Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTQZT2B7AY109SZFVPN7GEH

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect darted around the corner, a blur of motion against the glistening pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced as she pushed herself harder, her breath coming in sharp bursts. The rain pelted down, drenching her salt-and-pepper hair, but she barely noticed. The world around her faded, reduced to the rhythm of her pounding feet and the echo of the suspect's hurried footsteps. "Stop!" she shouted, her voice swallowed by the night. The figure ahead glanced back, eyes wide with panic, and then sprinted faster, weaving through the throng of late-night revellers oblivious to the chase unfolding just beyond their laughter and chatter. Quinn's mind raced, calculating the distance between them. She had to close the gap. The suspect was a small-time dealer, but he had connections—dangerous ones. If he slipped away now, it could mean losing a vital lead in her investigation into the clique's criminal activities. She couldn't let that happen. They rounded another corner, and the suspect stumbled, nearly losing his footing on the slick cobblestones. Quinn seized the moment, lunging forward, but he regained his balance and shot down a narrow alleyway, the shadows swallowing him whole. She skidded to a halt, her instincts screaming at her to follow. The alley was dark, the air thick with the scent of damp refuse and something more sinister. She hesitated, glancing back at the street, where the neon lights of Soho flickered like distant stars. The laughter and music felt like a world away. But the suspect was slipping through her fingers, and she couldn't afford to lose him now. With a deep breath, she plunged into the darkness, her senses heightened. The alley twisted and turned, the walls closing in as she navigated the maze of refuse and graffiti. The sound of her footsteps echoed, mingling with the distant thrum of the city. She could hear him ahead, panting, desperate. "Where are you?" she muttered under her breath, her voice barely a whisper. The alley opened up into a wider space, and she spotted him again, silhouetted against a flickering light. He was fumbling with something in his hands, glancing over his shoulder as if sensing her presence. "Don't move!" she barked, raising her badge, the glint of metal catching the light. He froze, eyes darting, and then bolted again, this time towards a set of stairs leading down into darkness. Quinn cursed under her breath, adrenaline surging. She followed, her feet pounding against the concrete steps, the air growing colder and more oppressive with each descent. The underground market loomed ahead, a hidden world beneath the city, alive with the hum of whispered conversations and the clinking of glass. The Veil Market. She had heard whispers of it, a place where the supernatural mingled with the mundane, where secrets were bought and sold like trinkets. As she stepped into the dimly lit space, the atmosphere shifted. The air was thick with the scent of incense and something metallic, a hint of danger lurking just beneath the surface. Stalls lined the walls, each one overflowing with strange artifacts and oddities. A woman with wild hair and piercing eyes offered vials of shimmering liquid, while a man in the corner displayed a collection of bones, their origins unknown. Quinn's heart raced. This was no ordinary chase. She had crossed into a realm where the rules of her world no longer applied. The suspect had vanished into the throng, and she had to decide—follow him deeper into this unknown territory or retreat to the safety of the surface. A voice broke through her thoughts, low and gravelly. "You lost, detective?" She turned, her gaze locking onto a figure leaning against a stall, arms crossed. Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic turned underground medic, stood there, his warm brown eyes glinting with mischief. He wore a Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, a stark contrast to the chaos surrounding them. "Not lost," she replied, her voice steady despite the unease creeping in. "Just... exploring." "Exploring, eh?" He pushed off the stall, stepping closer. "You know this place isn't for the faint-hearted. What are you after?" "The suspect," she said, scanning the crowd. "He came down here. I can't let him slip away." Tomás chuckled, a sound that held both amusement and concern. "You really think you can catch him in this mess? You’re not equipped for this kind of hunt." Quinn shot him a glare, irritation flaring. "I don’t need your advice, Tomás. I need to find him." "Fine, but if you’re going in, you need to know the rules." He leaned in, lowering his voice. "This isn’t just a market. It’s a web of deals and debts. You step on the wrong toes, and you might not walk out." She hesitated, the weight of his words settling in. The market pulsed with energy, a living entity that thrived on secrets and shadows. But she couldn’t back down now. Not when she was so close. "Where did he go?" she pressed, her eyes narrowing. Tomás shrugged, glancing around. "Could be anywhere. But if he’s smart, he’ll head for the back. That’s where the real players are." Quinn nodded, determination hardening her resolve. "Then that’s where I’ll go." "Just remember," he said, his tone serious. "You’re not the only one looking for him. There are others who want him too, and they won’t hesitate to use you as bait." Before she could respond, a commotion erupted at the far end of the market. Shouts rang out, and the crowd surged, a wave of bodies pushing against her. Quinn’s instincts kicked in, and she fought her way through, adrenaline surging as she moved closer to the chaos. A figure stumbled into view, eyes wild, clothes torn. It was the suspect, panic etched across his face. He glanced back, and for a moment, their eyes locked. Then he turned and bolted again, darting through the throng, desperation propelling him forward. Quinn followed, weaving through the crowd, her heart pounding in her chest. The market erupted into chaos, stalls toppling as people scrambled to get out of the way. "Stop!" she shouted, but her voice was lost in the cacophony. The suspect was fast, darting between stalls, his movements frantic. She pushed herself harder, determination fueling her every step. He was almost within reach when a figure stepped into his path, blocking his escape. A tall man with a scarred face and a predatory grin. Quinn’s stomach dropped as she realised the danger. "Looks like you’ve got nowhere to run," the man said, his voice smooth and menacing. The suspect hesitated, fear flashing across his features. Quinn’s instincts screamed at her to intervene, but she was too far away. The crowd surged around her, a living barrier that kept her from reaching him. "Get out of the way!" she yelled, shoving past a group of startled onlookers. But the man lunged, grabbing the suspect by the collar, dragging him back into the shadows. Quinn’s heart raced as she fought against the tide of bodies, desperation clawing at her throat. She had to act. Now. With a surge of adrenaline, she pushed through, her badge glinting in the dim light. "Metropolitan Police! Let him go!" The man turned, surprise flickering across his face, but it was too late. Quinn lunged forward, adrenaline coursing through her veins, ready to confront whatever darkness lay ahead.
