Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQXFXYKF68VGFGANWDPMGQ

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Duration:
15.4s
Cost:
$0.002304
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bell above the door tossed out a brittle chime, like a warning. Aurora Carter’s blue eyes flicked up from the half-empty glass perched by the bar. The smell of stale smoke and old leather wrapped around the dimly lit Raven’s Nest like a secret. She’d only come in for a quiet drink, just a pause in the relentless shuffle of her part-time grind and living above this same bar. A tall figure stepped inside, scanning the low-ceilinged room with that familiar calm, that quiet command—hazel eyes measuring everything, hair streaked grey but auburn still managing to shine through. Silas Blackwood. The trick of the years was sharp and jagged now. Silas carried his age like a sword—neatly trimmed beard, slight limp in the left leg—defying the slow pull of time. The silver signet ring gleamed faintly on the hand set on the bar. The edge of her scar twitched under the sleeve, a crescent-shaped reminder of a childhood accident that once seemed so insignificant, small and distant now. She watched Silas scan the room, and their eyes locked—two old ghosts confronting the weight of absence. “You don’t usually haunt these shadows.” His voice was gravel, but there was a flicker behind it, a recognition aimed just for her. “Neither do you.” Rory’s voice was calm, but her hand tightened on the glass till the knuckles blushed white. Silas slid onto the stool beside her, the hop of his limp careful, practiced. “Not many places left I haunt.” “We all lose our places,” she muttered, voice barely carrying. The bar’s low murmur swirled around them, the crackling of the jukebox in the corner, a distant laugh swallowed by the walls. Rory traced the rim of her glass absently, the liquid inside catching the muted green glow of the Raven’s Nest sign thrown through the window. “You look... different.” Unexpected words, the careful diplomacy of years layered in a simple observation. His lips twitched in something close to amusement. “You don’t.” Her jaw tightened. “I left Cardiff for a reason.” Silas peered at her, reading between the lines. “Evan?” Aurora’s bright blue eyes dropped for a fraction, a flicker of pain she knew he could pull from shadows if he wanted. “You heard.” “I hear more than you think.” She inhaled the smoky air, bitter like burnt ends. “I’m not the same girl who ran to London begging for a lift.” Silas raised an eyebrow. “Neither am I the man who once dreamt of saving the world one covert op at a time.” His words carried the quiet shake of old wounds, ghost battles fought in foggy alleys and cold Prague nights. Rory slid her hand down the edge of the bar, tracing the map hanging just out of easy sight—ancient London roads twisting like spilled secrets. “So, what brings Silas Blackwood to his own bar, nursing regrets like cheap whiskey?” The set of his jaw tightened, gaze steady. “Redemption doesn’t pour itself.” The door rattled with a draft, but no one came in. The room shrank to just them—two souls tangled in years and silence. “I heard about Prague,” Rory said softly, “The botched mission.” The bar around them seemed to dim further, shadows pooling in the corners like ink spills. Silas’s limp shifted, a small jab of memory. “Lost more than a knee that night.” Rory looked away, catching the stinging scent of iron under the faint tangle of old smoke. “I lost easier things.” “A man doesn’t carry every blade he’s ever caught,” Silas said. His voice dropped, fraught—“but some cut deeper.” Her wrist moved unconsciously, the scar there pulsing against fabric. “I ran from my own demons—Evan’s shadow was the longest.” “Did you find light here? Or just the same darkness?” The question hung heavy. Rory swallowed a lump in her throat. “The jobs, the streets, the chase—they’re different now. Faster in London. Harder to disappear.” They sat there, years folding between them like the brittle pages of a battered book neither wanted to reread. “You ever think about what might have been?” Silas’s voice cracked open the thin veneer. “Before the mistakes? Before everything went sideways?” Her hand curled into a fist, knuckles pale again. “That was never us, was it?” “No. But we clung to the idea. Two kids with nothing but hope and anger. We thought we could break the world apart and put it back in order.” The bar’s secret room, hidden behind the bookshelf, held echoes of whispered plans and stolen moments. Tonight, it felt like a tomb for memories better left buried. A cigarette ember flared behind Silas’s cheek, his eyes drifting for a moment—the kind of tired that comes only from years of watching, waiting. His hand tapped the bar subtly, a nervous tic buried beneath layers of command. “I’m sorry,” Rory said in a breath, refusal to break gaze. “For what?” “For leaving.” He shrugged, a slow, practiced motion. “Sometimes the hardest words are the ones never said.” She heard footsteps approaching—the shuffle of someone closing in. The air shifted. Silas stiffened. A voice, low and unfamiliar, cut through the bar’s murmur. “You Silas Blackwood?” The question was the last thing Rory heard before the bar's door slammed shut behind a group of dark shapes.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
70.97% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"a recognition aimed just [just]"
1"Rory said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.29
