Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQXE1MG92EA89ZXGA387BD

Run Details

Duration:
1m 40s
Cost:
$0.003551
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn’s boots hammered the slick pavement. The suspect crashed through a pile of black bags, sending sodden refuse skittering into the gutter. Forty yards ahead, he vanished down a side passage. She didn’t break stride. *Morris would’ve called it an ambush setup*. The thought arrived, unwelcome but sharp, as she darted into the narrow alley. Brick walls closed in. A shadow darted left, down another turning. Camden. Rain turned the gutters to streams. She rounded the corner, hand on her sidearm, and froze. A dead end. Scaffolding cluttered the space ahead. Chains rattled in the wind. She scanned the shadows. A glint of wet cobbles caught her eye—not water, but polished bone. A token lay discarded near a rusted service hatch set into the pavement. The manhole lid sat ajar. “Underground,” she muttered. Morris’s ghost whispered in her ear again, memories of tunnels and things that hunted in the dark. She knelt, snatched the token. Smooth, cold, carved with twisting symbols she didn’t recognise. The hatch stank of damp earth and something else—ozone and crushed herbs. The market moved locations every full moon. Tonight was a shipping night. She listened. Distant echoes rose from the hole. Voices. The clink of glass. Bargain-hunting at three a.m. She could call it in. Wait for backup. Watch the hatch and log the sighting. Standard procedure. But standard procedure hadn’t caught Morris’s killers. Standard procedure kept files closed and questions unanswered. Whoever was down there traded in more than just stolen antiques. Her contacts whispered about artifacts. Things that could do damage in the wrong hands. Quinn holstered her weapon and hauled the hatch open. A coil of rope knotted to a rusted ladder led down into the dark. She descended. The air changed halfway down. The chill of the London night gave way to a thick, warm humidity, heavy with the scent of incense and hot metal. Her feet landed on uneven stone. Before her stretched a cavernous space, lit by flickering lanterns strung along curved tunnel walls. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden had been hollowed out, transformed into a cathedral of shadows and commerce. The Veil Market thrummed with low, murmured commerce. Stalls lined the platforms, draped in dark cloth, their proprietors hooded or masked. A polished horn glistened on one table. Jars of viscous liquid, glowing faintly, lined another. A vendor sold bolts of fabric that seemed to drink the light. Every transaction was conducted with a whisper and the soft chime of bone tokens changing hands. Her suspect was nowhere in sight. Lost in the shifting crowd of cloaked figures. She kept to the edges, her worn leather watch tight against her wrist, her military bearing making her stand out like a lighthouse in the fog of buyers and sellers. A few hooded faces turned her way. She ignored them, scanning the stalls. Then she saw him. Slinking past a stall selling what looked like bottled moonlight, heading for a curtained archway at the far end of the platform. She moved, quick and quiet, melting between bodies. An elbow clipped her side. “Watch yourself.” She glanced at the speaker—an older woman with eyes the colour of tarnished silver. She held a small, whittled flute. The vendor behind her gave Quinn a slow, deliberate blink. “Lost, officer?” *Damn.* “Just browsing.” The woman smiled, a thin, knowing twist of the lips. “First time buyers usually start with the introductory stalls.” She gestured with her chin toward the archway her suspect had just ducked through. “That’s the expert’s section. Requires an invitation.” “I’ve got one.” Quinn flashed her warrant card, then immediately regretted it. The woman’s smile didn’t waver, but her silver eyes hardened. “Different sort of invitation, I think.” Quinn pushed past her. The curtain was heavy velvet, worn bald in patches. She slipped through into a narrower, darker tunnel. The noise of the main market faded to a dull throb. Here, the stalls were fewer, but the goods were stranger. A shelf of books bound in what looked like human skin. Globes that contained miniature, swirling galaxies under glass. A cage hung from the ceiling, empty but for the lingering scent of burnt feathers. Her target was ahead, talking in low tones to a man behind a table stacked with vials of dark liquid. She closed the distance. The suspect turned. Saw her. Panic flashed across his face. He bolted down a side passage, a crack in the tunnel wall she hadn’t noticed. She gave chase. The passage twisted, descending in a tight spiral. The air grew colder. The sound of the market vanished, replaced by the drip of water and her own ragged breathing. She emerged into a circular chamber. No exits. Just stone walls slick with algae, and in the centre, a simple wooden table. Her suspect stood behind it. He wasn’t alone. Two other figures flanked him, their features obscured by deep hoods. “You shouldn’t have followed,” the suspect said, his voice flat. “End of the line,” Quinn said, drawing her sidearm. “Metropolitan Police. Hands where I can see them.” One of the hooded figures chuckled. A low, wet sound. A bone token landed on the table between them. Hers. “You dropped something,” the suspect said. She glanced at it. Looked back. Her vision swam. The token seemed to pulse with a sickly inner light. *It’s in your head. It’s a trick.* “Put it down,” she ordered, her voice tight. “Or what?” The hooded figure on the left spoke, their voice a rasp of broken glass. “You’ll arrest us? In our market?” Her finger tightened on the trigger. Morris’s face flashed before her eyes. Not as he was in life, smiling, but as she’d imagined him in the dark, alone, facing something he didn’t understand. Something that didn’t care about warrants or procedure. She was alone. No backup. No radio signal this far down. These people could make her disappear. They could bury her in the foundations of London and no one would ever know. “The token is your toll,” the suspect explained, picking it up. He held it out to her. “Take it. Leave. Forget you saw any of this. It’s the easiest path.” The other hooded figure moved. A hand emerged from the folds of its cloak, holding a long, curved blade that shone with a faint blue phosphorescence. “Or,” the figure with the blade rasped, “you can stay.” Quinn looked from the token to the blade to the empty archway behind her. The ladder back to the surface felt a thousand miles away. She kept her gun raised. “I didn’t come down here to collect souvenirs.” The suspect sighed. He placed the token back on the table. “Wrong choice, Detective.” The figure with the blade lunged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.45
leniency0.9
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1127
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"scanned"
count1
1
word"glint"
count1
2
word"echoes"
count1
3
word"standard"
count3
4
word"chill"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"throb"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"scanned"
1"glint"
2"echoes"
3"standard"
4"chill"
5"whisper"
6"scanning"
7"velvet"
8"throb"
9"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences129
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords15
totalWords1123
ratio0.013
matches
0"Morris would’ve called it an ambush setup"
1"Damn."
