Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQQSNRMSKQQY21BE79AYRZ

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32.9s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect darted into the alley, a shadow slipping through the rain-soaked night. Harlow Quinn's heart raced as she sprinted after him, her worn leather watch slapping against her wrist with each determined stride. The scent of damp asphalt and distant smoke filled her lungs, mingling with the adrenaline coursing through her veins. “Stop!” she shouted, her voice echoing off the brick walls, but the figure only quickened his pace, a dark silhouette against the flickering streetlights. She could barely make out his features, but the glint of something metallic in his hand sent a jolt of urgency through her. He rounded a corner, and Quinn followed, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the neon glow of the city. The rain drummed a relentless rhythm, drowning out the sounds of the bustling streets above. She could feel the weight of the night pressing down on her, the shadows thickening as she plunged deeper into the labyrinth of Soho. “Get back here!” The alley narrowed, and she pushed herself harder, her breath coming in sharp bursts. The suspect glanced back, eyes wide with panic, and for a fleeting moment, she saw the fear etched on his face. It was a look she knew all too well—the kind that came from desperation. He veered left, and Quinn skidded to a halt, her instincts screaming at her to follow. But the entrance to The Veil Market loomed ahead, a gaping maw in the brickwork, its darkened threshold promising both danger and answers. She hesitated, the weight of her badge heavy in her pocket. The Market was a place of whispers and secrets, a hidden underbelly of the city where the supernatural mingled with the criminal. She had heard the stories—of enchanted goods, of alchemical substances that could twist fate itself. It was a world she had skirted around, but never dared to enter. The suspect slipped inside, and Quinn’s resolve hardened. She couldn’t let him escape, not now. Not when he might hold the key to the truth behind DS Morris’s death. With a deep breath, she stepped into the darkness, the air thick with the scent of incense and something metallic. The dim light flickered overhead, casting eerie shadows that danced along the walls. Old maps and photographs adorned the space, remnants of a time long past, and the low hum of conversation buzzed around her like a swarm of bees. “Quinn!” a voice hissed from the shadows. She turned, her hand instinctively reaching for her sidearm. Tomás Herrera emerged, his warm brown eyes scanning the crowd. He wore a leather jacket, the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck glinting in the low light. “Tommy,” she breathed, relief flooding her. “Have you seen him?” He nodded, gesturing towards a narrow passageway at the back of the market. “He went that way. But you shouldn’t follow. This place is dangerous.” “Dangerous?” she echoed, her voice low. “You think I’m worried about that?” “Quinn, listen—” “Not now.” She brushed past him, her focus narrowing on the passage. The walls seemed to close in around her, the air thickening with tension. She could hear the distant sound of laughter, the clinking of glasses, and the murmur of deals being struck. The passage led her deeper into the market, the atmosphere shifting from bustling to sinister. The flickering lights cast long shadows, and she felt eyes on her, watching, waiting. Quinn pressed on, her instincts honed from years on the force guiding her through the maze of stalls and vendors. “Quinn!” Tommy’s voice echoed behind her, but she didn’t stop. She had to find him. The suspect. The answers. The passage opened into a larger chamber, filled with strange artifacts and oddities. A vendor with a crooked smile offered her a vial of shimmering liquid, while another displayed a collection of bones, each one etched with symbols she couldn’t decipher. “Looking for something?” the vendor asked, his voice smooth as silk. “Just passing through,” she replied curtly, her eyes scanning the room. A sudden crash echoed from the far side, and she turned just in time to see the suspect stumble into view, his face pale and wild. He spotted her and bolted again, weaving through the crowd. “Stop!” she shouted, but the words barely left her lips before he disappeared into another passage. Quinn cursed under her breath and followed, her heart pounding in her chest. The chase twisted through the market, the air thick with the scent of spices and something acrid that made her stomach churn. She could hear the murmur of voices, the clatter of goods being exchanged, but all she could focus on was the figure ahead of her, slipping further away. “Quinn!” Tommy’s voice was urgent now, cutting through the chaos. “You need to get out of here!” “Not without him!” she shot back, determination hardening her resolve. The suspect turned sharply, and Quinn followed, adrenaline surging as she pushed through the throng of people. The crowd parted reluctantly, eyes narrowing as she barreled through, her badge glinting in the dim light. “Move!” she barked, and they stepped aside, sensing the danger in her voice. He was close now, just ahead, but the passage narrowed, and she could feel the weight of the market pressing in on her. The walls seemed to pulse with energy, and she could almost hear the whispers of the supernatural, urging her to turn back. But she wouldn’t. Not now. The suspect stumbled again, and she seized the moment, lunging forward. Her fingers brushed against his jacket, but he twisted away, darting into a hidden alcove. Quinn skidded to a halt, her heart racing as she peered into the darkness. “Don’t make this harder than it has to be!” she shouted, her voice echoing off the walls. Silence. Then, a low chuckle. “Harder? You have no idea what hard is.” The voice dripped with malice, and Quinn’s blood ran cold. She stepped into the alcove, her gun drawn, the darkness swallowing her whole. “Show yourself!” A figure emerged from the shadows, a smirk playing on his lips. The suspect stood there, but he wasn’t alone. A hulking figure loomed behind him, eyes glinting like a predator’s in the dark. “Quinn,” the suspect said, his voice taunting. “Welcome to the Veil Market.” The hulking figure stepped forward, and Quinn’s instincts screamed at her to retreat. But there was no way out now. She was trapped, the walls closing in, the weight of the night pressing down on her. “Let’s see how brave you really are.” And with that, the darkness surged forward, swallowing her whole.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she replied curtly [curtly]"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.083
