Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQRVY7E4Z2X6X7HC0J2B05

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Duration:
40.3s
Cost:
$0.001255

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Stop!" Harlow Quinn's voice cut through the cacophony of the night, a sharp command swallowed by the rain drumming against the pavement. She sprinted, each step a defiance against the slick surface threatening to betray her. The suspect, a shadow cloaked by the torrential rain, dashed around the corner ahead, a fleeting figure on the cusp of evading her grasp once more. Quinn's heart thudded in her chest, adrenaline surging as her body moved with military precision. Gritting her teeth, she steadied her breath. The haunt of her past chased her, as relentless as the suspect she pursued. Every fleeting glimpse of movement betrayed a darker truth lurking in the London streets—one she would not let slip away again. The alley opened into a wider thoroughfare, heavy with the scent of damp asphalt and distant exhaust. A flickering neon light from a nearby café illuminated the scene, reflecting dully in the puddles scattered across the ground. Quinn’s gaze flicked to the lurking figures at the kerb, silhouettes wrapped in shadows, watching her with dull curiosity. They had no idea what had become of the criminal underground, and the veiled dangers that tailed behind. "Get down!" a voice pierced through the haze. Quinn’s instincts kicked into overdrive. She sidestepped and ducked just in time to see a makeshift projectile—a glass bottle—smash against a nearby wall, scattering shards like glimmering daggers. The figures scattered, but not before the glint of a knife caught her eye. *No time.* Quinn pivoted, her footsteps resonating off the bricks, surging after her target who had rounded another corner. A flurry of thoughts buzzed around her mind: the rain-soaked streets, the dark figures, the perpetual echoes of her partner’s voice fading away—the whispers of the supernatural, a world she had fought against in silence. Ahead, her suspect dove through a narrow passage between two crumbling buildings, disappearing into the murky depths. Quinn hesitated only a beat, instincts warring with reason. This was no ordinary chase; she could feel the darkness lurking behind the brick walls—the underbelly of London was a dangerous labyrinth. But with a deep breath and grit that had made her one of the best detectives in the force, she followed. The narrow alleyway opened into a gaping maw beneath the surface—the Veil Market—an underground world shifting every full moon, hidden beneath the noise of the glossy city above. The dim light of flickering torches cast elongated shadows across the faces of the gathered crowd. Various characters mingled, each one more curious than the last—shapeshifters, witchlings, all trading mysterious wares with a smirk or a nod. A thread of unease pulled at her stomach. This was territory both old and charged with the uncanny, the persistent whispers of those who had come before prickling the hairs on her neck. However, the figure ahead moved with purpose, weaving through the throng like smoke. Quinn charged in after them, the tunnel closing tighter behind her as the clamour swallowed her whole. "Watch it!" A vendor barked, glaring as she forced her way past, catching a glimpse of strange relics on rickety tables—tattered spellbooks, vials of bubbling liquids, and iron-tipped stakes. "Tommy!" she shouted, her voice lost in the commotion. In the corner of her vision, she spotted him—a familiar figure, olive skin glistening in the flickering light. It was Tomás Herrera, a former paramedic turned underground healer, standing outside one of the vendor booths. He glanced up, spotting Quinn with keen urgency. “What have you gotten yourself into now?” he said, worry etching into his features even in the midst of chaos. “Chasing a suspect!” Quinn shot back, scanning the crowd. “I can't lose him. Have you seen anyone suspicious?” “Depends what you mean by suspicious,” he smirked, glancing over his shoulder. The corner of his mouth twitched slightly. “Every soul down here is hiding something.” And then she saw him—the suspect, made of shadows and sin, standing at the edge of a more secluded area, flanked by figures obscured in cloaks. Quinn steeled her resolve, berating herself for pausing. She pushed through the bodies, eyes locked on her target, their darting movements nothing but a pretence for the dark magic lurking. “This place isn’t safe!” Tommy called, but urgency consumed her, guiding her choices. “Quinn! Think about it.” “Trust me!” she bit out, force of will colliding with instinct. She could handle this. Her footsteps quickened, drawing her closer to the suspect who met her eyes for a heartbeat—devoid of fear and filled with a sickening grin. Quinn's heart sank, recognition flashing in her mind. He was part of the clique tying together the supernatural underbelly, a participant in the web of mystery surrounding her partner's death. "Stop!" She shouted, but more than a warning, it was a plea. The suspect pushed a crate aside, revealing the hidden doorway behind, leading deeper into the underground. The shadows beckoned. They twisted and curled, parting like dark water. *Would she follow?