Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQYTGZ20XTTGQP40BT0JR1

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16.6s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn's boots pounded against the slick pavement, her breath coming in sharp bursts as she pursued the shadowy figure ahead. The suspect darted through the rain-soaked streets, weaving between the late-night crowd that had gathered under the neon glow of Soho's nightlife. Harlow's heart raced, her mind focused on the chase, the thrill of the hunt coursing through her veins. "Stop!" she shouted, her voice cutting through the cacophony of the city. But the figure only glanced back, a fleeting silhouette against the backdrop of blurred lights, before disappearing down a narrow alleyway. Harlow skidded to a halt at the mouth of the alley, her sharp jaw set with determination. She could feel the weight of her worn leather watch on her wrist, a constant reminder of time slipping away. She hesitated for a fraction of a second, then plunged into the darkness, her senses heightened by the adrenaline. The alley was a labyrinth of shadows and echoes, the rain a constant drumbeat on the corrugated metal roofs above. Harlow's eyes adjusted quickly, her military precision guiding her through the maze. She caught sight of the suspect again, a flash of movement as they slipped through a hidden door, the entrance to an abandoned Tube station. Harlow paused, her instincts screaming caution. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of it, a hidden supernatural black market that moved locations every full moon. It was a place of danger and deceit, where the lines between reality and the supernatural blurred. She knew the risks, but the suspect was her only lead, the key to unraveling the mystery that had haunted her since the loss of her partner, DS Morris. She took a deep breath, steeling herself, and pushed open the door. The air inside was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else, something metallic that stung her nostrils. Copper. Blood. Recent. The station was a cavernous space, dimly lit by flickering bulbs strung haphazardly along the walls. Stalls lined the platform, each one a treasure trove of enchanted goods and banned alchemical substances. The crowd was a mix of the ordinary and the extraordinary, humans and creatures mingling in a dance of commerce and secrecy. Harlow moved through the throng, her eyes scanning for the suspect. She felt the weight of eyes on her, the market's denizens sizing her up, assessing her purpose. She kept her expression neutral, her posture relaxed but ready, her sharp gaze never lingering too long on any one face. A flash of movement caught her attention, the suspect slipping through a gap between two stalls. Harlow followed, her heart pounding in her chest. She pushed past a vendor hawking charms and talismans, her focus unwavering. The suspect led her deeper into the market, through a warren of tunnels and passageways that twisted and turned, each one more disorienting than the last. Harlow's mind raced, cataloguing every detail, every potential escape route. She couldn't afford to lose them now, not when she was so close. Finally, they emerged into a larger chamber, the air thick with tension. The suspect stood at the far end, their back to a wall covered in faded graffiti. Harlow approached slowly, her hand resting on the grip of her service weapon, her senses on high alert. "End of the line," she said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins. "There's nowhere left to run." The suspect turned, their face obscured by the shadows. "You shouldn't have followed me, Detective," they said, their voice a low, mocking drawl. "This isn't your world." Harlow's eyes narrowed, her mind racing. She could feel the weight of the decision before her, the choice between retreating to the safety of the known or stepping further into the unknown, into a world she barely understood. But the memory of DS Morris, of the case that had taken him from her, pushed her forward. "I make my own world," she replied, her voice firm. "And you're coming with me." The suspect laughed, a sound that echoed off the walls, and lunged. Harlow reacted instinctively, her training kicking in as she sidestepped the attack, her movements fluid and precise. She drew her weapon, the cold metal a reassuring weight in her hand. "Don't make this harder than it has to be," she warned, her voice a low growl. The suspect hesitated, their eyes flicking to the exit, calculating their chances. Harlow could see the conflict in their gaze, the fear and defiance warring within them. She held her ground, her resolve unshaken. In that moment, the market seemed to hold its breath, the air charged with anticipation. Harlow's heart pounded in her chest, her mind a whirlwind of possibilities. She knew the risks, the dangers that lay ahead, but she also knew she couldn't turn back now. Not when she was so close to the truth. The suspect's shoulders slumped, their defiance crumbling under the weight of inevitability. They raised their hands in surrender, their eyes meeting Harlow's with a mixture of resignation and respect. "Alright, Detective," they said, their voice tinged with a hint of admiration. "You win." Harlow nodded, her grip on her weapon relaxing slightly. She stepped forward, her eyes never leaving the suspect's face, ready for any sudden movement. The market around them began to stir, the tension dissipating as the crowd returned to their business, the moment of drama passing into memory. As Harlow led the suspect back through the market, her mind was already racing ahead, piecing together the puzzle that had eluded her for so long. She knew the path ahead would be fraught with danger, but she also knew she was ready, her resolve stronger than ever. The rain had stopped by the time they emerged back onto the streets, the city a glittering tapestry of lights and shadows. Harlow took a deep breath, the cool air a balm to her senses, and glanced at the suspect beside her. "Let's see what secrets you have to share," she said, her voice a promise and a challenge. The suspect met her gaze, a flicker of something unreadable in their eyes, and nodded. Together, they stepped into the night, the city a living, breathing entity around them, full of mysteries waiting to be uncovered.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.636
