silas’s eyes softened, and for a moment, the bar seemed to shrink around them, the neon sign outside a distant echo. “You can’t outrun yourself, Rory. You can only learn to walk beside it.” She laughed, a short, breathless sound. “You always had a way with words.” He raised an eyebrow, the silver ring glinting. “And you always had a way of getting into trouble.” Their conversation fell into a comfortable silence, the kind that only old friends could share without needing to fill the gaps with chatter. The jazz tune swelled, a trumpet wailing a melancholy note that seemed to echo the unspoken regrets hanging in the air. Aurora’s gaze drifted to a black‑and‑white photograph on the wall—a portrait of a young man in a uniform, his eyes fixed on something beyond the frame. She felt a strange kinship with the man, a sense that he, too, had been caught in a moment of decision, a crossroads of duty and desire. “Do you ever wonder what would have happened if we’d taken a different path?” she asked, her voice barely audible over the music. Silas’s eyes lingered on the photograph, his hazel irises reflecting the image. “All the time.” He set the glass down with a soft thud. “I think about the night you left the university, the night you walked away from the law, the night you ran from Evan. I think about the night I left the field, the night I opened this bar. We both made choices. Some were good, some were… necessary.” She felt a chill run down her spine, as if the past had brushed against her skin. “Do you ever regret?” He looked at her, his gaze steady, the scar on his left wrist—if he had one—hidden beneath his shirt. “Regret is a luxury. It’s a feeling that tells you you’ve lived too much for the moment you’re in. I have regrets, Rory. I have regrets about the people I lost, about the things I couldn’t protect. But I also have regrets about the moments I didn’t take, the words I didn’t say.” Aurora’s breath caught. “I have regrets too. About the night I left Evan, about the night I didn’t call you when I needed help. I thought I could handle it on my own. I thought I could be… something else.” Silas reached out, his hand hovering over the bar, his silver ring catching the light. “You’re still the same girl who could solve a puzzle in a hallway of lockers. You’re still the one who could think three steps ahead. The world may have changed, but you haven’t lost that spark.” She felt the sting of tears, a salty taste at the back of her throat. “I’m not sure who I am anymore, Silas. The deliveries, the flat, the scar—everything feels like a mask.” He placed his hand on the bar, the wood warm under his palm. “You’re not a mask, Rory. You’re a story that’s still being written. And sometimes, the best stories are the ones that have gaps, the ones that leave room for the next chapter.” The neon sign outside flickered again, casting a brief green pulse across the room. The jazz trumpet swelled, then faded into a soft saxophone. Aurora felt the weight of the years lift, just a little, as if the bar itself was breathing with her. She glanced at the bookshelf, the secret room behind it a silent promise. “Do you ever go in there?” Silas’s eyes narrowed, the silver ring glinting as he considered his answer. “Only when I need to remember why I’m still here.” He leaned forward, his voice low. “There’s a file in that room—old maps, old contacts, a list of people who owe me favors. It’s a reminder that I’m not just a bartender. I’m still a keeper of secrets.” Aurora felt a sudden curiosity, a pull toward the hidden door. “May I see it?” He hesitated, the limp in his left leg shifting his weight. “It’s not for everyone. But you… you’ve always been good at finding doors, Rory.” She smiled, the scar on her wrist catching a glint of the bar’s amber light. “Then let’s find it together.” Silas stood, his movement deliberate, the silver ring catching the light as he lifted his hand. The limp in his left leg was a reminder of the past, a physical echo of the price he had paid. He guided her toward the bookshelf, his hand brushing hers briefly as they pushed the spines aside. The secret room was small, its walls lined with maps that seemed to whisper of distant places, of missions that had never been completed. A single wooden table sat in the center, a stack of folders and a glass of amber liquid that had long since gone cold. The air was thick with the scent of old paper and something metallic—perhaps the lingering echo of a past that refused to be entirely buried. Silas pulled a folder from the stack, the leather cracked and worn. He placed it on the table, his fingers lingering over the cover. “This is a reminder of who we were, Rory. It’s a reminder that we can’t escape the past entirely, but we can choose how we carry it.” Aurora reached out, her fingertips brushing the leather. The scar on her wrist ached, a reminder of the accident that had once threatened to break her. She felt a strange kinship with the old maps, each line a path, each border a limit. She thought about the deliveries she made, the routes she knew, the way the city’s streets twisted like veins beneath the surface. “This… this is a life I never imagined,” she whispered, the words barely audible over the soft hum of the bar’s ventilation. Silas nodded, his hazel eyes softening. “And yet here we are, standing in a room that holds the ghosts of our past. The secret room is a place