Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNETGZ42HFC4WNSZW684B3X

Run Details

Duration:
8.1s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The night had settled over Richmond Park like a thick, damp blanket, muffling the distant hum of traffic and the occasional bark of a lone dog. Aurora Carter moved through the winding paths with the practiced ease of someone who had spent countless evenings navigating the city’s backstreets, delivering orders for Yu‑Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress. Her black hair, pulled back into a low ponytail, brushed against the back of her neck as she walked, and the bright blue of her eyes caught the faint glimmer of the streetlamp that flickered above the footpath. She had taken a shortcut through the park after a long shift, a route suggested by Eva, the friend who had urged her to leave the cramped flat above Silas’ bar. The shortcut was supposed to be a quick way to get home, but the map Eva had handed her—drawn in a hurried hand, annotated with a single word, “Grove”—had promised something else. “If you’re looking for answers,” Eva had said, “the Fae Grove is where the veil thins. The pendant will guide you.” Aurora had laughed then, half‑in disbelief, half‑in hope. The Heartstone Pendant, a small silver chain with a deep crimson gemstone the size of a thumbnail, had been slipped into her palm by an unknown benefactor a week earlier. She’d examined it under the fluorescent lights of her flat, noting the faint inner glow that seemed to pulse when she thought of the old legends about Hel portals. She’d never believed in such things, but the scar on her left wrist—a crescent‑shaped line left from a childhood accident—had always been a reminder that she was more attuned to the unseen than most people realized. Now, the park’s familiar paths gave way to a darker, more tangled thicket. The trees grew taller, their branches intertwining overhead to form a vaulted canopy that blocked out the moon. The air grew cooler, carrying a scent of damp earth and something sweet, almost metallic, that seemed to cling to her skin. Aurora’s breath came out in short, visible puffs, and she tightened the grip on the pendant, feeling its faint warmth seep into her palm. She followed the sound of a low, rhythmic rustle that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once. The path narrowed, the ground softening under her boots as she stepped onto a carpet of moss that glowed faintly with the phosphorescence of wildflowers—tiny blossoms that never seemed to wilt, their petals a kaleidoscope of colors that defied the season. She paused, listening. The usual night sounds—crickets, a distant owl—were absent, replaced by a low, humming vibration that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her. The standing stones rose ahead, ancient oaks that had been carved into monolithic shapes by hands long gone. Their bark was knotted and scarred, each one bearing a faint, rune‑like etching that caught the pendant’s glow and reflected it back in a soft, crimson sheen. Aurora stepped between them, feeling the space compress, as if the stones themselves were breathing. She glanced at her wrist, the scar catching the pendant’s light. The crescent mark was a reminder of the accident that had left her with a heightened sense of danger, an instinct that had saved her more than once. She pressed her palm to the stone, feeling the faint pulse of the pendant synchronize with the rhythm of her own heartbeat. The pulse grew steadier, a gentle thrum that seemed to echo through the clearing. A sudden gust of wind rustled the wildflowers, scattering a spray of pollen that hung in the air like a fine mist. Aurora inhaled, tasting the metallic tang of the pollen on her tongue. The world seemed to tilt, the edges of her vision blurring as if the night itself were stretching. She felt a tug at the back of her mind, a whisper that was not a sound but a pressure, urging her forward. She moved deeper into the grove, the stones receding behind her, their silhouettes merging with the darkness. The air grew thicker, each breath a deliberate effort. The humming intensified, now a low, resonant chord that vibrated through her bones. Aurora’s mind raced, cataloguing the anomalies: the absence of ordinary night sounds, the unnatural glow of the flowers, the way the time seemed to stretch and compress around her. She stopped at the center of the clearing, where the ground rose slightly, a shallow depression that was carpeted with a layer of soft, silver‑gray moss. The pendant’s glow flared, the crimson gemstone pulsing in time with the humming. Aurora knelt, brushing the moss aside with the heel of her hand. Beneath the moss lay a shallow, circular indentation in the earth, as if something had been pulled out, leaving a perfect, dark void. She leaned over, peering into the darkness. The void was not empty; it was a surface of liquid darkness that rippled like water, though no water was present. The surface reflected the pendant’s light, sending back a distorted, wavering image of the