Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT09607KCMXSTJJJRMSEXVT

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Duration:
17.6s
Cost:
$0.004101
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door slammed open before Aurora could reach it. She froze on the threshold of Eva’s flat, breath snagged and fingers stiff with the carrier bag she still hadn’t dropped. The front door rattled against its locks—three deadbolts, stubborn as ever—shoved aside by a familiar weight. Lucien Moreau stood in the doorway, calm as a crypt, the hem of his tailored charcoal suit flicking dust from the worn floorboards beneath his polished shoes. His slicked-back platinum blond hair caught the dim hallway light, but it was those eyes — one amber, one black as oil — that pinned her in place like a viper ready to strike. “Still less welcoming than I expected.” His voice was silk, dangerous velvet threading through every syllable. Rory didn’t respond. Her throat clenched, dry and tight, as the old ache resurfaced, sharp enough to taste. The distance between them hadn’t dulled it, only stalled like a caged beast gnashing its teeth. “I didn’t come to chat.” Lucien stepped inside anyway, the faint scent of sandalwood and smoke following behind. “We need to talk. Now.” Eva’s flat smelled the way it always did—books stacked like precarious towers, scrolls curling like ancient promises, and the steady presence of Ptolemy, the tabby cat, who circled Lucien’s legs with cautious indifference. Rory shifted the bag in her hand, fingers brushing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—the scar she hid under long sleeves, the one Evan never noticed. That scar, that past, feeling strangely exposed tonight. “What’s the game, Lucien?” Her voice held just enough steel to ward off the weight of everything unsaid. “No games.” He closed the door, the locks clicking back into place behind him. “There’s something coming. Something bad. And you’re in it whether you like it or not.” She met that amber eye, unblinking, challenging him. “You say that every time you appear out of nowhere.” He smirked, sharp as a blade concealed in his ivory-handled cane. “Yet here you are. You still listen.” “And what now? You want me to drop everything? Just walk into your world?” She swung the carrier bag to the side, weight thudding against the coffee table. “I’m not your errand girl, Lucien.” “Far from it.” His voice dropped, low and urgent. “I need you. More than ever.” Her heart faltered. She bit down the bitter taste of old attraction tangled with resentment. The room closed in around her. Rory’s bright blue eyes never left his, but her arms crossed, shielding a soft vulnerability she’d refused to share before. Ptolemy leapt onto the windowsill, sunken in shadow now, eyes half-lidded in silent judgement. Lucien’s gaze flicked to the cat before returning to her. “I never stopped believing you could handle this. Even if you ran from it.” The words were easy to say, but they bruised. The memory of fleeing Evan’s grip still haunted the edges of her resolve. London had been her refuge, Eva’s flat her sanctuary. Now his presence threatened to shatter that, like glass in slow-motion. “Why come now?” Rory demanded, voice sharper. “Wasn’t enough pain last time?” His smile was cruel yet genuine. “Pain keeps us alive. You know that.” A sudden noise startled both of them. The front window rattled. Rory’s heart leapt, every nerve alert. “Did you hear that?” Her tone snapped, accusing and cautious at once. “Someone’s watching.” Lucien’s fingers twitch around the cane just enough to warn. “Tell me what’s going on.” She advanced a step, the hesitation gone from her voice. Lucien hesitated—not often he hesitated. “There’s an old debt coming due. One tied to what you once left behind in Cardiff.” His amber eye darkened. “Leaving didn’t erase your ties, Rory.” She clenched her jaw, the wound beneath his words raw and familiar. “Explain,” she said, voice brittle but beneath it a spark of old defiance ignited. He moved closer, close enough that she could smell the faint trace of fine tobacco and lavender on his breath. “You thought you could run from your past, but that past will pull us both under.” Rory’s gaze dropped to his hand resting lightly on the doorframe, the ivory-handled cane barely visible at his side. “And what if I refuse?” Then he was tense, his jaw ticking. “Refusal isn’t an option. Not this time.” Her fists clenched at her sides. “Back then, you left me to clean up the mess. No explanations, no promises.” “And I’m paying for that now,” he admitted. “If it hurts, that’s because it should.” She swallowed, the weight of years pressing on her chest. “So why come to me? After all this time?” “Because you’re the only one who’ll understand the stakes. I need you to trust me, Rory. Just this once.” Trust. The word slipped between them, fragile and dangerous, like glass balanced on a knife’s edge. Silence settled, thick and suffocating. Ptolemy meowed softly, a reminder of the normal, the ordinary world slipping farther away. Rory took a breath, eyes hardening. “Alright. Talk.” Lucien smiled, but it was sharp, dangerous, the kind that promised blood beneath the charm. “This debt,” he said, “it’s not just a score. It’s a curse. One tied to your family, to your blood. And it’s chasing shadows through London’s darkest corners.” “Family? My father? That’s where you want to go?” She stepped back, the old fire flaring up. “You always wrapped yourself in riddles and half-truths. Spit it out.” The dark eye gleamed. “You want the full story? It’s buried with the dead in Cardiff. And it’s waking now.” Rory swallowed, the memories clawing to the surface—her father’s stern voice, the cold chambers of Cardiff’s courts, the whispers of law and legacy she’d tried to escape. Lucien leaned forward, voice low. “Stay with me. Fight this. Or everything you left behind will swallow us both.” Suddenly, the window shattered inward — a shard slicing through the heavy silence like a scream. A figure plunged through the broken glass, silhouetted in streetlight — fast, furious. Lucien’s cane flashed in the dim light, blade gleaming as he intercepted the intruder. Rory’s heart slammed as chaos erupted in the cramped flat, shards scattering like icy rain. “Get back!” Lucien growled through clenched teeth, parrying a brutal swing. Her carrier bag hit the floor, forgotten. “Who the hell was that?” Rory demanded, panic sharpening her words. Lucien didn’t answer, just pushed harder against the assault. “Trouble. The kind we can’t afford to ignore.” He twisted, the blade slicing air, sparks of danger igniting the room. Closer, closer, the danger pulling them into a reckless dance of violence and unspoken desire. And amidst the shards and shadows, Rory’s fierce blue eyes locked on his, a silent warning—and a promise. The fight had only just begun.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