where we can see what we’ve become, and perhaps, what we still could be.” She felt a sudden surge of gratitude, a fleeting moment of peace. “Thank you, Silas. For this… for remembering.” He gave a small, almost imperceptible smile. “Remembering is a form of loyalty, Rory. It’s the only thing that keeps us anchored when the world spins too fast.” The neon sign outside pulsed again, a green heartbeat that seemed to sync with the rhythm of their conversation. The jazz tune swelled, a soft crescendo that carried the weight of unspoken regret and the promise of something new. Aurora stood there, her eyes drifting over the maps, the photographs, the secret room that held the remnants of a life she had once imagined. The scar on her wrist was a reminder of a childhood accident, a small crescent that had never fully healed, just as the wounds of the past never fully faded. Yet, in this dimly lit bar, with the green neon glow casting a hopeful hue, she felt a sense of possibility. Silas turned to her, his silver ring catching the light one last time. “You can stay as long as you like, Rory. The bar is yours as much as it is mine. The secret room is open to those who need it.” She smiled, a genuine curve that reached the corners of her eyes. “I think I’ll stay for a while. I think I need to learn how to carry my past without letting it define me.” He lifted his glass, the amber liquid catching the bar’s light. “To old friends, new beginnings, and the spaces in between.” Aurora lifted her own glass, the cheap plastic clinking against the metal. “To the weight of time, and the light that follows.” The neon sign flickered once more, a green pulse that seemed to echo the rhythm of their hearts. The jazz trumpet swelled, then faded into a soft saxophone, the notes lingering like a promise in the night. In the dim glow of The Raven’s Nest, two old friends stood together, the weight of years and unspoken regret hanging between them, but also a quiet hope that perhaps, in this hidden room, they could finally find a way to move forward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.22
leniency0.44
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2698
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2698
totalAiIsms54
found
0
word"flickered"
count3
1
word"weight"
count9
2
word"pulse"
count4
3
word"flicker"
count2
4
word"reminder"
count8
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"pang"
count1
8
word"glint"
count2
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count2
11
word"echo"
count5
12
word"eyebrow"
count1
13
word"glinting"
count2
14
word"comfortable"
count1
15
word"silence"
count1
16
word"unspoken"
count3
17
word"desire"
count1
18
word"chill"
count1
19
word"down her spine"
count1
20
word"fleeting"
count1
21
word"pulsed"
count1
22
word"carried the weight"
count1
23
word"sense of"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"weight"
2"pulse"
3"flicker"
4"reminder"
5"measured"
6"echoing"
7"pang"
8"glint"
9"trembled"
10"whisper"
11"echo"
12"eyebrow"
13"glinting"
14"comfortable"
15"silence"
16"unspoken"
17"desire"
18"chill"
19"down her spine"
20"fleeting"
21"pulsed"
22"carried the weight"
23"sense of"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
2
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"The air was thick with"
2"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences101
matches
0"felt a chill"
1"felt the sting"
15.56% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences140
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen80
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2688
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount1764
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Soho1
Raven2
Nest2
Aurora15
Eva1
Silas14
persons
0"Raven"
1"Aurora"
2"Eva"
3"Silas"
places
0"Golden"
1"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"eyes that seemed to have been caught in a moment of quiet desperation"
1"quite reach the corners of her eyes"
2"note that seemed to echo the unspoken regrets hanging in the air"
3"maps that seemed to whisper of distant places, of missions that had never been completed"
4"heartbeat that seemed to sync with the rhythm of their conversation"
5"pulse that seemed to echo the rhythm of their hearts"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2688
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences140
matches(empty)
94.11% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean46.34
std22.22
cv0.479
sampleLengths
082
164
287
384
495
583
649
732
844
930
1072
1131
1239
1362
1457
1522
1645
1745
1833
1933
2044
2121
2291
2372
2434
2513
2618
2744
2853
2923
3072
3121
3272
3340
3451
3533
3645
3744
3819
3960
4015
4125
4220
4354
4473
4551
4665
4722
4842
4919
91.37% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences101
matches
0"been caught"
1"been broken"
2"been caught"
3"been completed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs262
matches
0"was breathing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences140
ratio0.05
matches
0"The door swung open with a soft sigh, and the scent of stale beer mingled with the faint perfume of old wood and something metallic—perhaps the lingering tang of a bar that had seen too many late‑night deals."
1"The sight of it made Aurora’s pulse quicken; she remembered the stories Eva had whispered about the bar’s hidden back room, a place where whispers turned into deals."
