Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNF82BCHPAV4GYSB28BFC2H

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Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.165285

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain drumming against The Raven's Nest's windows had driven most of the evening crowd away, leaving only the dedicated drinkers and those with nowhere better to be. Aurora Carter fell into neither category as she descended the narrow stairs from her flat, but the sound of Silas polishing glasses had drawn her down like a siren song. She needed the distraction. "Thought you'd be asleep by now," Silas said without looking up. His silver signet ring caught the green neon bleeding through the windows as he worked a spot from a tumbler. "Early delivery tomorrow, isn't it?" "Couldn't sleep." Rory slid onto a barstool, her fingers automatically finding the crescent scar on her wrist. The habit annoyed her, but tonight she let it be. "Mind if I help myself?" "You know where everything is." She moved behind the bar with practiced ease, reaching for the bottle of Jameson on the second shelf. The familiar ritual of pouring steadied her hands, though her mind kept circling back to the text message glowing on her phone upstairs. One word: "Sorry." From a number she didn't recognize but somehow knew. "Make it two," Silas said, setting the clean glass aside. They drank in comfortable silence, the old maps on the walls seeming to shift in the dim light. Prague, Istanbul, Hong Kong—cities that held Silas's secrets, though he never spoke of them directly. Rory had learned not to ask. The bell above the door chimed, bringing in a gust of wet air and a figure in a sodden overcoat. Silas barely glanced up, but Rory's hand froze halfway to her glass. "Christ," she breathed. Marcus Chen stood in the doorway, water dripping from his coat onto the worn floorboards. Five years had carved new lines around his eyes and added silver to his temples, but the apologetic half-smile was achingly familiar. He looked like he'd stepped out of a boardroom rather than her memories—expensive coat, leather shoes that probably cost more than her monthly rent, the kind of watch that whispered rather than shouted its price. "Hello, Rory." The way he said her name, careful and measured, made her chest tighten. She'd imagined this moment countless times—usually while delivering takeaway through London's maze of streets, her mind wandering to what she'd say if she ever saw him again. Now, faced with the reality, words scattered like startled birds. "Marcus." The name felt foreign on her tongue. "What are you doing here?" "I heard you were in London. Working at the Golden Empress." He approached the bar slowly, as if she might bolt. Smart man. "Yu-Fei mentioned it when I was arranging catering for a client dinner." Of course. Even now, their worlds couldn't help but intersect through the invisible threads of the city's Chinese community. Rory reached for the Jameson again, needing something to do with her hands. "Drink?" The question came out harder than intended. "Whatever you're having." Silas had vanished into the back room with the practiced discretion of someone who'd spent decades reading situations. The bookshelf clicked shut behind him, leaving them alone with the rain and the weight of everything unsaid. Rory poured with deliberate precision, using the ritual to study him without seeming to. The boy who'd shared her lecture halls at Cardiff had been all nervous energy and grand plans, sketching business ideas on napkins and staying up until dawn debating constitutional law. This man moved with careful deliberation, each gesture considered. "Investment banking," he said, answering her unasked question. "Merged two startups, sold them, ended up at Barclays. The whole cliché trajectory." "You always said you'd never wear a suit to work." "I said a lot of things." He accepted the glass, their fingers brushing. She pulled back too quickly, whiskey sloshing. "I heard about Evan. That he—I'm sorry." The scar on her wrist seemed to pulse. "That's not why I left Cardiff." They both knew it was a lie, but Marcus had the grace not to challenge it. He'd been there the night she'd met Evan, had warned her with the kind of gentle concern that had made her bristle at twenty. Pride was such a stupid, expensive thing. "I should have reached out," he said. "When I heard you'd left. Should have done something." "I had Eva. I was fine." "Were you?" The question hung between them like an accusation. Rory thought of those first months in London, sleeping on Eva's couch and jumping at shadows, learning the city's rhythms while trying to forget Cardiff's. Of Silas offering her the flat with gruff kindness, of Yu-Fei teaching her Mandarin curse words during the lunch rush. She'd rebuilt herself piece by piece, but Marcus had known her before the breaking. "I'm a delivery driver," she said, the words coming out like a challenge. "Part-time. Cash in hand. That what you wanted to hear?" "I wanted to hear you were safe." The simplicity of it caught her off-guard. She'd expected pity or disappointment, the kind of well-meaning concern that felt like judgment. Instead, there was only relief in his eyes, as if he'd been carrying the question for years. "Why now?" she asked. "Five years, Marcus. Why tonight?" He turned the glass in his hands, watching the amber liquid catch the light. "My firm's acquiring a restaurant chain. Due diligence turned up the Golden