Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEY4YFHEZC8SH8MK41BKD9

Run Details

Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.185670

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The ancient oaks of Richmond Park pressed close in the darkness, their branches forming a canopy so thick that even the full moon's light barely penetrated. Aurora pulled her jacket tighter against the October chill and checked her phone again. No signal. Of course there wouldn't be, not this deep in the park after closing time. She'd climbed the fence an hour ago, following the cryptic instructions that had arrived at the Golden Empress that afternoon: *The Grove knows your name. Midnight. Come alone if you want answers about the pendant.* The Heartstone lay heavy against her collarbone, its usual faint warmth now pulsing like a second heartbeat. She'd worn it every day since finding it on her doorstep six months ago, wrapped in brown paper with no return address. Just her name in spidery handwriting and the pendant itself, beautiful and inexplicable. Aurora swept her torch beam across the path ahead. According to the map she'd memorized, the standing stones should be just beyond the next rise. Her breath misted in the cold air as she climbed, dead leaves crunching beneath her boots with a sound like breaking bones. At the crest of the hill, she stopped. The torch beam caught them first—massive oak trees arranged in a perfect circle, their trunks so wide it would take three people holding hands to embrace them. But these weren't quite trees. The bark had been carved, or perhaps grown, into intricate patterns that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them. The pendant grew warmer. Aurora stepped between two of the oak-stones and immediately noticed the change. The air felt different here—thicker, older, charged with something that made her teeth ache. The October wind that had been tugging at her hair suddenly stilled. Even the distant sounds of London traffic vanished as if someone had closed a heavy door. Inside the circle, wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible abundance. Bluebells and foxgloves and flowers she couldn't name bloomed side by side, their colors vivid even in the torch light. Their perfume was cloying, too sweet, with an undertone of decay. "Hello?" Her voice came out smaller than intended. "I'm here. About the pendant." Nothing answered but the flowers seemed to lean toward her, their faces tracking her movement like tiny satellites. Aurora's hand went instinctively to the Heartstone. It was properly hot now, almost burning through her shirt. She took another step into the grove and the world tilted. For a moment, she could have sworn the stars overhead were arranged in entirely different constellations. The moon hung too low, too large, its light the wrong shade of silver. A branch snapped somewhere behind the standing stones. Aurora spun, torch beam slicing through the darkness. "Who's there?" The flowers rustled though there was still no wind. Their whisper sounded almost like words, almost like her name drawn out into syllables she'd never heard before. *Au-ro-ra-car-ter-mal-pho-ra.* She backed toward the center of the grove, heart hammering. This had been stupid. Meeting an anonymous message writer in an isolated location after midnight—what had she been thinking? Her mother would have called it another example of her impulsive streak. Evan would have said worse. Another crack, this time to her left. Aurora whirled again and caught a glimpse of movement between the oak-stones. Not quite a person, not quite anything her eyes could process. The shape slid away before her mind could make sense of it, leaving only the impression of something tall and wrong. The pendant burned hotter. She yanked it out from under her shirt, hissing at the heat against her palm. The crimson stone glowed like an ember, casting red light across the impossible flowers. "Beautiful, isn't it?" The voice came from directly behind her. Aurora's scream caught in her throat as she spun. A woman stood in the center of the grove where nothing had been a second before. She wore a dress that might have been made of cobwebs and starlight, her skin pale as bone, her eyes the color of winter ice. When she smiled, her teeth were too sharp, too many. "I've been waiting for you to find your way here, Malphora." "That's not my name." Aurora's voice shook. She tried to step back but her legs wouldn't cooperate. The flowers had grown while she wasn't watching, their stems now twining around her ankles. "Isn't it?" The woman tilted her head at an angle that made Aurora's neck ache in sympathy. "Names have power here. Aurora Carter is what your parents called you, yes. But Malphora is what you are." The pendant pulsed in time with Aurora's racing heart. She forced herself to breathe slowly, to think. Quick out-of-the-box thinking, that's what Eva always said about her. There had to be a way out of this. "The message said you had answers about the pendant." "I do." The woman glided closer, her feet never quite touching the ground. "It called you here because it remembers. Because you need to remember." "Remember what?" The woman's laugh sounded like glass breaking in reverse. "What you did. What you took. What you owe." The flowers climbed higher, their stems now wrapped around Aurora's calves. Their thorns pressed through her jeans, not quite breaking skin. The torch flickered and went out, leaving only the pendant's crimson glow. In that red light, the woman's face changed. Features shifted like melting wax, becoming something