Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEVBS2ZCRAKB4JA7BZCEX1

Run Details

Duration:
10.4s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The green neon sign above the doorway flickered, a thin line of light that cut through the perpetual drizzle of Soho’s night. Aurora Carter slipped the coat from her shoulders, the dampness of the rain clinging to the fabric of her black hair, and pushed the door open. The bell above the entrance gave a soft, metallic chime that seemed too bright for a place that had earned its reputation by dimming the world outside. Inside, the air was warm, scented with stale whiskey and the faint tang of fried onions. The walls were a collage of old maps, their borders frayed, and black‑and‑white photographs of strangers whose eyes seemed to follow you across the room. A low hum of conversation rose from the patrons, punctuated by the occasional clink of glass. In the corner, a battered leather armchair faced a wall of bookshelves that looked more like a shrine to forgotten routes than a place to keep novels. She scanned the room, her bright blue eyes catching on a familiar silhouette behind the bar. Silas Blackwood—his name still tasted like an old secret, a whisper from a time when she was a student of law and he was a man who moved in shadows. He was taller than she remembered, his hair now a mixture of auburn and grey that caught the light like ash. A neatly trimmed beard framed his jaw, and his hazel eyes, though softened by age, still held a glint of something unspoken. He lifted a glass, the motion smooth despite the slight limp in his left leg, a reminder of an old knee injury that had become a permanent part of his gait. Aurora’s breath caught. She had not seen him in years, not since the night she fled Cardiff after the last argument with Evan, the ex who had turned love into a bruise that never healed. She had imagined him as a ghost, a figure in the background of her memory, but here he was, alive, breathing, the signet ring on his right hand catching the amber light as he turned the glass in his palm. Silas glanced up, his gaze landing on her. For a heartbeat, the bar seemed to hold its breath. The scar on his left wrist—small, crescent‑shaped, a relic of a childhood accident—caught the light as he raised his hand to wipe a spill. He smiled, a thin line that did not quite reach his eyes. “Aurora,” he said, his voice low, the timbre of someone who had spoken into radios in far‑off rooms. “Or should I call you Rory?” She swallowed, feeling the weight of the delivery bag she had just set down on the bar, its contents of steaming rice and battered fish now forgotten. “Silas,” she replied, the name feeling both a greeting and a question. “It’s been a long time.” He nodded, the motion deliberate, as if measuring the distance between the past and the present. “Too long, perhaps. What brings you to The Raven’s Nest?” She glanced around, noting the green neon sign that painted the bar’s interior in an eerie hue. The secret back room, the one hidden behind the bookshelf, was a rumor among the regulars—a place for clandestine meetings. She had never needed it, but now it seemed a fitting metaphor for the conversation she was about to have. “I’m delivering a order for Yu‑Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress,” she said, gesturing to the bag. “Just finished a shift. I live above the bar, actually. The flat is… it’s a small place, but it’s mine.” His eyes flicked to the scar on her left wrist, a detail he had never missed. “You still have that scar,” he observed, his tone gentle, almost amused. “It’s a reminder of the past, isn’t it?” She lifted her hand, feeling the faint ridge where the skin had healed. The memory of the accident—an old bicycle, a fall, the sharp pain—was a distant echo compared to the more recent bruises of heartache. She thought of the night she left Evan, the way the world had seemed to tilt, the way she had packed a suitcase and taken a train to London without looking back. “It’s a reminder,” she said, her voice steadier than she felt. “Of how I survived.” Silas set the glass down with a soft thud, his signet ring glinting. “You always were clever, Rory. You could think your way out of any mess. I remember the night you solved that puzzle in the library—how you turned a dead end into a new route.” She smiled, a small, private curve of her lips. “You were always the one who knew the shortcuts, Silas. The ones that weren’t on any map.” He chuckled, a low sound that seemed to vibrate the very wood of the bar. “Maps are for those who want to see the world in lines. I learned early that the best routes are the ones you make yourself.” The conversation slipped into a rhythm, each sentence a step across a bridge that had been built, then abandoned, then repaired. The bar’s patrons continued their murmurs, the clink of glasses, the soft jazz that floated from a hidden speaker. Outside, the rain fell in steady sheets, the city’s neon lights blurring into watercolor. Aurora’s mind drifted to the night she had first met Silas, a chance encounter at a university fundraiser where she had been a nervous law student, and he a retired operative with a reputation for being both intimidating and oddly comforting. He had offered her a drink, and she had accepted, feeling the weight of his presence like a shield. He had spoken of his time in Prague, of the operation that went wrong, of the knee that never healed. She had listened, absorbing his stories like a sponge. Now, standing in his bar, the weight of those stories seemed heavier, as if the years had added layers of dust to the old photographs on the walls. She could see