Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR3DSHCK1HJ5MXFY5TNW4B

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Duration:
25.8s
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$0.001586
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DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pounding of footsteps on wet pavement echoed through the empty streets as Detective Harlow Quinn pursued her suspect through the rain-drenched night. The cool mist clung to her face, her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair damp against her sharp jawline. Her military precision bearing was the only thing keeping her lean frame upright as she pushed herself harder, faster. "Why do they always run?" she muttered under her breath, the soft glow from a worn leather watch on her left wrist catching her eye. It had been a gift from her late partner, Morris, three years ago when they'd still been chasing cases together - before he disappeared into the supernatural underworld, never to return. A sudden turn down an alleyway forced Harlow to quicken her pace. She watched as the figure ahead of her navigated the narrow passage with ease, seemingly unfazed by the treacherous conditions. The scratched metal of a fire escape ladder groaned in protest as the suspect scaled it effortlessly, disappearing into the shadows above. "Shit," Harlow hissed through gritted teeth. With no time to waste, she followed suit, climbing the ladder with practiced efficiency despite her age. The cold metal bit into her fingers, but she pressed on, determined not to lose sight of her quarry. As she crested the top of the building, Harlow scanned the rooftop for any sign of movement. A glint of something metallic caught her eye - a medallion dangling from the suspect's neck. It looked like the Saint Christopher medallion she'd seen just days before around the neck of Tomás Herrera, the paramedic-turned-underground medic who'd been treating supernatural patients off the books. "You're not getting away that easily, Herrera," she whispered, her brown eyes narrowing in focus. She followed him across the rooftops, leaping over gaps between buildings with cat-like agility. The rain made the surfaces slick and dangerous, but Harlow refused to let fear take hold. Instead, she channeled her anger into every movement, driving herself forward. After what felt like an eternity, they reached the edge of the warehouse district. With nowhere left to run, the suspect paused, turning to face her directly. Even in the dim light, Harlow could make out the warm brown eyes and short curly dark brown hair of Tomás Herrera - a man she'd been trying to track down for weeks. "I didn't do anything wrong, Detective," he called out over the pounding rain, his voice tinged with desperation. "You've got no reason to chase me." "You're a wanted man, Herrera. And I'm taking you in," she shouted back, the raindrops pelting against her skin like tiny needles. "You don't understand. There's something down there..." His voice trailed off as he glanced towards the entrance to the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden - the location of the Veil Market, a hidden supernatural black market that moved every full moon. Harlow knew she had only moments to decide whether to follow him into the unknown depths of the market or cut her losses and bring him back to the station for questioning. The memory of her partner's disappearance flashed through her mind, but she shook it off. She couldn't afford to be distracted by ghosts from her past. "Fine, Herrera. You want to play this game? Let's go." She reached for her gun, checking it was secure in its holster. With a heavy sigh, Tomás began descending the stairs leading down to the market. As they approached the entryway, he pulled out a bone token from his pocket - the required pass to enter the illicit trading hub. "Detective, I need you to trust me on this one. I'm not your enemy," he said quietly, handing her the token. She took it reluctantly, eyeing him with suspicion. The smell of damp earth enveloped them as they entered the main chamber of the market. Stalls and stands filled with enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information lined the underground platform, creating a maze-like atmosphere that disoriented Harlow instantly. Herrera led her through the winding passages, navigating the twists and turns with ease. Harlow kept close behind him, her hand never straying far from her gun. A thousand eyes seemed to watch them from the shadows, hidden beneath hoods or obscured by tattered cloth. The clipping of footsteps echoed around them as they delved deeper into the market. She noticed a familiar green neon sign above the entrance to a bar - The Raven's Nest, the same place she'd been investigating just last week. "What's this?" she asked, nodding towards a door hidden behind a dusty bookshelf. "Secret room," Tomás replied, his voice low and urgent. "Used for meetings... and other things." Harlow felt a sudden surge of adrenaline coursing through her veins. If there was one thing she hated more than anything else, it was walking into an unknown situation blind. But she didn't have a choice. With a deep breath and a silent prayer, she followed Tomás into the hidden chamber. Inside, the air was thick with the stench of sweat and stale cigarettes. A table sat in the center of the room, surrounded by five figures shrouded in darkness. "Welcome," a voice rasped from the shadows. "We've been expecting you."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
18.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she shouted back [back]"
1"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.786
leniency1
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.182
94.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount867
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
7.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount867
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pounding"
count2
1
word"footsteps"
count2
2
word"echoed"
count2
3
word"navigated"
count1
4
word"treacherous"
count1
5
word"determined"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"glint"
count1
8
word"tinged"
count1
9
word"depths"
