Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR39PYV9QE6CZYT8VRTR8M

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Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.001472

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect darted around the corner, a blur of motion against the glistening pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced as she pushed herself harder, her breath coming in sharp bursts. The rain pelted down, drenching her salt-and-pepper hair and soaking through her coat, but she barely noticed. The thrill of the chase consumed her, the adrenaline sharpening her focus. “Stop!” she shouted, her voice swallowed by the night. The figure ahead glanced back, eyes wide with panic, and then sprinted into the shadows of an alley. Quinn cursed under her breath, her worn leather watch digging into her wrist as she quickened her pace. The alley opened up into a narrow street, slick with rain and littered with refuse. She skidded to a halt, scanning the area. The suspect had vanished. Quinn's instincts screamed at her to keep moving, to not let the trail go cold. She spotted a flicker of movement at the far end of the street, where a neon sign buzzed erratically above a door. The Raven's Nest. “Damn it,” she muttered, her mind racing. The Nest was a known haunt for the city's underbelly, a place where secrets were traded like currency. She hesitated, weighing her options. The suspect could be hiding inside, but so could a dozen unsavoury characters. With a deep breath, she pushed through the door, the familiar scent of stale beer and smoke hitting her like a wall. The bar was dimly lit, the walls adorned with old maps and black-and-white photographs that whispered of forgotten stories. Quinn's eyes adjusted quickly, scanning the room for any sign of her quarry. A few patrons sat hunched over their drinks, their faces obscured by shadows. At the far end of the bar, a man with a scruffy beard and a leather jacket caught her eye. He nodded towards the back, where a bookshelf stood slightly ajar. Quinn's pulse quickened. “Hey!” she called, striding towards him. “Did you see someone come in here? A man, about this tall, dark hair?” The man shrugged, his gaze flicking to the door. “Could be anyone, love. This place is a revolving door.” “Right.” She stepped closer, lowering her voice. “I need to know if he went into that back room.” He hesitated, then leaned back, crossing his arms. “What’s it to you?” “Just a detective looking for a suspect.” “Detective, eh?” He smirked, his eyes glinting with mischief. “You sure you want to go back there? Not exactly a friendly place.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “I don’t have time for games. Either you tell me or I’ll make your life very uncomfortable.” The man chuckled, but there was a flicker of fear in his eyes. “Alright, alright. He went in there. But you didn’t hear it from me.” “Thanks.” She shot him a warning glance before making her way to the bookshelf. The hidden door swung open with a creak, revealing a dimly lit room filled with the scent of damp wood and something else—something metallic. Quinn stepped inside, her instincts on high alert. The room was cluttered with mismatched furniture and a table strewn with strange objects: vials of glowing liquids, odd trinkets, and what looked like a bone token. The atmosphere buzzed with an undercurrent of tension, as if the very air held secrets waiting to be uncovered. “Looking for something?” a voice drawled from the shadows. Quinn spun around, her hand instinctively reaching for her sidearm. A figure emerged, a tall man with a scar running along his left forearm, his warm brown eyes glinting in the low light. “Tomás,” she said, relaxing slightly. “What are you doing here?” “Just keeping an eye on things.” He stepped closer, his gaze flicking to the door. “You shouldn’t be here, Quinn. This isn’t your territory.” “I’m aware.” She glanced back at the door, her mind racing. “But I’m on the trail of a suspect. He came in here.” Tomás frowned, his expression shifting to concern. “You don’t want to