* A million whispers clamoured in her thoughts, cautioning against the plunge into the unknown—an abyss filled with secrets and horrors she had yet to comprehend. Yet, every moment paused, weighted by grief and duty. “Quinn!” Tommy's voice broke her trance, pulling her momentarily from the dark space as he hovered at the entrance. Fear rested on his brow, sliding into concern. “Please don’t!” The suspect smirked, that infuriating grin plastered on his face as he turned towards the void, disappearing into the depths beyond the door. Every fibre of her being screamed for caution, for prudence, but who would be there to save those who haunted her when she hesitated? “Stay close!” she called, lunging toward the doorway. Quinn stepped over the broken threshold into the dim corridor, Tommy just behind her, the sharp scent of stale air engulfing them. Inside, darkness swelled, mysterious and thick. A lantern swung overhead, illuminating intricate carvings stained against the walls—ancient symbols she recognised from old case files. “Quinn, this is madness,” Tommy hissed, casting nervous glances. They pressed deeper, a rhythmic pounding echoing from somewhere down the hallway, as though the very heart of the underground pulsed with danger. Then she saw it—a door adorned with rusted chains and a gnarly, breathing lock. The music of tension swelled as she fought through hesitation. Beyond that door lay her answers—marked not just by the criminal, but by the echoes of her past. With a single determined step, she reached for the handle. A gut-wrenching noise emanated from within; the light flickered ominously as the world screamed for her to turn back. Instead, she opened the door. The scene erupted like a broken dam, the shadows spilling out with the weight of certainty, right as the symphony of chaos commenced. The thud of footsteps followed her. “Close it!” Tommy urged. But Quinn's grip tightened. She stepped across the threshold, heart racing as darkness beckoned in whispers. There was no turning back now.
total_cost0.0012554299999999999

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.778
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"cacophony"
count1
1
word"fleeting"
count2
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count3
5
word"echoes"
count2
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"depths"
count2
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"maw"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"charged"
count2
12
word"uncanny"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"glistening"
count1
15
word"etching"
count1
16
word"scanning"
count1
17
word"steeled"
count1
18
word"resolve"
count1
19
word"quickened"
count1
20
word"intricate"
count1
21
word"rhythmic"
count1
22
word"pounding"
count1
23
word"echoing"
count1
24
word"pulsed"
count1
25
word"tension"
count1
26
word"determined"
count1
27
word"flickered"
count1
28
word"weight"
count1
29
word"symphony"
count1
30
word"racing"
count1
highlights
0"cacophony"
1"fleeting"
2"flicked"
3"glint"
4"footsteps"
5"echoes"
6"silence"
7"depths"
8"could feel"
9"maw"
10"stomach"
11"charged"
12"uncanny"
13"familiar"
14"glistening"
15"etching"
16"scanning"
17"steeled"
18"resolve"
19"quickened"
20"intricate"
21"rhythmic"
22"pounding"
23"echoing"
24"pulsed"
25"tension"
26"determined"
27"flickered"
28"weight"
29"symphony"
30"racing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences74
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords5
totalWords1150
ratio0.004
matches
0"No time."
1"Would she follow?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.37% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1090
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn13
London2
Veil1
Market1
Tomás1
Herrera1
Fear1
Tommy5
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Fear"
4"Tommy"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.904
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.87
wordCount1150
matches
0"not just by the criminal, but by the echoes of her past"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean37.1
std19.33
cv0.521
sampleLengths
062
157
274
350
454
569
665
763
829
99
1043
1120
1218
1326
1456
1517
1615
1754
1828
1948
2029
2147
2230
2324
2432
2542
2629
2728
286
294
3022
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"being screamed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs188
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences78
ratio0.192
matches
0"Every fleeting glimpse of movement betrayed a darker truth lurking in the London streets—one she would not let slip away again."
1"She sidestepped and ducked just in time to see a makeshift projectile—a glass bottle—smash against a nearby wall, scattering shards like glimmering daggers."