2"It’s in your head. It’s a trick."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1028
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.68
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn7
Morris4
London2
Tube1
Camden2
Veil1
Market1
One1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Camden"
3"Market"
4"One"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
56.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"fabric that seemed to drink the light"
1"looked like bottled moonlight, heading fo"
2"looked like human skin"
21.91% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.781
wordCount1123
matches
0"not water, but polished bone"
1"Not as he was in life, smiling, but as she’d imagined him in the dark, alone, facing something h"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean20.8
std16.45
cv0.791
sampleLengths
032
135
217
313
434
520
638
717
817
940
1025
1166
1264
1314
1443
1526
1613
172
1830
192
201
212
2240
2312
2416
254
2672
2720
284
2925
303
3129
3241
3310
3417
3510
3610
376
3819
397
408
4122
426
4335
4432
4530
4626
4710
4825
495
99.82% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences129
matches
0"been hollowed"
1"was conducted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs184
matches(empty)
81.19% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences139
ratio0.022
matches
0"A glint of wet cobbles caught her eye—not water, but polished bone."
1"The hatch stank of damp earth and something else—ozone and crushed herbs."
2"She glanced at the speaker—an older woman with eyes the colour of tarnished silver."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1032
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.015503875968992248
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.0029069767441860465
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean8.08
std5.26
cv0.651
sampleLengths
07
116
29
34
47
513
64
77
81
96
1010
113
125
135
144
1512
1613
175
183
1917
205
219
2212
237
245
252
266
271
284
294
305
313
327
332
347
358
3611
375
389
399
4014
412
425
4322
446
4515
4618
478
4813
497
65.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.43884892086330934
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners61
56.98% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"Then she saw him."
1"Just stone walls slick with"
ratio0.017
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences117
matches
0"She didn’t break stride."
1"She rounded the corner, hand"
2"She scanned the shadows."
3"She knelt, snatched the token."
4"She could call it in."
5"Her contacts whispered about artifacts."
6"Her feet landed on uneven"
7"Her suspect was nowhere in"
8"She kept to the edges,"
9"She ignored them, scanning the"
10"She moved, quick and quiet,"
11"She glanced at the speaker—an"
12"She held a small, whittled"
13"She gestured with her chin"
14"She slipped through into a"
15"Her target was ahead, talking"
16"She closed the distance."
17"He bolted down a side"
18"She gave chase."
19"She emerged into a circular"
ratio0.282
49.74% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount96
totalSentences117
matches
0"Harlow Quinn’s boots hammered the"
1"The suspect crashed through a"
2"She didn’t break stride."
3"*Morris would’ve called it an"
4"The thought arrived, unwelcome but"
5"Brick walls closed in."
6"A shadow darted left, down"
7"She rounded the corner, hand"
8"A dead end."
9"Chains rattled in the wind."
10"She scanned the shadows."
11"A glint of wet cobbles"
12"A token lay discarded near"
13"The manhole lid sat ajar."
14"Morris’s ghost whispered in her"
15"She knelt, snatched the token."
16"The hatch stank of damp"
17"The market moved locations every"
18"Tonight was a shipping night."
19"The clink of glass."
ratio0.821
85.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"Whoever was down there traded"
1"Before her stretched a cavernous"
ratio0.017
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Morris’s ghost whispered in her ear again, memories of tunnels and things that hunted in the dark."
1"A hand emerged from the folds of its cloak, holding a long, curved blade that shone with a faint blue phosphorescence."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"the suspect said, his voice flat"
1"she ordered, her voice tight"
2"The hooded figure on the left spoke, their voice a rasp of broken glass"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she ordered (order)"
2"The hooded figure on the left spoke (hood speak)"
3"the suspect explained (explain)"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.4
82.1358%