standing stones, the flowers, and Aurora herself, all twisted in a way that made her skin crawl. A sudden, sharp crack echoed through the clearing, like a branch snapping under a weight. Aurora’s head snapped up. She could not see any source of the sound, but the hairs on the back of her neck rose. The hum shifted, a discordant note threading through the chord, as if the grove itself were reacting to her presence. She stood, clutching the pendant tighter. The darkness of the void seemed to pulse, sending a ripple of cold up her spine. Aurora’s thoughts turned to the stories Eva had whispered—stories of the Fae, of portals that linked worlds, of bargains made in the shadows. She had never believed in bargains, but the pendant’s warmth suggested something was near, something that recognized her. A soft rustling came from the edge of her vision. Aurora turned her head, expecting to see a rabbit or a nightbird, but the darkness held nothing but the silhouettes of the standing stones. Yet, as she watched, a faint movement flickered at the periphery—a shape, barely discernible, shifting like a shadow caught in a slow, deliberate dance. It was not a leaf, not a wind, but something that seemed to have a mind of its own. She swallowed, feeling the lump rise in her throat. “Hello?” she called, her voice barely more than a whisper. The words hung in the air, swallowed by the humming. No answer came, only the soft, rhythmic thrum that seemed to sync with her heartbeat. Aurora’s eyes darted back to the void. The surface was now rippling more violently, as if something beneath it was stirring. The crimson glow of the pendant intensified, casting a thin halo of light that made the wildflowers’ petals appear to pulse in time with the heartbeat of the grove. The scent of the flowers grew sharper, more pungent, and the metallic tang turned into a sour, iron‑like smell that made her nostrils flare. She felt a cold draft brush past her cheek, though the air was still. The sensation was like a breath on the back of her neck, a whisper that seemed to say, “You are not alone.” Aurora’s hand tightened around the pendant, the chain digging into her palm. She could feel the faint scar on her left wrist, a reminder of the accident that had left her with a heightened sense of danger, an instinct that had saved her more than once. She took a step forward, the moss giving way beneath her boots with a soft, muffled sigh. The standing stones seemed to close in, their shadows lengthening, stretching across the ground like dark fingers. The humming grew louder, now a chorus of low, resonant notes that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. A low, guttural laugh—more a vibration than a sound—rippled through the clearing. It was not a laugh of joy, but a mocking, ancient chuckle that seemed to echo from the very stones themselves. Aurora’s breath caught. She turned, trying to locate its source, but the darkness was impenetrable. The only thing she could see was the faint, pulsing glow of the pendant, a beacon in a sea of black. She felt a pressure on her mind, a weight that pressed against her thoughts, trying to pry open a door she didn’t know existed. The pressure was accompanied by images—a flash of a child’s face, a silhouette of a woman with eyes like polished amber, a hand reaching out from the void, fingers elongated and twisted. Aurora’s heart hammered against her ribs, and she forced herself to focus on the present, on the feel of the moss under her boots, the scent of the flowers, the warmth of the pendant against her skin. “Who’s there?” she demanded, her voice steadier now, a thin thread of determination cutting through the fear. The humming faltered for a heartbeat, then resumed, as if the grove was listening, deciding whether to answer. The void’s surface rippled again, and this time a shape emerged—a silhouette of a figure, tall and slender, its outline blurred as if made of smoke. The figure hovered just above the ground, its limbs elongated, its head tilted at an impossible angle. Aurora could not see its face, but she could feel its gaze, a cold, probing stare that seemed to look straight through her. The figure raised a hand, and the pendant’s glow flared, casting a crimson light that illuminated the clearing in a stark, eerie hue. The wildflowers seemed to recoil, their petals curling inward as if in pain. The standing stones trembled, the ancient bark cracking in places, releasing a faint, piney scent that mixed with the iron tang. Aurora’s mind raced. She remembered the stories of Hel portals—gateways that could be opened by those who carried a token of the old world, a Heartstone. The pendant was that token, and she had felt its pulse growing stronger as she approached the grove. She had come for answers, for a way to escape the shadows of her past, for a chance to find something beyond the ordinary grind of deliveries and cramped apartments. Now the portal was before her, a living thing that seemed to breathe, to watch, to judge. Aurora’s hand tightened around the pendant, the silver chain biting into her