Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNFCS59Y53D2SP8P17FQXE7

Run Details

Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.177960

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Raven's Nest hummed with its usual Tuesday night crowd—a mix of locals nursing pints and tourists drawn by the green neon sign that flickered like a dying firefly against the Soho drizzle. Aurora Carter slipped through the narrow door, shaking raindrops from her delivery jacket. The familiar smell of wood polish and whiskey wrapped around her like an old blanket. "Kitchen's closed, Rory," Silas called from behind the bar without looking up. He was polishing glasses with the same methodical precision he brought to everything—left to right, three clockwise turns, hold to the light. His silver signet ring caught the amber glow of the overhead lamps. "Not here for food." She hung her jacket on the coat rack by the door, noting how her landlord's limp seemed more pronounced tonight. The weather, probably. "Yu-Fei gave me the evening off. Thought I'd see if you needed help with inventory." Silas glanced up then, hazel eyes crinkling at the corners. "Since when do you volunteer for inventory?" Since she'd noticed him wincing every time he climbed the stairs to the stockroom. Since the knee that had ended his career seemed to be giving him more trouble than usual. But Aurora just shrugged and made her way behind the bar. "Since I'm already wet and miserable. Might as well be useful." She was reaching for an apron when the door chimed. A woman stood in the entrance, designer heels impractical for the weather, blonde hair swept into a style that probably cost more than Aurora made in a week. The woman's gaze swept the room—past the faded maps of Prague and Berlin, past the black-and-white photographs of faces whose names Silas never shared—before landing on Aurora. "Rory?" Aurora's hands stilled on the apron strings. That voice, polished now with received pronunciation but still carrying traces of Cardiff underneath. "Eva?" The woman who'd once been Eva Marsh—who'd eaten cheese sandwiches on Aurora's bedroom floor while they studied for A-levels, who'd held Aurora's hair back after too many shots of cheap vodka at university, who'd sent the text that had saved her life (*Come to London. Now. Don't tell him*)—clicked across the worn floorboards in those ridiculous heels. "My God, it is you." Eva's smile was perfect, the kind that came from years of practice at corporate events. "What are you doing here?" "I live upstairs." Aurora heard how flat her voice sounded, how the words dropped like stones into still water. "What are you doing here?" "Client drinks ran late. Someone mentioned this place had character." Eva's laugh tinkled like crystal, nothing like the snorting giggle Aurora remembered. "I can't believe it. How long has it been?" Three years, two months, and sixteen days since Eva had stopped returning her calls. But Aurora just said, "A while." Silas had stopped polishing glasses. He stood perfectly still, the way he did when he was cataloging every detail of a scene. Aurora could practically feel him filing away Eva's manicured appearance, the Hermès bag, the way she kept touching her pearl earrings—a nervous habit that apparently even finishing school hadn't cured. "Can I get you something?" he asked, breaking the silence that had stretched too tight. "Gin and tonic. Hendrick's, if you have it." Eva perched on a barstool like she was posing for a photograph. "Unless you're helping? I don't want to interrupt." "Just started my shift," Aurora lied. She pulled down a glass, added ice. Her hands moved automatically—two parts gin, three parts tonic, cucumber slice balanced on the rim. The same drink Eva had ordered the night they'd celebrated their university acceptances. The night before everything began to unravel. "Still at Cardiff?" Eva asked, watching Aurora work. "You must be nearly finished with law school by now." The bottle of tonic slipped slightly in Aurora's grip. "I left. After first year." "Oh." Eva's perfectly shaped eyebrows drew together. "But you were so determined. Your father must have been—" "Disappointed. Yes." Aurora slid the glass across the bar. "Seven pounds fifty." Eva fumbled for her wallet, clearly thrown by the transaction. "Rory, I—" "It's Aurora now." She turned to wipe down the already-clean bar, unable to meet those familiar brown eyes. "Rory was a long time ago." "Right. Of course." Eva took a sip of her drink. "I work for Deloitte now. Senior consultant. The hours are murder, but the money..." She trailed off, perhaps remembering their old jokes about selling out to corporate overlords. "What about you? What do you do?" Aurora gestured vaguely at the bar, at her faded t-shirt and jeans. "This. Delivery work during the day." "Delivery work," Eva repeated, as if the words were foreign. "But you're brilliant. You could—" "Could what?" The sharpness in Aurora's voice made Silas look up from where he'd retreated to give them space. "Could go back to university? Could pretend the last three years didn't happen? Could forget why I left in the first place?" Eva's hand found her earring again. "I tried to call. After you left Cardiff." "No, you didn't." Aurora's voice was steady now, each word precise as a blade. "You texted once to ask if I'd made it to London safely. Then nothing." "I didn't know what to say." Eva stared into her gin and tonic as if it held answers. "Evan kept asking about you. Showing up at my flat. I thought if I stayed away, he'd leave you alone." Aurora's hand went unconsciously to her left wrist, where the crescent scar seemed to burn beneath her skin. Not from childhood, despite what she told anyone who asked. "And did he?" "I don't know. I transferred to the London office six months later." Eva looked up then, and for a moment Aurora saw her old friend beneath the corporate veneer—the girl who'd shared her lunch money, who'd taught her Welsh curse words, who'd known