Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQS8HGE35TZJN5SB7P8EY8

Run Details

Duration:
16.6s
Cost:
$0.001014
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect darted around the corner, rain slicking the cobblestones and turning the city into a shifting maze of shadows. Harlow Quinn’s boots thudded hard on the wet surface, each step echoing her pounding heartbeat. She dove into the alley behind a flickering neon sign that cast a sickly green glow, her breath fogging in the chilled air as she pressed her back against the damp brick wall. The suspect vanished into the darkness like a ghost, but Quinn’s sharp eyes caught a flicker—the faint glow of a phone screen disappearing around a bend. Her fingers tightened on her pistol, her muscles coiled with anticipation. The downpour intensified, droplets hammering her shoulders and pooling in the cracks of the pavement, smearing the streets in a glossy sheen. She peered into the alley’s narrow end, listening; only the distant rumbling of trucks and the steady drip of rain. No feet, no breath, just the silence before the storm. She stepped forward soundlessly, senses prickling, till she reached a dead end—a rusted metal door cracked open just enough for her to slip inside. No warning, no time to hesitate. The air inside was thick, metallic, and tinged with something bitter and chemical. She moved swiftly, her presence swallowed by the darkness. Shadows cloaked her as she kept low, her eyes adjusting to the dim glow emanating from a flickering bulb overhead. The faint scent of mould and old machinery clung to the stale air. She pressed her back against the cool, damp wall, heart hammering in her chest. In the silence, her ears picked up muffled voices down a corridor—foreign, hurried. She crept toward it, every step deliberate. Heavy footfalls, hushed whispers, and low chuckles resonated through the narrow passage. She pressed her hand to her radio, whispering, “Suspect just ducked into the market. Possible underground location. Need backup.” Only static greeted her. The city’s chaos had drowned her signal. She clenched her jaw, tilting her head to listen. The voices grew clearer—an argument, urgent, punctuated by the clink of metal objects and faint murmurs of a crowd not meant for her ears. The suspect’s silhouette flickered across the entryway—tall, hunched, darting through a narrow archway. She moved instinctively, her gun steady. But hesitation prickled at her mind. The market beneath the city was no stranger to rumours—of bandits, ghosts, whispering shadows—and now she was about to step into its abyss. Her fingers hovered over her holster, heart pounding anew. Then she remembered the old stories—about the underground market’s shifts, how every full moon it whispered to a different part of the city, secrets traded beneath the streets, dangerous knowledge, enchanted objects, and entities with motives she didn’t want to understand. Still, the chase propelled her. She slipped through the archway, down a crumbling staircase that smelled of damp stone and old secrets. Pushing past cobwebs and rusted pipes, she reached a sprawling space—a cavern carved from centuries of neglect. Dim, flickering lights hung from the ceiling, casting uneven shadows over stalls crafted from battered wood, burlap, and time itself. Vendors—some human, some not—huddled around chipped tables, bartering in hushed tones. The stink of rotting vegetables, burnt resin, and old leather filled her nostrils. The market’s pulse was palpable, alive with the murmur of voices, the clink of coins, and the rustle of parcels exchanged beneath tired, peeling awnings. Here, familiar rules bowed before the need for secrecy. She steadied herself, scanning for her target. The suspect’s scent blended with the air—faint but persistent. She moved carefully, bodies shifting in her peripheral vision, eyes darting over strange figures. This wasn't her turf, not the police station or the familiar districts. No, this was something darker, woven into the fabric of the city’s underbelly. Suddenly, a voice called out from behind her—soft but sussurrous. "Looking for someone?" She spun, gun raised. The vendor—a gaunt man with sharp eyes and a crooked smile—wore a tatter of tattered cloth and a charm necklace along his neck. His voice was smooth, coated in intrigue. "Who wants to know?" she growled, voice low. He shrugged, palm open. "Word travels fast, Detective. Especially when you’re chasing ghosts." The hair on the back of her neck prickled. Her instincts screamed she’d taken a step too far, but she kept her weapon steady. "I'm looking for a guy," she said, voice clipped. "Tall, dark hair. Been here?" His eyes flicked to a shadowed corner, where a flickering lantern threw brief light over a figure hunched behind a pile of odd trinkets. Quinn’s finger tightened on her trigger. She let her eyes meet the vendor’s. "Not my business," he murmured. "But you might want to think about what’s lurking behind those stalls before you make enemies." She caught the faint glint of something metallic in the shadow—the quick movement of a figure