total_cost0.00130343

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.522
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1234
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1234
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"raced"
count4
2
word"pounding"
count3
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"calculating"
count1
6
word"sinister"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"navigated"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"glint"
count1
12
word"oppressive"
count1
13
word"loomed"
count1
14
word"glinting"
count2
15
word"stark"
count1
16
word"scanning"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
18
word"pulsed"
count1
19
word"resolve"
count1
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"cacophony"
count1
22
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"raced"
2"pounding"
3"echo"
4"footsteps"
5"calculating"
6"sinister"
7"flickered"
8"navigated"
9"echoed"
10"whisper"
11"glint"
12"oppressive"
13"loomed"
14"glinting"
15"stark"
16"scanning"
17"weight"
18"pulsed"
19"resolve"
20"etched"
21"cacophony"
22"stomach"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
2
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
1"The air was thick with"
2"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences85
matches
0"e with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences85
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1227
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
88.21% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1052
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn13
Soho1
Veil1
Market1
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.882
windowScore1
83.33% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like a world away"
1"as if sensing her presence"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1227
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"let that happen"
99.76% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean33.16
std16.55
cv0.499
sampleLengths
063
140
250
350
459
551
648
714
845
949
1071
1149
1212
1348
1414
1521
1617
1728
1818
1942
2035
219
2222
2311
2431
2547
2628
2742
2830
2934
3015
3135
3214
3332
345
3520
3628
97.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"were bought"
1"was lost"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs187
matches
0"was slipping"
1"was fumbling"
83.33% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences96
ratio0.021
matches
0"The suspect was a small-time dealer, but he had connections—dangerous ones."
1"The suspect had vanished into the throng, and she had to decide—follow him deeper into this unknown territory or retreat to the safety of the surface."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1058
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic turned underground medic,"
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.031190926275992438
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004725897920604915
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean12.78
std5.97
cv0.467
sampleLengths
014
116
212
321
49
531
68
76
811
920
105
1116
1222
1312
1417
1517
169
1716
1812
1918
2014
217
2213
2318
2417
2514
2619
277
2819
2923
303
3123
3211
3321
3412
3527
363
375
3815
3926
409
413
4214
4317
4417
4512
462
479
4812
497
52.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.3333333333333333
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners32
39.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"Then he turned and bolted"
ratio0.012
77.14% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences84
matches
0"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
1"She had to close the"
2"She couldn't let that happen."
3"They rounded another corner, and"
4"She skidded to a halt,"
5"She hesitated, glancing back at"
6"She could hear him ahead,"
7"she muttered under her breath,"
8"He was fumbling with something"
9"she barked, raising her badge,"
10"He froze, eyes darting, and"
11"She followed, her feet pounding"
12"She had heard whispers of"
13"She had crossed into a"
14"She turned, her gaze locking"
15"He wore a Saint Christopher"
16"she replied, her voice steady"
17"He pushed off the stall,"
18"she said, scanning the crowd"
19"He leaned in, lowering his"
ratio0.357
25.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences84
matches
0"The suspect darted around the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced"
2"The rain pelted down, drenching"
3"The world around her faded,"
4"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
5"The figure ahead glanced back,"
6"Quinn's mind raced, calculating the"
7"She had to close the"
8"The suspect was a small-time"
9"She couldn't let that happen."
10"They rounded another corner, and"
11"Quinn seized the moment, lunging"
12"She skidded to a halt,"
13"The alley was dark, the"
14"She hesitated, glancing back at"
15"The laughter and music felt"
16"The alley twisted and turned,"
17"The sound of her footsteps"
18"She could hear him ahead,"
19"she muttered under her breath,"
ratio0.869
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences84
matches
0"If he slipped away now,"
1"Before she could respond, a"
ratio0.024
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He was fumbling with something in his hands, glancing over his shoulder as if sensing her presence."
1"She followed, her feet pounding against the concrete steps, the air growing colder and more oppressive with each descent."
2"The market pulsed with energy, a living entity that thrived on secrets and shadows."
3"Quinn followed, weaving through the crowd, her heart pounding in her chest."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she muttered, her voice barely a whisper"
1"she replied, her voice steady despite the unease creeping in"
2"she pressed, her eyes narrowing"
3"he said, his tone serious"
4"she shouted, but her voice was lost in the cacophony"
5"the man said, his voice smooth and menacing"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"she barked (bark)"
3"she pressed (press)"
4"she shouted (shout)"
5"she yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.435
leniency0.87
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.522
78.5127%