the shadows behind the rows of maps, the hidden corners where secrets lived. “Do you ever regret… the choices you made?” she asked, the question slipping out before she could catch it. Silas’s eyes lingered on the signet ring, the silver gleam catching the light. He took a breath, his hand resting on the bar, the slight limp in his left leg making the motion deliberate. “Regret is a strange companion,” he said. “It follows you like a shadow, but it also tells you where you’ve been. I regret the operation in Prague—lost men, lost trust. I regret the way I left the service. But I also cherish the moments that followed, the ones that gave me a purpose beyond the field.” She thought of her own regrets: the night she had left Evan, the way she had abandoned her studies, the way she had taken a job delivering food to pay rent. She had always told herself that she was surviving, that she was moving forward, but the scar on her wrist reminded her that she was also carrying a piece of the past that never quite healed. “I think about the things I left behind,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper. “My father’s expectations, the law, the idea that I would become… something respectable. I thought I was escaping, but maybe I was just running.” Silas placed a hand on the bar, his fingers brushing the polished wood. “Running isn’t always cowardice, Rory. Sometimes it’s the only way to find a new road. You’ve built a life here, above this very bar. You’ve turned a delivery job into something more than a paycheck. You’ve survived, and that’s a kind of triumph.” She looked at the scar again, feeling the faint ache of the old wound. “I’m not sure I’m a triumph,” she admitted. “I’m just… here.” He smiled, the expression softening. “You’re more than here, Aurora. You’re a thread in a tapestry that stretches far beyond this bar. You’ve touched lives you don’t even know. You’ve carried a piece of me, of this place, without realizing it.” She felt a sudden pang, as if the weight of his words pressed against her ribs. The bar’s dim light seemed to focus on the two of them, the neon green casting an otherworldly glow on the scar, the signet ring, the maps that lined the walls. “Do you ever think about the secret room?” she asked, half‑joking, half‑curious. “The one behind the bookshelf?” He chuckled, a sound that seemed to echo off the old photographs. “I’ve used it more than you think. It’s where I meet people who need a listening ear, where I keep the old ghosts at bay. It’s a place for those who can’t speak openly. But it’s also a reminder that some doors should stay closed.” She imagined the hidden room, a narrow space behind rows of books, a place where whispers could be heard without the world’s ears. She imagined herself, a young law student, standing in that room, listening to a man who had once been a spy, learning about the world beyond her textbooks. “Do you ever wish you could go back?” she asked, the question hanging between them like a fragile glass ornament. Silas’s eyes softened, the hazel turning a shade darker. “Every day,” he confessed. “But the past is a place you can only visit in memory. You can’t stay there. You can only bring what you learned forward.” She thought of the night she had left Cardiff, the way the train had rattled through the countryside, the way the rain had hammered the windows of the carriage. She thought of the moment she had first set foot in London, the way the city had seemed both alien and inviting. She thought of Silas, of his bar, of the neon sign that had become a beacon in the darkness. “You’ve changed,” she said, the words tentative. “You’re not the Spymaster I heard about in stories. You’re… something else.” He tilted his head, the slight limp making his movement deliberate. “I’m a man who has learned to listen more than he speaks. I’m a bar owner who knows that people come here for more than drinks. I’m a mentor, perhaps, for those who need a hand to steady them. And I’m a man who still carries a scar, though not the one you see on my wrist.” She laughed, a short, breathy sound. “We both have scars, then.” He nodded, his signet ring catching the neon light. “And we both have stories. Some we tell, some we keep hidden. The secret room is a reminder that some stories need a quiet place.” She looked around the bar, the old maps, the photographs, the green neon sign that seemed to pulse with a life of its own. She realized that the weight of time was not just in the years that had passed, but in the moments that had shaped them—each decision, each regret, each scar. “Do you ever feel… lonely?” she asked, the question slipping out before she could stop it. “Even with all the people around you?” Silas’s eyes lingered on the scar on her left wrist, a quiet empathy passing through them. “Loneliness is a companion I’ve learned to sit with,” he said. “It’s not a void; it’s a space where you can hear yourself. In a bar like this, you hear the murmurs of many lives, but the silence between them is where the truth lives.” She thought of the empty spaces in her own life, the moments when she had stood alone in a cramped flat, the night she had stared at the ceiling, listening to the rain, wondering if she had made the right choices. She thought of the weight of unspoken regret that settled like dust on the shelves of the bar, unseen but present. “I think we’re both trying to fill those spaces,” she said, her voice barely above the hum of conversation. “With work, with friends, with… whatever we can find.” Silas placed a hand on the bar, his fingers brushing the wood, the signet ring catching the light. “And sometimes, the best way to fill them is to let someone