slipping behind a curtain. Her instinct defied caution. She edged forward. A sudden crackle of static from her radio, then a burst of noise—urgent, strained. Glancing down, she saw her finger tremble on her earpiece; the signal was crackling, fragmented, like the city itself was fighting her efforts to stay connected. She pressed deeper into the market, feet crunching over broken glass and discarded paper. The suspect was close. She could feel it—not just through the scent but through that prickling sensation, like being watched by eyes hidden in the dark. She traced her gaze over the crowd, every face a potential threat or clue. Then—from behind a curtain of beads—the suspect emerged, clutching a small, weathered bone token. His eyes widened as they met hers, a flicker of defiance—or despair. He darted again, weaving between stalls, voice hoarse now over the commotion. "You shouldn’t be here," he hissed under his breath. She fired a warning shot into the ceiling, the echo vibrating through the cavernous space. "Stop right there," she demanded, voice echoing louder than intended. A surge of movement erupted. Figures darted from shadowed corners, some lifting strange artifacts, others simply melting into the crowd like ghosts dissolving into fog. The market seemed to flex and writhe with an unspoken life, opening into chaos. The suspect disappeared into a narrow side passage, arm stretched out, clutching that bone token like his life depended on it. Quinn’s hand trembled slightly. She had to decide—pursue into the black maw of the underground, or retreat, knowing she was entering territory where certainty was a precious commodity. The air grew thicker, the shadows more oppressive. No backup, no radio signals. Just her and the dark secrets of the market, closing in. And somewhere behind her, the faint echo of whispers—omens of things deeper than she’d yet to comprehend—murmuring from the abyss she was about to enter.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1139
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"suddenly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1139
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"echoing"
count2
1
word"pounding"
count2
2
word"chilled"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count2
4
word"anticipation"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"tinged"
count1
7
word"resonated"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"palpable"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count2
12
word"scanning"
count1
13
word"charm"
count1
14
word"intrigue"
count1
15
word"flicked"
count1
16
word"glint"
count1
17
word"fragmented"
count1
18
word"could feel"
count1
19
word"traced"
count1
20
word"potential"
count1
21
word"echo"
count2
22
word"unspoken"
count1
23
word"trembled"
count1
24
word"maw"
count1
25
word"oppressive"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"pounding"
2"chilled"
3"flicker"
4"anticipation"
5"silence"
6"tinged"
7"resonated"
8"flickered"
9"pulse"
10"palpable"
11"familiar"
12"scanning"
13"charm"
14"intrigue"
15"flicked"
16"glint"
17"fragmented"
18"could feel"
19"traced"
20"potential"
21"echo"
22"unspoken"
23"trembled"
24"maw"
25"oppressive"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences80
matches
0"d with anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1115
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions4
wordCount1052
uniqueNames1
maxNameDensity0.38
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn4
persons
0"Quinn"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.897
wordCount1115
matches
0"not just through the scent but through"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"clutching that bone"
88.47% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean38.45
std17.67
cv0.46
sampleLengths
068
159
260
369
451
544
648
750
859
958
1055
1113
1234
138
1413
1524
1614
1737
1821
1927
2040
2154
2226
2321
2425
2539
2649
2724
2825
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"being watched"
93.05% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs187
matches
0"was crackling, was fighting"
1"was entering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences84
ratio0.25
matches
0"The suspect vanished into the darkness like a ghost, but Quinn’s sharp eyes caught a flicker—the faint glow of a phone screen disappearing around a bend."
1"She peered into the alley’s narrow end, listening; only the distant rumbling of trucks and the steady drip of rain."
2"She stepped forward soundlessly, senses prickling, till she reached a dead end—a rusted metal door cracked open just enough for her to slip inside."
3"In the silence, her ears picked up muffled voices down a corridor—foreign, hurried."
4"The voices grew clearer—an argument, urgent, punctuated by the clink of metal objects and faint murmurs of a crowd not meant for her ears."
5"The suspect’s silhouette flickered across the entryway—tall, hunched, darting through a narrow archway."
6"The market beneath the city was no stranger to rumours—of bandits, ghosts, whispering shadows—and now she was about to step into its abyss."