2"A flurry of thoughts buzzed around her mind: the rain-soaked streets, the dark figures, the perpetual echoes of her partner’s voice fading away—the whispers of the supernatural, a world she had fought against in silence."
3"This was no ordinary chase; she could feel the darkness lurking behind the brick walls—the underbelly of London was a dangerous labyrinth."
4"The narrow alleyway opened into a gaping maw beneath the surface—the Veil Market—an underground world shifting every full moon, hidden beneath the noise of the glossy city above."
5"Various characters mingled, each one more curious than the last—shapeshifters, witchlings, all trading mysterious wares with a smirk or a nod."
6"\"Watch it!\" A vendor barked, glaring as she forced her way past, catching a glimpse of strange relics on rickety tables—tattered spellbooks, vials of bubbling liquids, and iron-tipped stakes."
7"In the corner of her vision, she spotted him—a familiar figure, olive skin glistening in the flickering light."
8"And then she saw him—the suspect, made of shadows and sin, standing at the edge of a more secluded area, flanked by figures obscured in cloaks."
9"Her footsteps quickened, drawing her closer to the suspect who met her eyes for a heartbeat—devoid of fear and filled with a sickening grin."
10"*Would she follow?* A million whispers clamoured in her thoughts, cautioning against the plunge into the unknown—an abyss filled with secrets and horrors she had yet to comprehend."
11"A lantern swung overhead, illuminating intricate carvings stained against the walls—ancient symbols she recognised from old case files."
12"Then she saw it—a door adorned with rusted chains and a gnarly, breathing lock."
13"Beyond that door lay her answers—marked not just by the criminal, but by the echoes of her past."
14"A gut-wrenching noise emanated from within; the light flickered ominously as the world screamed for her to turn back."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1109
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic turned underground healer,"
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.027953110910730387
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.007213706041478809
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean14.74
std7.47
cv0.507
sampleLengths
022
114
226
315
47
514
621
717
820
919
1018
118
125
1323
1414
1519
1635
1717
189
1922
2021
2128
2216
2321
248
2525
2613
2717
2829
299
3018
3117
328
3320
349
359
3612
377
387
3926
408
4122
4213
434
4411
454
4624
478
4822
4912
79.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners39
91.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences73
matches
0"Then she saw it—a door"
1"Instead, she opened the door."
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences73
matches
0"She sprinted, each step a"
1"They had no idea what"
2"She sidestepped and ducked just"
3"she shouted, her voice lost"
4"It was Tomás Herrera, a"
5"He glanced up, spotting Quinn"
6"he said, worry etching into"
7"he smirked, glancing over his"
8"She pushed through the bodies,"
9"she bit out, force of"
10"She could handle this."
11"Her footsteps quickened, drawing her"
12"He was part of the"
13"She shouted, but more than"
14"They twisted and curled, parting"
15"she called, lunging toward the"
16"They pressed deeper, a rhythmic"
17"She stepped across the threshold,"
ratio0.247
69.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences73
matches
0"Harlow Quinn's voice cut through"
1"She sprinted, each step a"
2"The suspect, a shadow cloaked"
3"Quinn's heart thudded in her"
4"The haunt of her past"
5"Every fleeting glimpse of movement"
6"The alley opened into a"
7"A flickering neon light from"
8"Quinn’s gaze flicked to the"
9"They had no idea what"
10"a voice pierced through the"
11"Quinn’s instincts kicked into overdrive."
12"She sidestepped and ducked just"
13"The figures scattered, but not"
14"A flurry of thoughts buzzed"
15"Quinn hesitated only a beat,"
16"This was no ordinary chase;"
17"The narrow alleyway opened into"
18"The dim light of flickering"
19"Various characters mingled, each one"
ratio0.781
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences73
matches
0"However, the figure ahead moved"
1"Yet, every moment paused, weighted"
ratio0.027
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"*No time.* Quinn pivoted, her footsteps resonating off the bricks, surging after her target who had rounded another corner."
1"They pressed deeper, a rhythmic pounding echoing from somewhere down the hallway, as though the very heart of the underground pulsed with danger."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"A vendor barked (bark)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"She shouted (shout)"
3"Tommy hissed (hiss)"
4"Tommy urged (urge)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.444
leniency0.889
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.556
87.2071%