leniency0.581
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.129
94.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount890
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.35% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount890
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count2
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"eyebrow"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"echoes"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"scanning"
2"familiar"
3"reminder"
4"weight"
5"flicker"
6"traced"
7"eyebrow"
8"tracing"
9"silence"
10"echoes"
11"footsteps"
12"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences52
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences74
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords876
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount657
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.67
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Raven2
Nest2
Blackwood1
Silas11
Rory8
Prague1
London1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Blackwood"
4"Silas"
5"Rory"
places
0"Prague"
1"London"
globalScore0.663
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed so insignificant small and distant now"
1"something close to amusement"
2"felt like a tomb for memories better le"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount876
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean19.91
std13.63
cv0.685
sampleLengths
070
131
243
342
423
519
620
710
847
915
1010
119
129
1324
146
1522
1622
1744
1814
1912
2023
2110
2224
237
2420
2518
2620
2710
2825
2919
3022
3115
3229
3327
3438
3511
362
372
3815
3912
402
4110
423
4320
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs111
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences74
ratio0.108
matches
0"A tall figure stepped inside, scanning the low-ceilinged room with that familiar calm, that quiet command—hazel eyes measuring everything, hair streaked grey but auburn still managing to shine through."
1"Silas carried his age like a sword—neatly trimmed beard, slight limp in the left leg—defying the slow pull of time."
2"She watched Silas scan the room, and their eyes locked—two old ghosts confronting the weight of absence."
3"Rory slid her hand down the edge of the bar, tracing the map hanging just out of easy sight—ancient London roads twisting like spilled secrets."
4"The room shrank to just them—two souls tangled in years and silence."
5"His voice dropped, fraught—“but some cut deeper.”"
6"A cigarette ember flared behind Silas’s cheek, his eyes drifting for a moment—the kind of tired that comes only from years of watching, waiting."
7"She heard footsteps approaching—the shuffle of someone closing in."
99.51% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount567
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.04056437389770723
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.012345679012345678
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences74
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences74
mean11.84
std7.18
cv0.606
sampleLengths
013
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218
325
429
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720
813
925
1017
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1219
1314
146
1510
1622
1725
1815
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202
213
226
238
241
2522
262
276
289
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304
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3219
3325
3414
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3711
3812
3910
4016
418
427
4316
444
4511
467
4710
4810
4910
54.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.35135135135135137
totalSentences74
uniqueOpeners26
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
97.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences49
matches
0"She’d only come in for"
1"She watched Silas scan the"
2"His voice was gravel, but"
3"she muttered, voice barely carrying"
4"His lips twitched in something"
5"Her jaw tightened."
6"She inhaled the smoky air,"
7"His words carried the quiet"
8"His voice dropped, fraught—“but some"
9"Her wrist moved unconsciously, the"
10"They sat there, years folding"
11"Her hand curled into a"
12"His hand tapped the bar"
13"He shrugged, a slow, practiced"
14"She heard footsteps approaching—the shuffle"
ratio0.306
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences49
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"Aurora Carter’s blue eyes flicked"
2"The smell of stale smoke"
3"She’d only come in for"
4"A tall figure stepped inside,"
5"The trick of the years"
6"Silas carried his age like"
7"The silver signet ring gleamed"
8"The edge of her scar"
9"She watched Silas scan the"
10"His voice was gravel, but"
11"Rory’s voice was calm, but"
12"Silas slid onto the stool"
13"she muttered, voice barely carrying"
14"The bar’s low murmur swirled"
15"Rory traced the rim of"
16"His lips twitched in something"
17"Her jaw tightened."
18"Silas peered at her, reading"
19"Aurora’s bright blue eyes dropped"
ratio0.98
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"A cigarette ember flared behind Silas’s cheek, his eyes drifting for a moment—the kind of tired that comes only from years of watching, waiting."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she muttered, voice barely carrying"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.129
leniency0.258
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.065
75.7997%