Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0ZWYGGN1RSTKYSFVKMBSE

Run Details

Duration:
18.5s
Cost:
$0.002417
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside the lifeless body sprawled across the cracked marble floor. Her sharp jaw clenched as she scanned the peculiar scene. The forgotten mausoleum lay far beneath the chaotic streets of London, nestled deep inside a sealed crypt beneath a centuries-old cemetery. The faint echo of dripping water met cold silence, broken only by the effective click of her worn leather watch against the ground as she shifted her weight. “A body in a family crypt. Perfect for the tabloids, huh?” DS Morris stood just beyond the ornate iron gates, hands shoved into the pockets of his rumpled coat. His voice carried an uneasy note, the corners of his mouth tightening. Quinn didn’t look up. “No forced entry, no signs of struggle, and the victim’s pockets untouched. Yet the wallet holding her ID is missing.” Morris stepped closer, peering at the pallid face illuminated by Quinn’s torchlight. “Maybe it’s a professional job. Clean and discreet.” “Professional? That’s what you think? A professional forensic trooper wouldn’t leave her killer’s signature smeared all over the scene.” His brow furrowed. “The signature?” Quinn tapped the floor where something protruded—a faint, jagged, ink-black symbol scorched into the marble. Thin cracks radiated outward like spider legs. “Look closer.” She nudged aside a fallen bone shard. “Glyphs.” Her voice lowered, like confessing a sin. “Not human.” Morris frowned, hesitant. “You mean… witchcraft?” “More likely the opposite. Not a witch, but a Shade’s handiwork, or worse.” Morris chuckled darkly. “You’re chasing shadows again, Harlow. The evidence says robbery gone wrong.” Quinn’s gaze snapped to him, brown eyes flashing. “And the so-called robbery just ignored every loose item? No fingerprints except the victim’s own? No footprints other than hers and that strange stain at the rear exit? Doesn’t add up.” He glanced toward the back of the crypt where a faint, oily black smear marred the worn threshold. “That stain?” “A residual taint, a rift trace.” Morris shook his head. “You’re fitting a puzzle to your theory again. This isn’t the Veil Market or some supernatural bazaar.” “Not yet. But understand this: the market’s shadow creeps outward all the time.” Quinn reached into her coat and pulled out a small brass compass etched with sigils. Its needle quivered violently, struggling to settle. “This Shadow Compass points closest to the nearest portal. And it’s wildly erratic.” Morris reached for the strange tool, but Quinn retracted it. “Try to keep an open mind, Morris. We haven’t seen the whole picture yet.” Morris exhaled slowly, rubbing his salt-and-pepper stubble. “If we’re wrong, this will be a stain on your career.” Quinn smiled grimly. “If we’re right, it’s a stain on us all.” She knocked sharply on the inner crypt door, where faint shuffling echoed from the shadowed chamber beyond. Moments later, hardened forensic officer Evelyn Leary emerged carrying a sealed evidence bag. “Harlow, you want to see this?” Evelyn’s voice trembled, betraying an eerie tension. “What have you got?” Quinn asked. Leary laid the evidence on the cracked floor—an ancient bone talisman, carved with cryptic symbols, oddly warm beneath the pale light. “Found it tucked inside a hidden compartment beneath the victim’s collar,” Leary explained. Quinn crouched closer, fingers reaching for the talisman, but stopped as Morris’s phone buzzed. “Got a message from Eva Kowalski,” Morris said, reading out loud, “‘Strange energy readings near the Veil Market’s location — could be linked to recent disappearances.’” Quinn’s mouth twitched into a faint smirk. “Eva’s occult research could prove useful here. Someone tracking the Market’s ripple effect.” “So you think the victim was connected to the Market?” Morris asked, eyes narrowing. “Either connected or forcibly silenced before becoming collateral.” Morris whistled. “Complicated.” “Too complicated for dull explanations.” Quinn restored the compass to her coat pocket and held her breath. “Feel that?” Evelyn whispered suddenly. “The air just shifted.” Quinn inhaled sharply as the faint scent of copper stung her nostrils. Blood. Recent. “Someone’s close,” Quinn muttered, rising slowly, eyes sweeping the gloom. A shadow detached from the far end—an indistinct figure blurred like smoke. “Stay calm.” Quinn’s voice was steel. The figure stepped into faint torchlight—a slender silhouette clad in dark clothes, face obscured. “Drop it.” Quinn’s hand inched toward her holster. The stranger’s voice was cold, clipped. “You’re meddling where you shouldn’t, Detective.” Quinn’s grip tightened. “And you are?” “Call me a messenger.” Morris took a step forward, but Quinn’s sharp glance froze him. “You don’t know what you’re interfering with,” the messenger warned. “Walk away before the market claims another.” Quinn’s military precision kicked in, adrenaline sharpening her edge. “I don’t walk away from truth.” The shadow flickered—almost a grin before it vanished into a slit in the crypt wall, leaving behind an icy whisper of dread. Morris swore beneath his breath, glancing at Quinn with new respect. She tightened her leather watch strap. “Whatever this market is, it’s alive—watching. “And hunting. “We just found its footprint beneath the city.” A weight settled on her chest as she stared at the spot where the shadow vanished. Something ancient was stirring—and the uneasy thrum of the Veil Market’s dark tide was pulling her deeper into its depths.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
