Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR1M4D87ETP8JHGGJ070MX

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Duration:
16.8s
Cost:
$0.041695
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow Quinn's breath came in sharp bursts, her boots pounding the wet pavement. The rain had grown into a relentless downpour, each drop stinging where it found exposed skin. Her quarry, a nimble figure dressed in a dark hood, darted through alleys and sidestreets with the certainty of someone with intimate knowledge of the city's labyrinthine layout. "Stop!" Harlow yelled, though it was futile. The hooded figure didn’t look back, their pace quickening. A puddle splashed up, soaking her trousers as she turned a corner. Ahead, the glow of The Raven's Nest's distinctive green neon sign flickered through the curtain of rain. The suspect veered towards the bar, and Harlow cursed under her breath. The Raven's Nest wasn’t just any bar; it was Silas' place, and everyone knew it doubled as a haven for the city's more dubious characters. "Oi, Silas," Harlow growled as she pushed her way through the heavy wooden door. The bar's familiar acrid scent of whisky and damp wood greeted her. The hooded figure was nowhere in sight. Silas, wiping a glass behind the bar, raised an eyebrow. "Evening, Detective. Something amiss?" "Where did they go?" she snapped, scanning the dimly lit room. Silas pretended to inspect a smudge on the glass. "Who?" Harlow stepped closer, her voice dropping ominously. "Don't play coy with me, Silas. You know who." Silas sighed, setting the glass down gently. "Back room," he admitted, nodding towards a bookshelf lined with old maps and antique books. Harlow wasted no time. She shoved past the few patrons who glanced her way with mild curiosity and reached the bookshelf. Her fingers grazed the spines until she found the trigger - a worn copy of "Treasures of the Lost Kingdoms." She pulled it, and the hidden door creaked open. The hidden room was a stark contrast to the bar. Clean, almost surgically so, lit by harsh fluorescent lights. Maps and photographs of city blueprints papered the walls. Harlow scanned for movement and caught sight of the hooded figure slipping through a trapdoor in the floor. She lunged, feeling the sting of déjà vu. Another chase through an unknown underworld, just like the one that had claimed DS Morris three years ago. Harlow ignored the tightness in her chest and moved. The trapdoor led to a narrow, rust-covered ladder descending into darkness. She paused, only for a moment, assessing. In the world she lived in, hesitation could be fatal, but so could reckless confidence. She gripped the ladder and began her descent. The air grew colder, thicker. The scent of damp earth and aged concrete replaced the bar's aroma. The ladder ended in a barely visible corridor, lit by sporadic candles flickering from wrought-iron sconces. A figure darted at the periphery of her vision. Harlow took off again, boots echoing against the cold, hard floor. The corridor twisted, opening suddenly into a wide space. The Veil Market. Harlow had heard whispers but dismissed them as legends. Yet here it was, an abandoned Tube station transformed into a bustling market for the supernatural. Stalls selling enchanted goods, rare alchemical substances, and esoteric artefacts lined the platform. The market hum was a mix of various languages and an unsettling undertone of haggling and veiled threats. Her suspect weaved through the crowd effortlessly. Harlow followed, brown eyes vigilant. "Watch it," growled a vendor selling vials of shimmering liquid as she accidentally nudged their table. The bone token requirement crossed her mind, but she doubted anyone here would bother her while in pursuit. She spotted the hooded figure slip into an alcove behind a stall covered with strange tomes. The stall owner eyed her warily but made no move to intervene. Harlow approached, her heart pounding. If she was to apprehend this individual, now was her chance. She drew her sidearm, holding it low but ready. "Police. Come out with your hands where I can see them." There was a shuffle, something metallic clinked, and the hooded figure emerged, hands raised but hidden in long sleeves. The hood fell back to reveal a young man, no older than mid-twenties, with defiance in his warm brown eyes. Tomás. "Herrera,” Harlow said, momentarily stunned. She lowered her weapon, just slightly. “Detective Quinn," Tomás replied, his voice devoid of surprise. "I see you've found our little sanctuary." "Why are you running?" she demanded. "What's going on?" He shrugged, the medallion around his neck catching the dim light. "Would you believe me if I said I wasn’t running from you?" Her grip tightened on her gun. "Try me." Tomás glanced around, ensuring no one was eavesdropping. "I was delivering. There's a lot you don't understand, detective. My clients down here... they need medical attention off the books." "Ten years in prison says you need a better story. You ran from an active investigation scene." "Because I don't trust the police. Not after what happened to Morris," he replied, his voice a harsh whisper, and for a moment, there was a flicker of shared pain in his eyes. "This isn't about me or you. It’s about secrets, Harlow. Secrets your department doesn’t want coming to light." Harlow's mind raced. She needed to think. The implications of Tomás’ words meant more than just a simple chase; they hinted at corruption, hidden agendas, and a danger that went beyond her typical remit. "Then help me understand," she said, lowering her gun fully. "What don’t I know?” Tomás hesitated, then resolved something within himself. "Fine. But not here. Too many ears. Follow me." He turned, leading her through the labyrinth of stalls. Harlow kept her weapon ready, just in case. Ti he world she now walked in was filled with unknowns. They finally stopped at a stall covered with obscure and ancient alchemical texts. The vendor, an old woman with piercing green eyes, glanced at Tomás and nodded, lifting a tapestry to reveal another hidden passage. "After you," Tomás said, motioning Harlow to go first. Harlow stifled her apprehension, remembering the fate of Morris. This was her chance to uncover the truth. To finally prove she wasn’t chasing ghosts. She stepped into the dark passage, feeling an invisible weight on her shoulders. The path ahead was dangerous and uncertain. But one thing was clear. There was no turning back now.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.48