palm. She could feel the weight of the scar on her wrist, the reminder that she had survived before, that she could survive this. She forced herself to speak again, her voice a steady whisper that seemed to cut through the humming. “What do you want?” The figure’s silhouette wavered, and for a moment the darkness seemed to recede, revealing a glimpse of a cavernous space beyond the void—a realm of twisted trees, luminous fungi, and a sky that was a perpetual twilight. The figure’s hand lowered, and the humming softened, turning into a low, mournful sigh. A sudden, sharp crack echoed again, this time from the standing stones themselves. One of the ancient oaks split, a fissure opening along its bark, revealing a hidden cavity filled with a soft, amber light. From within the cavity came a faint, melodic humming, like a lullaby sung by unseen voices. Aurora’s eyes widened. She felt a tug at the edge of her consciousness, a pull toward the cavity, toward the light. The pendant’s glow intensified, the crimson gemstone now pulsing in perfect rhythm with the amber light emanating from the oak’s fissure. The figure’s silhouette dissolved into a swirl of dark mist, which rose and coalesced around the cavity, forming a vortex that seemed to draw the very air toward it. She took a step toward the oak, her feet moving of if guided by an unseen force. The moss under her boots gave way, revealing a thin, silver thread that led from the ground to the cavity’s opening. Aurora followed the thread, her hand brushing against the bark, feeling the roughness of the oak, the faint warmth of the pendant seeping into her skin. As she approached the fissure, the air grew colder, the metallic scent sharpening into a sharp, almost bitter tang. The humming grew louder, now a chorus of voices that seemed to speak in a language she could not understand yet felt oddly familiar. The amber light flickered, casting shadows that danced along the standing stones, turning them into grotesque silhouettes that seemed to move of their own accord. Aurora hesitated at the edge of the fissure, the pendant’s glow now a beacon that illuminated the darkness beyond. She could feel the weight of the scar on her wrist, a reminder of the accident that had left her with a heightened sense of danger, an instinct that had saved her more than once. She thought of Eva’s words, of the promise of answers, of the yearning that had driven her to this pocket of the world where the veil thinned. She inhaled, the cold air filling her lungs, and stepped into the fissure. The amber light enveloped her, wrapping her in a warm embrace that contrasted sharply with the chill of the night outside. The humming rose to a crescendo, then suddenly fell silent, as if the world had held its breath. The void behind her closed, the standing stones returning to their silent, unmoving state. The wildflowers ceased their glow, their petals drooping as if exhausted. The night outside the grove seemed to pause, the moon hanging low, a thin sliver of silver that barely illuminated the path back to the city. Aurora stood alone in the amber glow, the Heartstone Pendant pulsing against her chest, its crimson light now a steady, calm rhythm. She felt a presence around her, not hostile, but ancient, waiting, as if the grove itself were a living, breathing entity that had finally acknowledged her arrival. She closed her eyes, letting the warmth of the pendant seep into her bones, feeling the faint echo of the figure’s voice—an echo that seemed to whisper, “You have crossed, but the journey has only begun.” When she opened her eyes again, the amber light was gone, replaced by the soft, silvery glow of the moon filtering through the trees. The standing stones stood as they always had, ancient and indifferent. The wildflowers glistened with dew, their colors muted but still vibrant. The air was still, the humming replaced by the distant, faint chirp of a cricket. Aurora turned, her gaze falling on the narrow path that led back toward the park’s main entrance. The pendant’s glow had dimmed, its pulse now a gentle, steady beat that matched her own heart. She felt the scar on her wrist, a small crescent that caught the moonlight, a reminder of the past and of the resilience that had brought her this far. She took a deep breath, the night air filling her lungs, and began to walk, each step echoing on the mossy ground. The grove behind her seemed to recede, the ancient oaks retreating into the darkness, as if the pocket between Earth and the Fae realm had sealed itself once more. Aurora’s mind raced, the images of the cavernous space beyond the fissure still vivid, the sense of being watched lingering like a half‑remembered dream. She knew she would return, that the Heartstone would call to her again, that the mysteries of the Fae Grove would not be satisfied with a single night. But for now, she walked toward the city lights, the sound of her own footsteps a steady rhythm against the night’s silence, the weight of the pendant against her chest a promise that she was not alone, even in the darkest of places.