7"Then she remembered the old stories—about the underground market’s shifts, how every full moon it whispered to a different part of the city, secrets traded beneath the streets, dangerous knowledge, enchanted objects, and entities with motives she didn’t want to understand."
8"Pushing past cobwebs and rusted pipes, she reached a sprawling space—a cavern carved from centuries of neglect."
9"Vendors—some human, some not—huddled around chipped tables, bartering in hushed tones."
10"The suspect’s scent blended with the air—faint but persistent."
11"Suddenly, a voice called out from behind her—soft but sussurrous."
12"The vendor—a gaunt man with sharp eyes and a crooked smile—wore a tatter of tattered cloth and a charm necklace along his neck."
13"She caught the faint glint of something metallic in the shadow—the quick movement of a figure slipping behind a curtain."
14"A sudden crackle of static from her radio, then a burst of noise—urgent, strained."
15"Glancing down, she saw her finger tremble on her earpiece; the signal was crackling, fragmented, like the city itself was fighting her efforts to stay connected."
16"She could feel it—not just through the scent but through that prickling sensation, like being watched by eyes hidden in the dark."
17"Then—from behind a curtain of beads—the suspect emerged, clutching a small, weathered bone token."
18"His eyes widened as they met hers, a flicker of defiance—or despair."
19"She had to decide—pursue into the black maw of the underground, or retreat, knowing she was entering territory where certainty was a precious commodity."
20"And somewhere behind her, the faint echo of whispers—omens of things deeper than she’d yet to comprehend—murmuring from the abyss she was about to enter."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1076
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.02137546468401487
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.010223048327137546
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean13.27
std7.5
cv0.565
sampleLengths
020
115
233
326
411
522
620
710
824
96
1013
119
1220
1313
1414
1513
167
1712
1819
194
207
219
2224
2313
246
256
2623
279
2841
295
3017
3117
3220
3311
3413
3525
369
377
389
3914
4012
4113
4210
433
444
4523
467
478
484
499
62.70% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.40476190476190477
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners34
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences79
matches
0"Only static greeted her."
1"Then she remembered the old"
2"Suddenly, a voice called out"
3"Then—from behind a curtain of"
4"Just her and the dark"
ratio0.063
47.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences79
matches
0"She dove into the alley"
1"Her fingers tightened on her"
2"She peered into the alley’s"
3"She stepped forward soundlessly, senses"
4"She moved swiftly, her presence"
5"She pressed her back against"
6"She crept toward it, every"
7"She pressed her hand to"
8"She clenched her jaw, tilting"
9"She moved instinctively, her gun"
10"Her fingers hovered over her"
11"She slipped through the archway,"
12"She steadied herself, scanning for"
13"She moved carefully, bodies shifting"
14"She spun, gun raised."
15"His voice was smooth, coated"
16"she growled, voice low"
17"He shrugged, palm open."
18"Her instincts screamed she’d taken"
19"she said, voice clipped"
ratio0.43
67.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences79
matches
0"The suspect darted around the"
1"Harlow Quinn’s boots thudded hard"
2"She dove into the alley"
3"The suspect vanished into the"
4"Her fingers tightened on her"
5"The downpour intensified, droplets hammering"
6"She peered into the alley’s"
7"She stepped forward soundlessly, senses"
8"The air inside was thick,"
9"She moved swiftly, her presence"
10"Shadows cloaked her as she"
11"The faint scent of mould"
12"She pressed her back against"
13"She crept toward it, every"
14"She pressed her hand to"
15"The city’s chaos had drowned"
16"She clenched her jaw, tilting"
17"The voices grew clearer—an argument,"
18"The suspect’s silhouette flickered across"
19"She moved instinctively, her gun"
ratio0.785
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
99.13% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She dove into the alley behind a flickering neon sign that cast a sickly green glow, her breath fogging in the chilled air as she pressed her back against the d…"
1"Shadows cloaked her as she kept low, her eyes adjusting to the dim glow emanating from a flickering bulb overhead."
2"She slipped through the archway, down a crumbling staircase that smelled of damp stone and old secrets."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she growled, voice low"
1"she said, voice clipped"
2"she demanded, voice echoing louder than intended"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"She pressed (press)"
1"she growled (growl)"
2"he murmured (murmur)"
3"he hissed (hiss)"
4"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.833
77.0761%