13.95% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"DS Morris stood just [just]"
1"She nudged aside [aside]"
2"Her voice lowered like [like]"
3"Evelyn whispered suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.326
leniency0.651
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.186
71.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount869
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"sharply"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount869
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"marble"
count2
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"chaotic"
count1
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"furrowed"
count1
9
word"etched"
count1
10
word"quivered"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"gloom"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
16
word"whisper"
count1
17
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"marble"
1"jaw clenched"
2"scanned"
3"chaotic"
4"echo"
5"silence"
6"weight"
7"perfect"
8"furrowed"
9"etched"
10"quivered"
11"echoed"
12"trembled"
13"tension"
14"gloom"
15"flickered"
16"whisper"
17"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences54
matches(empty)
89.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences54
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords858
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount510
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity3.92
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn20
London1
Morris13
Evelyn3
Leary3
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Evelyn"
4"Leary"
5"Market"
places
0"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences37
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
83.45% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.166
wordCount858
matches
0"Not a witch, but a Shade’s handiwork"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean17.16
std12.61
cv0.735
sampleLengths
073
141
224
320
419
55
622
719
86
913
1014
1139
1220
136
1421
1548
1624
1718
1812
1930
2013
216
2221
2313
2414
2526
2620
2714
288
293
3017
319
3214
3310
3412
356
3614
378
3812
396
404
4111
4217
4315
4422
4511
4612
472
488
4936
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs96
matches
0"was pulling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences82
ratio0.073
matches
0"Quinn tapped the floor where something protruded—a faint, jagged, ink-black symbol scorched into the marble."
1"Leary laid the evidence on the cracked floor—an ancient bone talisman, carved with cryptic symbols, oddly warm beneath the pale light."
2"A shadow detached from the far end—an indistinct figure blurred like smoke."
3"The figure stepped into faint torchlight—a slender silhouette clad in dark clothes, face obscured."
4"The shadow flickered—almost a grin before it vanished into a slit in the crypt wall, leaving behind an icy whisper of dread."
5"Something ancient was stirring—and the uneasy thrum of the Veil Market’s dark tide was pulling her deeper into its depths."
87.07% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount521
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"faint, jagged, ink-black symbol"
1"faint, oily black smear"
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.030710172744721688
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.02111324376199616
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean10.46
std7.03
cv0.672
sampleLengths
014
110
221
328
429
512
64
720
812
98
1019
113
122
1315
147
159
168
172
183
193
2013
213
2211
238
2431
2518
262
276
284
2917
3028
317
3213
3310
3414
357
3611
373
389
3917
4013
4113
426
4321
4413
4514
4626
477
4813
4914
94.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.573170731707317
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners47
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences49
matches
0"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
1"His voice carried an uneasy"
2"His brow furrowed."
3"She nudged aside a fallen"
4"Her voice lowered, like confessing"
5"He glanced toward the back"
6"Its needle quivered violently, struggling"
7"She knocked sharply on the"
8"She tightened her leather watch"
ratio0.184
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences49
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside"
1"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
2"The forgotten mausoleum lay far"
3"The faint echo of dripping"
4"DS Morris stood just beyond"
5"His voice carried an uneasy"
6"Quinn didn’t look up."
7"Morris stepped closer, peering at"
8"His brow furrowed."
9"Quinn tapped the floor where"
10"She nudged aside a fallen"
11"Her voice lowered, like confessing"
12"Morris frowned, hesitant."
13"Morris chuckled darkly."
14"Quinn’s gaze snapped to him,"
15"He glanced toward the back"
16"Morris shook his head."
17"Quinn reached into her coat"
18"Its needle quivered violently, struggling"
19"Morris reached for the strange"
ratio0.98
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"DS Morris stood just, hands shoved into the pockets of his rumpled coat"
1"Morris asked, eyes narrowing"
56.98% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Leary explained (explain)"
1"Evelyn whispered suddenly (whisper)"
2"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
3"the messenger warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.163
leniency0.326
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.186
71.6837%