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native_tokens_prompt742
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
87.50% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Aurora’s hand tightened around [around]"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.125
88.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2636
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"very"
count3
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slightly"
2"sharply"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2636
totalAiIsms71
found
0
word"practiced ease"
count1
1
word"navigating"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count3
3
word"pulse"
count7
4
word"reminder"
count6
5
word"familiar"
count2
6
word"warmth"
count5
7
word"rhythmic"
count2
8
word"kaleidoscope"
count1
9
word"etching"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count4
11
word"echo"
count4
12
word"whisper"
count5
13
word"vibrated"
count1
14
word"raced"
count3
15
word"perfect"
count2
16
word"wavering"
count1
17
word"echoed"
count2
18
word"weight"
count5
19
word"dance"
count1
20
word"could feel"
count4
21
word"beacon"
count2
22
word"stark"
count1
23
word"trembled"
count1
24
word"wavered"
count1
25
word"yearning"
count1
26
word"chill"
count1
27
word"echoing"
count1
28
word"footsteps"
count1
29
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"practiced ease"
1"navigating"
2"flickered"
3"pulse"
4"reminder"
5"familiar"
6"warmth"
7"rhythmic"
8"kaleidoscope"
9"etching"
10"sense of"
11"echo"
12"whisper"
13"vibrated"
14"raced"
15"perfect"
16"wavering"
17"echoed"
18"weight"
19"dance"
20"could feel"
21"beacon"
22"stark"
23"trembled"
24"wavered"
25"yearning"
26"chill"
27"echoing"
28"footsteps"
29"silence"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count2
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences129
matches
0"felt a tug"
1"felt a tug"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount28
narrationSentences129
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appear to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2621
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount2564
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Carter1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Eva5
Aurora24
Heartstone4
Pendant2
Hel2
Fae3
Earth1
Grove1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Cheung"
2"Eva"
3"Aurora"
4"Heartstone"
5"Pendant"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Earth"
4"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences123
glossingSentenceCount16
matches
0"glow that seemed to pulse when she thought of the old legends about Hel portals"
1"rustle that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once"
2"vibration that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her"
3"thrum that seemed to echo through the clearing"
4"something that seemed to have a mind of its own"
5"thrum that seemed to sync with her heartbeat"
6"whisper that seemed to say, Aurora’s hand tightened around the pendant, the chain digging into her palm"
7"notes that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
8"chuckle that seemed to echo from the very stones themselves"
9"stare that seemed to look straight through her"
10"thing that seemed to breathe, to watch, to judge"
11"whisper that seemed to cut through the humming"
12"vortex that seemed to draw the very air toward it"
13"voices that seemed to speak in a language she could not understand yet felt oddly familiar"
14"silhouettes that seemed to move of their own accord"
15"echo that seemed to whisper"
9.23% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords1.908
wordCount2621
matches
0"not a sound but a pressure, urging her forward"
1"not a leaf, not a wind, but something"
2"not a wind, but something"
3"not a laugh of joy, but a mocking, ancient chuckle"
4"not hostile, but ancient, waiting, as if the grove itself were a living, brea"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences130
matches
0"was that token"
1"return, that the"
28.84% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean65.53
std16.44
cv0.251
sampleLengths
093
184
2103
377
487
560
675
775
868
974
1059
1158
1263
1377
1444
1574
1682
1755
1869
1993
2035
2166
2257
2374
2453
2522
2651
2751
2871
2964
3068
3181
3252
3351
3449
3536
3661
3763
3875
3971
80.78% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences129
matches
0"was supposed"
1"been slipped"
2"been carved"
3"was knotted"
4"was carpeted"
5"been pulled"
6"was accompanied"
7"was gone"
8"being watched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs409
matches
0"were breathing"
1"were stretching"
2"were reacting"
3"was listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences130
ratio0.1
matches
0"The shortcut was supposed to be a quick way to get home, but the map Eva had handed her—drawn in a hurried hand, annotated with a single word, “Grove”—had promised something else."
1"She’d never believed in such things, but the scar on her left wrist—a crescent‑shaped line left from a childhood accident—had always been a reminder that she was more attuned to the unseen than most people realized."