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.70% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1049
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slowly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1049
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"raced"
count2
1
word"cacophony"
count1
2
word"fleeting"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"weight"
count5
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"echoes"
count1
7
word"unraveling"
count1
8
word"dance"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"pounding"
count1
11
word"unwavering"
count1
12
word"potential"
count1
13
word"tension"
count2
14
word"racing"
count2
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"calculating"
count1
17
word"resolve"
count2
18
word"charged"
count1
19
word"anticipation"
count1
20
word"tinged"
count1
21
word"tapestry"
count1
22
word"flicker"
count1
23
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"raced"
1"cacophony"
2"fleeting"
3"could feel"
4"weight"
5"reminder"
6"echoes"
7"unraveling"
8"dance"
9"scanning"
10"pounding"
11"unwavering"
12"potential"
13"tension"
14"racing"
15"echoed"
16"calculating"
17"resolve"
18"charged"
19"anticipation"
20"tinged"
21"tapestry"
22"flicker"
23"unreadable"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences67
matches
0"t with determination"
1"d with anticipation"
78.89% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences67
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences71
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1047
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
64.66% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount996
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.71
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow17
Quinn1
Soho1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Morris2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
places
0"Soho"
1"Market"
globalScore0.647
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1047
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
66.43% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean40.27
std15.4
cv0.383
sampleLengths
062
133
256
357
471
535
654
749
836
949
1046
1121
1227
1356
1415
1542
1616
1734
1854
1929
2014
2148
2248
2342
2417
2536
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences71
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount998
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.027054108216432865
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.01002004008016032
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences71
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences71
mean14.75
std6.72
cv0.456
sampleLengths
022
122
218
312
421
517
620
719
820
912
1025
116
123
1316
1417
1529
1612
1720
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191
201
2116
2216
2322
2411
2517
2621
2716
288
2912
3026
3110
3213
3312
3416
3518
3616
375
389
3914
404
416
4232
4318
4410
455
4612
4717
4813
4916
59.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.38028169014084506
totalSentences71
uniqueOpeners27
52.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences64
matches
0"Finally, they emerged into a"
ratio0.016
63.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences64
matches
0"she shouted, her voice cutting"
1"She could feel the weight"
2"She hesitated for a fraction"
3"She caught sight of the"
4"She'd heard whispers of it,"
5"It was a place of"
6"She knew the risks, but"
7"She took a deep breath,"
8"She felt the weight of"
9"She kept her expression neutral,"
10"She pushed past a vendor"
11"She couldn't afford to lose"
12"she said, her voice steady"
13"they said, their voice a"
14"She could feel the weight"
15"she replied, her voice firm"
16"She drew her weapon, the"
17"she warned, her voice a"
18"She held her ground, her"
19"She knew the risks, the"
ratio0.391
14.69% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences64
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots pounded"
1"The suspect darted through the"
2"Harlow's heart raced, her mind"
3"she shouted, her voice cutting"
4"Harlow skidded to a halt"
5"She could feel the weight"
6"She hesitated for a fraction"
7"The alley was a labyrinth"
8"Harlow's eyes adjusted quickly, her"
9"She caught sight of the"
10"Harlow paused, her instincts screaming"
11"The Veil Market."
12"She'd heard whispers of it,"
13"It was a place of"
14"She knew the risks, but"
15"She took a deep breath,"
16"The air inside was thick"
17"The station was a cavernous"
18"Stalls lined the platform, each"
19"The crowd was a mix"
ratio0.891
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences64
matches(empty)
ratio0
26.24% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The suspect darted through the rain-soaked streets, weaving between the late-night crowd that had gathered under the neon glow of Soho's nightlife."
1"She'd heard whispers of it, a hidden supernatural black market that moved locations every full moon."
2"She felt the weight of eyes on her, the market's denizens sizing her up, assessing her purpose."
3"She pushed past a vendor hawking charms and talismans, her focus unwavering."
4"The suspect led her deeper into the market, through a warren of tunnels and passageways that twisted and turned, each one more disorienting than the last."
5"But the memory of DS Morris, of the case that had taken him from her, pushed her forward."
6"The suspect hesitated, their eyes flicking to the exit, calculating their chances."
7"As Harlow led the suspect back through the market, her mind was already racing ahead, piecing together the puzzle that had eluded her for so long."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she shouted, her voice cutting through the cacophony of the city"
1"she said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins"
2"they said, their voice a low, mocking drawl"
3"she replied, her voice firm"
4"she warned, her voice a low growl"
5"she said, her voice a promise and a challenge"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences11
tagDensity0.636
leniency1
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.286
72.8470%