97.44% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Her voice held just [just]"
1"She stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.41
leniency0.821
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.103
86.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1131
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"softly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
7.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1131
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"weight"
count4
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"resolve"
count1
6
word"sanctuary"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"reminder"
count1
9
word"charm"
count1
10
word"shattered"
count1
11
word"gleaming"
count1
12
word"dance"
count1
13
word"unspoken"
count1
14
word"desire"
count1
15
word"amidst"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"silk"
3"velvet"
4"flicked"
5"resolve"
6"sanctuary"
7"silence"
8"reminder"
9"charm"
10"shattered"
11"gleaming"
12"dance"
13"unspoken"
14"desire"
15"amidst"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
1"fists clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences70
matches
0"d with resentment"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.25% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount800
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.38
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Eva3
Moreau1
Rory11
Ptolemy3
Lucien11
Evan2
Cardiff1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Moreau"
3"Rory"
4"Ptolemy"
5"Lucien"
6"Evan"
places
0"Cardiff"
globalScore0.813
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1122
matches(empty)
94.20% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"met that amber"
1"shatter that, like"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean19.02
std10.34
cv0.544
sampleLengths
09
137
261
316
434
523
633
736
818
929
1018
1118
1234
1315
1415
1526
1614
1724
1842
1912
2013
2117
2212
2312
2415
255
2626
2712
2814
2936
3024
3114
3220
3315
3419
3519
361
3715
385
3914
408
4115
4228
4328
4420
4527
4619
4716
4813
4914
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences92
ratio0.098
matches
0"The front door rattled against its locks—three deadbolts, stubborn as ever—shoved aside by a familiar weight."
1"His slicked-back platinum blond hair caught the dim hallway light, but it was those eyes — one amber, one black as oil — that pinned her in place like a viper ready to strike."
2"Eva’s flat smelled the way it always did—books stacked like precarious towers, scrolls curling like ancient promises, and the steady presence of Ptolemy, the tabby cat, who circled Lucien’s legs with cautious indifference."
3"Rory shifted the bag in her hand, fingers brushing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—the scar she hid under long sleeves, the one Evan never noticed."
4"Lucien hesitated—not often he hesitated."
5"Rory swallowed, the memories clawing to the surface—her father’s stern voice, the cold chambers of Cardiff’s courts, the whispers of law and legacy she’d tried to escape."
6"Suddenly, the window shattered inward — a shard slicing through the heavy silence like a scream."
7"A figure plunged through the broken glass, silhouetted in streetlight — fast, furious."
8"And amidst the shards and shadows, Rory’s fierce blue eyes locked on his, a silent warning—and a promise."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount808
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03712871287128713
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.008663366336633664
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean12.2
std6.84
cv0.561
sampleLengths
09
121
216
327
434
516
63
715
816
918
105
1133
1228
138
1418
1514
1615
178
1810
1911
207
2128
226
239
246
253
2612
276
2820
2914
3010
3114
329
3313
349
3511
367
375
386
397
407
414
426
4312
4412
4515
465
4720
486
4912
85.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5217391304347826
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners48
99.50% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"Then he was tense, his"
1"Suddenly, the window shattered inward"
ratio0.03
76.72% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences67
matches
0"She froze on the threshold"
1"His slicked-back platinum blond hair"
2"His voice was silk, dangerous"
3"Her throat clenched, dry and"
4"Her voice held just enough"
5"He closed the door, the"
6"She met that amber eye,"
7"He smirked, sharp as a"
8"She swung the carrier bag"
9"His voice dropped, low and"
10"Her heart faltered."
11"She bit down the bitter"
12"His smile was cruel yet"
13"Her tone snapped, accusing and"
14"She advanced a step, the"
15"His amber eye darkened"
16"She clenched her jaw, the"
17"she said, voice brittle but"
18"He moved closer, close enough"
19"Her fists clenched at her"
ratio0.358
4.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences67
matches
0"The door slammed open before"
1"She froze on the threshold"
2"The front door rattled against"
3"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
4"His slicked-back platinum blond hair"
5"His voice was silk, dangerous"
6"Rory didn’t respond."
7"Her throat clenched, dry and"
8"The distance between them hadn’t"
9"Lucien stepped inside anyway, the"
10"Eva’s flat smelled the way"
11"Rory shifted the bag in"
12"That scar, that past, feeling"
13"Her voice held just enough"
14"He closed the door, the"
15"She met that amber eye,"
16"He smirked, sharp as a"
17"She swung the carrier bag"
18"His voice dropped, low and"
19"Her heart faltered."
ratio0.91
74.63% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences67
matches
0"Now his presence threatened to"
ratio0.015
95.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Eva’s flat smelled the way it always did—books stacked like precarious towers, scrolls curling like ancient promises, and the steady presence of Ptolemy, the ta…"
1"Lucien smiled, but it was sharp, dangerous, the kind that promised blood beneath the charm."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"He closed, the locks clicking back into place behind him"
1"She swung, weight thudding against the coffee table"
2"Rory demanded, voice sharper"
3"She advanced, the hesitation gone from her voice"
4"She stepped back, the old fire flaring up"
21.79% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Rory demanded (demand)"
1"Her tone snapped (snap)"
2"he admitted (admit)"
3"Lucien growled (growl)"
4"Rory demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.179
leniency0.359
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.256
79.7326%