2"The path narrowed, the ground softening under her boots as she stepped onto a carpet of moss that glowed faintly with the phosphorescence of wildflowers—tiny blossoms that never seemed to wilt, their petals a kaleidoscope of colors that defied the season."
3"The usual night sounds—crickets, a distant owl—were absent, replaced by a low, humming vibration that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her."
4"The void was not empty; it was a surface of liquid darkness that rippled like water, though no water was present."
5"Aurora’s thoughts turned to the stories Eva had whispered—stories of the Fae, of portals that linked worlds, of bargains made in the shadows."
6"Yet, as she watched, a faint movement flickered at the periphery—a shape, barely discernible, shifting like a shadow caught in a slow, deliberate dance."
7"A low, guttural laugh—more a vibration than a sound—rippled through the clearing."
8"The pressure was accompanied by images—a flash of a child’s face, a silhouette of a woman with eyes like polished amber, a hand reaching out from the void, fingers elongated and twisted."
9"The void’s surface rippled again, and this time a shape emerged—a silhouette of a figure, tall and slender, its outline blurred as if made of smoke."
10"She remembered the stories of Hel portals—gateways that could be opened by those who carried a token of the old world, a Heartstone."
11"The figure’s silhouette wavered, and for a moment the darkness seemed to recede, revealing a glimpse of a cavernous space beyond the void—a realm of twisted trees, luminous fungi, and a sky that was a perpetual twilight."
12"She closed her eyes, letting the warmth of the pendant seep into her bones, feeling the faint echo of the figure’s voice—an echo that seemed to whisper, “You have crossed, but the journey has only begun.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2598
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount67
adverbRatio0.025789068514241724
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.004618937644341801
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean20.16
std8.44
cv0.419
sampleLengths
026
129
238
331
432
521
68
730
829
936
1013
1118
1222
1324
1419
1541
163
1724
1818
1927
2015
2111
2228
2322
2414
2522
2612
2718
2823
2917
309
3113
3229
3326
3413
3512
3623
377
3821
3931
4015
414
4219
4320
446
4516
4623
4718
4810
4924
28.46% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.15384615384615385
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners20
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
ratio0
95.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences129
matches
0"Her black hair, pulled back"
1"She had taken a shortcut"
2"She’d examined it under the"
3"She’d never believed in such"
4"She followed the sound of"
5"She paused, listening."
6"Their bark was knotted and"
7"She glanced at her wrist,"
8"She pressed her palm to"
9"She felt a tug at"
10"She moved deeper into the"
11"She stopped at the center"
12"She leaned over, peering into"
13"She could not see any"
14"She stood, clutching the pendant"
15"She had never believed in"
16"It was not a leaf,"
17"She swallowed, feeling the lump"
18"she called, her voice barely"
19"She felt a cold draft"
ratio0.31
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount119
totalSentences129
matches
0"The night had settled over"
1"Aurora Carter moved through the"
2"Her black hair, pulled back"
3"She had taken a shortcut"
4"The shortcut was supposed to"
5"Eva had said"
6"Aurora had laughed then, half‑in"
7"The Heartstone Pendant, a small"
8"She’d examined it under the"
9"She’d never believed in such"
10"The trees grew taller, their"
11"The air grew cooler, carrying"
12"Aurora’s breath came out in"
13"She followed the sound of"
14"The path narrowed, the ground"
15"She paused, listening."
16"The usual night sounds—crickets, a"
17"The standing stones rose ahead,"
18"Their bark was knotted and"
19"Aurora stepped between them, feeling"
ratio0.922
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences129
matches
0"Now, the park’s familiar paths"
1"Yet, as she watched, a"
2"Now the portal was before"
ratio0.023
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences110
technicalSentenceCount39
matches
0"Aurora Carter moved through the winding paths with the practiced ease of someone who had spent countless evenings navigating the city’s backstreets, delivering …"
1"Her black hair, pulled back into a low ponytail, brushed against the back of her neck as she walked, and the bright blue of her eyes caught the faint glimmer of…"
2"She’d examined it under the fluorescent lights of her flat, noting the faint inner glow that seemed to pulse when she thought of the old legends about Hel porta…"
3"The path narrowed, the ground softening under her boots as she stepped onto a carpet of moss that glowed faintly with the phosphorescence of wildflowers—tiny bl…"
4"The usual night sounds—crickets, a distant owl—were absent, replaced by a low, humming vibration that seemed to emanate from the very earth beneath her."