older, hungrier. "You don't remember yet. But you will. The Heartstone always brings them back." "Brings who back?" "The ones who ran. The ones who thought they could escape their debts by hiding in human skin." The creature wearing a woman's shape leaned close enough that Aurora could smell its breath—sweet rot and copper and burned roses. "Did you really think crossing the water would save you? Did you think taking a new name, a new life, would make us forget?" Aurora's mind raced. She'd lived in Cardiff her whole life until six months ago. Her parents were boringly normal—her dad arguing cases, her mum teaching Year 3. There were photo albums, school records, a whole paper trail of Aurora Carter existing. But the pendant burned against her palm like it recognized something she didn't. "I don't know what you're talking about." The words came out steadier than she felt. "I'm nobody. I deliver Chinese food and live above a bar." "For now." The creature's smile widened impossibly. "But the Heartstone woke when you touched it, didn't it? Recognized what sleeps inside you. That's why you're here, in the Grove that exists between what is and what was." The flowers had reached Aurora's waist. Their whispers grew louder, more insistent. She caught fragments of words in a language that hurt to hear, syllables that wanted to reshape themselves on her tongue. Time felt strange, syrupy. How long had she been standing here? Minutes? Hours? The moon hadn't moved but that meant nothing in a place where wildflowers bloomed out of season. "What do you want?" Aurora forced the question through numb lips. "Want?" The creature laughed again. "Oh, little Malphora. It's not about what I want. It's about what you owe. Blood calls to blood. Power calls to power. And you..." It reached out one too-long finger to touch the pendant. "You carry the heart of someone who broke a covenant." The moment the creature's flesh met the stone, images flooded Aurora's mind. A vast hall made of twilight and thorns. Her own hands—but not quite, the fingers too long, the nails like glass—signing something in blood on bark. A promise made. A trust betrayed. Running through a forest that wasn't quite Earth, wasn't quite anywhere, clutching something precious and stolen. Aurora gasped and jerked back, breaking the contact. The images faded but left echoes, like trying to remember a dream. "Beginning to see?" The creature circled her slowly. The flowers parted to let it pass. "You can't run from what you are. The Heartstone won't let you. It will burn hotter each night, call louder each day, until you return what was taken." "I didn't take anything!" But even as Aurora said it, she felt the lie stick in her throat. Somewhere deep inside, beneath the life of Aurora Carter, something else stirred. Something that remembered. The creature stopped directly in front of her. "Three nights. That's what the old laws grant. Three nights to remember on your own before we come to collect. The Heartstone will guide you, if you let it." "And if I don't?" This time when the creature smiled, Aurora saw rows upon rows of teeth spiraling back into an impossible throat. "Then Evan will be the least of your worries, little runaway. Human pain is nothing compared to what waits for oath breakers in the Bright Lands." The flowers suddenly released their hold, stems retracting so quickly Aurora stumbled. The creature began to fade, its edges blurring into moonlight and shadow. "Three nights, Malphora. Use them wisely." Between one blink and the next, Aurora stood alone in an ordinary clearing in Richmond Park. The standing stones were just ancient oaks again. The wildflowers had vanished, leaving only frost-brittle grass. Her torch flickered back to life as if it had never gone out. But the Heartstone still burned against her palm, and when Aurora looked at her wrist, the old crescent scar seemed to glow faintly in the darkness. She ran then, crashing through the underbrush, scrambling over the fence, not stopping until she reached the night bus on the main road. As she collapsed into a seat, Aurora caught her reflection in the window. For just a moment, her bright blue eyes looked winter-pale, and her fingers seemed a fraction too long. Three nights. The words echoed in her head as London rushed past outside. Three nights to remember what she'd forgotten. Or what she'd made herself forget.
total_cost0.18567

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
87.50% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The creature's smile widened impossibly [impossibly]"
1"The creature laughed again [again]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.406
leniency0.813
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.125
81.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1659
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
2"really"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1659
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"intricate"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"sense of"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count2
10
word"raced"
count1
11
word"echoes"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"perfect"
3"intricate"
4"charged"
5"whisper"
6"sense of"
7"pulsed"
8"racing"
9"flickered"
10"raced"
11"echoes"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences117
matches
0"e in sympathy"
81.81% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences117
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords16
totalWords1647
ratio0.01
matches
0"The Grove knows your name. Midnight. Come alone if you want answers about the pendant."