something was wrong before Aurora could admit it to herself. "I should have done more. I know that." The bar had gone quiet around them. Even the usual Tuesday night regulars seemed to sense the weight of the conversation, turning back to their pints and hushed discussions. Silas polished the same glass over and over, his presence solid and reassuring at Aurora's back. "You did enough," Aurora said finally. "You got me out." "But then I left you." Eva's voice cracked, just slightly. "I was scared. Of him. Of what it meant that I hadn't seen it sooner. Of how close I'd come to losing you." She pushed the drink away, barely touched. "I'm not proud of it." Aurora studied the woman across the bar—the expensive highlights, the designer clothes, the careful makeup that couldn't quite hide the shadows under her eyes. Success worn like armor against the world. She wondered what Eva saw when she looked back—a university dropout serving drinks in a dingy Soho bar, living above her workplace, delivering takeaway to make ends meet. "We were different people then," Aurora said. It wasn't forgiveness, exactly, but it was acknowledgment. Of time passed. Of choices made in fear and self-preservation. Of the strange alchemy that transformed friendship into regret. Eva pulled out a business card, cream-colored with raised lettering. "If you ever want to talk. Or if you need—" "I'm fine." Aurora didn't take the card. "Really." Eva stood, leaving a twenty-pound note beside her barely touched drink. "It was good to see you, Rory. Aurora. I mean that." She clicked toward the door in those impractical heels, pausing at the threshold. For a moment, Aurora thought she might turn around, might say something to bridge the three years of silence. Instead, Eva pulled her coat tighter and stepped out into the rain. The green neon sign painted her retreating form in sickly light before the darkness swallowed her whole. Silas finally set down the over-polished glass. "Old friend?" "Old something." Aurora picked up the twenty-pound note, stared at it. Clean and crisp, like Eva herself. Nothing like the crumpled fivers they used to pool for late-night chips. "Keep the change in the till." "You all right?" She considered the question, rolling her left wrist where the scar ached with phantom memory. "Yeah. Just strange, seeing who people become." "Or who they always were," Silas said quietly. "Sometimes it takes distance to see clearly." Aurora thought about that as she resumed wiping down the bar. About the girl who'd saved her life with a text message and then disappeared. About the woman who'd walked in wearing success like a shield. About herself, hiding in a bar in Soho, using a name that wasn't quite hers anymore. The door chimed again, bringing in a gust of cold air and two laughing tourists. Aurora straightened her shoulders, pulled on her professional smile. "What can I get you?" The night moved on, as nights do. But the ghost of Eva's perfume lingered, mixing with the whiskey and wood polish, a reminder that some regrets never quite wash clean. Outside, the green neon sign continued its eternal flicker, casting long shadows on the rain-slicked streets of Soho.
total_cost0.17796

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
69.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"Eva's laugh tinkled like [like]"
1"But Aurora just said [just]"
2"Aurora said finally [finally]"
3"Eva's voice cracked just [just]"
4"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.403
leniency0.806
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.161
83.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1533
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1533
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"methodical"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"crystal"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"unravel"
count1
7
word"determined"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"reminder"
count1
10
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"familiar"
2"methodical"
3"perfect"
4"crystal"
5"silence"
6"unravel"
7"determined"
8"weight"
9"reminder"
10"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences88
matches
0"e in fear"
61.69% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences88
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords7
totalWords1512
ratio0.005
matches
0"Come to London. Now. Don't tell him"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.07% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1120
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity2.68
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Tuesday2
Soho4
Carter1
Aurora30
Prague1
Berlin1
Silas8
Cardiff1
Eva22
Marsh1
London1
Three1
Hermès1
Welsh1
Clean1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Carter"
3"Aurora"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"Berlin"
3"Cardiff"
4"Marsh"
5"London"
globalScore0.161
windowScore0.167
18.42% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"seemed more pronounced tonight"
1"ous habit that apparently even finishing scho"
2"quite hide the shadows under her eyes"
3"quite hers anymore"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1512
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean30.86
std17.46
cv0.566
sampleLengths
061
146
242
317
453
565
61
722
857
925
1024
1131
1220
1352
1415
1528
1648
1718
1814
1917
2012
2112
2224
2345
2418
2515
2641
2714
2828
2938
3031
3161
3245
3310
3445
3559
3634
3720
388
3922
4061
419
4235
433
4422
4515
4652
4729
4848
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
66.67% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs200
matches
0"was polishing"
1"was reaching"
2"was cataloging"
3"was posing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences123
ratio0.081
matches
0"The Raven's Nest hummed with its usual Tuesday night crowd—a mix of locals nursing pints and tourists drawn by the green neon sign that flickered like a dying firefly against the Soho drizzle."
