Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0YT1W0AJ6S6KN62CPNZGZ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The doorbell chimed, jolting Rory awake from a restless nap on the sofa. She sat up, bleary-eyed, mentally cataloguing the empties littering her flat. Tupping up three 600mls of Pinot Grigio was not the answer for sleeplessness, it seemed. Sleep had evaded her the night before, her racing mind stuck on a memory she would rather forget. The one where she naively trusted the wrong man. Evan. Tears pricked her eyes, but she blinked them away. No more looking back. The bell rang again, more insistently this time. Probably Eva wanting me to pick up premix packs. Again. The lift had light and no sound. Didn't bother announcing visitors. Par for the course in a city of 8.5 million people, all seeing themselves as London's luckiest inhabitants. There were no exceptions. "One minute!" Rory called, grabbing her discarded crop top. She pulled her hair into a messy bun without a brush, dabbing cotton pads at the mascara smudges underneath her eyes. Good enough. She unlatched the bolt but kept the chainlock engaged. Eva was on the other side of the door, clutching a mysterious case like Dr. Spencer on an excursion. "Oh, what a relief. I thought it might've been you earlier!" Rory pulled the chain off and opened the door slightly wider, gesturing for Eva to come in. "It was. You carry the case. Are you starting a practice?" Eva huffed. "A likely story. This is only for a moment." She barrelled past Rory, setting the case down in the kitchen. "This is heavier than it looks." "Scared maybe." Rory turned a critical eye up and down Eva's figure. She had filled out a bit since university. The freckles dusting her arms looked like they were fading, but her fiery red hair was still flaming. "I asked if you wanted me to pick up a case when I was out yesterday." "I closed my practice a year ago, Rory." Eva's eyes darted away. "On a case. Do you remember? The one that interested you so much after you broke up with Evan?" Rory's cheeks flushed pink, but she held her ground. "How was I to know you would find something so crazy? There's no real proof of fae creatures." Eva sighed and unzipped her case, pulling out a to-do list brimful of scribbles. Rory peered over her shoulder as she read: find dining room — fancy; gear up — basic. "Then what's this all about? You're being cagey. I don't like it." "I can see that." Eva shuffled papers and murmured something under her breath. Rory could hear it clearly though: "On the money for once." Her eyes widened. There was no way she could have heard that. "You're not one to cuss, Eva." Rory batted her eyelashes. "Was that something new? University was a long time ago." Eva flushed, crumpling the paper and tossing it in the bin. "What I said fits with undergraduate education." She reached behind to unclip Rory's bun, causing the hair to tumble unceremoniously. "A little overzealous. I see you're not above pillow talk yourself." Rory flinched, stepping back. Her face was still flushed from before, so she hoped Eva's color was blending with the new emotion. She busied herself with picking up all the scattered bits. "That's an old case. I'm over that. Why do you ask?" "Let's just say I hear things." Eva took the crumpled paper out of the bin and smoothed it across the counter. "I have a favour to ask." She handed Rory the paper. "I need you to watch this for me before I torch it. That way you have proof to take it all in, but the outcome changes." "And what do I get for helping you go incognito into an obvious rendezvous?" Rory pressed her fingers together, slowly bringing them towards her mouth. "Payment. I would need it in coin." Eva's hair sticking straight out would've made her look like a cat who caught the canary, if Eichmann's language was groovy enough for her. Rory hadn't seen that reference book since how many years. "Counting the person who brought you your order tonight. I won't be able to reheat your arousal." "And that's without counting the painters who drew me nude." Rory slid a hand under her shirt. "Weren't they studious? All she got was a standing ovation." She pushed away her skirt with a pillow, falling in a mess of limbs. Eva's shirt. Her skirt. Rory's skirt. The collage of the creatures on the wall. The recollection of the square. Rory straightened herself back up and accepted the cup of tea Eva offered her. She hated tea. And yet, of all the things, there it was. Her heart had been broken. "Is this really just pillow talk? I can't give my next even to one of my own aunties." Eva looked away. "Seeing you holding my hand makes me forget any pain, Rory." Rory pulled away but held her hand on the counter. She had never held a man's hand so firmly before. "That's not enough. By now, you should have realized that this is a patient process. I need to get my head around things." Eva nodded slowly, rubbing her temple. "How about we talk a bit more?" And so they did, skipping the bits of the case that were too involved. Instead, Eva countered with lighter question-answer. She wanted to know how boyfriends are supposed to work. When will they take responsibility? Does she like them? Has she ever had one? She used Rory as a pointer for each. Rory could've answered the first one with her poker face, but she couldn't hide how she was feeling anymore. She was alright now. "My neighbour is a demon." She shrugged, not noticing the tightening in her chest. "I didn't know how my pictop medium worked." But Eva was like a dog with a bone. "How did that happen?" She looked up at Rory. Rory was pouring herself a cup of tea, blowing on it to cool it down. "That night." She took a sip of the tea. "I found out things he wasn't telling me and flipped out. Didn't let him off easily. "And?" Eva prompted. "Three months after breaking up, I sight one moving in. I freak. They treat me like one of their own." Rory gave a shaky laugh. "I make excuses. His parents were always secretive, and I never met them. He always had these stamina. Oh god, I sound like a victim. I'm glad it didn't turn