follow him. This place is dangerous. You don’t know what you’re getting into.” “Neither do you,” she shot back, her frustration bubbling to the surface. “I’m not backing down. Not now.” “Fine.” He sighed, running a hand through his short curly hair. “But if you’re going in, you need to be careful. The Veil Market is just below us. It’s not like the rest of London.” “Veil Market?” Quinn raised an eyebrow. “What’s that?” “An underground market for the supernatural. They deal in things you can’t even imagine.” “Like what?” “Enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, information.” He leaned closer, lowering his voice. “And they don’t take kindly to outsiders.” Quinn’s heart raced. The suspect could be down there, and she couldn’t let him slip away. “I have to go after him.” “Quinn—” “Enough.” She cut him off, determination hardening her resolve. “I’m going.” Tomás stepped back, his expression a mix of admiration and worry. “Just be careful. I’ll cover for you if anyone asks.” “Thanks.” She gave him a quick nod before turning towards the hidden staircase that led down into the depths of the market. The air grew colder as she descended, the faint sound of murmurs and laughter echoing up from below. The stairs creaked underfoot, and the dim light flickered ominously. Quinn’s heart pounded in her chest, a mix of fear and excitement coursing through her veins. At the bottom, she stepped into a cavernous space filled with stalls and makeshift booths. The atmosphere buzzed with energy, the air thick with the scent of incense and something sweetly intoxicating. Strange figures moved about, their features obscured by hoods and shadows. “Keep your head down,” she muttered to herself, scanning the crowd for any sign of her suspect. A stall caught her eye, its table laden with shimmering crystals and odd trinkets. A woman with wild hair and piercing blue eyes beckoned her closer. “Looking for something special, love?” “Just passing through,” Quinn replied, her gaze darting around. “Ah, but you’re not just passing through, are you?” The woman’s smile was unsettling. “You’re hunting.” Quinn’s instincts flared. “I don’t have time for riddles.” “Time is all you have down here.” The woman leaned closer, her voice dropping to a whisper. “But be warned, not all who enter the Veil Market leave unscathed.” Quinn’s pulse quickened. She had to find the suspect before it was too late. As she pushed deeper into the market, the crowd thickened, and the noise grew louder. She spotted a flash of dark hair ahead, the figure weaving through the throng. “Stop!” she shouted, her voice cutting through the chaos. The suspect turned, eyes wide with fear, and bolted down a narrow passageway. Quinn surged forward, her heart pounding as she chased him through the twisting alleys of the market. “Get back here!” He glanced back, panic etched on his face, and then disappeared around a corner. Quinn followed, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The passage opened up into a dimly lit chamber, the walls lined with strange symbols that pulsed with an eerie light. The suspect stood at the far end, cornered, his back against the wall. “Don’t come any closer!” he shouted, his voice trembling. Quinn raised her hands, trying to appear non-threatening. “I just want to talk.” “Talk?” He laughed, a wild, desperate sound. “You think I’m going to talk to a cop in a place like this?” “Why did you run?” “Because I know what you’re after!” “Then help me.” He shook his head, eyes darting around as if searching for an escape. “You don’t understand. They’ll come for you.” “Who?” Before he could answer, a low growl echoed through the chamber, sending a chill down Quinn’s spine. The shadows shifted, and a hulking figure emerged from the darkness, eyes glowing with a predatory hunger. “Shit,” she breathed, adrenaline surging as she realised the danger they were in. The suspect’s face drained of colour. “I told you!” Quinn’s instincts kicked in. She had to act, and fast. “Run!” she shouted, lunging towards the suspect as the creature lunged forward. The chase was far from over.