Empress in the supplier network. When I saw your name on the employee records..." He shrugged, a ghost of his old self in the gesture. "I've been sitting in my car outside for an hour, trying to talk myself out of coming in." "What changed your mind?" "The rain." He smiled, and for a moment she saw the boy who'd shared her umbrella that first week at university, both of them too proud to admit they were lost. "Seemed like a sign." Rory found herself smiling back, surprising them both. "You always were superstitious." "And you always were practical. Delivery driver suits you better than barrister ever would have." The old ease crept back as they talked, filling in the gaps with careful honesty. His marriage to a colleague that had ended after eighteen months. Her discovery that she actually enjoyed the freedom of courier work, the way London revealed itself one delivery at a time. They danced around the deeper currents—her father's disappointment, his mother's death two years ago—but even the careful conversation felt like coming home. "I have a meeting in the morning," Marcus said finally, though neither of them had touched their drinks in the last hour. "But maybe—" "Yu-Fei needs someone to handle the corporate accounts," Rory said quickly, before she could think better of it. "She mentioned it last week. If your firm's looking to expand their catering options..." "I could stop by tomorrow afternoon. After two?" "I'll be there." They stood awkwardly, the space between them loaded with possibility and old hurt. Marcus reached for his coat, then paused. "That night, when Evan showed up at your flat and I called the police—" "Don't." The word came out sharper than intended. "Just... don't." He nodded, understanding flickering across his face. Some things were better left buried, even between old friends. Especially between old friends. After he left, Rory stayed at the bar, staring at the untouched whiskey. Silas emerged from the back room with impeccable timing, sliding back into his spot without comment. "Old friend?" he asked mildly, resuming his glass polishing. "Something like that." "The ones who knew us before are always the hardest." His hazel eyes held depths she'd never fully fathomed. "They carry the map of who we were." Rory thought about Marcus's careful smile, the way he'd said her name like an apology. Five years was a long time, but maybe not long enough. Or maybe, she thought as she headed back upstairs, it was exactly long enough. The text message was still glowing on her phone. "Sorry." She deleted it without checking the number, then typed a new one to Eva: "You'll never guess who walked into the bar tonight." Outside, the rain had stopped, leaving the streets gleaming under the green neon glow of The Raven's Nest. Tomorrow, she'd deliver noodles and navigate London's twisted streets. Tomorrow, Marcus would walk back into her life through the proper door, with proper reasons. Tonight, she poured out the whiskey and went to bed, the crescent scar on her wrist nothing more than old skin remembering old wounds.
total_cost0.165285

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
91.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Marcus said finally [finally]"
1"Rory said quickly [quickly]"
2"he asked mildly [mildly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.118
89.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1419
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
1"quickly"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Chen"
1"Marcus"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.24% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1419
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"practiced ease"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"comfortable"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"measured"
count1
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"depths"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
9
word"navigate"
count1
highlights
0"practiced ease"
1"familiar"
2"comfortable"
3"silence"
4"measured"
5"weight"
6"pulse"
7"depths"
8"gleaming"
9"navigate"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1406
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions49
wordCount1084
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.92
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest2
Carter1
Silas8
Jameson2
Istanbul1
Hong1
Kong1
Rory10
Marcus7
Chen1
London4
Smart1
Chinese1
Cardiff2
Evan1
Eva2
Yu-Fei1
Mandarin1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Silas"
4"Jameson"
5"Rory"
6"Marcus"
7"Chen"
8"Evan"
9"Eva"
10"Yu-Fei"
places
0"Istanbul"
1"Hong"
2"Kong"
3"London"
4"Chinese"
5"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
47.26% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like he'd stepped out of a boardro"
1"felt like judgment"
2"felt like coming home"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1406
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean26.04
std19.49
cv0.749
sampleLengths
062
136
232
35
453
510
639
732
83
972
102
1150
1213
1335
1432
158
163
1736
1853
1921
2010
2127
2214
2347
2416
256
262
2767
2823
297
3038
319
3269
334
3435
3512
3615
3769
3824
3932
408
413
4220
4314
4410
4521
4629
479
483
4927
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs194
matches(empty)
39.90% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences111
ratio0.036
matches
0"Prague, Istanbul, Hong Kong—cities that held Silas's secrets, though he never spoke of them directly."