1"Au-ro-ra-car-ter-mal-pho-ra."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1319
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
October2
Golden1
Empress1
Grove1
Heartstone3
London2
Aurora25
Eva1
Cardiff1
Year1
Carter2
Earth1
persons
0"October"
1"Aurora"
2"Eva"
3"Carter"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"Heartstone"
4"London"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore0.552
windowScore0.333
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences97
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"patterns that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them"
1"Not quite a person, not quite anything her eyes could process"
2"not quite anything her eyes could process"
3"sounded like glass breaking in reverse"
4"not quite breaking skin"
5"not quite the fingers too long, the nails like glass—signing something in blood on bark"
6"quite Earth, wasn't quite anywhere, clutching something precious and stolen"
7"quite anywhere, clutching something precious and stolen"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1647
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean30.5
std17.62
cv0.578
sampleLengths
056
135
252
347
462
54
654
741
813
935
1041
118
1210
1328
1446
1551
1633
1710
1860
1911
2032
2136
2236
239
2425
252
2618
2733
2830
293
3063
3141
3213
3326
3437
3533
3630
3711
3849
3960
4020
4143
4233
4337
444
4545
4624
476
4845
4949
96.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences117
matches
0"been carved"
1"were arranged"
2"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs224
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was cloying"
2"wasn't watching"
16.81% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences136
ratio0.044
matches
0"The torch beam caught them first—massive oak trees arranged in a perfect circle, their trunks so wide it would take three people holding hands to embrace them."
1"The air felt different here—thicker, older, charged with something that made her teeth ache."
2"Meeting an anonymous message writer in an isolated location after midnight—what had she been thinking?"
3"\"The ones who ran. The ones who thought they could escape their debts by hiding in human skin.\" The creature wearing a woman's shape leaned close enough that Aurora could smell its breath—sweet rot and copper and burned roses."
4"Her parents were boringly normal—her dad arguing cases, her mum teaching Year 3."
5"Her own hands—but not quite, the fingers too long, the nails like glass—signing something in blood on bark."
79.04% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1331
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay heavy against her"
adverbCount76
adverbRatio0.05709992486851991
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.014274981217129978
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean12.11
std7.17
cv0.592
sampleLengths
026
114
22
314
425
51
69
717
822
913
109
1116
1222
138
1427
155
1622
174
1812
1914
2012
2116
2210
2320
2411
258
265
2718
287
2910
3011
3116
3214
338
348
352
369
3718
381
3910
404
4115
4212
435
447
4512
4611
4721
484
4915
67.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4338235294117647
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners59
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences111
matches
0"Of course there wouldn't be,"
1"Just her name in spidery"
2"Even the distant sounds of"
3"Somewhere deep inside, beneath the"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences111
matches
0"She'd climbed the fence an"
1"She'd worn it every day"
2"Her breath misted in the"
3"Their perfume was cloying, too"
4"Her voice came out smaller"
5"It was properly hot now,"
6"She took another step into"
7"Their whisper sounded almost like"
8"She backed toward the center"
9"Her mother would have called"
10"She yanked it out from"
11"She wore a dress that"
12"She tried to step back"
13"She forced herself to breathe"
14"Their thorns pressed through her"
15"She'd lived in Cardiff her"
16"Her parents were boringly normal—her"
17"Their whispers grew louder, more"
18"She caught fragments of words"
19"It reached out one too-long"
ratio0.207
77.12% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount85
totalSentences111
matches
0"The ancient oaks of Richmond"
1"Aurora pulled her jacket tighter"
2"She'd climbed the fence an"
3"The Heartstone lay heavy against"
4"She'd worn it every day"
5"Aurora swept her torch beam"
6"Her breath misted in the"
7"The torch beam caught them"
8"The bark had been carved,"
9"The pendant grew warmer."
10"Aurora stepped between two of"
11"The air felt different here—thicker,"
12"The October wind that had"
13"Bluebells and foxgloves and flowers"
14"Their perfume was cloying, too"
15"Her voice came out smaller"
16"Nothing answered but the flowers"
17"Aurora's hand went instinctively to"
18"It was properly hot now,"
19"She took another step into"
ratio0.766
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She'd climbed the fence an hour ago, following the cryptic instructions that had arrived at the Golden Empress that afternoon: *The Grove knows your name."
1"The air felt different here—thicker, older, charged with something that made her teeth ache."
2"She wore a dress that might have been made of cobwebs and starlight, her skin pale as bone, her eyes the color of winter ice."
3"Running through a forest that wasn't quite Earth, wasn't quite anywhere, clutching something precious and stolen."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The creature laughed again (laugh)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.063
leniency0.125
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.063
82.5174%