2"She felt a flicker of something—perhaps recognition, perhaps something else—before the memory of the scar on her left wrist rose to the surface."
3"She remembered how Silas’s hand had trembled when he opened the door to the secret room, how the air had smelled of cold stone and something metallic—perhaps a hint of the past they both tried to leave behind."
4"Aurora’s gaze drifted to a black‑and‑white photograph on the wall—a portrait of a young man in a uniform, his eyes fixed on something beyond the frame."
5"He looked at her, his gaze steady, the scar on his left wrist—if he had one—hidden beneath his shirt."
6"The air was thick with the scent of old paper and something metallic—perhaps the lingering echo of a past that refused to be entirely buried."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1772
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount53
adverbRatio0.029909706546275394
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.009029345372460496
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences140
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences140
mean19.2
std10.78
cv0.561
sampleLengths
020
115
225
322
412
533
619
738
89
922
1018
1115
1216
1325
1428
1520
1628
1728
1819
1929
2023
2131
2217
2312
2420
2525
267
2714
2821
299
3012
3118
3222
3337
3413
3515
3616
3715
3818
396
4021
4141
4219
4338
4413
459
469
4736
4811
4934
45.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.19285714285714287
totalSentences140
uniqueOpeners27
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences101
matches
0"She tucked the insulated bag"
1"She had never meant to"
2"She moved toward the bar,"
3"He was taller than she"
4"His left leg bore a"
5"She felt a flicker of"
6"She took a breath, feeling"
7"he said, his voice low"
8"She placed the bag on"
9"He nodded, his gaze flicking"
10"She let out a small"
11"She brushed a strand of"
12"She felt a pang, a"
13"She swallowed, the words tasting"
14"He leaned against the bar,"
15"She remembered how Silas’s hand"
16"she said, her voice barely"
17"She felt the weight of"
18"He smiled, a faint, almost"
19"He leaned forward, his elbow"
ratio0.455
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences101
matches
0"The green neon sign flickered"
1"Aurora paused at the curb,"
2"She tucked the insulated bag"
3"The bar’s windows were dark,"
4"She had never meant to"
5"The flat above the Raven’s"
6"The door swung open with"
7"Aurora stepped inside, the dim"
8"The walls were a patchwork"
9"The photographs stared back with"
10"She moved toward the bar,"
11"The hum of conversation was"
12"The sight of it made"
13"Silas stood behind the bar,"
14"He was taller than she"
15"A neatly trimmed beard framed"
16"His left leg bore a"
17"Aurora’s eyes found the silver"
18"She felt a flicker of"
19"The crescent‑shaped mark, a souvenir"
ratio0.96
49.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"Yet, in this dimly lit"
ratio0.01
20.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"The flat above the Raven’s Nest was a convenient roof over her head, a cheap lease that let her keep a roof over her head while the city’s rent rose like a tide…"
1"The door swung open with a soft sigh, and the scent of stale beer mingled with the faint perfume of old wood and something metallic—perhaps the lingering tang o…"
2"In the far corner, a small bookshelf leaned against the wall, its spines a jumble of titles that hinted at a secret beyond the ordinary."
3"He was taller than she remembered, his shoulders broader, his hair now a mixture of auburn and grey streaks that caught the light like lichen on a stone."
4"His left leg bore a slight limp, a subtle shift that made the bar stool under his weight creak."
5"Silas turned, his hazel eyes meeting hers with a mixture of surprise and something that lingered just beyond the surface."
6"The jazz tune swelled, a trumpet wailing a melancholy note that seemed to echo the unspoken regrets hanging in the air."
7"Silas reached out, his hand hovering over the bar, his silver ring catching the light."
8"The secret room was small, its walls lined with maps that seemed to whisper of distant places, of missions that had never been completed."
9"A single wooden table sat in the center, a stack of folders and a glass of amber liquid that had long since gone cold."
10"The air was thick with the scent of old paper and something metallic—perhaps the lingering echo of a past that refused to be entirely buried."
11"The neon sign outside pulsed again, a green heartbeat that seemed to sync with the rhythm of their conversation."
12"The jazz tune swelled, a soft crescendo that carried the weight of unspoken regret and the promise of something new."
13"Aurora stood there, her eyes drifting over the maps, the photographs, the secret room that held the remnants of a life she had once imagined."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"She placed, the clink of metal against wood echoing softly"
1"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
2"she confessed, the words slipping out like a confession"
3"she asked, her voice barely audible over the music"
4"He leaned, his voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she confessed (confess)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.1
leniency0.2
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.08
67.1791%