leniency0.96
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1045
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"warily"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"suddenly"
2"warily"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
9.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1045
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"pounding"
count2
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"amiss"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"stark"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"sanctuary"
count1
10
word"ensuring"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"resolved"
count1
15
word"tapestry"
count1
16
word"apprehension"
count1
17
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"pounding"
1"flickered"
2"familiar"
3"eyebrow"
4"amiss"
5"scanning"
6"stark"
7"scanned"
8"echoing"
9"sanctuary"
10"ensuring"
11"whisper"
12"flicker"
13"raced"
14"resolved"
15"tapestry"
16"apprehension"
17"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1043
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
49.29% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount844
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity2.01
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Raven2
Nest2
Harlow17
Silas3
Morris2
Veil1
Market1
Tube1
Tomás6
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Harlow"
4"Silas"
5"Morris"
6"Tomás"
places(empty)
globalScore0.493
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1043
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean28.19
std15.21
cv0.54
sampleLengths
057
128
254
343
44
511
610
716
822
950
1046
1135
1241
1333
1429
1559
1612
1734
1844
1920
2040
2111
2216
239
2423
258
2629
2717
2851
2934
3014
3116
3228
3335
349
3524
3631
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"was filled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs168
matches
0"was eavesdropping"
51.67% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences94
ratio0.032
matches
0"The Raven's Nest wasn’t just any bar; it was Silas' place, and everyone knew it doubled as a haven for the city's more dubious characters."
1"Her fingers grazed the spines until she found the trigger - a worn copy of \"Treasures of the Lost Kingdoms.\" She pulled it, and the hidden door creaked open."
2"The implications of Tomás’ words meant more than just a simple chase; they hinted at corruption, hidden agendas, and a danger that went beyond her typical remit."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount234
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.017094017094017096
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean11.1
std6.25
cv0.563
sampleLengths
013
116
228
37
49
512
617
712
825
914
1012
117
1210
134
1411
159
161
177
189
197
2015
214
2217
2329
2410
259
269
2718
288
2918
309
3111
327
3315
348
355
3612
3716
389
3911
409
413
429
4316
4413
4518
467
475
4816
4918
70.92% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4574468085106383
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners43
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences79
matches
0"Her quarry, a nimble figure"
1"she snapped, scanning the dimly"
2"he admitted, nodding towards a"
3"She shoved past the few"
4"Her fingers grazed the spines"
5"She lunged, feeling the sting"
6"She paused, only for a"
7"She gripped the ladder and"
8"Her suspect weaved through the"
9"She spotted the hooded figure"
10"She drew her sidearm, holding"
11"She lowered her weapon, just"
12"He shrugged, the medallion around"
13"Her grip tightened on her"
14"he replied, his voice a"
15"She needed to think."
16"she said, lowering her gun"
17"He turned, leading her through"
18"They finally stopped at a"
19"She stepped into the dark"
ratio0.253
23.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences79
matches
0"Harlow Quinn's breath came in"
1"The rain had grown into"
2"Her quarry, a nimble figure"
3"Harlow yelled, though it was"
4"The hooded figure didn’t look"
5"A puddle splashed up, soaking"
6"The suspect veered towards the"
7"The Raven's Nest wasn’t just"
8"Harlow growled as she pushed"
9"The bar's familiar acrid scent"
10"The hooded figure was nowhere"
11"Silas, wiping a glass behind"
12"she snapped, scanning the dimly"
13"Silas pretended to inspect a"
14"Harlow stepped closer, her voice"
15"Silas sighed, setting the glass"
16"he admitted, nodding towards a"
17"Harlow wasted no time."
18"She shoved past the few"
19"Her fingers grazed the spines"
ratio0.873
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences79
matches
0"If she was to apprehend"
1"To finally prove she wasn’t"
ratio0.025
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Tomás replied, his voice devoid of surprise"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Harlow yelled (yell)"
1"Harlow growled (growl)"
2"she snapped (snap)"
3"he admitted (admit)"
4"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.4
82.2820%