else sit beside you for a while.” She felt a sudden urge to reach out, to touch the signet ring, to feel the cool metal against her skin. Instead, she lifted her glass, the clink of crystal echoing through the bar. “To old friends,” she toasted, a smile forming at the corners of her mouth. He lifted his own glass, the amber liquid catching the neon glow. “To new beginnings,” he replied, his eyes meeting hers, the weight of years melting into a shared moment. The rain outside intensified, the city’s streets turning into ribbons of silver. Inside, the bar seemed to hold its breath, the neon sign flickering with a steady rhythm. The secret room behind the bookshelf remained hidden, its door unmarked, a silent witness to the conversations that unfolded in the dim light. Aurora felt the scar on her wrist throb faintly, a reminder that the past was never truly gone. She felt Silas’s limp, the way he shifted his weight, a sign of a wound that had never fully healed. She felt the weight of time, of unspoken regret, of the choices that had led them to this moment. She took a sip of her drink, the flavors of the Golden Empress mingling with the bar’s smoky atmosphere. She looked at Silas, his hazel eyes reflecting the green neon, his beard catching the light. She realized that the man before her was both the Spymaster of her memories and the quiet bar owner of the present—a man who had changed, and yet, in some ways, remained the same. The conversation drifted, moving from the past to the present, from regrets to hopes. They spoke of the maps on the walls, of the hidden room, of the people who came and went, each story a thread in the tapestry of the bar. The night stretched on, the rain outside turning into a steady drizzle, the neon sign humming like a heart. When she finally left, the door chimed behind her, the green light spilling onto the wet pavement. She paused, looking back at the bar, at Silas standing behind the counter, his signet ring catching the last of the neon glow. She felt the weight of the night settle into her bones, a reminder that time could not erase the scar, but could soften its edges. She walked down the street, the rain cooling her skin, the city’s lights reflecting in puddles. The secret room remained hidden, its door unopened, but she knew that the space it represented—quiet, unspoken, waiting for a moment of truth—was now a part of her own story. The weight of time, the unspoken regret, and the promise of new beginnings walked with her, step by step, as she disappeared into the night.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.419
leniency0.837
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2511
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2511
totalAiIsms46
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"glint"
count1
5
word"unspoken"
count5
6
word"reminder"
count7
7
word"weight"
count11
8
word"clandestine"
count1
9
word"flicked"
count1
10
word"echo"
count2
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"encounter"
count1
13
word"comforting"
count1
14
word"tapestry"
count2
15
word"pang"
count1
16
word"otherworldly"
count1
17
word"beacon"
count1
18
word"pulse"
count1
19
word"silence"
count1
20
word"crystal"
count1
21
word"echoing"
count1
22
word"throb"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"scanned"
2"familiar"
3"whisper"
4"glint"
5"unspoken"
6"reminder"
7"weight"
8"clandestine"
9"flicked"
10"echo"
11"glinting"
12"encounter"
13"comforting"
14"tapestry"
15"pang"
16"otherworldly"
17"beacon"
18"pulse"
19"silence"
20"crystal"
21"echoing"
22"throb"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences104
matches(empty)
19.23% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences104
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2499
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1878
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Carter1
Blackwood1
Cardiff2
Evan3
London2
Silas13
Prague1
Golden1
Empress1
Spymaster1
Aurora4
persons
0"Carter"
1"Blackwood"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
4"Empress"
5"Aurora"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"tasted like an old secret, a whisper from"
1"not quite reach his eyes"
2"as if measuring the distance between the past and the present"
3"sound that seemed to vibrate the very wood of the bar"
4"seemed heavier as if the years had added layers of dust to the old photographs on the walls"
5"sound that seemed to echo off the old photographs"
6"sign that seemed to pulse with a life of its own"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.4
wordCount2499
matches
0"not just in the years that had passed, but in the moments"
63.31% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences129
matches
0"surviving, that she"
1"realized that the"
2"realized that the"
3"knew that the"
87.50% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean49
std22.36
cv0.456
sampleLengths
075
184
2120
375
454
524
644
726
857
935
1036
1168
1215
1347
1426
1540
1654
1789
1844
1919
2090
2167
2240
2356
2425
2541
2647
2717
2857
2951
3020
3137
3270
3319
3468
3511
3634
3753
3823
3961
4062
4128
4237
4348
4430
4551
4657
4769
4862
4965
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"been built"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs294
matches
0"was surviving"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences129
ratio0.062
matches
0"Silas Blackwood—his name still tasted like an old secret, a whisper from a time when she was a student of law and he was a man who moved in shadows."
1"The scar on his left wrist—small, crescent‑shaped, a relic of a childhood accident—caught the light as he raised his hand to wipe a spill."