total_cost0.00147203

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She glanced back [back]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0.042
effectiveRatio0.033
77.83% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1353
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count2
3
adverb"sweetly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"slightly"
2"very"
3"sweetly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1353
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"raced"
count2
2
word"quickened"
count3
3
word"scanning"
count3
4
word"flicker"
count2
5
word"racing"
count2
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"glinting"
count2
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"eyebrow"
count1
11
word"resolve"
count1
12
word"depths"
count1
13
word"echoing"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"pounding"
count1
17
word"etched"
count1
18
word"pulsed"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"chill"
count1
21
word"hulking"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"raced"
2"quickened"
3"scanning"
4"flicker"
5"racing"
6"familiar"
7"pulse"
8"glinting"
9"tension"
10"eyebrow"
11"resolve"
12"depths"
13"echoing"
14"flickered"
15"whisper"
16"pounding"
17"etched"
18"pulsed"
19"echoed"
20"chill"
21"hulking"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"a flicker of fear"
96.59% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences88
matches
0"e with panic"
1"a flicker of fear"
2"e with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences88
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1347
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
55.47% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount1005
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn19
Raven1
Nest2
Tomás2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Tomás"
places(empty)
globalScore0.555
windowScore0.667
81.51% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a bone token"
1"as if searching for an escape"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1347
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean21.73
std15.22
cv0.7
sampleLengths
059
145
267
343
454
547
620
719
818
912
107
1122
1220
1326
1438
1554
169
1733
1810
1924
2023
2124
2218
2335
248
2514
262
2719
2822
291
3011
3121
3222
3344
3443
3517
3631
379
3816
399
4029
4114
4229
439
4430
453
4622
4734
489
4913
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"were traded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs185
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences123
ratio0.008
matches
0"The hidden door swung open with a creak, revealing a dimly lit room filled with the scent of damp wood and something else—something metallic."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1011
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.02967359050445104
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.012858555885262116
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean10.95
std5.77
cv0.527
sampleLengths
014
116
217
312
49
518
618
715
88
94
1015
1122
123
137
1418
155
1613
1722
1819
1913
2013
2120
2211
233
246
2514
269
2710
287
2911
308
314
327
339
3413
353
3617
3713
3813
3914
4024
418
4227
4319
449
4510
4623
475
485
4915
58.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.37398373983739835
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
83.64% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences88
matches
0"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
1"She skidded to a halt,"
2"She spotted a flicker of"
3"she muttered, her mind racing"
4"She hesitated, weighing her options."
5"He nodded towards the back,"
6"she called, striding towards him"
7"She stepped closer, lowering her"
8"He hesitated, then leaned back,"
9"He smirked, his eyes glinting"
10"She shot him a warning"
11"she said, relaxing slightly"
12"He stepped closer, his gaze"
13"She glanced back at the"
14"she shot back, her frustration"
15"He sighed, running a hand"
16"He leaned closer, lowering his"
17"She cut him off, determination"
18"She gave him a quick"
19"she muttered to herself, scanning"
ratio0.341
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount81
totalSentences88
matches
0"The suspect darted around the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced"
2"The rain pelted down, drenching"
3"The thrill of the chase"
4"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
5"The figure ahead glanced back,"
6"Quinn cursed under her breath,"
7"The alley opened up into"
8"She skidded to a halt,"
9"The suspect had vanished."
10"Quinn's instincts screamed at her"
11"She spotted a flicker of"
12"The Raven's Nest."
13"she muttered, her mind racing"
14"The Nest was a known"
15"She hesitated, weighing her options."
16"The suspect could be hiding"
17"The bar was dimly lit,"
18"Quinn's eyes adjusted quickly, scanning"
19"He nodded towards the back,"
ratio0.92
56.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Before he could answer, a"
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences44
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The bar was dimly lit, the walls adorned with old maps and black-and-white photographs that whispered of forgotten stories."
1"The atmosphere buzzed with an undercurrent of tension, as if the very air held secrets waiting to be uncovered."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"she muttered, her mind racing"
1"He smirked, his eyes glinting with mischief"
2"He stepped, his gaze flicking to the door"
3"She glanced back, her mind racing"
4"she shot back, her frustration bubbling to the surface"
5"She cut, determination hardening her resolve"
6"Quinn replied, her gaze darting around"
7"The woman leaned, her voice dropping to a whisper"
8"she shouted, her voice cutting through the chaos"
9"he shouted, his voice trembling"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"a voice drawled (drawl)"
3"He sighed (sigh)"
4"she muttered (mutter)"
5"she shouted (shout)"
6"he shouted (shout)"
7"He laughed (laugh)"
8"she breathed (breathe)"
9"she shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.217
leniency0.433
rawRatio0.769
effectiveRatio0.333
75.8928%