86.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1103
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"reluctantly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1103
totalAiIsms41
found
0
word"raced"
count1
1
word"determined"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count2
3
word"quickened"
count1
4
word"glint"
count1
5
word"could feel"
count2
6
word"weight"
count4
7
word"fleeting"
count1
8
word"etched"
count2
9
word"loomed"
count2
10
word"maw"
count1
11
word"resolve"
count2
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"scanning"
count2
14
word"glinting"
count3
15
word"echoed"
count3
16
word"tension"
count1
17
word"sinister"
count1
18
word"silk"
count1
19
word"pounding"
count1
20
word"stomach"
count1
21
word"churn"
count1
22
word"pulse"
count1
23
word"racing"
count1
24
word"silence"
count1
25
word"hulking"
count2
26
word"predator"
count1
highlights
0"raced"
1"determined"
2"echoing"
3"quickened"
4"glint"
5"could feel"
6"weight"
7"fleeting"
8"etched"
9"loomed"
10"maw"
11"resolve"
12"flickered"
13"scanning"
14"glinting"
15"echoed"
16"tension"
17"sinister"
18"silk"
19"pounding"
20"stomach"
21"churn"
22"pulse"
23"racing"
24"silence"
25"hulking"
26"predator"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences75
matches
0"a jolt of urgency"
1"e with panic"
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences75
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1100
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1015
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn10
Soho1
Veil1
Market2
Morris1
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Silence1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Herrera"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Veil"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1100
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean25.58
std19.01
cv0.743
sampleLengths
053
147
259
33
449
550
650
729
860
97
1036
1110
1225
1312
142
1544
1649
171
1818
1941
2011
2111
2236
2316
2463
2517
2610
2734
2813
2945
305
3140
3217
331
344
358
3623
372
3834
3912
4036
417
4210
91.23% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences75
matches
0"being struck"
1"being exchanged"
2"was trapped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs176
matches(empty)
76.41% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences86
ratio0.023
matches
0"It was a look she knew all too well—the kind that came from desperation."
1"She had heard the stories—of enchanted goods, of alchemical substances that could twist fate itself."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1018
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.02455795677799607
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.007858546168958742
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean12.79
std6.8
cv0.532
sampleLengths
013
121
219
324
423
520
615
724
83
914
1021
1114
1216
1323
1411
1522
1615
1713
188
197
2014
2120
2213
2327
247
259
2610
2717
286
294
3013
3112
326
336
342
3512
3613
3719
3815
3914
4020
411
429
435
442
452
4613
4728
4811
4911
50.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3488372093023256
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners30
46.95% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"Then, a low chuckle."
ratio0.014
56.62% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences71
matches
0"she shouted, her voice echoing"
1"She could barely make out"
2"He rounded a corner, and"
3"She could feel the weight"
4"It was a look she"
5"He veered left, and Quinn"
6"She hesitated, the weight of"
7"She had heard the stories—of"
8"It was a world she"
9"She couldn’t let him escape,"
10"She turned, her hand instinctively"
11"He wore a leather jacket,"
12"she breathed, relief flooding her"
13"He nodded, gesturing towards a"
14"she echoed, her voice low"
15"She brushed past him, her"
16"She could hear the distant"
17"She had to find him."
18"she replied curtly, her eyes"
19"He spotted her and bolted"
ratio0.408
16.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences71
matches
0"The suspect darted into the"
1"Harlow Quinn's heart raced as"
2"The scent of damp asphalt"
3"she shouted, her voice echoing"
4"She could barely make out"
5"He rounded a corner, and"
6"The rain drummed a relentless"
7"She could feel the weight"
8"The alley narrowed, and she"
9"The suspect glanced back, eyes"
10"It was a look she"
11"He veered left, and Quinn"
12"She hesitated, the weight of"
13"The Market was a place"
14"She had heard the stories—of"
15"It was a world she"
16"The suspect slipped inside, and"
17"She couldn’t let him escape,"
18"The dim light flickered overhead,"
19"a voice hissed from the"
ratio0.887
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.55% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The scent of damp asphalt and distant smoke filled her lungs, mingling with the adrenaline coursing through her veins."
1"He rounded a corner, and Quinn followed, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the neon glow of the city."
2"She had heard the stories—of enchanted goods, of alchemical substances that could twist fate itself."
3"The crowd parted reluctantly, eyes narrowing as she barreled through, her badge glinting in the dim light."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she breathed, relief flooding her"
1"she echoed, her voice low"
2"She brushed, her focus narrowing on the passage"
3"the vendor asked, his voice smooth as silk"
4"she replied curtly, her eyes scanning the room"
5"she shot back, determination hardening her resolve"
6"she shouted, her voice echoing off the walls"
7"the suspect said, his voice taunting"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"a voice hissed (hiss)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
3"she shouted (shout)"
4"she barked (bark)"
5"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.5
76.4736%