1"He was polishing glasses with the same methodical precision he brought to everything—left to right, three clockwise turns, hold to the light."
2"The woman's gaze swept the room—past the faded maps of Prague and Berlin, past the black-and-white photographs of faces whose names Silas never shared—before landing on Aurora."
3"The woman who'd once been Eva Marsh—who'd eaten cheese sandwiches on Aurora's bedroom floor while they studied for A-levels, who'd held Aurora's hair back after too many shots of cheap vodka at university, who'd sent the text that had saved her life (*Come to London."
4"Don't tell him*)—clicked across the worn floorboards in those ridiculous heels."
5"Aurora could practically feel him filing away Eva's manicured appearance, the Hermès bag, the way she kept touching her pearl earrings—a nervous habit that apparently even finishing school hadn't cured."
6"Her hands moved automatically—two parts gin, three parts tonic, cucumber slice balanced on the rim."
7"\"I don't know. I transferred to the London office six months later.\" Eva looked up then, and for a moment Aurora saw her old friend beneath the corporate veneer—the girl who'd shared her lunch money, who'd taught her Welsh curse words, who'd known something was wrong before Aurora could admit it to herself."
8"Aurora studied the woman across the bar—the expensive highlights, the designer clothes, the careful makeup that couldn't quite hide the shadows under her eyes."
9"She wondered what Eva saw when she looked back—a university dropout serving drinks in a dingy Soho bar, living above her workplace, delivering takeaway to make ends meet."
96.62% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1140
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.043859649122807015
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.017543859649122806
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean12.29
std8.4
cv0.683
sampleLengths
033
113
215
312
422
512
624
73
815
910
107
1114
1217
1311
1411
1510
1628
1727
181
197
2014
211
2245
231
2411
2520
265
2719
285
2922
309
3114
326
335
3417
3530
3615
3720
388
396
407
4115
4213
437
448
4510
469
475
487
4910
67.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4634146341463415
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners57
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"Even the usual Tuesday night"
1"Instead, Eva pulled her coat"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences85
matches
0"He was polishing glasses with"
1"His silver signet ring caught"
2"She hung her jacket on"
3"She was reaching for an"
4"He stood perfectly still, the"
5"he asked, breaking the silence"
6"She pulled down a glass,"
7"Her hands moved automatically—two parts"
8"She turned to wipe down"
9"She trailed off, perhaps remembering"
10"She pushed the drink away,"
11"She wondered what Eva saw"
12"It wasn't forgiveness, exactly, but"
13"She clicked toward the door"
14"She considered the question, rolling"
ratio0.176
71.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences85
matches
0"The Raven's Nest hummed with"
1"Aurora Carter slipped through the"
2"The familiar smell of wood"
3"Silas called from behind the"
4"He was polishing glasses with"
5"His silver signet ring caught"
6"She hung her jacket on"
7"The weather, probably."
8"Silas glanced up then, hazel"
9"She was reaching for an"
10"A woman stood in the"
11"The woman's gaze swept the"
12"Aurora's hands stilled on the"
13"That voice, polished now with"
14"The woman who'd once been"
15"Eva's smile was perfect, the"
16"Aurora heard how flat her"
17"Eva's laugh tinkled like crystal,"
18"Silas had stopped polishing glasses."
19"He stood perfectly still, the"
ratio0.776
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The Raven's Nest hummed with its usual Tuesday night crowd—a mix of locals nursing pints and tourists drawn by the green neon sign that flickered like a dying f…"
1"The woman who'd once been Eva Marsh—who'd eaten cheese sandwiches on Aurora's bedroom floor while they studied for A-levels, who'd held Aurora's hair back after…"
2"Aurora studied the woman across the bar—the expensive highlights, the designer clothes, the careful makeup that couldn't quite hide the shadows under her eyes."
85.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She turned, unable to meet those familiar brown eyes"
1"Eva repeated, as if the words were foreign"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Aurora lied (lie)"
1"Eva repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.145
leniency0.29
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.065
78.8605%