5"The standing stones rose ahead, ancient oaks that had been carved into monolithic shapes by hands long gone."
6"Aurora stepped between them, feeling the space compress, as if the stones themselves were breathing."
7"A sudden gust of wind rustled the wildflowers, scattering a spray of pollen that hung in the air like a fine mist."
8"The world seemed to tilt, the edges of her vision blurring as if the night itself were stretching."
9"She felt a tug at the back of her mind, a whisper that was not a sound but a pressure, urging her forward."
10"She moved deeper into the grove, the stones receding behind her, their silhouettes merging with the darkness."
11"The humming intensified, now a low, resonant chord that vibrated through her bones."
12"She stopped at the center of the clearing, where the ground rose slightly, a shallow depression that was carpeted with a layer of soft, silver‑gray moss."
13"Beneath the moss lay a shallow, circular indentation in the earth, as if something had been pulled out, leaving a perfect, dark void."
14"The surface reflected the pendant’s light, sending back a distorted, wavering image of the standing stones, the flowers, and Aurora herself, all twisted in a wa…"
15"The hum shifted, a discordant note threading through the chord, as if the grove itself were reacting to her presence."
16"Aurora’s thoughts turned to the stories Eva had whispered—stories of the Fae, of portals that linked worlds, of bargains made in the shadows."
17"She had never believed in bargains, but the pendant’s warmth suggested something was near, something that recognized her."
18"The surface was now rippling more violently, as if something beneath it was stirring."
19"The scent of the flowers grew sharper, more pungent, and the metallic tang turned into a sour, iron‑like smell that made her nostrils flare."
20"The standing stones seemed to close in, their shadows lengthening, stretching across the ground like dark fingers."
21"The humming grew louder, now a chorus of low, resonant notes that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once."
22"The humming faltered for a heartbeat, then resumed, as if the grove was listening, deciding whether to answer."
23"The figure raised a hand, and the pendant’s glow flared, casting a crimson light that illuminated the clearing in a stark, eerie hue."
24"The wildflowers seemed to recoil, their petals curling inward as if in pain."
25"The standing stones trembled, the ancient bark cracking in places, releasing a faint, piney scent that mixed with the iron tang."
26"The figure’s silhouette wavered, and for a moment the darkness seemed to recede, revealing a glimpse of a cavernous space beyond the void—a realm of twisted tre…"
27"The figure’s silhouette dissolved into a swirl of dark mist, which rose and coalesced around the cavity, forming a vortex that seemed to draw the very air towar…"
28"The moss under her boots gave way, revealing a thin, silver thread that led from the ground to the cavity’s opening."
29"Aurora followed the thread, her hand brushing against the bark, feeling the roughness of the oak, the faint warmth of the pendant seeping into her skin."
30"The humming grew louder, now a chorus of voices that seemed to speak in a language she could not understand yet felt oddly familiar."
31"The amber light flickered, casting shadows that danced along the standing stones, turning them into grotesque silhouettes that seemed to move of their own accor…"
32"Aurora hesitated at the edge of the fissure, the pendant’s glow now a beacon that illuminated the darkness beyond."
33"The amber light enveloped her, wrapping her in a warm embrace that contrasted sharply with the chill of the night outside."
34"The wildflowers ceased their glow, their petals drooping as if exhausted."
35"She felt a presence around her, not hostile, but ancient, waiting, as if the grove itself were a living, breathing entity that had finally acknowledged her arri…"
36"The pendant’s glow had dimmed, its pulse now a gentle, steady beat that matched her own heart."
37"She felt the scar on her wrist, a small crescent that caught the moonlight, a reminder of the past and of the resilience that had brought her this far."
38"The grove behind her seemed to recede, the ancient oaks retreating into the darkness, as if the pocket between Earth and the Fae realm had sealed itself once mo…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she called, her voice barely more than a whisper"
1"Aurora’s hand tightened around, the chain digging into her palm"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences7
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.286
59.7740%