2"The secret back room, the one hidden behind the bookshelf, was a rumor among the regulars—a place for clandestine meetings."
3"The memory of the accident—an old bicycle, a fall, the sharp pain—was a distant echo compared to the more recent bruises of heartache."
4"She realized that the weight of time was not just in the years that had passed, but in the moments that had shaped them—each decision, each regret, each scar."
5"“It’s not a void; it’s a space where you can hear yourself. In a bar like this, you hear the murmurs of many lives, but the silence between them is where the truth lives.”"
6"She realized that the man before her was both the Spymaster of her memories and the quiet bar owner of the present—a man who had changed, and yet, in some ways, remained the same."
7"The secret room remained hidden, its door unopened, but she knew that the space it represented—quiet, unspoken, waiting for a moment of truth—was now a part of her own story."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1888
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.01694915254237288
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.004766949152542373
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean19.37
std10.01
cv0.517
sampleLengths
022
126
227
316
425
516
627
716
830
921
1022
1131
123
1332
1440
158
1610
1724
1812
1918
206
2127
2212
235
2416
2510
2617
2720
2820
2915
3020
3116
3212
338
3413
3523
3632
3711
384
3913
4034
419
4217
4315
4425
4521
4619
4714
4841
4919
36.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2713178294573643
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners35
33.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"Instead, she lifted her glass,"
ratio0.01
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences100
matches
0"She scanned the room, her"
1"He was taller than she"
2"He lifted a glass, the"
3"She had not seen him"
4"She had imagined him as"
5"He smiled, a thin line"
6"he said, his voice low,"
7"She swallowed, feeling the weight"
8"she replied, the name feeling"
9"He nodded, the motion deliberate,"
10"She glanced around, noting the"
11"She had never needed it,"
12"she said, gesturing to the"
13"His eyes flicked to the"
14"he observed, his tone gentle,"
15"She lifted her hand, feeling"
16"She thought of the night"
17"she said, her voice steadier"
18"She smiled, a small, private"
19"He chuckled, a low sound"
ratio0.63
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences100
matches
0"The green neon sign above"
1"Aurora Carter slipped the coat"
2"The bell above the entrance"
3"The walls were a collage"
4"A low hum of conversation"
5"She scanned the room, her"
6"Silas Blackwood—his name still tasted"
7"He was taller than she"
8"A neatly trimmed beard framed"
9"He lifted a glass, the"
10"Aurora’s breath caught."
11"She had not seen him"
12"She had imagined him as"
13"Silas glanced up, his gaze"
14"The scar on his left"
15"He smiled, a thin line"
16"he said, his voice low,"
17"She swallowed, feeling the weight"
18"she replied, the name feeling"
19"He nodded, the motion deliberate,"
ratio0.92
50.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"Now, standing in his bar,"
ratio0.01
14.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"The bell above the entrance gave a soft, metallic chime that seemed too bright for a place that had earned its reputation by dimming the world outside."
1"He lifted a glass, the motion smooth despite the slight limp in his left leg, a reminder of an old knee injury that had become a permanent part of his gait."
2"He nodded, the motion deliberate, as if measuring the distance between the past and the present."
3"The bar’s patrons continued their murmurs, the clink of glasses, the soft jazz that floated from a hidden speaker."
4"Now, standing in his bar, the weight of those stories seemed heavier, as if the years had added layers of dust to the old photographs on the walls."
5"He took a breath, his hand resting on the bar, the slight limp in his left leg making the motion deliberate."
6"She felt a sudden pang, as if the weight of his words pressed against her ribs."
7"She imagined herself, a young law student, standing in that room, listening to a man who had once been a spy, learning about the world beyond her textbooks."
8"She thought of Silas, of his bar, of the neon sign that had become a beacon in the darkness."
9"She looked around the bar, the old maps, the photographs, the green neon sign that seemed to pulse with a life of its own."
10"Silas placed a hand on the bar, his fingers brushing the wood, the signet ring catching the light."
11"The secret room behind the bookshelf remained hidden, its door unmarked, a silent witness to the conversations that unfolded in the dim light."
12"She looked at Silas, his hazel eyes reflecting the green neon, his beard catching the light."
13"She walked down the street, the rain cooling her skin, the city’s lights reflecting in puddles."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"he observed, his tone gentle, almost amused"
1"she said, her voice steadier than she felt"
2"she asked, the question slipping out before she could catch it"
3"she said, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"she asked, the question hanging between them like a fragile glass ornament"
5"she asked, the question slipping out before she could stop it"
6"she said, her voice barely above the hum of conversation"
7"she toasted, a smile forming at the corners of her mouth"
80.23% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
1"she admitted (admit)"
2"he confessed (confess)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.791
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.14
66.1579%