out that way." Eva placed a comforting hand on Rory's arm. "You're not a victim. You're a survivor." She smiled softly. "And you had the sense to get out of there. What happened happened, but it shaped who you are today." She paused. "I'm proud of you Rory. You never give in to the routine of what people tell you." Rory smirked. "I've been told I'm quite a force of nature." She took another sip of her tea. "So, are you going to tell me about this mysterious rendezvous? Or are we going to keep dancing around the issue?" "I'll tell you this much," Eva said, her eyes twinkling mischievously. "It involves the fae." She held up a hand. "Before you say anything, I've done my research. This is for real. I wouldn't be involving you otherwise." Rory looked at the case Eva had brought with her, then back up at her friend. All she had to do was offer her hand, and she would be game for anything. No more tears, no more worries. For now, just stairs and the ugly carpet, and get to the music at midnight. "Fine. But you're buying me breakfast in the morning to make up for this surprise session." "Deal," Eva smiled, holding out her hand to shake on it. "Breakfast it is."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva's eyes darted away [away]"
1"She pushed away [away]"
2"Rory pulled away [away]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
80.89% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1308
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
2"really"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
84.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1308
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"racing"
count1
1
word"firmly"
count1
2
word"comforting"
count1
3
word"dancing"
count1
highlights
0"racing"
1"firmly"
2"comforting"
3"dancing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences93
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences93
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences112
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen54
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1307
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount871
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity2.99
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory26
Pinot1
Grigio1
Eva23
London1
Dr1
Eichmann1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Dr"
3"Eichmann"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.007
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like they were fading, but her fie"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1307
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"seen that reference"
63.10% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean40.84
std15.15
cv0.371
sampleLengths
039
141
251
332
439
528
628
754
831
927
1043
1136
1220
1342
1443
1558
1632
1751
1860
1949
2057
2113
2252
2345
2458
253
2658
2757
2839
2938
3069
3114
97.72% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"been broken"
1"are supposed"
43.14% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs170
matches
0"were fading"
1"was blending"
2"was feeling"
3"was pouring"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences112
ratio0.009
matches
0"Rory peered over her shoulder as she read: find dining room — fancy; gear up — basic."
94.50% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount821
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.04628501827040195
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.012180267965895249
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences112
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences112
mean11.67
std7.52
cv0.644
sampleLengths
013
111
215
318
49
51
69
74
88
99
101
117
124
1318
144
159
1621
172
189
1915
204
2111
2217
2311
242
2520
266
2712
288
2918
3016
3112
3219
339
3418
3514
3617
3712
3813
3914
409
4110
4210
4311
4420
4511
464
4718
4810
4911
71.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.44642857142857145
totalSentences112
uniqueOpeners50
79.37% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences84
matches
0"Probably Eva wanting me to"
1"Instead, Eva countered with lighter"
ratio0.024
96.19% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences84
matches
0"She sat up, bleary-eyed, mentally"
1"She pulled her hair into"
2"She unlatched the bolt but"
3"She barrelled past Rory, setting"
4"She had filled out a"
5"She reached behind to unclip"
6"Her face was still flushed"
7"She busied herself with picking"
8"She handed Rory the paper"
9"She pushed away her skirt"
10"She hated tea."
11"Her heart had been broken."
12"She had never held a"
13"She wanted to know how"
14"She used Rory as a"
15"She was alright now."
16"She shrugged, not noticing the"
17"She looked up at Rory"
18"She took a sip of"
19"They treat me like one"
ratio0.31
61.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences84
matches
0"The doorbell chimed, jolting Rory"
1"She sat up, bleary-eyed, mentally"
2"Sleep had evaded her the"
3"The one where she naively"
4"Tears pricked her eyes, but"
5"The bell rang again, more"
6"The lift had light and"
7"Par for the course in"
8"Rory called, grabbing her discarded"
9"She pulled her hair into"
10"She unlatched the bolt but"
11"Eva was on the other"
12"Spencer on an excursion."
13"Rory pulled the chain off"
14"She barrelled past Rory, setting"
15"Rory turned a critical eye"
16"She had filled out a"
17"The freckles dusting her arms"
18"Eva's eyes darted away"
19"Rory's cheeks flushed pink, but"
ratio0.798
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences84
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences23
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Eva's hair sticking straight out would've made her look like a cat who caught the canary, if Eichmann's language was groovy enough for her."
90.52% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She shrugged, not noticing the tightening in her chest"
1"Eva said, her eyes twinkling mischievously"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.08
leniency0.16
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.04
85.4348%