1"He looked like he'd stepped out of a boardroom rather than her memories—expensive coat, leather shoes that probably cost more than her monthly rent, the kind of watch that whispered rather than shouted its price."
2"She'd imagined this moment countless times—usually while delivering takeaway through London's maze of streets, her mind wandering to what she'd say if she ever saw him again."
3"They danced around the deeper currents—her father's disappointment, his mother's death two years ago—but even the careful conversation felt like coming home."
89.37% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1093
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.05215004574565416
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.01738334858188472
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean12.67
std7.68
cv0.606
sampleLengths
028
130
24
311
420
55
617
710
85
95
1018
1123
1212
1310
1418
1515
166
1720
1812
193
2015
2122
2235
232
2413
2527
2610
278
285
2921
302
3112
322
3317
3413
358
363
3718
3818
3914
4030
419
428
4313
4410
4513
467
477
488
496
82.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5045045045045045
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners56
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"Instead, there was only relief"
1"Especially between old friends."
ratio0.026
83.16% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences76
matches
0"She needed the distraction."
1"His silver signet ring caught"
2"She moved behind the bar"
3"They drank in comfortable silence,"
4"He looked like he'd stepped"
5"She'd imagined this moment countless"
6"He approached the bar slowly,"
7"he said, answering her unasked"
8"He accepted the glass, their"
9"She pulled back too quickly,"
10"They both knew it was"
11"He'd been there the night"
12"She'd rebuilt herself piece by"
13"she said, the words coming"
14"She'd expected pity or disappointment,"
15"He turned the glass in"
16"He shrugged, a ghost of"
17"He smiled, and for a"
18"His marriage to a colleague"
19"Her discovery that she actually"
ratio0.342
45.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences76
matches
0"The rain drumming against The"
1"Aurora Carter fell into neither"
2"She needed the distraction."
3"Silas said without looking up"
4"His silver signet ring caught"
5"Rory slid onto a barstool,"
6"The habit annoyed her, but"
7"She moved behind the bar"
8"The familiar ritual of pouring"
9"Silas said, setting the clean"
10"They drank in comfortable silence,"
11"Prague, Istanbul, Hong Kong—cities that"
12"Rory had learned not to"
13"The bell above the door"
14"Silas barely glanced up, but"
15"Marcus Chen stood in the"
16"He looked like he'd stepped"
17"The way he said her"
18"She'd imagined this moment countless"
19"The name felt foreign on"
ratio0.829
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"Now, faced with the reality,"
1"Even now, their worlds couldn't"
ratio0.026
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Prague, Istanbul, Hong Kong—cities that held Silas's secrets, though he never spoke of them directly."
1"He looked like he'd stepped out of a boardroom rather than her memories—expensive coat, leather shoes that probably cost more than her monthly rent, the kind of…"
2"She'd imagined this moment countless times—usually while delivering takeaway through London's maze of streets, her mind wandering to what she'd say if she ever …"
3"Silas had vanished into the back room with the practiced discretion of someone who'd spent decades reading situations."
4"The boy who'd shared her lecture halls at Cardiff had been all nervous energy and grand plans, sketching business ideas on napkins and staying up until dawn deb…"
5"She'd expected pity or disappointment, the kind of well-meaning concern that felt like judgment."
5.95% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Rory slid, her fingers automatically finding the crescent scar on her wrist"
1"He approached, as if she might bolt"
2"He accepted, their fingers brushing"
3"she said, the words coming out like a challenge"
4"He shrugged, a ghost of his old self in the gesture"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.196
leniency0.392
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.039
83.7266%