count1
10
word"navigating"
count1
11
word"delved"
count1
12
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"pounding"
1"footsteps"
2"echoed"
3"navigated"
4"treacherous"
5"determined"
6"scanned"
7"glint"
8"tinged"
9"depths"
10"navigating"
11"delved"
12"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"the air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences48
matches(empty)
83.33% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences48
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences51
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords868
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
86.39% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount786
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.27
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow10
Quinn1
Morris1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás5
Herrera3
Tube1
Camden1
Veil1
Market1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
5"Tomás"
6"Herrera"
7"Raven"
places
0"Market"
globalScore0.864
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"age with ease, seemingly unfazed by the trea"
1"looked like the Saint Christopher medalli"
2"felt like an eternity, they reached the"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount868
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences51
matches(empty)
77.21% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs23
mean37.74
std15.86
cv0.42
sampleLengths
059
156
254
342
462
515
641
760
825
922
1041
1158
1222
1338
1429
1540
1645
1740
1813
1915
2036
2144
2211
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs130
matches
0"was walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences51
ratio0.118
matches
0"It had been a gift from her late partner, Morris, three years ago when they'd still been chasing cases together - before he disappeared into the supernatural underworld, never to return."
1"A glint of something metallic caught her eye - a medallion dangling from the suspect's neck."
2"Even in the dim light, Harlow could make out the warm brown eyes and short curly dark brown hair of Tomás Herrera - a man she'd been trying to track down for weeks."
3"\"You don't understand. There's something down there...\" His voice trailed off as he glanced towards the entrance to the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden - the location of the Veil Market, a hidden supernatural black market that moved every full moon."
4"As they approached the entryway, he pulled out a bone token from his pocket - the required pass to enter the illicit trading hub."
5"She noticed a familiar green neon sign above the entrance to a bar - The Raven's Nest, the same place she'd been investigating just last week."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount785
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"paramedic-turned-underground medic"
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.0267515923566879
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.012738853503184714
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences51
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences51
mean17.02
std7.57
cv0.445
sampleLengths
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219
325
431
512
620
722
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1019
1117
1216
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1415
1514
1616
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1814
1913
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227
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2441
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2711
2822
2914
3024
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3424
3514
3613
3718
3814
3926
4013
419
426
4311
4419
456
4615
4713
4816
497
82.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5294117647058824
totalSentences51
uniqueOpeners27
69.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"Instead, she channeled her anger"
ratio0.021
86.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences48
matches
0"Her military precision bearing was"
1"she muttered under her breath,"
2"It had been a gift"
3"She watched as the figure"
4"It looked like the Saint"
5"she whispered, her brown eyes"
6"She followed him across the"
7"he called out over the"
8"she shouted back, the raindrops"
9"His voice trailed off as"
10"She couldn't afford to be"
11"She reached for her gun,"
12"he said quietly, handing her"
13"She took it reluctantly, eyeing"
14"She noticed a familiar green"
15"she asked, nodding towards a"
ratio0.333
85.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount36
totalSentences48
matches
0"The pounding of footsteps on"
1"The cool mist clung to"
2"Her military precision bearing was"
3"she muttered under her breath,"
4"It had been a gift"
5"A sudden turn down an"
6"She watched as the figure"
7"The scratched metal of a"
8"Harlow hissed through gritted teeth"
9"The cold metal bit into"
10"A glint of something metallic"
11"It looked like the Saint"
12"she whispered, her brown eyes"
13"She followed him across the"
14"The rain made the surfaces"
15"he called out over the"
16"she shouted back, the raindrops"
17"His voice trailed off as"
18"Harlow knew she had only"
19"The memory of her partner's"
ratio0.75
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences48
matches
0"Even in the dim light,"
1"If there was one thing"
ratio0.042
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"It looked like the Saint Christopher medallion she'd seen just days before around the neck of Tomás Herrera, the paramedic-turned-underground medic who'd been t…"
1"Stalls and stands filled with enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information lined the underground platform, creating a maze-like atmosphere tha…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she whispered, her brown eyes narrowing in focus"
1"she shouted back, the raindrops pelting against her skin like tiny needles"
2"Tomás replied, his voice low and urgent"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Harlow hissed (hiss)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"he called out (call out)"
4"she shouted back (shout)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.625
76.1511%